[Report This]Date: April 04 2013 9:37 PM Title: Unlikely Friendship
the detail you put into her socked feet and cleats was something I have not seen in a while. I love how he accepts being her pet and then starts to feel the pain of the risky decision he's hastily made.
Whatever your plans are for the future I look forward to them.
Author's Response:
Thank you Mr E for commenting I have always been a huge fan of soccer girls particularly the destructive power of their feet, so there will probably be more of that from Paige. And also I'm glad you caught my idea about his decision to become Paige's slave as well. But I can't say he doesn't deserve his punishment. After all he traded the little liberty he had left for a little security so he deserves neither. :D
Date: April 03 2013 4:54 PM Title: Unlikely Friendship
Sorry I misposted on Carycomics review I was meaning to say that the plot will continue on chapter 9.
Author's Response:
shut up Amateur Wordsmith you moron
[Report This]Date: April 03 2013 10:27 AM Title: Unlikely Friendship
The foot-fetish thing was a little off-putting. Because, personally, I don't find _anything_ erotic about b.o. (from any part of the anatomy)! But, at least Paige is being half-gentle.
See you @ chapter 8. :-)
Author's Response:
Thank you for being an excellent supporter Carycomic. I should probably warn you though that the first part of the next chapter is all bare feet so I'll put a warning in bold before it starts and after it ends so that people don't have to read me rambleing on about things they don't want to read.
And on a second note I'm going to start moving the plot along in chapter 8 so... yeah just figured i'd let everybody know that. I just need one more chapter to finish things up with Paige.
Date: April 03 2013 4:49 AM Title: Unlikely Friendship
Make it Nasty and sadistic
Author's Response:
Done and done
Date: April 03 2013 4:48 AM Title: Unlikely Friendship
Make it à little Nasty
And sadistic
Author's Response:
I think I have added a lot of nastyness expecially in the latest chapter and as for sadism don't worry Priya will return with a vengence.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2013 1:12 AM Title: Prologue
I love how paige doesn't even have to threaten him she just is really, really persuasive..
Author's Response:
Thats one of her best qualities, rather than threatening Kevin when he disagrees she instead uses kindness and patience in addition to her physical power to mentally dominate and manipulate him into a position of submission.
[Report This]Date: April 03 2013 12:51 AM Title: Unlikely Friendship
I love and adore Paige so much.
Author's Response:
As do I. She has been one of my favorite characters to write I really feel like I portrayed her well and I'm definately going to bring her back in future chapters
[Report This]Date: April 02 2013 10:04 PM Title: Unlikely Friendship
Getting better! I'm still loving this story so much! Impressive descriptions and improved dialogue.
I chuckled when you added
"Psychological Drama next chapter"
Author's Response:
Thanks dudeman I'm glad to hear i'm doing better. I have learned to control my overactive imagination and only explain the most importaint details as opposed to earlier chapters.
Ah yes! about the psychological drama, I'm thinking about finally making Kevin fall down the crazy tree and hit all the branches on the way down
Author's Response:
Thanks dudeman I'm glad to hear i'm doing better. I have learned to control my overactive imagination and only explain the most importaint details as opposed to earlier chapters.
Ah yes! about the psychological drama, I'm thinking about finally making Kevin fall down the crazy tree and hit all the branches on the way down
[Report This]Date: April 02 2013 9:13 PM Title: Prologue
Most of this isn't very erotic for me, I really don't care for feet. My tastes lie more in butt, insertion and breasts. The chapter with Priya was really good. I prefer the dominant aspects, but the past relationship with angela is interesting. I'll definatly keep reading to find out whats actually going on because it's bugging me, lol.
Author's Response:
I totally understand your sentiment and don't worry future chapters will have a greater diversity of erotic material including insertion and breasts. Also you reminded me that I have not included any butt material yet so I'll get into it in the next erotic part.
As for Angela she's not going anywhere and will return back into the story shortly
Date: April 02 2013 8:05 PM Title: Prologue
Not bad at all. You have some detailed descriptions during the "action" scenes that are quite effective and your dialogue for the most part works very well. The introduction of different giantesses gives it nice variety. There are a smattering of technical errors I found in terms of grammar and punctuation, particularly in your early chapters that I think you could probably go back and clean up with some revision, but it's not a huge issue. Keep it up, I like what you've got here so far.
Author's Response:
Well thank you very much Jacksmith I'm glad you enjoyed the story. Also I do plan on re-writting the first two chapters and the prologue once I finish up some things in later chapters.
[Report This]Date: April 01 2013 4:23 AM Title: Prologue
This is a good story although I REALLY wanna know whats going on, so yeah...I kinda want to know more than any sexy stuff, truly your mystery is good enough to drive me nuts everytime I read a new chapter without any info. Keep it up, I can safely say I'm hooked.
Author's Response:
Thanks for commenting Gadget. And rest easy as I now have a good idea as to where I want to take this series so expect the plot to finally arrive.
