[Report This]Date: December 10 2014 8:22 AM Title: Chapter 10 End of A Year Pt. 1
Well, I will guess that, somehow or other, Alex will wind up in between Juli's Big Melons. ;-)
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 9 Magic Charm
I would’ve read this earlier, but my wife was down... : )
Good story. Please continue...
Author's Response:
Thank You So Much
[Report This]Date: May 07 2013 7:23 PM Title: Chapter 9 Magic Charm
Playful as ever, these two. Bravo!
Author's Response:
Thank You Very Much
[Report This]Date: April 24 2013 10:14 AM Title: Chapter 8 Point of View
Alex will probably spend the whole next chapter "pantying" with excitement.
*Waits for collective groan to subside.*
Seriously, though: thanks for finally updating. This poignant-as-ever chapter was well worth the wait.
Author's Response:
Thank you very much... sorry I been busy with school and now with exams coming up its hard to do anything in my spare time... again I'll try to write more often....and thanks for reading my (first) story.
Date: April 01 2013 11:49 PM Title: Chapter 1 In Love
I like the premise if the story it's very original, however there are a few noticeable grammar errors, but I think you'll improve on those over time.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the advice
[Report This]Date: March 29 2013 4:12 PM Title: Chapter 7 3'z
The story started off really great. I loved the what did she do to her ex boyfriend. I took it as a she shrunk him or somthing. Obviously whatever she did wasn't that big a deal as he wasn't scared of her or anything at the party. That was a real downpoint for me, I would of prefered a more sadistic break up, not a pathetic one.
At first I didn't care for the chapter length. I prefer a few paragrahs over the one or two. But you fixed that after chapter 2.
Obviously they seem to treally love each other but I'm not to crazy over gentle giantesses. I'd prefer situations where he's not to crazy over whats happening to him. Either she gets caried away or someone else gets him. Maybe even have some misunderstaning between them.
[Report This]Date: March 29 2013 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 7 3'z
Good story.
Just stop apologizing and provide a brief description of each chapter.
[Report This]Date: March 28 2013 8:31 PM Title: Chapter 7 3'z
Shrinkage, at last! And, it's nicely refreshing to have the beautiful giantess be a gentle one, right from the start.
:-)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2013 4:40 PM Title: Chapter 7 3'z
Good good, just some improvements here and there. All I suggest majorly is for you to make the dialogue sound a bit more 'loud'. I mean make the characters really speak out.
But I like the story.
Author's Response:
Thank you :)
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 12:14 PM Title: Chapter 6 Calm Sunday
OK! They're now officially girlfriend and boyfriend. And, they have officially slept together. Is there any chance that, when he wakes up a second time (at the start of chapter 7), he will finally be shrunk for real?
Author's Response:
Yes :)
Date: March 08 2013 10:16 AM Title: Chapter 6 Calm Sunday
It's a decent chapter, but I felt the first and last paragraphs were rather long. I do like the characters and I hope things don't go too far too quickly.
Author's Response:
Thank You and there love will go slowly
[Report This]Date: March 08 2013 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 6 Calm Sunday
LOL, I loved the gotcha part! Anyway, great chapter. This story reminds me of another one called The Ladybug, you should check it out!
Good chapter!
Author's Response:
Thank You Very Much
I'll Add More
[Report This]Date: March 01 2013 1:04 PM Title: Chapter 5 Some Party Pt 2
Well, aside from mispronouncing "sting operation, this was a flawless new chapter. Thanks for updating! :-)
Author's Response:
Thank You Very Much
[Report This]Date: February 28 2013 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 5 Some Party Pt 2
Not caring about whether or not the GTS comes, I am really liking the build up. I'm gonna pull a Stubbornstain here and tell you not to go too fast with the relationship.
Author's Response:
Ok and thank you
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 4 Some Part Pt1
The character-building keeps getting better and better. Although, with regard to Chance? I think you meant to say "...fourth _passenger_ in the car."
Unless, of course, it's a quintet made up of Zoey, Ida, Juliella, Chance, and Alex. In which case; lucky Alex! ;-)
Author's Response:
Yeah I did and no Alex dosen't get all the girls but one and thank you for reading
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 3:49 PM Title: Chapter 3 Sweet
I wonder if he'll get shrunk at that party?
Author's Response:
Maybe maybe not :) and thank you for reading
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 3:46 PM Title: Chapter 2 Strange Dream
That's SOME dream! :-)
Author's Response:
Sure is and thank you for reading
[Report This]Date: February 21 2013 3:44 PM Title: Chapter 1 In Love
Well, the first grammar errors that come to mind are the conjoining of character quotes (a.k.a. dialogue) with the narrative text. Please, separate them via double spacing. I ask this as someone who was initially guilty of it, myself.
Author's Response:
I'll keep this in mind and thank you
Date: February 21 2013 7:28 AM Title: Chapter 4 Some Part Pt1
Luke sounds like a typical ex. I hope Alex will be alright.
Author's Response:
Don't worry he will be and thank you for reading
[Report This]Date: February 20 2013 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 4 Some Part Pt1
COMMAS! I notice a massive absence of these. Other than that, it's a really good story, but use COMMAS!!
Author's Response:
I will use these in my story and thank you