Reviewer: Clouder25 Signed [Report This]
Date: March 14 2018 6:14 AM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

This was such a great story when it first came out, though what happended To the other 4 or so chapters?! Could you reupload or give me a link To read the missing chapters? Anything will do, i really wanted to read this story in full.

Reviewer: Casanova Signed [Report This]
Date: June 06 2013 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

Amazing work so far. I'm really impressed by the introduction especially. The tension was built masterfully throughout the first two chapters, and it has me wanting to try a similar structure in whatever I write next. I usually eschew from the long intro, both because I like to get to the action right away and also because I'm scared of messing up the pacing. Clearly, though, I'm missing out on an opportunity to make a truly resonant start, which is what you've crafted here very nicely.

I usually try to point out one area that could improve, but it's tough. I guess the only thing that bothered me was this: given that this story is a third person limited narrative, it fleetingly threw me off when Mivera recognized the air conditioner as well as the Converse shoes. Obviously her life had been extremely cloistered up to this point, so I feel like she wouldn't be able to recognize those things for what they were. There might be a few other instances, but those were the big ones. On the other hand, it obviously helps the reader to visualize Caitlin better when you say "Converse" as opposed to "rubber foot sleeve" or something to that effect, so in that regard it's clearly a give and take.

All in all, truly excellent work. I look forward to the next installment!

Author's Response: Thanks much for the thorough review. I'm glad you thought the lengthy intro was worth it. As far as the terminology, I did my best to avoid specificity so as to portray Mivera's foreign perceptions better, but ultimately it came down to picking which details it was most important to emphasize this on, so none of the descriptions started to feel bloated. I admit it's a bit of a trade-off, as you pointed out, so I've got my fingers crossed that I made the right call.

Reviewer: youre_my_slave Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

Why is it that in every fairy giantess story I read the fairies have a "holier than thou" attitude? Easier to hate?

Author's Response:

I suppose it's just to mirror a common sentiment of humanity, so that the fairies are more relatable as living things.  But yes, it also helps when it comes time for one to take a beating.

Reviewer: Amateur Wordsmith Signed [Report This]
Date: June 03 2013 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

Honestly the fairies deserve torture.  

“They’re vile creatures.  And ugly.  Disgusting.”

“They lack the breeding of we noble fairies,”

“Reaping resources from the land for their own benefit,”

Let the slaughter commence!

 

Author's Response:

Had to chuckle at this.  Everybody but Mivera is kind of an asshole, right?  Thanks for reading/reviewing.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: May 31 2013 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

Well if anyone person would consider Julia or Carly good role models it would be lil Miss. Sarah.

 

Excellent work from a great writer.

Author's Response: Trust me, after this story is over, Julia and Carly will look like twin Mother Teresas by comparison. Thanks for reviewing!

Reviewer: wildcatman Signed [Report This]
Date: May 30 2013 12:43 AM Title: Chapter 1: Night Flight

O.M.G.!  'Your', going to team-up with Tinyone234!  This, is going to be an instant 'Classic'!  Are you going to 'tame-it-down' a little, or are you going right-for-the-jugglar?  With your exquisite style, and tiny's explisiteness for murder,  this is going to be a real 'thunderstorm' of twisted erotica....   Holding breath untill next update!

 

 

Author's Response:

Sorry to have gotten your hopes up; this is a trade, not a collab, meaning I wrote this for Tinyone, and she's writing one for me separately.  Still, I hope you enjoy.  This is definitely the most violent of my work.