Reviews For Under Whose Roof
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Reviewer: Chozo Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 22 2013 1:52 PM Title: Chapter 1

I'm going to give this a rating of 10, even though it really hasn't gotten to any significant sort of action. I love the setup, and where it seems to be going. As you may know, I am a HUGE fan of the whole "reversal of fortune" aspect of size changing. It doesn't really matter too much how it happened, but I have to say I am curious why the pink energy ball backfired on here? You don't have to explain what the problem was, but it would be kinda nice to know.

I also love how the conditions of the spell are that the target must "obey the rules of the house". I think I get where you are going with that... The bra is the house, right? ;) I'd love to see what sort of strict rules the daughter will impose on her mother while she is living in that "house". And of course the mother will be forced to abide by those rules if she ever hopes to be freed of the spell.



Author's Response:

Thanks Chozo, I do have a reason for the spell backfiring.  If/when I ever write again, then it'll be explained :)

As for the conditions of the spell...I planned on the mother determining when the "rules of the house" are obeyed sufficiently.  Unfortunately for her, now that things have backfired, Andrea likely has the power to determine when the spell is finished.  Sorry, I should have explained that in the story.

Reviewer: slave4ever Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 29 2012 6:05 AM Title: Chapter 1

Very good start. Please keep going.

Dave

Reviewer: jacksmith5996 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 29 2012 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 1

A very enjoyable premise with some good introductory action.  Keep it up.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 28 2012 11:56 PM Title: Chapter 1

I remember this story from a little while back an I absolutely loved it back then an now, was always hoping that you would continue with it.

aaron

Reviewer: AdamX Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 28 2012 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very nice, please go on.

Reviewer: KefkaR Signed [Report This]
Date: November 28 2012 10:06 PM Title: Chapter 1

Really loving the description present in this.  All the 'small' details that are really important got touched on.

Hoping to see more soon!

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