[Report This]Date: May 28 2016 3:20 PM Title: Prologue
This is a fantastic story. Woman-led NWO is among my personal favorite topics, and you pulled it off extremely well.
[Report This]Date: July 18 2013 1:22 PM Title: Epilogue
Congratulations on completing an atmosphere-laden tale with such very de-medievalized women!
Author's Response:
Thanks. The vibe I got for the main narrative was that of some Swiss canton between 1000 - 1200 (so that would put the outer story between 1600 - 1800), but I guess it could also happen anywhere/anytime. Definitely mostly atmosphere in this story -- atmosphere and distance. Some gross stuff. A lot of irony. Maybe a little bit of wistfulness or disillusion. Hopefully not too heavy-handed, though.
Now back to Holly. I'll try to punch that out first, before anything else.
[Report This]Date: July 16 2013 11:50 AM Title: Prologue
This is a phrase I wish I had written:
"...by breathing in her personal smell, and servicing her daily, her womanhood would come not only to represent the world, but to take the world’s place in their lives. "
Author's Response:
Those three/four paragraphs were added yesterday, after the rest of the stuff was finished. Reading it over, I wasn't satisfied with it, and couldn't figure out why. So I thought about that dream/foreshadowing sequence, and it seemed to balance out rest of the chapter in a couple ways. (Although, I'm encouraged by your response, because I wasn't sure exactly how readers would respond to it, and was a little nervous. The point was to encapsulate the fet-portions of the story in as few words as possible.)
Date: July 14 2013 5:39 PM Title: Part One
Hm... I'm still in the dark, but I have a few theories.
Author's Response:
The mysteries will start to clear up tomorrow. (I'm curious about your theories, though -- you wouldn't have them if I'd posted it all at once.)
Also, I feel like I have to explain the scene with the friars and popes. The image comes from a great comical/erotic/horrific sequence in Pasolini's Canterbury Tales, the one where an angel visits some lascivious friar during the night, tells him it's time to die, and then carries him down him to hell.
Date: July 13 2013 5:23 PM Title: Prologue
Perhaps the previous reviewer meant Children of the CORNS... or calluses... or bunions. :)
Author's Response:
Heh. Well, in that case, he'll have to wait a couple thousand words (there's a long dry spell early next chapter, fetishwise). Really, those fetish scenes are -- by a long shot -- the hardest part of a story for me. Except for the vore ones, which I do more or less on autopilot. (And it's strange because, hearing other people talk, you'd think they'd be pretty damn easy.)
Date: July 13 2013 9:26 AM Title: Prologue
I'm intrigued. I have read none of the stories you've mentioned, but I get the idea behind it.
But I'm interested to know, is there a sort of plot coming?
Author's Response:
I've built the narrative in a frame design -- meaning that the prologue and epilogue are separated from the main narrative & plot structure itself (in this case, by a story within a story).
So that means all you see right now is the frame, which is mostly background information, a sketch of the customs and village life, and some clues about what's to come.
Thanks for reading. (I also need to get around to reading and reviewing some of the longer stories on this site, being written right now. Yours and gerald's and few others look pretty interesting, for instance. Soon.)
Date: July 13 2013 8:37 AM Title: Prologue
Sounds like Children of the Corn.
Author's Response:
Prepare to be surprised, then.