[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 5:16 PM Title: Chapter 6: System Failure
Now, THAT is a brilliantly unexpected cliff-hanger. Bravo!
Date: November 09 2011 5:13 PM Title: Chapter 5: Bath Water
Well, let me put it this way. If Julia were to devour him first, I wouldn't consider him an irreplaceable loss to Humanity.
[Report This]Date: November 09 2011 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 5: Bath Water
When (and I don't mean "if") Julia does to Brian what she did to Jim, I will silently cheer. He sounds like the type of impatient coward who would've dressed in drag to get off the Titanic (alongside the women and children), first!
Author's Response:
yikes sounds like you want brian voted off the island. and by "the island," of course, i mean "not in julia"
[Report This]Date: November 08 2011 11:55 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
I really like how you portray the captives' interactions with Julia, and the way you can see them getting used to their situation. It seems like Julia cares about them even if in a screwed up way.
Once again you do a great job conveying tension and portraying the psychological aspects of some messed up scenarios. I like it!
Author's Response:
thanks, i love the psych stuff, it makes it so much more fun
[Report This]Date: November 08 2011 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 4: Kicking Up Heels in Detention
wow. what an amazing couple of chapters. an i agree with cary. julia reminds me of cayce's carolyn(with coming from me is an honor because i love his stories/characters)
at any rate i hope the feedback you receive inspires you.
aaron
Date: November 08 2011 5:49 AM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Wow, you're one of only two authors on this site that make me feel true genuine emotion when I read. That whole detention chapter was very nerve wracking for me, as I wasn't sure what she was going to do. You really have a knack for flushing out your characters in a way that makes me very attached to them. Amazing work as always. Keep it up! And my other favorite story of yours is The Freshman! Hope to see more of that as well!
Author's Response:
thanks, i'm glad you're enjoying it that much. the freshman will come back eventually as well
[Report This]Date: November 07 2011 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 4: Kicking Up Heels in Detention
I read all four chapters in one sitting. Not bad! Julia sounds like a brunette version of Carolyn (from Cayce's "Summer Job").
[Report This]Date: November 05 2011 8:00 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
awesome story. kept me at the edge of my seat.
aaron
ps i take it that this is complete then?
Author's Response:
no, i've got more that i will post soon
Date: November 05 2011 5:07 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
moar!!! your one of my favorite authors cant wait for the next chapter
[Report This]Date: November 05 2011 2:45 PM Title: Act I: Prisoner, Chapter 1: Good Morning
Always good to see somethign new (well, something we havent read) from you. I will say that I'm a little disappointed though, it sounds like you dont plan on doing much with this, which is unfortunate, but regardless, it's the start of something very cool.
Author's Response:
there's actually a lot more to this story, i just need to spellcheck it, but i'll post it eventually. thanks for reading bud