Reviewer: Woodstock165 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2021 9:42 PM Title: Chapter 15

Are you going to put the rest of it up here or not?

Author's Response:

Not..  I'll put one more chapter up when the editing process if finished and the book is pressed ready for delivery.   It will essentially be an announcement (at the end of the chapter) with instructions on how to order the book.   So, one more chapter of it on the way with the book instructions for those who are intersted on reading it further.

Reviewer: Nodqfan Signed [Report This]
Date: January 30 2021 5:37 PM Title: Chapter 15

Congrats on trying to self publish this novel I hope it works out for you.

Author's Response:

Well just remember that there will be new material in it as well.

The way I see things is that whether it succeeds in recouping the costs of having it printed and pressed or not, it will be a learning experience so I think in that matter I'll win either way.

When it is ready for distribution I will post the anouncement here as well as on my DA page which will give instructions (on the DA page) on how to purchase it and for what cost.

Thank you very much for the well wishes Nodqfan and I hope that you will support it when it becomes availible to the public. ;)

Reviewer: ed6965240586 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28 2021 12:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

happy to see your back
cant find your user on devianart
care to send a link?

Author's Response:

Try the Ed: https://www.deviantart.com/crocodilewriter

Reviewer: vegetaboy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 28 2021 8:30 AM Title: Chapter 15

Note sent on Deviantart :) 

Would love to chat about the paperback publication there. 

Author's Response:

Please do that Vegetaboy!  I'll be waiting for you!

 

Crocodile

Reviewer: Qwertylulz Signed [Report This]
Date: October 31 2020 4:10 PM Title: Chapter 1

Do you mind reuploading the rest of the story here or put up a google docs link?

Really enjoyed the story and was saddened that the website gtsart is no longer a thing.

Author's Response:

I think I'm going to turn it into a paperback novel instead.  Even add some extra material to it.
When it's completed I'll let you know but I'll need your email in order to do that.

You can reach me at deviant art with the user name: Crocodilewriter.   Just send me a Private Message or use the Chat option in order to communicate about the details on the release and price of the book.

Reviewer: ed6965 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 15 2018 8:16 AM Title: Chapter 1

When are you planning to add another chapter?

Author's Response:

I'll probably start writing it tomorrow seeming as it's raining where I live and rain weather is great writing weather!

Thanks a lot for you continued suppord Ed.  :)

 

Reviewer: Clouder25 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 01 2018 10:53 AM Title: Chapter 1

It is so great to see this story updated with a nee chapter! I gotta say it is amazing and really well thought out. The way the main characters interact with each other is realistic and when they approach the daughter of the house, you beautifully described her as this big massive giant to the little people that is dangerous and but playful as well! 

The interaction of the brother and sister is cute and playful. But she also shows who is boss and dominance to her older brother as, she toys with him without effort and treating him like a toy. 

The best part that I enjoyed was the mouthplay part, the way she just slams her head down to get her brother in her mouth, is really effective. It shows that she was quick to act and that the brother had such small time to react in to do anything and it seems to imply that  like she loved having him in her mouth and that she just quickly wasted no time getting him in her mouth.

The way she swifty lifted her head up shows elegance and also I bet content that she has got this opportunity to play with her brother in her mouth. But the very best of all in my opinion. Is how you described her she dominantly and child like she slurped him In.

The way that you describe that his feet were the only thing to be seen and that they were violently thrashing around, really shows that, she enjoys this and the best in my opinion is how you described how she slurped him in like a child nosiely and wet. Really good image play, It was excellent and really easy and fun to visualise :)

From this point onwards, I like how the 2 little ones don't seem to pay much borther, which is like the idea of, if you don't keep up we aren't going to help you. And in this chapter, they don't bother considering to help. Since the cage can be seen as a metaphor as their imprisonment for acting aganist their actions of helping out.

It is also a nice detail, we can assume that the sister enjoys playing with him, maybe with dolls and treating like a baby or a doll lol or in this specific chapter, nothing more than a mouth toy ;D

Overall it was an excellent piece of writing. You should consider adding the brother and sister in more situations like more mouthplay, but also maybe like her playing dolls with him like he is one, or treating him like a baby. You should also consider maybe her dangling him to her mouth and maybe she opens it for a moment and then closes it again to continue playing with him and all of a sudden her mother's comes in, which she stops and tries to hide him in her mouth, she doesn't talk very much and slurs her words. So the mother would find it obvious that she has her brother in her mouth and could say like " oh not again. Spit him out right now!" And she would cup her hands around her mouth and slowly spit him out with a lot of salvia.

Maybe you can consider the mother doing mouthplay?  

Take care and I can't wait for the next chapter :D

Author's Response:

Thank you for the extensive review Clouder....

These main characters are moving on now but don't count this family or some of it's members out of the mix.

I like that you seem to appreciate the pains that I'm going to, to make sure that the reader knows exactly what is going on as clearly evidenced in this review.

Please hang in there for the next few chapters now..  I've figured out a strategy to keep it out of a GTS drought, and will switch up writing styles just a tad in order to keep this interesting on all levels...

And thank you most of all for being the primary voice that talked me into continuing this story once again Clouder! 

 

Reviewer: Nodqfan Signed [Report This]
Date: November 30 2018 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 14

Nice to see this story updated again, been a fan since the start, just never reviewed it until now. I feel Tim's agony as he tries to maintain a fleeting grip on his manhood and control of his life in a world where he is a tiny being in a land of giants. I do have to wonder if Tim will ever miss home and attempt to return to it in future chapters.

Author's Response:

All of these things that you are thinking I am thinking too.   So there's a hint in there somewhere Nodqfan. :)

The story's focus is not to meander off into the chaos of some dark cliff, but to have a meaning and a ending that makes sense..  Therfore lots of things have to happen.

It's my hope that you will be there for it too Nodqfan!

 

Thanks a lot for commenting as the comments are always appreciated!

Reviewer: Clouder25 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2018 6:16 AM Title: Chapter 1

Amazing story so far... That is if you haven't forget that this story exists. Will you continue the story?

Author's Response:

Perhaps one day I will..  The next few chapters I really have to think about before I structure them.  But I might get back to this one sooner rather than later Clouder. :)

Thank you for your interest in this story that has been on hiatus lately. :)

Reviewer: Miszczu21PL Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2018 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 8

It keeps emotions. 

Very well. Story which cause hard emotions is made well one.

 

Author's Response:

Thank you very much Miszcuzu.. Sorry that it took me so long to get back to these reviews.. I'd kind of shelved this one for a while..