[Report This]Date: February 19 2013 7:27 PM Title: Chapter 8
I like the story, I really do. You do good for the first time. The only thing I noticed is that you tend to 'jerk around' jumping from one subject to the next kind of quickly. That's about it.
I'm really enjoying this story.
Author's Response:
Thank you. I understand but isn't that better than droning on about one thing for let's say a whole chapter?
Date: February 19 2013 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 8
He could have asked to travel in her bag or her pocket. That would be much more sensible and I suppose, believable, because Charles might be crushed underneath her foot. At least he's going to work though.
Author's Response:
True, but where's the fun in that?!
[Report This]Date: February 19 2013 1:47 PM Title: Chapter 8
Really liking the way this story is going so far. Eagerly anticipating what is going to happen at work... However, at the moment I can't see this story exceeding 50 chapters. I hope this is not the case, but regardless, another excellent chapter, keep it up.
Author's Response:
Stay tuned. I can understand how you could perceive that, it's just coming up to the Chapter 10 mark yet and not a lot of ground has been covered in terms of the plot so there's still plently more I can write about. However that's not to say I want to drag this story out, but there's no point jumping straight to the midway point without building up a persona for each character. I do have idea's on whereabouts this story can go, even further than the outcome of the mystery messenger and Charles' dealings with the Chinese, but you'll have to wait and see. Anyway, thank you for the review, much appreciated.
Date: February 19 2013 4:21 AM Title: Chapter 7
I wonder if he'll make it to work. Charles has nothing to lose though, really. At least that's the way I see it for the moment and I'm sure that's kind of what he's thinking.
Author's Response:
You'll have to read on to find out. The thing is, is that Charles' actions seemed to have really ticked off Tanya. There's still a whole night to go before work the following day so who knows what will happen.
Date: February 18 2013 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is a great story! I'm a big fan of huge butts! Wouldn't it be awesome if she swallowed charles though? xD Or at least teased him about it? That would really compliment the control aspect. Tease about adding him to her massive ass xD
Author's Response:
Thanks, likewise! I'm confused, do you mean physically swallow him with her mouth? Or with her ass?
[Report This]Date: February 18 2013 7:25 PM Title: Chapter 7
OMG! She actually let one RIP! Poor Charles'! ( and, a deathly one Too!) Ewwww!
Talk about an "atomic wedgie!" Charles' 'choice' of travel, the dangerous derrie're??
Wow, gettin a lill' crazy with the butt-crack.
Author's Response:
I thought it added something a little different, otherwise it's just the same type of crush each time. Haha I know but this story may be centrally involved around butt's.
[Report This]Date: February 18 2013 7:05 PM Title: Chapter 5
"Oh it's fine don't worry about it Tanya, the main thing is that I'm alright, just don't do it again!" That is so funny! I can imagine that taking place.....Ha!
Tanya, might be enjoying herself a lil' Too Much! Ha,)
Great Stuff! Keep it rolling....
Author's Response:
Haha I'm glad you enjoy it, I think so to, but then again is Charles also enjoying himself?
[Report This]Date: February 18 2013 2:31 PM Title: Chapter 7
Quality on the length front and in style too! You do like your butts I have to say! But regardless another excellent chapter, two in one day! What a treat, keep it coming. I'd like to hope that perhaps Charles is returned to a larger height but at a slow process i.e a foot a day or something like that. Also I'm interested in whether you'll be bringing in more characters? Still, a cracking start keep up the good work!
Author's Response:
Ah thank you, glad to have cracked both of those enigma's. I am a fan yes, I just feel that butt's suit my style and I genuinely enjoy writing about them more so than say vore or mouth play for instance, but I will attempt to satisfy all party's. Yes I have been efficient today, although this could be a one off, I just really want to hit the ground running. Yes I also considered the possiblity of that you'll have to what and see on that front, but yes I do plan to, but it is key to build the story up around these two central characters, Tanya and Charles, early on. Thank you very much.
[Report This]Date: February 18 2013 8:05 AM Title: Chapter 6
Wow, what an excellent story so far. For your first piece of writing this is really good. Great use of imagery and I'm eagerly anticipating what is going to happen next. Finding hard to see how you're going to reveal, if at all, the mystery messenger, but very impressed keep it up.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much, yes I struggled at first also about how I could reveal the messenger but I think I have an idea.
Date: February 18 2013 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 4
Poor Charles. I hope he'll be alright.
Author's Response:
Wait and see.
[Report This]Date: February 17 2013 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 3
Well, I wish he hadn't been reduced to such a tiny-size. (6") inch's would have been much better! But, it's your story. Great story! and, it appears that there will be some 'VORE' in the next chapter?
Author's Response:
It was a tricky decision, yet I felt that just the one inch would be perfect due to the comparisons between Charles and the stiletto heel, but the game's not over yet so things may change. You'll have to wait and see.
[Report This]Date: February 17 2013 3:36 PM Title: Chapter 2
Mmm, Curled black-hair, hispanic complextion, shrinking potion stuffed inside her open clevage......an it's only chapter 2!
Author's Response:
There's only going to be more to come! Stay tuned.
Date: February 17 2013 2:47 PM Title: Chapter 3
Poor Charles. I hope he'll be alright. The potion only shrinks doesn't it? How will get get back to usual size?
Author's Response:
Indeed it does. Well the mystery messenger may have a part to play later on.
Date: February 17 2013 2:42 PM Title: Chapter 2
That was a weird chapter, but yes, excitement is building. I wonder why he would invite her to his place...
Author's Response:
I thought I made it clear? Sorry for any confusion, but he does have a thing for her, as does she, with both looking for a relationship.
Date: February 17 2013 2:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
I would like to know why such a powerful potion was randomly left on her desk. I hope this will be explained. Can she be trusted with it?
Author's Response:
All will be revealed in good time, it's going to be a long story, so perhaps this mystery will unravel the deeper you go down the rabbit hole.