Date: August 02 2020 5:19 AM Title: Chapter 1
true but not really ony the authors fault what above reviwer said most stories on this site either is way to short or way way to long with no intresting which is a shame since there is lot good concepts here
Date: July 12 2012 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
Everything happens so suddenly. I wouldn't see that as necessarily a bad thing but I think there does need to be more description. For example, the opening setence is rather bland and I don't think starting with "My name is Tom. I am 15 years old and I am 5'10"" is a good idea. His size is irrelavant at this point, and we will eventually know his name from the characters talking to him. What I suggest is having a look at the "Writing Tools" section of giantessworld. The tutorials are really good and should help you.
I have a feeling this could evolve into a nice story, but at the moment it's looking somewhat cliché.