[Report This]Date: April 01 2013 1:29 AM Title: One Last Time
Originally I really liked this story. Then you added the prologue. Before it was a simple, his friends shrunk I assumed probably sold him or somthing. But you added the new first chapter where theres kevin. Now they shrunk josh instead of kevin because they were told to. Then theres the whole don't say your josh your kevin now.
Now I am interested it's definatly got me thinking and wondering whats happening. So keep it up can't wait to learn more.
Author's Response:
Thank you for supporting my story stargate1990 It's good to hear that your really interested into whats going on.
I'm really sorry about all the confusion It's just that this story is part of a series i'm writting and as I'm still planning said series I can't risk throwing to many plot details out there and then have to live with them throughout the entire series.
I can tell you that I will start getting more in depth as to why he was shrunken, taken, and saved and for what reason(s) in about two more chapters. i just gotta finish things up with Paige first.
Look foward to reading a comment from you again.
[Report This]Date: March 31 2013 10:47 PM Title: The Pool and Paige
Ah, yes... "she lectured down to him in a disappointed tone", that's much better, and feels better too. (Her being a GIANTESS, she wouldn't have to ever, 'Scream.')
You didn't have to go back and change it on my account though, I hope that I didn't effect the outcome, or the direction, of your work. Don't ever let anyone 'Change', your original 'Idea', or ideas.
It's a great story, and I really like it!
Author's Response:
Normally I don't go back and change things but I felt that screaming was really unlike Paige's character, and don't worry although I consider the opinions expressed in every comment I don't allow them to guide my writing
Thank you for commenting again wildcatman I have really enjoyed your support
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:02 PM Title: The Pool and Paige
Hey Wordsmith, just realized I haven't reviewed since (2), so I Thought I'd chime in! :')
How BIG was that flippin' needle? My god! No wonder Kevin was freakin' out!
"What the hell is wrong with you" Screamed Paige at him,..... That would kind of blast his tiny ear drums out , I would think? If she was holding him inside the palm of her hand.....
The discription a little out of place, (maybe if she had"excitedly", or "Alarmingly" yelled out at him, ) Ya know? Just sayin", That's the only thing I really noticed though, just thought I'd give ya my 2 cents.....
Author's Response:
Thanks for checking in wildcatman I hope the story is to your liking.
As for the needle its part of a device designed to extract blood from a tiny person for reasons I will explain later.
you are right about the screaming thing, I'll go back and re-read it and see how I could change it. and thank you for the two cents I will spend them wisely
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 4:03 PM Title: Prologue
Realized I hadn't reviewed yet.
So anyway, I'm really liking Josh's character. (He's gonna remain Josh to me. The name they start with is the name that sticks with me.)
And if you said a lot of more girl's are going to be introduced then hey, keep em' coming!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing again Dudemanguy your one of my best supporters.
Also I'm working on several characters mostly high school and college aged, but I think what this story needs is a MILF perhaps a teacher or a parent. Maybe Angela's mother?
When I write the giantesses the thing is though (I'm posting this so that people can see part of my writing style and perhaps tell me whether its a good thing or not or even borrow it themselves) I start by selecting two or more emotions or sensations that will color the characters interactions with them.
Angela= glorious and dreamlike.
Priya= Exotic and dangerous.
Paige= Friendly and passively dominant.
sorry for putting that plug into the reply I just wanted to tell somebody that
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:32 AM Title: The Pool and Paige
Kevin-nee-Josh sounds like he's finally gone off the Deep End.
Author's Response:
Idk I think he's a little too sane for my tastes needs a little more self-doubt and psychopathic tendencys will fix that lol.
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 10:18 AM Title: A New Goddess A New Experience
*Postpones reviewing to drink some ICE water.*
Author's Response:
*Prepares for review with great anticipation*
[Report This]Date: March 18 2013 1:35 AM Title: The Pool and Paige
It's pretty cool to be honest.
The mysteriousness of his situation and the girls origons gives it some staying power.
Author's Response:
Thank you for reviewing and I agree entirely. I feel that when the reader learns as the character does it puts them into the story, and hopefully makes it more erotic, but also interesting to read
Date: March 18 2013 12:36 AM Title: Prologue
I like the story but im waiting to read why they shrunk him. I understand why u have not shared that info and im not trying to rush u at all. Im just not a fan of giantess bitches. I am looking forward to the feet ch.
Author's Response:
I'm sorry about keeping info a secret its just that this is part of a larger series and I havn't fully planned out where this story fits into it. that and the suspense makes the main characters dive into insanity have more of an impact. I want the reader to discover as he does whats going on.
But since you have been such a loyal fan I shall spoil some thing for you.
Angela and Paige are not bitches what they are doing is for a greater cause, and they hold no negative feelings towards the main character. As for Priya... well yeah she's a bitch, but she isn't a bitch for the sake of being one she has a reason, a really screwed up reason, but still a reason.
Date: March 18 2013 12:02 AM Title: Prologue
Not bad, not bad at all.
Author's Response:
I suppose that not bad is at least somewhat good :D