Date: September 16 2015 5:33 AM Title: Chapter 5
Cherish's personality is so engaging! :)
[Report This]Date: August 14 2013 12:12 AM Title: Chapter 34
Im glad you are working on the story again. The chapter was great.
Dave
Date: August 12 2013 8:48 PM Title: Chapter 1
In general the story is not bad, sadly it lacks in consequences. The guy travels about a day in the girls buttcrack, as a punishment *period* it doesnt seem to get warm there, it doesnt seem to smell, he doesnt seem to get grinded there from her buttocks...nothing. Doesnt seem to be that much of a punishment for him XD
[Report This]Date: June 15 2013 11:37 PM Title: Chapter 32
Great Chapter.
[Report This]Date: June 04 2013 9:33 AM Title: Chapter 27
Wow I came across this story a few days ago and gave it a chance since none of my favorite stories have been updated in awhile.
Your story is very good. And since I have a thing for women's butts I love where the 2 tinys spend most of there time. I hope they get back to Cherish soon. I am hoping for a happy ending when the story is done.
[Report This]Date: April 22 2013 10:18 PM Title: Chapter 24
Great chapter, I hope cherish will find them
[Report This]Date: April 21 2013 8:39 AM Title: Chapter 23
Love the new chapters, cannot wait for the next chapter.
[Report This]Date: March 03 2013 6:41 AM Title: Chapter 18
I wonder if magnus was good enough to have a little more fun.
[Report This]Date: March 01 2013 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
I to like this story but I also have concern over her (shrink sitter) skills.
hey can I borrow him for a couple of days? sure by. lol terrible (shrink sitter).
shrunken children fight! yes
[Report This]Date: February 13 2013 6:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
Other than the fact that everyone seems kind of "whatever" about what's happening to Magnus, I like this story...Although there were plenty of times that he could have died, like when the cat attacked him, some shrink sitter! And his parents concented to this, all cuz he is a bully.
[Report This]Date: February 11 2013 10:35 PM Title: Chapter 12
Very hot, very awesome!
I love this story with all of my heart, and what's left of my soul.
I give 10 stars, only becase I can't give 87.
Date: February 07 2013 6:57 PM Title: Chapter 8
Great chapter. Wonder what kind of cat food Sugar likes (Live or dead).
Date: February 06 2013 7:26 PM Title: Chapter 7
Oh Iwonder if Conlan will remember him.
Date: February 06 2013 5:17 PM Title: Chapter 6
Great new chapters. I cannot wait to see what kind of situation he gets into next.
Date: February 04 2013 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 4
Good chapter, seems like you have a good build up happening. Cannot wait for the new chapter.
Date: February 02 2013 9:39 AM Title: Chapter 3
These rules seem a bit light but good chapter non the less.
Date: February 01 2013 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 1
This is my last review for you, I am going to tell you one thing that I've said before. SLOW DOWN. This story is actually not a bad concept to imagine, but don't take it so fast. When you get an idea for a chapter, write the chapter out. But don't post it. Spend some time,whether it be a few minutes here, or an hour two there, to read it over and edit. Add more 'fluffy' description, snappy dialogue, and believable interactions. And I'm gonna just repeat what Jacksmith said. Write it like a story, don't read it like a textbook.
All in all, only time and practice will tell. My main point right now is, slow down.
Peace Out.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2013 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 1
You have some nice ideas here for a story, but they feel really contracted and bound down by the dry textbook-style delivery, at least initially. Try to show us the scenes rather than tell, and expand your concepts outward a little to make it a story rather than a compact summary. Good luck in continuing.
Date: February 01 2013 4:24 PM Title: Chapter 2
Ok, your layout is much better. Now onto tip# 2. Description. Being a first story, you can just stretch your arms, feeling about, trying to see what fits best in your story. But always add in that little bit of description so we know what's what, or where he is. I am still a little forgetful but it helps if you just think about it. Better chapter.
Date: February 01 2013 2:19 PM Title: Chapter 2
Hmm, wonder what the rules will entail. Cannot wait to see what she does.