Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 05 2011 3:47 PM Title: Chapter 2: Sibling Bonding

Developing nicely, although one minor issue is that niether Peter nor the read know who Lena is at this stage so for the momonet wouldn't she just be another girl until a proper intruduction (unless I haven't been paying enough attention she was mentioned in the previous chapter). Besides I don't think that mentioning her name is even important at this stage, although if she is important she can tell him she was the girl from the bus or something.

Author's Response:

i realize it's only in a passing remark, but i do mention in chapter 2 that Lena is Erica's friend, so we can probably assume Peter has met her several times before; hope this clears it up

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: September 02 2011 8:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

like this story already. cant wait to read more.

aaron

Author's Response:

thanks, i hope you like the coming installments

Reviewer: Stubbornstain Signed [Report This]
Date: September 01 2011 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety

I noticed the gentle/kind tag mixed in with some polar opposites so I'm guessing Peter will eventually find love but at the same time be bullied at school. So it's safe to assume there will be people who take advantage of him and others who, like his own mother, think he is someone special. I've read a couple of other stories about school and the quickly dive into the sexual part the relationship and this leaves little precious character development. I think it would be best if the two characters grow to like each other rather having everything happen all at once. Your story does look like it could turn into something I'd much enjoy reading, just depends if you get the right balance of evil and nice in it. Surely there will be some characters we meet who will protect Peter, other than his family. And while I don't normally like giant men, I think to leave men out of this story would be unrealistic given he can't go to an all girls school. Obviously I hope there won't be too much on giant men, but maybe there could be a love rival? Then again, this could be two ladies fueding over Peter rather than male jealously.

 

Author's Response:

i too have read "school stories" around here that go sexual absurdly quickly, so be assured, i won't be venturing to nearly that level or speed with this tale.  peter will indeed make other allies other than his mother to cope with school, though.

on the giant men bit, i do agree, and i feel confident that what i have planned will keep it realistic; this is giantessworld, after all