[Report This]Date: July 20 2013 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Really great story, I certainly enjoyed it and was pleased to read a new chapter everyday when you uploaded them.
I had my suspicion about the "special place" at first when I started reading this story. Then I checked your other stories, so yeah, then it became obvious.
I understand the comments from some people that question having this end in swallowing the shrunken people. Maybe this is personal taste, we can't all like the same things. If you as the writer like this subject a lot (I assume), then by all means only write stories that end like this. Whatever motivates you to give us a free story to read.
I'm not sure if I myself can be classified as a voraphile, or if you consider yourself one. For me it is more a morbid fascination and not something arousing. So I await your next story, and am very curious about the plot and characters that are going to be in it.
What you have in this story disregarding its conlusion is amazing character development and dynamic. I really love how you put down Samantha, she must have been so screwed up psychological by April. All three of them were great togheter. April as the cruel insane tormenter and Robert as "the new" guy experiencing this hell for the first time. I liked this aspect more than the conclusion of the story. (But again, I have no problem with the ending.)
Maybe you can explore this even more in future stories? The relationships between the characters, because you really got some talent there.
I must even admit, I would have prefered that Robert was eaten too. I am really not into crushing. This again is personal taste where there is no right or wrong.
Top class story, amazing writing style.
[Report This]Date: July 20 2013 3:10 AM Title: Chapter 14 - Together, at last
Great story, I love that they went together. April is one of my favorite characters. I hope we see more of her and I hope we see her do more.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2013 9:45 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Well cant say I didn't see that coming, but you made me intruiged in this world that allows these kinds of things to happen. I MEAN the cop was RIGHT THERE, and he obviously KNEW what she was gonna do to them. I hope you elaborate more on why people with this syndrome are allowed to be treated this way in some other story sometime. Great story BTW.
[Report This]Date: July 19 2013 9:31 PM Title: Chapter 4 - Microphilia is a hell of a thing
Loving it so far :)
[Report This]Date: July 19 2013 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 13 - Freindship
Oh I wonder if they are going to the special place. Cannot wait for the next chapter.
Date: July 18 2013 10:42 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
All that....just for them to get eaten? Really? That's pretty...sick. The categories lied to me!
Author's Response:
I wouldn't they say lied... Maybe the tags just felt you weren't privy to such information.
Date: July 18 2013 10:21 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Sizescribe I READ your previous story, you cant fool me! Great leadup though, although I knew what was coming.
[Report This]Date: July 17 2013 10:12 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Those who've come before
I wonder what this "special place" is. Good story can't wait to see what happens.
Date: July 17 2013 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 12 - Those who've come before
They're as good a dead.
[Report This]Date: July 17 2013 9:05 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wow. I just read the first 4 chapters at once; I'm blown away. Swift pacing and an an impressive slow shrnk aspect. Your writing feels very real and I like your style. Will most definitely be keeping up with this one.
[Report This]Date: July 15 2013 7:48 PM Title: Chapter 9 - Humanity
WAT DA HELL!? The f-ing cop too!? Is there some big conspiracy or something or is she just sucking this one guy off!
[Report This]Date: July 15 2013 7:11 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wouldn't anyone notice if he screamed in the stroller? She's like in the wide open aint she? And man, it scares the crap outta me just reading this story, April makes the hairs on my neck stand on end. Great story for sure!
[Report This]Date: July 15 2013 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 8 - All the pretty boats
I strongly agree with Thelin.
And jeez... how fast do you write... not that I'm complaining.
Date: July 14 2013 8:46 PM Title: Chapter 7 - Fur Elise
They're dead they're all dead...The others I mean.
[Report This]Date: July 13 2013 10:15 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Forces of nature
Great chapter. But now I'm wondering why Samantha was giggling? Has she lost it or is she in on the whole thing? I can't wait to see what happens next or what happens when he gets tiny.
aaron
PS will there be a full sized woman who's a friend of April maybe who joins in on the fun? Anyways great story I'm really liking it.
Author's Response:
Thanks, and anything is a possibility, stay tuned.
[Report This]Date: July 13 2013 10:09 AM Title: Chapter 6 - Forces of nature
I can only give a 10 out of 10 rating. System doesn't allow me to put in a 16.8223 out of 10. Don't worry this is all scientific.
It's weird to review a story that is not finished yet, I don't know what the plot and the finale is going to be like. But up until now, chapter 1 to 6, what a start.
Most us readers (if not all) agree that your writing skill is top notch. The way you manipulate the reader, making me curious and the build up of suspense. Amazing character development, perfect pacing. It's like... well, maybe I think it is: a psychological thriller. I like psychologival thrillers... and exciting action scenes. This story delivers both weaven toghether.
The content (up til now) might not really be my cup of tea...and there are many stories like this where a girl tortures her tiny captives. But this is raising the bar.
I will definately keep following this.
Author's Response:
Thank you for your support, I am so glad that you can look passed your own niche and enjoy my writing.
[Report This]Date: July 12 2013 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 2 - A special place
This is a good concept. and your writing style is polished so I can't really criteque it, but I'd say the one thing I would like to see is society's reaction to those with the syndrome.
Overall good job I will continue reading as soon as I get the opportunity.
Author's Response:
Thank you, appreciate you reading, and I touched a bit on society and the syndrome in the first syndrome story, and plan on touching on it a bit here.
[Report This]Date: July 11 2013 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Love the gentle/dominating attitude.
Author's Response:
Yeah, I am the kind of person that mixes soy suace, and duck sauce in my chinese food ;)
[Report This]Date: July 10 2013 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 3 - Little Robbie Ladner
Love how this story presents itself. Great job
aaron
Date: July 10 2013 9:27 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Sweet Little Lies
Wow, very cool! I can tell you definitely have experience with writing. The characters seem very realistic and I can totally imagine the whole situation playing out in my head.
Very excited to see where you take this, hope you keep updating it.
Author's Response:
Thank you, not to worry, this story is on the fast track to completion.