Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: October 17 2012 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 14

The plot thickens with the once terrifying Adela slowly morphing into a lovely young lady of virtue...well at-least a bit nicer.

Author's Response:

I like that: "lovely young lady of virtue." It's totally false, of course, but I almost wish it were true!

Thanks again for reading.

--scrymgeour

Reviewer: LJin Signed [Report This]
Date: October 15 2012 9:20 PM Title: Chapter 13

I am trying to understand Holly and Adela, but with each new chapter these characters seem to grow more rich and complex. Its driving me crazy. Hah Especially Holly, I am still trying to figure what future she holds for Martin, from many things I can think of, some may seem kinda obvious others not so much... Maybe he is indeed the kind of good boy she seeks, like she said, the kind of slave (or pet) she desires to keep to help with certain tasks or feelings that only a very few people in ours lives can fill. Maybe. She seems like a very lonely woman after all. From the way she talked with her husband, and her feelings about him and their marriage with Martin, at the first chapter, seemed to be an event which marked her life and she can't forget. Enough to keep him with her during all this time and put these emotions into physical punishment against him. Just my thoughts.

 

I am loving your story and your writing style. Thank you for sharing with us. n.n

Author's Response:

I like your thoughts about Holly, in particular. I think that's hammer to nail analysis.

I'll post another chapter tonight, when I get time away from work.

--scrymgeour

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: October 10 2012 2:50 PM Title: Chapter 11

P.S.---Revolutions are ALWAYS chaotic!

Author's Response:

Okay. But that doesn't contradict my point.

By the way, I reread this story and found that, so far, it's really, really not that explicitly violent. Only man has died under my watch. And that was in a vore, borderland erotic/horror, scene I was reluctant to write in the first place. It seems that what strikes you as chaotic here, more than anything else, is the psychological unsettling (or erotic brainwashing, maybe) of Martin and the other people here--maybe even of Adela and Holly.

When that settles--when Martin and Meredith, e.g., settle after the transition--there'll be no more mountains to climb. But right now there is definitely that sense of the big solid object ahead--the NWO thing I added after the fourth chapter--and I want to get over it and, to be honest, see what's on the other side just as much as the reader does.

Reviewer: ogilthorpe Signed [Report This]
Date: October 07 2012 12:43 PM Title: Introduction

well..

I am so fascinated by your story that I finally registered after several years of neglecting to do so

I look forward to finding more about this implied "new world order"

I am particularly drawn to the husband whose fate is both horrific yet also  intensely enviable and erotic--at least to me

you have said you will return to him later in the story---I look forward to that--I imagine that he serves some additional purpose for Holly beyond simply suffering for his sins

I have always been put off by people suggesting too readily changes and additions to satisfy their own needs---and I love that philosophy and thoughtfulness that fleshes out the story---I only hope that you avoid the trap of too many good sophisticated writers in evolving the story too far from the fetish and making it too complicated and intellectual---we should never forget or apologize for our fetish that drives these creations

If at the end of your story---and if the husbands story has many loose ends--I would like to write perhaps a back story on just him---with your permission of course

since I have now finally registered I will probably put some of my old works up eventually---maybe even complete the ones that are unfinished

thanks for the fine story

Author's Response:

Appreciate your comment. 

I admit I'm a big fan of your own stories, and I'm glad you've decided to register.

And I don't think I'll be writing a backstory on the husband, so your idea definitely interests me.

--scrymgeour

 

Reviewer: Afroking Signed [Report This]
Date: October 05 2012 3:31 PM Title: Introduction

Taking away free will is hard to read but it makes the story different. I understand wht your saying to truly be a slave his will has to be crushed. I was thinking if Martin was given his hight back for a while and still served them that would show his submissive life. Just an idea I know this is a gts site, I dont need to give ideas I already like the flow of the story. "FEED ME MORE"

Author's Response:

I'm saying that neither Adela nor Holly necessarily 'believe' any more in their own free will than Martin's. And--you'll see--Martin is a character that can be crushed, I think. He's blows where the wind lists, and the wind is pushing him and a bunch of other people toward Holly and Adela. He adopts to the situation and tries to move on, yeah, but I don't think that he ever really believed in things like hierarchies and power struggles and masters and slaves. That's sort of what I like about the three main characters. They play their roles, but ultimately they see themselves as the gamepieces of larger forces. Anyway, that's how I see it. Best to bring this out in relief as the story goes on.

I like your idea, and I think I'll use it. :)

--scrymgeour

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: October 04 2012 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 9

Wonderful new addition and Adela makes things even more clearer to us but not the little one.

Author's Response:

Thanks again for the review.

Reviewer: zephilia Signed [Report This]
Date: September 29 2012 9:54 AM Title: Chapter 7

Love the story, and I would definately be on Holly's side.

Author's Response:

Thanks.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: September 08 2012 7:06 PM Title: Chapter 7

I feel for Meri but the it's for the greater good.

Author's Response:

Thanks. Sorry 'bout the delay in updating. I've been busy for the past month with other things. Should be a straight road here on out.

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2012 9:39 PM Title: Chapter 6

I was curious when we were going to get to see a tiny woman added in. This really is becoming one of my favorite reads of all time.

Author's Response:

I haven't written about tiny/shrunken women yet, but I'll try to develop her over the next couple of chapters. Meredith will stay until the end, I'm pretty sure (which may be next week or the week after). - D

Reviewer: AdamX Signed [Report This]
Date: September 06 2012 12:16 AM Title: Chapter 5

Kind of peaceful and serene. You know what they are capable of but the fact remains if he follows the rules it would not be so bad being Martin.

Author's Response:

Yep. Felt the story needed a little contrast after all the tension and sustained violence of the first few chapters. Thanks again for following along. The next few chapters will be coming shortly.

-D