[Report This]Date: July 15 2023 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 6: Emotions
By pure chance I found this story on its tenth anniversary. Nice short story, too bad it never developed
Date: July 23 2013 1:33 PM Title: Chapter 6: Emotions
I wonder if Jack or his parents willl eventually contact Jerry Springer or something similar. That would be cool and unique, although I don't think you have anything like that planned.
Author's Response: Maybe I do my little friend. Maybe I do
[Report This]Date: April 25 2013 12:21 AM Title: Chapter 5: GULP!
Great story, but wonder if jacks parents will try to stop him or ig they will let him go. If they stop I wonder what Ashley will do. Great chapters.
Author's Response: Hush little tiny don't say a word, mommas gonna buy you a tiny Burt ad if that tiny bird gives away the plot, Mommas going to finish this story, I think not ;)
Date: April 14 2013 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 5: GULP!
The chapter title I wasn't paying attention too, but I guess it's actually refering to the actions of Jacks father and how there is misunderstanding between him and Jack.
Author's Response:
possibly. just keep reading
Date: April 14 2013 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 4: Movie Madness
Somehow I don't think their relationship will fourish. I'm always skeptical about love, so maybe everything will turn out ok. I think reading all these gantess stories has made me fear girls. I was never really that interested in finding love myself anyway. That may mean giving up this site atogether.
Author's Response:
Awww dont leave :( I love all my small friends
[Report This]Date: March 27 2013 9:37 PM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
Awesome, can't wait 2 c how the food thing turns out.
Author's Response: Hmm -licks lips- ill remember that my tiny friend
[Report This]Date: March 26 2013 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 4: Movie Madness
Sneaking him into the movie, you naught-ty, giant girl, you......what's next, smuggling him into the girl's locker room?
Author's Response: Easy there, don't get too excited
[Report This]Date: March 26 2013 6:50 PM Title: Chapter 4: Movie Madness
Heyo, go Jack. I like Jack. Put it where it hurts!
Just kidding, but I do understand why he's saying what he's saying. But if the story is going where I think it is, then he just made himself giantess food.
Author's Response: Good idea my tiny friend
[Report This]Date: February 28 2013 8:27 AM Title: Chapter 3: Family Turmoil at Dinner
Great story, I wonder if Ashley will mistake Jack as a piece of candy or popcorn. Maybe she'll have a a more inimate mistake in mind. Can't wait for the next chapter. Alot of ideas are popping in my mind. I cannot wait to see where you go.
Author's Response: No, not yet my little friend
Date: February 11 2013 7:01 AM Title: Chapter 3: Family Turmoil at Dinner
I just realized your username is an anagram for giantess. One of my friends is a giantess but she wouldn't do what Ashley is doing to Jack. We mostly talk about science because she is very smart for her age but I'm her only friend apparently...
There's something about the title of your story, but I can't quite figure it out. I'm guessing it could serve as a warning to people. Maybe it's because normal males like a hearty chest, obviously ever chest has a heart but I'm sure you know what I mean, and in Jack's quest for Ashley's he will put himself in great danger? That's what I think anyway. People talk about wolves in sheeps clothing and I reckon Ashley will be a wolf in peacocks clothing, simply because peacocks ae pretty like her and I seem to be doing a really long review so I'm going to stop now.
Author's Response: Very interesting ideas little one
[Report This]Date: February 11 2013 12:58 AM Title: Chapter 3: Family Turmoil at Dinner
Awesome chapter. Keep it up! Oh, and I'm glad you enjoyed my stories. Can't wait to see what you add to my collection if you decide to help.
Author's Response: Glad you are liking te story
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 11:53 PM Title: Chapter 3: Family Turmoil at Dinner
Hmmm, dinner and a movie, with a fifty-foot Ashley! Sounds dangerous!
Jack really snapped out of it quick though, after being treated like an appetizer?
Great story! Keep it going, I'll be following this one......
Author's Response: Glad you liked :)
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
Woah, slow down there missy. Everything is going bye a little too fast. Just explain everything out. I understand everything that's happening, but you seem to jump from scene to scene. Take some time on just one scene and explain it out.
But good story so far.
Author's Response: Thanks :) I was trying a different writing style that didn't exactly work out, next chapter will be better
Date: February 10 2013 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
Basically what I meant was it might not hurt to bring in some more concrete description. The first paragraph of your first chapter does this when the video is shown; try to have this come through in spoken scenes too. Even when nothing explosive is happening, you can still deliver some description to beef up the dialogue. Every detail, even if it feels small, adds to the package.
Author's Response: Wait till you see the next chapter...
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
Ahh, my mistake. I meant, good story ma'am. Sorry for the mixup.
Author's Response: Lol it's cool, I may have to eat you now though
Date: February 10 2013 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
An intriguing couple of chapters you have here. Your opening does seem to suggest more of a "gentle" story so I'm interested to see how you bring in a couple of those tags you have. You have some technical errors littered around, and I might also suggest trying to inject a little more imagery into the exposition to give an image to the reader rather than just explaining. Still this is not bad at all for a first story; you've made your characters easy to relate to early on in the story and the dialogue flows well. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thanks *smiles* but how would I do those things you mentioned? And remember, you never do the freaky stuff on the first date
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 9:54 AM Title: Chapter 2: Lions and Tigers and Bears
Uh oh, hope Jack is fine. Some giants aren't what they seem...
Good story man.
Author's Response: Thanks, but I'm a girl >.< My name is an anagram for something...
Date: February 10 2013 5:11 AM Title: Chapter 2: Lions and Tigers and Bears
Phew, Ashley is real. I'm a bit worried about the insertion tag but I'm sure I'll be fine.
Author's Response: But will jack?
Date: February 10 2013 3:13 AM Title: Chapter 1: History Class
Well, I have the story set to round robin, so each person can add their own stories as chapters. You can check out my account for more details on how the guidelines and stuff work. I suggest that you also read Adam and Ashley/Adam's New School first.
Author's Response: I did, it was great!
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 1:08 AM Title: Chapter 2: Lions and Tigers and Bears
Awesome chapter; keep the foot stuff going, maybe add some boob stuff too.
PS: You look to be a pretty good writer. If you're interested, i've got a short story collection going that's open to everyone. Do you think you'd want to contribute?
Author's Response: In due time my friend, maybe, and as for the short story thing, how does that work exactly?