Reviewer: marky8931 Signed [Report This]
Date: October 23 2017 7:26 PM Title: Prologue

This is really good is the next chapter ever going to be finished

 

Reviewer: dth456 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 04 2014 4:25 AM Title: Chapter 3

When is Chapter 4 finished?? cant wait to read it :) 

Reviewer: Ketek Signed [Report This]
Date: June 16 2014 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 2

That's a very impressive story . Keep it going (thumbs up)

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 31 2013 9:59 PM Title: Prologue

You should post this on writing.com or something, it would be fun to take a whack at it and post chapters of my own. Also, I am confused as to why her name changed from Abby to Abbi. Intentional or accident?

This next little tidbit is for Stubbornstain. 

Who is Alex? Do you mean Ben? And didn't you read the part where she said she couldn't hear him? That's why he isn't complaining any. No need to waste breath if she can't hear him. 

Author's Response: I feel so stupid. Yes, it is Abby, I just forgot. Wow...I am stupid...

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: January 31 2013 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 2

Here:

but desired to with all the heart.

I think you mean their.

 

You need to remember to put the description on separate lines to the description because in places this makes the story harder to follow than it would otherwise be and I found myself have to reread sections. It wasn't much of an issue in earlier chapters and normally it's fine but it's good to follow ocnvention.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: January 31 2013 4:27 PM Title: Prologue

It's an interesting start. I like the fact that a prologue has been included because I feel the background information you have provided will be useful. I also like that this appears to be a second person story, although be careful of using the word "you" in the first few words of too many sentences and aim to have some variety in the description. Second person, I feel, is the hardest writing style to pull off effectively, though present continuous tense in any form is probably up there with it.

 

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 31 2013 1:53 AM Title: Prologue

Ok, official review. I love your stuff on here and writing.com. Favorited definitely. Fun stuff man, fun stuff...

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 29 2013 8:53 PM Title: Prologue

Hey, are there any ending for "My Shrunken Life" on writing.com? If not, I guess I might contribute a chapter...

Author's Response:

There's one ending, but you should feel free to add a chapter if you want! Out of the 60 chapters so far, only one is an ending so, you should easily find a place where you want to add!

Reviewer: Dudemanguy Signed [Report This]
Date: January 27 2013 1:55 PM Title: Prologue

That's what I was thinking  deathshinigami. Just call her, Ben!

Reviewer: Intention Signed [Report This]
Date: January 26 2013 11:19 PM Title: Prologue

I'm going to give you my review. This is indeed a really good story for your first time. Mine wasn't nearly as good as this (I wrote it 4 years ago, give me credit.) I like the idea of her not recognizing him, and I also await the inevitable discovery of her when she sees it's him. My thing I have ti give you is that the 'beginner's element' is shown a lot in here, Not a bad thing, but it shows that you're using the standard fetish stuff. Mix it up! I like the back story you built up between the two though. That's what I look for in most stories. Keep it up.

Author's Response: Oh believe me...I definately plan on mixing it up...you'll see...(Evil laughter)