Date: August 07 2017 9:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
It has been quite a while. When will you come back and finish this story? Also, Happy Vore Day!
Date: June 03 2013 5:40 PM Title: Chapter 1
Of course, at something like 100 to 500 meters tall, it makes perfect sense that she eats ordinary-sized people (probably of both sexes, although most bandits are male, and I guess most volunteers would be), but it makes the most sense if she eats us in addition to other foods. ;-)
Date: June 03 2013 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
First of all, this is by far your best story. Some of the others are good, even great, but this one is the best of all. Even as great as this story is, however, I have some suggestions.
The story would make a little more sense if you made it clear that Carla also eats regular food in addition to normal-sized humans. (In larger amounts based on her size, obviously.) For one thing, you already established that with a different giantess in another story (Hayley from "Dinner Offering"), but even more importantly if you want to make what is admittedly a giantess vore story at least remotely realistic it just plain makes more sense. Even a giant being (such that she is) shaped like a human would presumably be pretty similar chemically to us. So, she would require an ecclectic diet (not only omnivorous but in fact can't survive on just 1 plant and just 1 animal as only 2 foods) just as we do.
My next suggestion is that you had some potential with the relationship between Carla and Thaddeus in the few days after he volunteered but before she ate him. It's best not to waste potential like that. (Lee not so much; from the tone of the writing Lee was a VERY minor character, but Thaddeus had the potential to be a temporarily important character.) I might suggest sticking a new chapter in between "The Afterparty" and "The Gunslinger," or else developing that relationship more elaborately in flashbacks.
Last but not least while I realize the site GiantESS World, it still couldn't hurt to explain why there are no male giants. For example, there could be some rare magic potion that is fatal if consumed by a man but turns women into giantesses. There could be, I just thought we could brainstorm a little bit.
:-)
Author's Response:
Nice suggestions 222_410. They were actually quite helpful. I like the idea about Thaddeus and Carla. Perhaps I can come up with some flashbacks or something.
Yes, I definately should establish that giantesses eat fruits and veggies just like normal humans.
THank you for both of your reviews. It was remarkably valuable for you to take the time to put so much detail into the response.
I don't have anything solid for another chapter yet because I have been working on another project. I'm sure I will get back to this sooner or later. If you have any more ideas then don't be shy! Thanks again.
Date: March 09 2013 7:20 PM Title: Gunfight
I can't help but be curious as to how this will play out. It is strange and interesting, and I enjoy the dynamic between Carla and Malcolm.
[Report This]Date: February 10 2013 3:20 PM Title: Gunfight
Bravo! You're one of the few other authors, on this website (besides me), who's ever done a gts-Western. Of course, this one was a little more light-hearted than A "SMALLER" SHADE OF GRAY. But, that only earns you my further praise, for innovation. ;-)
Author's Response:
Thanks Carycomic. I appreciate the review.
Date: February 10 2013 11:37 AM Title: Chapter 1
I'm glad to see this one back after such a long hiatus. I love the idea; it's a fun melding of the Western archetype and gts fetishism. Personally, I'm a fan of just having your main characters stay as friends rather than romantic leads, as that would give the story a little more uniqueness, but that's just me.
Author's Response:
Partners, bounty hunters, friends. That's how they will stay... at least for now. I have no romantic designs for them. Glad you are enjoying the story. I'll write more once I figure out what comes next.
[Report This]Date: February 09 2013 11:32 PM Title: Gunfight
"Her gigantic lips gave me a kiss on the whole of my chest. Beautiful, soft lips. "
Now doesn't that sound like fun?
Author's Response:
It sure does!
[Report This]Date: February 09 2013 11:30 PM Title: The Afterparty
Here's thuh story,
O' thuh gang O'Grady,
Who wuz busy bein' eatin' on their own....
[Report This]Date: February 09 2013 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 1
Well tarnation. Whut a way fer thuh honorary critter to go.
Date: October 09 2012 10:22 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great can u plz keep it up look forward to reading more :)
Author's Response:
I just added a few new picture links of Carla to the story. Be sure to check them out. Also, I'm working on a few other stories right now but I may come back to this one since there seems to be a lot of interest in it. Thanks for the review!
Date: January 05 2012 9:45 AM Title: The Afterparty
“We’re real pleased you ate the O’Grady gang Carla?” said the My Pa says they’re awful folk. They shot up our town and even made Mr. Crabb give over his whiskey. I don’t care ‘bout that part much. Mr. Crabb’s awful mean!”
This line doesn't make sense, especially this sentence: said the My Pa says they’re awful folk. I think you mean said the boy, and then add in another speech mark.
Author's Response:
Oh jeez. You're right. That is all jacked up. Either I missed this while editing or the document didn't post to the website properly (a problem I've had before.) Thanks for pointing it out. I'll correct.
Date: January 05 2012 9:35 AM Title: Chapter 1
This setence confused me:
He’ll credit us the money he owes us for you eating the O’Grady Gang. They were priced at $300 apiece as each one of them had killed a lawman that had come after them
How can Carla prove she ate the criminals if when she eats them there is no evidence left? Or at least I assume there was no evidence left? In which case, anyone could claim that they ate someone.
I also noted you mentioned telegraphs so that not really a medium of communication that psyhical evidence can be trasmited a across, and at the time peoplpe were still using telegraphy, cameras weren't exactly that portable or very rugged.
Author's Response:
No, no. I ment telegraphy simply as the long distance code system. And you are correct, I should have included proof that the gang was killed. Still, if Carla is the only giantess in the area and no one ever sees the gang again, it would stand to reasion that they were eaten. I'll have to ask for your willing suspension of disbelief on that chapter and request you assume that our heroes brought something back; a hat, a distinctive jacket or some such article that was removed to one of the gang members prior to injestion. Thank you for pointing this out. I'll try to do better in other chapters.
Date: September 18 2011 6:58 PM Title: Chapter 1
Fantastic start, girlfood! Please continue, this has great potential!
Author's Response:
Thanks Doorknob. I'll see about another chapter sometime soon. I appreciate you reading my work.
Date: September 17 2011 10:11 AM Title: Chapter 1
I enjoy what you've done with the characters so far. Your descriptions followed the eye very well. If you know where you're going with it I think it could be really good.
Author's Response:
I don't have a good idea of where I want to take it but but have a general direction. I'll probably add another chapter eventually. Thanks for your input.
[Report This]Date: September 14 2011 4:35 PM Title: Chapter 1
Combining Western and Giantess genre? Okay, I'll buy it. Well done. If you are on the fence about continuing, allow me to convey my vote: Do proceed.
Author's Response:
Thans FGF. I appreciate the good review, one author to another. I'm working on Forbidden Dish stories right now but I'll probably be adding another chapter here soon.
[Report This]Date: September 14 2011 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Good story as always, Girlfood!
Now, how about a romantic/sexual angle in the next chapter?
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review friend. I'll see what can be done about a romantic angle. Initially my plan was just to make them good friends. I appreciate the weigh in and will try to incorporate a more romantic side of things.