[Report This]Date: April 15 2012 3:52 PM Title: Chapter 8
I note you're trying out the first person narrative method.
Now if a Cheshire Cat, like Alice's had rabies. Would the rabies vanish along with the cat?
Author's Response: Like the exact number of licks it takes to get to the center of a Tootsie-pop? "The world may never know." And, yes, I alternate points of view in the narration of my stories. It's a technique the late, great Louis L'Amour adopted for his Western novels ("The Sackett Family" series, in particular). If there was an interlude that was realistically impossible for the first-person narrator of the story to know was occurring elsewhere, at that exact same moment, then he switched back to "omniscient author" mode to depict it. And, rightly so! :-)
Date: April 08 2012 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 7
An itsy bitsy fighter?
She'd better help the blighter.
Careful flushing clothes down the toilet. They might get caught on somebody's passport or tax records LOL.
Author's Response: If that happened, they'd be rendered useless by the green water (as in "Blue Tidy-bowl+ Yellow bilirubin=..."). ;-D
[Report This]Date: April 02 2012 8:36 PM Title: Chapter 6
Twirlercise!
I'll sign up right away. Might as well give it a twirl and see what I think.
Author's Response: That's the name I invented for what had been the key plot-device in my original version of IOTBTFOS. That is; before I decided to make the latter an occasional in-joke (a la John Landis' "See You Next Wednesday").
[Report This]Date: March 31 2012 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 5
Baton down the hatches. Cary's getting funnier.
Author's Response: Literally; you're too kind. :-)
[Report This]Date: March 28 2012 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 4
Speaking of the giant plasma TV, I think it would be a great gts gag to do what the Goodies did once, and have a character stepping out of the screen at giant size (a woman of course, or even reaching out of the tv and pulling a man into it, with the result that he's tiny in the show).
"My nether-portions began to have a ... big reaction".
Ho ho ho.
Shades of strange stirrings in utility belts, old chum.
Author's Response: Well, if I had used the clinically accepted term, "gonads," I would've had to change the story rating to "PG!" Soemthing which I'm mentally see-sawing about doing, after chapter 5, anyway.
[Report This]Date: March 27 2012 2:54 AM Title: Chapter 3
Don't make me tiny, Miss Ramona. You wouldn't like me when I'm tiny.
Author's Response: Well, duh! Obviously, she does. ;-D
[Report This]Date: March 27 2012 2:52 AM Title: Chapter 2
Lucille Ball and Lana Lang were both redheads too.
Author's Response: True. But, the former one-ups the latter by having THREE L's in her name! ;-)
[Report This]Date: March 27 2012 2:51 AM Title: Chapter 1
Bob N Weaver meets Duck 'n' Weaver in a future chapter?
Author's Response: More like "the Masked Mantis."
[Report This]Date: March 26 2012 5:22 AM Title: Chapter 2
Remember when Lucy met Superman?
Author's Response: Yep! It had the greatest closing line in TV sit-com history. "Wait a minute, Mr. Ricardo. You mean to say you've been married to her for FIFTEEN YEARS?" "Yeah, that's right. Fifteen years!" "And, they call ME 'Superman!' "
Date: March 25 2012 1:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
Well I think the readers are going to be wondering about gts content...
Author's Response: Heh! It took me two weeks just to mentally flesh out the mundane opener! But, now that I've gotten the seasoned veteran Ace Corona giving me some encouragement, as well, I'll see what I can do.
[Report This]Date: March 24 2012 6:05 PM Title: Chapter 1
You're off to a good start, but you should give more of a preview of things to come in this little prologue, as far as the shrinking is concerned. I hope if the woman who shrinks him is Asian that she's half Philipino and half Hispanic, chicks like that are hot!
Author's Response: Esta verdad! :-D