Date: July 30 2013 9:00 AM Title: Chapter 1
This was a great story, would love to see it get posted back up. Huge fan of oishi's work!
Author's Response:
I think the site is just glitchy because of how big it is. I never took it down. Check out DA if it stil isn't up here. Thanks for the review.
Date: July 19 2013 7:52 PM Title: Chapter 1
Very good, can't see any of the story besides the story notes, but very good
Author's Response:
it does that sometimes. I didn't take it down. It should still be here. I also have it on deviant art. I go by the same name there.
Date: December 06 2011 5:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
A fun little tale.
Date: November 19 2011 11:51 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad Bob stayed faithful to his wife.
Author's Response:
I think it added a bit of sad romanticism to the story don't you?
Date: November 19 2011 8:29 PM Title: Chapter 1
I agree with TinyDann that I would have liked to know more about the characters. How old are Bob and Flo. I realize that it is sort of irrelevant to the story, I just like to know this stuff as I read.
Otherwise this is a quite a little gem. I have never tried to do an "unaware" but it is something I am tinkering with. This is a good source of inspiration. Well done.
Author's Response:
I think unaware stories are fun. My first shrunken man/giantess dream involved me in a drink accident, so they hold a special place for me. You should totally go for it. You have great skill in writing sensory details. I try to focus on the relevant details in the story, so unless certain things come up I don't always mention them. Especially since I like the reader to be able to place themselves in the story. In my forbidden dish stories I give a bit more detail to some of my characters.
Date: November 19 2011 11:16 AM Title: Chapter 1
I like the concept of the evil coworker and how she kept checking up on him. she shoulda put him in food though
Author's Response:
Yeah, this one is a bit unusual for me. Most of my "drink accident" fantasies are just that, accidents, and most of my unaware sandwich fantasies involve someone putting the person there. Many people prefer the drinks because it makes the story "cleaner". I know you and Star Sage prefer sandwiches though.