Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 19 2012 9:44 AM Title: Carbon

As one of the reviews has already said the next chapter name could Aluminium which would make the word "critical". However, I'm willing to extrapolate.

If the name of the next chapter is Sulfer then that would make the word "Critics".

If you have another chapter called Iodine and then one called Selenium you get the word "criticise".

I'm also willing to go further. If the next chapter is Alluminium then the chapter after could be Neon and after those two chapters named Sulfer to make the word "Criticalness".

However I'm willing to go further. If the word is indeed critical (which would make for an awfully short story) then you would have a second word, like "person".

In which case, after Aluminium you have a chapter called Phosphorus then one called Erbium then one called Sulfur, after that Oxygen and ending with a chapter called Nitrogen.

Reviewer: Ghostbuster5 Signed [Report This]
Date: September 18 2012 7:49 PM Title: Carbon

Hmmmm? I don't like these people. And I love how each chapter you put in a different element. That is so creative. I comend you on doing such a great job with this story.

Reviewer: Malaka Signed [Report This]
Date: September 18 2012 2:39 PM Title: Titanium

I like this story so far, and I'd love to see more. These two characters are easy to relate to, even if we don't know their names yet, lol. And I am curious to see how it's going to end for them.

So far the chapters spell Cr-I-Ti, so I'm guessing ( maybe I'm wrong) that the next one will be Carbon ;-)

Author's Response:

I was really excited to see a review from an amazing author like you, Malaka! I'm trying really hard to improve my writing with this story.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 15 2012 10:12 AM Title: Iodine

I'm curious as to why the chapters are named after elements. I'm guessing the codeword could have something with their symbols on the periodic table or maybe it has something to do with their atomic number. I'd like to think it's just the first letter of every chapter but that seems too simple.

Author's Response:

It does involve the periodic table. It's not as complex as you might think, but it isn't too simple either.

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 14 2012 8:55 AM Title: Chrome

Welcome to giantessworld! I prefer gentle stories too, and once I've finished writing that story for my friend (who is a giantess) I will update my unfinished story (hopefully). I don't think she'll eat me or anything if I don't get it done, but I did make a pledge. If it was somebody else then maybe things might turn nasty...and I have a habit of overanalyzing situations, so please forgive me.

A nice start and I do like the story so far, though there are a couple of things. A good thing is to always put any speech on separate lines to the description. This makes your story easier to follow. It's not a big issue however in places which have longer paragraphs I feel it helps the reader.

I remember I had an idea for a story once with changing perspectives between chapters. I like the idea of two perspectives so long as it isn't constant, because a story isn't like a TV show or cartoon and some people forget that. My idea was to base a giantess a story on the cartoon known as "Tom and Jerry" but this never materialized.

Someone said to me once, "reading is the best way to improve writing abiltiy". I'm not sure if that's true or not, but in addition to reviewing the stories of others you could take a gander at the "writing tools" section of giantessworld. I found it quite helpful when I first came here, and I feel my stories have gradually improved over the years that I've been a member.

I think that's everything I wanted to say. I'll contact you if I think of anything else.

Author's Response:

Thanks. I've been messing with the dialogue and trying to fix it as you suggested.

Author's Response:

Thanks. I've been messing with the dialogue and trying to fix it as you suggested.