Date: November 15 2012 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 9
Overall a decent story. I like how it has a happy ending...well sort of.
Date: November 15 2012 8:24 PM Title: Chapter 6
Here it says:
"But now, two large naked feet the size of a small boat crashed into them..."
Though in the previous chapter you said each toe was the size of an elephant. How can her feet be the size of a small boat if each toe is the size of an elephant?
Date: November 15 2012 8:18 PM Title: Chapter 5
I think you're overestimating the size of her toes at fifty feet. A blue whale is a little under 100 feet. Here is a size comparision with an (average) human:
http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/File:Blue_whale_size.svg
There's no denying her feet would be big, but to say, and I quote: "Her enormous toes, each the size of an elephant" seems exaggerated.
Author's Response:
She is 200 feet at that time ;). Look it up in the according chapter. And with "small boat" I meant compared to Battleships, Cruise ships and oil tankers. But it's subjective what boatsize one would consider small, I realise that.
Date: November 15 2012 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 4
I knew she was supposed to be stupid, though I didn't think we she was this stupid. I guess I overestimated her...
Date: November 15 2012 8:07 PM Title: Chapter 3
It's a shame the chapters are so short, becuase I'm starting to really the story.
Date: November 15 2012 8:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Oh, as an added note, you should probably up the rating, it's not quite "G" material lol
Author's Response:
I fixed the rating. Indeed, I forgot to change it, thanks for telling me.
Date: November 15 2012 8:03 PM Title: Chapter 2
Cala is a unique character. I don't think I've ever read a story on here with a character like her. Good work.
Date: November 15 2012 7:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
A good start I think. Just remember to put the speech on separate lines to the description.
[Report This]Date: November 15 2012 7:54 PM Title: Chapter 9
Unique, amusing, and well written. The ending seems inconclusive, but it's there. :]
Well done!