Reviews For Shrunk ....
Reviewer: Small_but_firm Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 9:56 PM Title: Shrunk ....
Date: June 03 2013 9:56 PM Title: Shrunk ....
This is a very compelling story, and I really enjoy it.
Nice work!
Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2013 3:24 PM Title: Shrunk ....
Date: June 02 2013 3:24 PM Title: Shrunk ....
Here; 'Grabbed', 'Gripped', 'Feel'.....
And, you need to Cap. on "I', when your speaking of yourself in first person.
Nice Idea's though, just need to elaborate on the storyline, and refine it. A bit more build-up and discription is needed, before you just 'plunge' right in,...ya-know?
Just my advice, you can take it for what it's worth. :`)
Reviewer: shinyfox14 Signed [Report This]
Date: June 02 2013 2:14 PM Title: Shrunk ....
Date: June 02 2013 2:14 PM Title: Shrunk ....
This is my first story i worked really hard on it hope you enjoy it