[Report This]Date: August 21 2012 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 10
I honestly thought things were going to take a turn for the worse. I wonder why the lady killed Xi and not Nami. Perhaps she has grown attached to her, like a pet.
[Report This]Date: August 02 2012 11:27 PM Title: Chapter 9
My...My heart hurts now. I now have a vague sadness lurking deep inside my soul. This is the same feeling I got from watching Titanic. That's really saying something.
Author's Response:
I read you profile, and it says you like evil giantess. Why has this made you so sad?
[Report This]Date: August 02 2012 9:20 AM Title: Chapter 8
D'AAAAWWWW...
Author's Response:
I actually apologize about that last chapter. I kind of rushed it this morning before I had to go to work, so there are a couple typo's and I didn't get a chance to proof read it so there are some parts that sound a little off. Either way, thanks for commenting.
Date: July 30 2012 11:37 PM Title: Prologue
So Calculus means "little pebble," eh? I didn't know that. Is there a reason for the Latin influence on the Calculi? I noticed it in some of the names.
Poor Leigh, I know how she feels. I can be pretty useless in social situations or around the opposite sex sometimes.
I like that you don't depict any of the giantess's dialogue. Their inability to communicate really drives home how foreign and bizarre they are to each other.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Yea there is actually a reason for the passing Latin references. I already have these three stories planned out in my head for the most part, and the source for this influence will probably be explained in the thrid installment.
[Report This]Date: July 30 2012 10:16 PM Title: Chapter 7
...I'm not even sure if I can say anything. I am literally speechless right now.
Author's Response:
I hope its a good speechless :)
[Report This]Date: July 30 2012 2:09 AM Title: Chapter 6
Awww...That made me so sad...Even though I'm into cruel GTS I know that if I found a tiny person on my floor I'd probably keep it as a pet and be super nice to it, giving it whatever it wanted (with the exception of being let go, of course.) it would make me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. Back on topic, I wonder why the giantess hates Nami (or the Calculi in general) so much. I thought it was kind of funny that the species was named after a branch of mathematics. It does make an excellent name for an alien species though, I'll give you that.
Author's Response:
Calculus means 'little pebble' in Latin. It is because of that, and because the plural, Calculi, sound cute that I chose to call them that.
[Report This]Date: July 29 2012 12:02 AM Title: Chapter 4
This chapter made me...distressed. I really don't know why. Maybe it's because I know that something awful is going to happen. Anyway, I just want to say that you're a great writer. You have a very extensive vocabulary, you're very descriptive, but the thing that just gets me the most is that your writing has actually caused me to have sympathy for the characters. It might sound silly, but right now I feel bad for them, knowing that Nami is going to learn possibly more than she ever desired, only to have her innocence taken and to learn that the beings of her fascination are not at all what she had imagined, and in fact, quite cruel. Then, to top it all off, she watches one of her best friends get MURDERED right in front of her. I think my brain is going to explode. Seriously though, this story is like cocaine to me. I NEED IT. Withdrawal symptoms may include (but are not limited to): anxiousness, shaking, dizziness, sudden bouts of irrational anger, screaming incoherently at the cat, spinning around in a circle on the floor, curling into the fetal position while wailing, crying, diarrhea, projectile vomiting, and clinical depression. If you suffer from one or any of these symptoms, you may be suffering from Fetish Story Withdrawal Syndrome. Please call your nearest XXX adult store for consultation. There is always help.
Author's Response:
Ha good, good i'm glad you like it. Yea I enjoy creating stories that you really get involved with. Too many stories on here simply serve sexual fantasies without any real plot or character development. I had said earlier, but this is going to be a story, not a collection of independent fetish scenarios. It will revolve around the giantess, and obviously I will throw fetish material in, but I want the people reading this to enjoy the story for its own sake.
[Report This]Date: July 28 2012 4:38 PM Title: Prologue
I am absolutely in love with this story!
Author's Response:
Great, glad to hear! Adding a new chapter now. It'll be done in about an hour.
[Report This]Date: July 26 2012 8:24 PM Title: Prologue
this is very well written my only problem is that the texxt needs to be broken into smaller paragrphs but christ, this is a ten
Author's Response:
Haha, very glad your enjoying it :). The paragraphs may be grouped together because I type this up first in word, and when you paste it into the text box that giantessworld provides you, it kind of messes with the spacing. I'll try to fix it here in upcoming ch's.
Date: July 26 2012 7:15 PM Title: Chapter 2
This is really good. My favorite kinds of stories are the ones that combine the fetish with fantasy elements and actual plot and character work. Ones that can stand on their own as a story, as well as being sexy.
I love the details about the Calculi, especially the "light of the soul" and the description of their language. Very cool. I was able to picture them well.
Not sure how I feel about the prologue. It looks like things will turn a bit dark and the suspense over Xi's fate is gone. Overall though, this is a very strong start.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the compliment. My hope is that in this story I am able to create very realistic characters that the readers are able to connect with. I was debating on whether to add the details of Xi's fate in the prologue or not, but then I decided it would be more of an entralling story if I gave away one secret just so that you can observe how things spiral out of control from the beginning. Don't worry, though, I am going to add a lot more characters as the story progresses.
Date: July 26 2012 4:45 PM Title: Prologue
I appreciate the plug in your story note. Anyway, per your request, I gave your story a look.
I applaud your choice of genre; I tend to regard the fantasy, plot-driven stories as the most difficult to write, since you actually have to stay more conscious of potential plot holes and character consistency even more than in purely fetish-oriented tales, and you seem to be doing a fine job of it so far. Your characters are reasonably life-like considering their short development time so far in just a few chapters, and your dialogue fits with the setting. The above-average vocab makes the prose a little more pleasant to read, as well.
The main suggestion I'd give is to watch your use of heavy personal description, ie in the prologue when you describe your giantess character. Particularly in a story like this, given POV-style, it becomes more important to maintain a voice to avoid pulling the reader out, and so that section felt a little out of place compared to what a real person would use in speech; try weaving those bits of description in with the passing narrative instead. Again, a tiny gripe; just something to perhaps think about in future chapters. Good luck!
Date: July 25 2012 11:52 PM Title: Prologue
How is Xi pronounced?
Author's Response:
"Zshi". It's kind of like "she" just with the "z" sound.
[Report This]Date: July 25 2012 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm enjoying it so far. I'm not sure if you already covered this, but what color are the Caculi in regards to skin tone? Is it similar to the human spectrum of skin tone, or is it some outlandish color like pink or green?
Author's Response:
I'm glad you like it. Yeah i've actually been meaning to describe their skin tone, I just haven't found a good place to do it yet. I'll try to incorporate that into upcoming chapters.
Date: July 25 2012 4:55 PM Title: Prologue
Nice verbage and definitely curious.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: July 25 2012 12:58 AM Title: Prologue
i belive that this story can be great, i personaly love fantasy storys that involve fetish an small females. but your context is hard to follow. i mean some of the words you used seemed hard to follow. not saying its bad but it slows down the story. i do belive that this will be a great series and i will read in an enjoy it.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll definately try to make sure the story flows better. Although there will be fetish content in the story, I am going to try to focus more on the emotional state of my characters and the plot. I feel that stories with poor content are just no fun to read :(