[Report This]Date: February 13 2015 3:13 PM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
What a cool idea. I'm starting to view this story through different eyes. Seeing this as an entirely plausible situation has greatly enhanced my enjoyment from this story. I'm really looking forward to seeing him trying to persuade his mom but also him actually in the play. It would be neat to see this not rushed through. I'd like to see him fitted for wardrobe, him just rehearsing in street clothes and him possibly getting stage fright. You've given yourself quite the avenue.
aaron
PS especially liked when all of Erica's friends were listening in and where more than willing to help him with girls. A very cute scene.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing. I'm glad to hear you find the story plausible, minus the part about a five-inch kid. Don't worry; just like with the rest of this story, I won't be rushing anything! ;)
Date: February 13 2015 3:05 PM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
It's nice to see how many people he has looking out for him. Erica's friends seem to love him like a brother, and are protective of him like big sisters.
Author's Response:
This is definitely true. Certainly they are more outwardly affectionate toward Peter than Erica is.
Date: February 13 2015 2:29 PM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
Which role did you have in mind for her, Cary? I don't see her self-image permitting her to play the cow.
Author's Response: If this was, in fact, Into the Woods, Sharon might be best suited to the giant's wife.
Date: February 13 2015 2:03 PM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
Delightful. I continue to be impressed by the fine balance you are able to maintain between Peter's precarious situation and optimism for his future. Every person he meets is a new opportunity for aid or menace (or, often, both).
I do think it would be basic courtesy not to use the word "crush" so casually around someone in Peter's condition.
Author's Response:
Thanks for saying that about the balance; that's definitely one of my main focuses with this story.
Luckily (or unluckily) for Peter, he's probably heard enough size-related puns by this point in his life that words like "crush" hardly register.
[Report This]Date: February 13 2015 12:17 PM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
Hmmmm! It sounds like Ms. Park is doing a retitled version of Stephen Sondheim's "Into The Woods." And the only true downside I can see, to Mrs. Clark's giving Peter permission to do the audition, is that someone else might be present. Someone who probably already considers herself the drama queen of the school in every sense of the word. Here's a hint: silvery hair and matching eyes? As much as I like Sondheim's musical, I think it would've been infinitely improved with the inclusion of Tom Thumb. And that's not a bad guess about Sharon, though with or without her present, Peter will still have his fair share of obstacles.
Author's Response:
Date: February 13 2015 8:21 AM Title: Chapter 25: Extracurricular Activity
Can't wait to see his mom's reaction. "What!? you wanna play Tom Thumb?, ERICA you know that your brother is taking drug?"haha
Author's Response:
Well, given Peter's mother's level of paranoia, that may not even be a joke!
[Report This]Date: February 10 2015 1:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
Loved this chapter, especially the conversation between Lisa and Peter- those two are the cutest together and it was great to hear Peter finally (trying to at least) pop the 'big question'! Keep up the awesome work!
Author's Response:
Thanks very much. I can't make it too easy for Peter, can I?
[Report This]Date: February 09 2015 9:27 PM Title: Chapter 24: Second Practice
Something tells me Lisa knew what kind of question Peter was going to pop. ;-)
Author's Response:
She probably did. Unfortunately, both were a little too bashful to have done anything about it in that moment.
[Report This]Date: February 09 2015 3:41 PM Title: Chapter 24: Second Practice
Yay! Awesome chapter! You're really good at writing, I can't wait to see more!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading/reviewing!
[Report This]Date: February 09 2015 12:50 PM Title: Chapter 24: Second Practice
“Trust me. You have no idea what that feels like.”
This sentence seems a little off. Did you mean more like "You have no idea had good it feels to hear that." or something? Cus her reaction seemed to imply that.
Author's Response:
No, that's what I meant. It was intended to sound like a relieved statement from Peter. Lisa's reaction was just one of bashfulness, not like she'd said something insulting.
[Report This]Date: February 09 2015 10:44 AM Title: Chapter 24: Second Practice
That exact scenario happens all the time. Well beside the 5 inch freshman part. Story is getting really really good.
Next chapter is going to be good.
Author's Response:
Also possibly aside from the fact that she can pick him up in one hand. Thanks for reading!
Date: February 09 2015 10:29 AM Title: Chapter 24: Second Practice
a cute chap! love in air!!!!
Author's Response:
It is indeed in the air
Date: February 07 2015 3:35 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
My favorite story from you so far. :) Hope to see more soon!
Author's Response:
Thanks very much! There will be more soon.
[Report This]Date: February 05 2015 6:48 PM Title: Chapter 23: Bus Interrogation
I absolutely love this story so far! I can't wait for the next chapter! In my favorites to get alerts of updates!
Author's Response:
Thanks! The next one will be up soon.
[Report This]Date: February 05 2015 6:41 PM Title: Chapter 23: Bus Interrogation
It's nice to see a loving family at home in these kinds of stories. Even the aloof and slightly cold nature of his sister is just a facade she puts on because she's a teenager; she really does care for her little brother.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reading, glad you liked it!
[Report This]Date: February 05 2015 3:25 PM Title: Chapter 23: Bus Interrogation
For those who have never seen one? Pugs are those toy dogs that resemble Bandit Quest. Lovable and gentle; but, they wheeze like elderly asthmatics!
Author's Response:
They're animals ripe for comedy.
Date: February 05 2015 12:32 PM Title: Chapter 23: Bus Interrogation
Cute chap! Oh Peter you'll be so in deep trouble when Erica find out the truth!
Author's Response:
He may be even deeper trouble if he doesn't tell her, though!
[Report This]Date: February 03 2015 11:33 AM Title: Chapter 22: Unsportsmanlike Assault
I hope Ms. Watson doesn't prove to be one of those easily-bribed teachers. Assuming, of course, that Sharon comes from a plutocratic family.
Author's Response:
Don't worry, Ms. Watson can't be bought. Though that's not to say she won't present problems on her own without the need of Sharon's influence.
Date: February 02 2015 12:14 AM Title: Chapter 22: Unsportsmanlike Assault
Love this story and I'm so glad you've started it back up! The volleyball chapter was great, except I don't think Amy would've been let off so easily in real life! Oh well- I'd assume it just leads to the drama of the whole situation! This chapter actually reminds me of my own giant tiny story 'I Wish I Was Normal'. Peter is an adorable little guy and I hope Amy and Sharon don't do something drastic!
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing. You may be right about Amy, although the majority of players are inexperienced enough that it could still be written off as an accident. Sharon hasn't done anything truly drastic yet, but she may have something cooking.
Date: February 01 2015 2:10 PM Title: Chapter 22: Unsportsmanlike Assault
While she retains a scary kind of attractiveness, whenever I try to visualize Sharon's eyes, I somehow always think of Christopher Walken.
Author's Response:
Well, that's a new one. I suppose they're both fairly off-putting people, aren't they?