Date: March 09 2017 3:40 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
Back at it! Thanks, and its always great when you focus on this one.
Author's Response:
Thanks much. My focus isn't completely back to this one, but there will be more new chapters soon
[Report This]Date: March 09 2017 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 62: Popular Kids
@Spooky Taco: I theorized (waaaaaaaay back in my chapter 8 review) that Mandy might bcome an ally of convenience with Sharon's chick clique.
It looks like I was right! :-(
Author's Response:
People have probably been guessing this might happen. And Peter was crossing his fingers it never would
Date: March 09 2017 12:55 PM Title: Chapter 62: Popular Kids
Something tells me that Erica just got a big bullseye painted on her back.
Author's Response:
May be true, but Erica also has the benefit of being too tall to be picked up, unlike someone else with a target on his back
[Report This]Date: March 09 2017 11:12 AM Title: Chapter 62: Popular Kids
Why the heck is Sharon hanging out with Mandy? This doesn't bode well for Peter. The two of them together pose quite a threat. Honestly, Mandy makes Sharon look like an angel. Hopefully Peter doesn't end up with an actual broken leg after the show.
Author's Response:
Ordinarily Mandy and Sharon don't quite fit in the same crowd, but exceptions can be made in special circumstances. ;)
Date: January 02 2017 5:53 PM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
Very nice culmination of events. Particularly effective was Peter's inner narrative intertwined with the hints of Lisa's emotional states as signaled by her body/facial-language. This allowed the dramatic exchange to carry the reader towards the embrace with the wavering, hesitant pace of two same-sized actors in a fraught scene rather than dwelling on the fact that Lisa was in complete control of just how close Peter came (or didn't come) to her. Even if the scene and the dialogue called for Peter to physically embrace Lisa, she alone determined their proximity; if she deflated or let her arms relax or otherwise held him distant, he couldn't force the issue. But since we were so caught up in their emotional exchange, their embrace seemed mutual rather than unilateral.
And that, my friends, is authentic characterization.
Author's Response:
Thanks very much, and I'm glad someone picked up on this. I always love when other macro stories have an echo of how the scene would play if everyone was more equal-sized. In this case, Peter has to lean forward a bit, but Lisa is still completely in control of distance.
[Report This]Date: January 02 2017 5:05 AM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
Finally, the long awaited kiss! Also, Lisa is growing in her ability to defend herself. I sense she'll no longer allower herself to be pushed around by the other girls at school. She knows what (or who) she wants and she's going for it!
Nice play on words with the chapter title.
Author's Response:
Thanks for reviewing! We're steadily seeing Lisa growing (hehe) into her own skin.
[Report This]Date: January 01 2017 7:18 PM Title: Chapter 61: Between Tulips
YES!
What a great way to start off the New Year, here. With Peter and Lisa achieving full-on lip lock...and so poignantly, too!
There's no going back, now. :-)
Author's Response:
I thought it would be nice to let Peter have a New Years kiss after all the crap I've put him through.
[Report This]Date: January 01 2017 7:11 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
Haven't read the chapter yet, just guessing that Between Tulips actually means Between Two Lips.
Author's Response:
;)
[Report This]Date: December 31 2016 12:24 PM Title: Chapter 60: Parental Guidance
Ack! And just when Peter was about to get his first kiss. Ah well. Stay strong, Lisa!
Author's Response:
;) Missed it by that much
[Report This]Date: December 29 2016 1:28 AM Title: Chapter 60: Parental Guidance
Damn. Good chapter.
Author's Response:
Thanks!
Date: December 28 2016 2:55 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
oh man, I knew something would go bad in this chapter, that her parents wouldn't be too excited. But that was harsh. Wondering where it goes from here. I also meant to review last chapter to say I loved it, especially in those paragraphs where he doesn't know what his sister is doing. I love how she's trying to train him.
Author's Response:
This chapter is definitely not meant to feel like the hopeful little adventures that so many of this story's segments are. I appreciate you reading/reviewing.
[Report This]Date: December 28 2016 12:08 PM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
I wonder where Sharon is through all this... Probably not important currently, though I believe she will come into play later.
I still think Lisa is the mystery person who put Peter in an instrument, etc., by the way.
Author's Response:
We're still a few chapters away from another face-to-face Sharon interaction. You're right that she doesn't feel vital to the story right now, but readers will increasingly feel her presence even if she's not there.
[Report This]Date: December 28 2016 11:48 AM Title: Chapter 60: Parental Guidance
The late, great John Polito would've been a natural to play the part of Mr. Carol, in a movie version of this story. He had a gravelly-sounding voice just perfect for the role of an over-protective, over-opinionated slightly upper-class city dweller with one wife, one child, and blue collar roots.
Thanks for updating this story before the New Year. And I hope you have a happy one! :-)
Author's Response:
I will never get his voice out of my head now.
The same to you. The next chapter will be up shortly into 2017.
Date: December 28 2016 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 60: Parental Guidance
It sounds old-fashioned, but Mr. & Mrs. Carol could really use a full and frank exchange with Suzanne. It's not fair, but friends and family of people with disabilities are often obliged to educate others on how to accommodate them. Also, I think that Suzanne--after hearing Mr. Carol's aspersions--would become much more supportive of Peter when he tries to venture farther out beyond her care.
But yeah, Sharon's not the first bully Lisa's had to deal with.
Author's Response:
You raise some good points. Part of the point of this chapter was to show other adults in Peter's world who genuinely don't think poorly of him as a person, but also have a healthy estimation of the stakes for Lisa. But you're right that the Carols might benefit from some outside perspectives.
Date: December 24 2016 8:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
Great chap! and yes It's time to man up otherwise you'll end like Mandy's drawing Peter.
Author's Response:
He's going to have to figure that out quickly.
[Report This]Date: December 24 2016 6:10 AM Title: Chapter 59: Finger Combat
I really love this story and how its going. This is some really high quality stuff.
Author's Response:
Thanks much!
Date: December 23 2016 8:42 AM Title: Chapter 1: Separation Anxiety
Great update! Us readers would really like to see you write your self ragged on a marathon binge ( your stuff has gotten that good), but we'll take what we can get! Hope you have a chance to continue the time out series, maybe TO7 pulls the different Arton/Mack/Stevens strings together like the shrink act files start to do?
The OmegaVerse is too good to let go too though, a really good prequel is needed that expands on the original pre-omega situation.
Don't run yourself ragged for us though... :)
Author's Response:
Thanks very much. I don't really have time to do the writing binges like I did when I first started on the site but I write whenever I can. TO7 is being worked on. The Omegaverse is sort of on break now but it has not been let go - Ackbar would be the one to ask about that though.
Date: December 23 2016 8:09 AM Title: Chapter 59: Finger Combat
Erica stepping up reminds me that I still want to hear more about Dad.
Author's Response:
We will hear more about Dad eventually. It's being held off for a reason. ;)
[Report This]Date: December 23 2016 7:54 AM Title: Chapter 59: Finger Combat
So, she was basically giving him the first of the 12 Steps of Shrinkie Self-empowerment? What to do when a non-familial giantess won't accept that "no" MEANS no?
Author's Response:
Basically!
Date: December 18 2016 7:37 PM Title: Chapter 58: Girl Troubles
Oh, well done! Ms. Tritter's face settling on Peter like his own personal sunrise. Creamy, indeed.
Author's Response:
Who wouldn't want to wake up to that?