Reviewer: Theodous Signed [Report This]
Date: November 11 2018 3:47 PM Title: Chapter Ten: Reformatory Prison (3)

Wow, it's very rare that I find a story of this caliber on this website. Or any sizeplay page for that matter. The level of detail that was put into describing not only the enviroments, but effects that things had on Adam. Made it very easy to put yoursel fin his shoes. And to see things through his eyes. To feel the emotional termoil that he and any other would surely feel, if they were to be suddenly thrust into such a terrible situation.

 

The way that Riley viewed the whole thing, is what made it all so truly haunting. Because in her mind, she wasn't doing any of it to hurt Adam. Rather than help him. And there's simply no way to talk to someone like that.

Pretty darn amazing story from a literary standpoint. I really hope that there is more in the work. Because this is such a rough cliff hanger. :)

Reviewer: ColdAtlas Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2013 5:04 PM Title: Chapter Ten: Reformatory Prison (3)

I bet Riley is going to look like the "Lesser of the two evils" after experiencing life with whoever took him away.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 08 2013 2:59 PM Title: Chapter Ten: Reformatory Prison (3)

Let me guess: she's found herself aGoth-punk boyfriend. And, new flame will extinguish old one (literally) underfoot.

Oh, dude! I thought you were _so_ more innovative than that. :-(

Author's Response:

not even close my friend.

Author's Response:

not even close my friend.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: October 04 2012 10:04 AM Title: Chapter Nine: Reformatory Prison (2)

OH, come on! Does he really deserve _this_ much karma?

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: September 18 2012 2:20 PM Title: Chapter Eight: Reformatory Prison

I guess she caught him on the desk by the computer. An damn the scene where she put the cover over the cage an said she was gonna leave him in there for a couple days was kinda intense at least to me.(just the way he's some completely helpless in the cage, an the fact she's so ho-hum about it) an the part when he didnt want to drink the water until necessary that was beautifully written, as well as the way you described the coldness of the bars in the cage an how thankful he was to be walking on the wood chips. I really don't know what to expect from this story an yet I do know what is going to happen... Its kinda weird how that works but it makes me want to read this all the more.
Great job asuka.

aaron

Author's Response:

Thanks for the review. I'm glad your enjoying it. I have always wanted to write a extended cage scene for years and finally decided this was the story to do it in. I really wanted to capture what it would be like to be trapped in a cage for an extended period of time. Just left to your own devices while someone else lived there life. 

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2012 9:30 PM Title: Chapter Six: Home Sweet Home

I was only half-joking. You don't have to be Sherlock Downey, Jr. to deduce from all those descriptors, on the title page, that you're going to have _more_ than seven chapters! But, to half-joke is to also be half-serious. And, I seriously feared you might have suddenly changed your mind. And, instead of Adam being put through all those standard (some might even say "stereotypical") trials, you had opted to do a fast, comparatively dull and quick stomp/crush!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 30 2012 2:46 PM Title: Chapter Six: Home Sweet Home

I hope the poor guy doesn't suffocate. It'd be an anti-climatic way to end such a promising story as this! :-(

Author's Response:

so you are saying i should change the endijng then?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 20 2012 9:15 AM Title: Chapter Four: It's a Mad, Mad, World

Nice web-like imagery with the sweater.

" 'Come into my parlor,' said Riley-spider to Adam-fly."

Reviewer: lilguyunderfoot Signed [Report This]
Date: August 15 2012 11:47 PM Title: Chapter One: Innocently Cheating

not bad, there are bits where the talking is kinda funny sounding but ur writing is good and overall its well done, keep going

Author's Response:

Hey thanks for the honesty and critque on the dialogue. I will look closer at it in the future. Your comments are much appreciated. 

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed [Report This]
Date: August 05 2012 6:19 PM Title: Chapter Two: Unrequited Love

Il Maestro has returned, again!

This is a great new story, AF. I read both opening chapters in one sitting. Which, as you know, is a rarity for me, seeing as I usually prefer to leave chapter-by-chapter reviews. :-)

Author's Response:

I take that as an epic compliment, as i dont ever remember you reading any of my other stories but chapter by chapter. I'm glad you are enjoying it. I hope you enjoy the tale. I have abotu 50 pages so far. Its mostly just a matter of editing and balancing the workload of writing new stuff and editing the old stuff.