[Report This]Date: June 23 2015 7:47 AM Title: Chapter 65: Front Lines
I just can't read this story unless I have enough time and no distraction whatsoever, so it took me some time...
"I haven’t had the privilege in looking at" (is "in looking" ok?)
Just a quick comment; now if you'll excuse me I'll go back to reading, I have maybe 30/60 minutes left...
Author's Response:
I don't blame you; it's definitely a time commitment to read this story. Thanks for catching the typo.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2015 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 73: A Little Help From My Friends
Yeah she wasn't happy at all. Which isn't surprising since her whole world just flipped upside down. For the first time I'm excited to how this story will end. As these chapters dwindled.
Author's Response:
Glad to hear it! Thanks for reading.
[Report This]Date: June 20 2015 5:55 PM Title: Chapter 73: A Little Help From My Friends
Bravo it worked!
Not sure what happens now but good on them for a least leveling the playing field consideribly.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: June 20 2015 1:13 PM Title: Chapter 73: A Little Help From My Friends
Yes-yes-yes-yes-YES!
Poetic justice, at last.
:-D
Author's Response:
As well as other types of justice, with any luck!
[Report This]Date: June 20 2015 6:45 AM Title: Chapter 73: A Little Help From My Friends
What a twist! You are really punishing us, leaving us in agonazing ignorance and painful suspense after having read every chapter. Really great, smart and well written.
Author's Response:
Thanks so much. I am hoping all of the ignorance and suspense will be worth it in the end.
Date: June 20 2015 5:31 AM Title: Chapter 73: A Little Help From My Friends
Jack's absolutely right. Whatever else happens now, Julia's ancien régime is over, and they all should take pride in that. Hearing her wail in despair was as sweet a reward as he could hope for.
So, she's done shrinking at 12 inches? Once she figures out she can't immediately reach Jack, her rage will turn to panic.
I'm partially relieved that I came up with a darker plot twist than what you actually went with. Gina's always had an irrational faith in Jack, but she's as capable of self-sacrifice as any of them at this point. I never thought Julia would harm the baby, but Gina might not have seen that, and she could easily have decided to remove Julia's leverage by killing the baby and herself, given an opportunity (she could quickly smother the baby and then provoke Julia to kill her).
Yes, she's done shrinking at (roughly) 12 inches - really that's just an estimate on Jack's part, since it's only because the ray couldn't take its full effect before Julia threw it away. That definitely would've been a dark twist! Perhaps it could've crossed Gina's mind as she spent all of this alone time while her friends were gone in the walls, though at this point she's seen too many innocents die to want to be responsible for one herself.
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[Report This]Date: June 07 2015 8:26 PM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
Guess Julia still has a soft spot for him.
Author's Response:
It may not last very long, though!
Date: June 06 2015 3:46 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
At last!! I was afraid you kept this story away for a while again but thank god you're back with it :)
Great chapter as always and exciting cliffhanger, it seems action is coming!!
By the way, have you ever thought on writing a book or something? I'm amazed about your writing skills and your deep ability to empathize with characters and build their emotions. I'd definitely buy anything you write ;)
Author's Response:
My hope is to finish this story by the end of the summer. Action is on the way. And I am interested in writing a book someday; I appreciate your kind words.
[Report This]Date: June 06 2015 12:42 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
IT'S BAAAAACK!!!!
An odd cliffhanger there but I give Jack credit for having the guts to try this tatic with the great destroyer. Hopefully things go better for him than the others who have tempted fate in such a way.
Author's Response:
Back indeed. And guts are just about all they have to work with here. Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: June 05 2015 1:14 PM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
Ooooh I can sense it...how many chapters until the grand finale?
Author's Response:
Thanks! There are about 5 or 6 chapters left of this story.
Date: June 05 2015 10:23 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
good as unsual! good description, Julia's buying it.
Author's Response:
Thanks! And they better hope she's buying it...
[Report This]Date: June 05 2015 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
Holy Shit Molasses!
She's gonna go volcanic over that one.
Author's Response:
There's definitely a little bit of an eruption coming up, and not the good kind.
Date: June 05 2015 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
That a very nice ending, an intelligent twist, with an even more excruciating cliffhanger!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing!
Date: June 05 2015 6:06 AM Title: Chapter 72: Jack and Julia Went Up the Hill
This is an excellent example of your talent for portraying conversation with depth and nuance. I really appreciate it when dialogue is leavened with body language and internal asides, and you always deliver. The entire story hinges on this encounter, and reading it made my guts as icy as Jack's.
That said, I don't think Julia's the only one engaging in desparate wish-fulfillment here.
Author's Response:
Thanks, it means a lot. This conversation is definitely pivotal to the entire relationship of Jack and Julia. But you're right that Jack has his hopes up just as much as Julia.
Date: May 26 2015 9:13 PM Title: Chapter 71: J-Day
Always awesome to see you updating again. Suspense is killing me
Author's Response:
Thanks! Hopefully the suspense builds a little higher before the end.
[Report This]Date: May 23 2015 2:43 AM Title: Chapter 71: J-Day
I really like your writing style. It’s
kind of a no-bullshit approach. You don't underestimate your reader and you
don't elaborate unnecessarily on the environment, but focus on emotion and
experience of the characters involved. You know that we as readers can fill in
the blanks.
Like I said, it’s a unique style and it’s
actually something I might try to emulate in future stories.
Author's Response:
Thanks! This story especially is meant to be in a stream-of-consciousness style, so less about the environment and more the semi-erratic thoughts of the main character. It can be a tougher style to follow but I think readers are up to it.
[Report This]Date: May 22 2015 1:38 AM Title: Chapter 71: J-Day
Awe man that was a killer cliffhanger. You could feel the intensity rise. I love this story so much, it's been going on for a while now.
Author's Response:
Thanks! It has been going for a while, so my goal has been to finish it well before it turns 4 years old.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2015 9:25 PM Title: Chapter 71: J-Day
Next up: the tie-breaker!
Author's Response:
...which is hopefully not solved with a penalty shot.
[Report This]Date: May 21 2015 8:39 PM Title: Chapter 71: J-Day
Damn your cliffhangers!!!
That said GREEEEEEEEEEEAT to see this back.
Author's Response:
Thanks! Unfortunately there may be a couple more cliffhangers before this is through. ;)
Date: May 21 2015 7:13 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Great chapter. So Jack is a distraction to let others to do execute the rest of plan which is still unclear lol. But the goal is bring their normal height back globally.
Author's Response:
You're partially right; Jack actually has a goal here besides keeping Julia in the room. Their plan will be shown in the next chapters.