[Report This]Date: February 05 2013 7:45 PM Title: Captured Again?
Ouch, what an ending...And just when Lee was starting to like living again. Not what I wished would have happened but an ending nonetheless...Great story Dudeman.
Author's Response:
Yeah... I don't know why but I liked that ending over a lot of others. Maybe I'm in a bit of a dark phase right now. But don't worry, I'll be back to my happy endings before you know it.
[Report This]Date: January 22 2013 7:23 AM Title: Do Not Disturb
*thumbs up* That was amazing! :D So... now what?
Author's Response:
Now I finish up this story and focus on other matters.
[Report This]Date: January 21 2013 6:35 PM Title: Do Not Disturb
Hey! Sometimes shorter _is_ sweeter.
Good job, once more. :-)
Author's Response:
THanks man. I agree too with the shorter is sweeter. But I do have a sequel in mind I might write someday.
[Report This]Date: January 21 2013 2:23 AM Title: Captured Again?
I just want to say that outta all the stories you've written so far, this one is my favorite, because I like the fact that Lee isnt afraid to die. I feel like it adds a lot to a character when they are so broken that death seems like the best option. And of course the fact that Alexis is trying to keep him alive while also making him trust her.
Author's Response:
Thanks. Even though this is just a short story (which I end in chapter 5) people seem to think it my best. Maybe it's because I work extra hard on character development in this one.
Again, Thanks.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2013 6:37 PM Title: Recompilation
Dear Dudemanguy,
I have not been on officially recently, but unofficially I have been following a few of your stories and gosh dang it, they are amazing. I love your stories. Don't stop writing!
Enthusiastic reader,
Ghostbuster5
P.S. This is my favorite so far
Author's Response:
Dear Ghostbuster5,
I am honored you think my stories are amazing. Heck, as an author, I always look back on my stories saying "Oh man, I could have definitely done this better. This just seems terrible." But I guess that's just the author's viewpoint of his own stories.
Enthusiastic Writer,
Dudemanguy.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2013 1:41 PM Title: Captured Again?
I am loving this so far, and I had no problems understanding chapter 3, so my theoretical hats off to you.
Author's Response:
Why thank you. I reread over chapter 3 to make sure everything was understandable.
Author's Response:
Why thank you. I reread over chapter 3 to make sure everything was understandable.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2013 11:16 AM Title: Recompilation
This is the most plausibly rendered version of shrinkie-PTSD I've ever seen depicted. Bravo!
Author's Response:
Probably some of the highest praise i've receieved in a review! Thanks!
But PTSD for shrinkie's can be quite different. Some other authors have expoited this fact like edexdexx and such.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2013 11:12 AM Title: Total Recall
That settles it. I'm definitely heading over to chapter 3! :-)
Author's Response:
Hey, i'll meet you halfway and we can move on to chapter 3 together.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2013 11:07 AM Title: Captured Again?
Ah! An action-packed prologue, followed by explanatory flashback. A literary classic. :-)
Author's Response:
Flashback's are going to be...
Wait, haven't I said this before?
[Report This]Date: January 19 2013 11:07 AM Title: Captured Again?
Ah! An action-packed prologue, followed by explanatory flashback. A literary classic. :-)
Author's Response:
Flashback's are going to be all too common here, so don't think this is close to ending.
A classic? I would like to think so.
[Report This]Date: January 17 2013 10:08 PM Title: Captured Again?
Nice chapter. Keep itup! I, like many other people, like the whole past to present thing.
Author's Response:
I plan to keep it up the whole story, each chapter hopefully.
Date: January 17 2013 8:11 PM Title: Captured Again?
"Well, for the first week and a half or so, she wouldn't let me out of her sight. Or in public, out from under her foot." Alex gasped as she saw Lee meant what he said. Rachel kept him under her foot for hours at a time. This also meant Lee heard the entire conversation!
"O-ok, just w-wanting to know." Lee raised an eyebrow.
"Something wrong Alex?"
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I think that your new spacing is kind of making some things a little tough to understand sometimes. This part is an example, I had to re-read it to make sure that I was understanding it correctly. And its not really a problem that you've had with previous stories, its just the spacing is causing you problems. I dont know, maybe its just me being dumb, but Im trying to help you make your stories easier to read.
Anyway this was a great chapter, good luck in the writting.
Author's Response:
Yeah, it's weird ya know? I see wildcatman saying he likes it, and you saying it's confusing! Gah! What should I do?
I'm gonna use this spacing still but from now on, I'll make an effort to clearly explain who's who. This new spacing requires it and I haven't been paying attention much. But from now on, I hope to fix this.
[Report This]Date: January 17 2013 7:50 PM Title: Captured Again?
Really good beginning. Lee straining to recall memory, and slowly remembering....
Fading from present to past; I like that, keep that going! Maybe, a l;ittle bit of each one of his past tormenters, revealed in each chapter? (Flashback)
Lee seems to be in good hands Now, Question: Is that going to develope into anything?
Wild-cat!
Author's Response:
Flashbacks of past tormentors. Maybe.
It develops into something no doubt, but what...?
[Report This]Date: January 17 2013 12:34 AM Title: Captured Again?
First of all, thanks for reviewing my stories. It's people like you, along with all my other main reviewers, who've helped me improve, and you in particular, have posted some great reviews. Now, onto the review.
All I have to say, is that the story's great. As a suggestion, It'll be cool to see some foot and breast stuff in the story later on.
Oh, and by the way, is the girl's name, Alex, a reference to one of my stories?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review! I plan to read 'Adam's New School' right after I post this. As for your suggestion, let's just say that I plan on taking the more 'enjoyable' route, while still having a story plot.
And to your question, the name is kinda sorta a reference. It's a mix between a character called 'Alexia' in a story by TinyDann, and yes, Alex from your story. And out pops Alexis or Alex!
[Report This]Date: January 16 2013 10:07 PM Title: Captured Again?
You are definitely getting better, this is the most interesting start to a story you've written thus far. One criticism though, is that towards the end, its kind of hard to tell who is talking, especially the part with "Tim". Im not sure who is saying what in that paragraph. Anyway, glad to see you improving and can't wait to read the rest of this.
Author's Response:
Yeah I noticed that too after rereading it once I posted. I plan to fix it though.
[Report This]Date: January 16 2013 8:49 PM Title: Captured Again?
Sounds like you did enjoy some of my work, I see that it's beginning to rub off on you...
Great start, and if the spaceing stays like that it's much easier to flow through...
I like it!....I have trouble with the tight spacing, and can't seem to stick with it if it's not double spaced like that,...
*wildcatman*
Author's Response:
I decided to space out paragraphs more for this story and it actually makes much more sense. Expect a lot of future chapters to be spaced like this.
[Report This]Date: January 16 2013 8:45 PM Title: Captured Again?
Good start, I like it!
Author's Response:
Thanks! Glad to have you onboard for this story too.