[Report This]Date: April 19 2013 6:39 AM Title: Chapter 1
Oh dear, actual lesbians and actual growth? A combination way more rare than the tag overlap may lead one to think!
I don't really have much to comment on, but I like what you've done so far. Please proceed.
Author's Response:
I have noticed that the tag system here isn't top quality... It would be nice if you could tag individual chapters instead of the whole story, since most of the time different tags takes place during different chapters... but that would probably make this site a bit confusing.
I plan on proceeding, but I've hit a snag. My computer crashed and I had loads written on it that I really don't feel like rewriting. I will try all that I can to save what is left from the remains of that old laptop before I continue...
Date: March 28 2013 2:17 PM Title: Chapter 3
I like this story very much! Please continue!
Date: March 25 2013 6:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
No more story I suppose? Its not Shakespeare but I really do enjoy it. I check almost daily for more but more never comes:( Like so many of the stories on here, it is unfinished. And that leaves me feeling empty.
Author's Response:
I feel your pain. I really want to continue the stories I've started, but right now my mind is kind of jumbled. I have some scenarios in mind but I can't decide which story to put them in. That's what I get for keeping several stories running at the same time I guess. I need some diciplin and finish things up properly. Nice to know that someone reads them still =)
[Report This]Date: October 20 2012 1:35 PM Title: Chapter 2
A few spelling and grammatical errors, and your sentence structure is monotonous, but what's new?
Your first chapter is probably the painfullest reading experience I've ever had on this site. What you've written there reminds me of Stephen King's idea of horror (or at least the humiliation side of his revenge fantasy, repeated through his books in all its scary permutations). Makes me cringe to read it--an unsocialized girl doing that, feeling humiliated, and then seeing some ghastly, shame-induced double of herself, a tenth of her height and "looking starved". That's how I interpret it, anyway. I think the first reviewer was right.
But, however cringeworthy, that's an authentic--and certainly original--image, at least in this genre. Only wish you'd pared it down a little, and spared me some of it. Might help to revise the first chapter.
Author's Response:
Thank you! Finally someone who speaks their mind without trolling, or maybe you are, but your comment looks sincere. I haven't read Stephen King myself so I can't really say anything about that comparison, but it sounds accurate from what I've heard. It is kind of a klishé theme I admit, but I hope to put my spin on it in the future. I'll try to work on the language as well, but my vocabulary is kind of limited but it doesn't come completely natural since English is a second language to me, and that tends to make my writing style pretty stale. Thank you greatly for the input //Joe
Date: October 18 2011 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 1
love it so far can't wait to see next part!
Author's Response:
If the diva-part of me gets what it wants, it looks like there won't be a second part. One day remains, and four comments remain to be seen...
Luckily for you, my inner diva doesn't always get what she wants, but it's a secret so don't go tell anyone ;P
[Report This]Date: October 18 2011 1:19 AM Title: Chapter 1
I definetely enjoyed this story, mostly for it's originality, but i also enjoyed the setting, and finding yourself is always a good situation to throw in some tiny people.
- Jake
Author's Response:
Glad you liked it, and especially glad you enjoyed the setting... Struggled hard with that one... ;)