Date: February 28 2012 9:43 AM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Gosh, all this were exactly what I was thinking and believing! :) The 'addiction' for this new life for both of them, the denial, the struggle, the mixed twisted feelings of love and hate, all resulting in this. Those five years have certainly been mentally disturbing for both of them, if Jack is completely broken by now, Carly isn't much different. I think it was the first time they were honest with each other feelings without caring about anything more, just the two of them, maybe not trying to blame all this to the quarrels and hate on the past and focus on what they mean now to each other in present. Still, even if things will be different from now on for little Jack as big sissy promised to be good to him (though, I doubt that she will stop some punishments, a toy always need that)... Jack maybe threw away their last hope of returning to normal, some drugs are very difficult to throw away indeed. And now after all this, their 'need' for each other certainly will grow even stronger. :P Loved it!
[Report This]Date: February 28 2012 9:38 AM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
After this chapter, I went from wanting him to be saved, to wanting him to suffer for life. He doesn't deserve to be saved, and he is literally a dumbass.
However, I may be wrong, maybe she actually changed and will make him orgasm more often(Which would actually be an understanding motive for giving her the password). But, I highly doubt this, and she will probably torture him for life.
You always leave the best cliffhangers though!! Can't wait to see what happens to him. :)
Date: February 28 2012 6:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
I think he should have made up two passwords. One to actually and really stop the program, as he did now, and one to only make Carly think that it's stopped, but actually isn't. So that the countdown keeps running in the background, but letting Carly believe that she reached her goal.
Yeah, he's a dumbass ;)
Please let Sophie save him... please! ^^
Date: February 28 2012 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
All I have to say is this, He, is, a, dumbass.
[Report This]Date: February 27 2012 11:12 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
If he now admits his longing for this there should be no trouble, unless of course, we are subject to another of your oh so brilliant plot twists :D
[Report This]Date: February 27 2012 9:01 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Great chapter, as always. My money's on Sophie ending up shrunk and Carly gives her over to Jenny. That way everyone's happy.
[Report This]Date: February 27 2012 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
holy shit! i completely thought that the last chapter was the end of the story and jack's life. i never would have guessed that he would willingly sign his life over to carly forever. now, i wonder what sophie is going to do?
well done man! never expected carly to bring him back.
Date: February 27 2012 8:34 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Fantastic! Took 5 long years to break him but she finally did it. Carly is one of my favorite characters ever. Sophie better not screw this up! I think Carly is too smart and will be ready for Sophie, plus now Jack wants to stay with Carly, so that adds an interesting twist to any attempted rescue. Going to be very sorry to see this one end.
Date: February 27 2012 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 29: Her Toy Forever
Jack is plum damn goofy but lucky for us he has such an excellent writer and fun as hell big sis to keep us coming back for more.
Also this begs the question...if one tiny can do all that granted he had more time then how did the entire group fail with Julia.
Honestly as a one off sometime down the road we need Julia, Carly, Alison and all their -pets- to have sit down interview. A Writers Guild of Crazy Giant Girls if you will.
Keep on doing what you're doing.
[Report This]Date: February 26 2012 5:25 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
you got me, maximus...what a great argument as to why im the one who needs to grow...it sure is clear. but in reality, my comment was harsh, and the story..stories..are very excellent
Date: February 26 2012 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
Don't waste time responding to Parrot, Jack, he's clearly the one who needs to grow up. You just keep rocking these stories like you have been! There's nothing wrong with asking for reviews, it's the authors who threaten to scrap a story if they don't get enough reviews. It's basically saying that the people who have given reviews don't count, piss on them.
Some of us appreciate the time an effort put into writing a story, a story that is provided for free and that the reviews are the only type of compensation given.
Keep up the great work!
Date: February 26 2012 9:30 AM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
jacksmith5996, since feedback is energy, and your only compensation, I understand your request for reviews. I have enjoyed the story of jack, even though I did not immediately connect with the long "thought stream" segments in some previous chapters. I later concluded they did help understand his psychological state and personality better. There never has appeared to be a strong emotion of affection between the two main characters, leading me to assume the dominant character is a cold, incomplete person. Reading your story has inspired me to attempt in the near future a story with a similar opening plot, featuring conflict and treachery. Now on to the grand conclusion.
Date: February 25 2012 10:34 PM Title: Chapter 1: Five Years Later
one hundred and forty five comments and still demanding comments after every fucking chapter with an exclamation point............grow. the. fuck. up.....pun intended
Author's Response:
geez, calm down, no one's forced to comment, it just motivates me to write more when people do
[Report This]Date: February 25 2012 12:11 AM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
awesome chapter, my friend.
[Report This]Date: February 24 2012 11:09 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
Wow Jack doesn't want it to end. Doesn't want to leave his Aphrodite. Well I guess Carly finally truly broke Jacks will.
Dave
Date: February 24 2012 9:32 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
Ahhhhh broken! So, did she hear that or will she swallow him down and bring him back up? I think she heard and will spit him out. I also think Aphrodite is the passsword? Perhaps? Excellent excellent story. Carly hasn't won yet though, Sophie is still lurking about, dang it. Or maybe Sophie will rescue Jack only to hear him tell her he wants to be with Carly. You can usually guess how these stories will go but you've done an excellent job of keeping the reader guessing. Kudos!
Author's Response:
i'm glad to know the ending hasn't been projected in neon letters by these preceding chapters. hope you enjoy what's to come
Date: February 24 2012 9:30 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
Wow, that's one of the best mouth scenes you've done yet! Very good. :)
I'm still quite interested in how exactly you plan to end this... Something tells me you've still got some surprises up your sleeve. Anyway, looking forward to seeing more~
Author's Response:
thanks, it was definitely one of the most fun mouthplay scenes i've gotten to write yet. and you are correct, i've got a couple more fun surprises coming up before things close out ;)
Date: February 24 2012 9:05 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
Pour Jack got himself in a heap of a picke, ain't no way he's gettin out of this bucket o syrup...
Date: February 24 2012 7:44 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
I think she will vomit him back, just scaring him even more than he need it. hah Oh, the tension and anxiety are killing me! What will happen? How it will end? :(
@The_Darkness: I'm on Jackie team! I really wish he can gain freedom and don't lose his humanity. :( Go jackie-poo! :D But I can't help but to wish a happy ending for both of them, I have a special like for fraternal love, hope Carly take conscience of her actions towards her brother and try to redeem herself. xD
[Report This]Date: February 24 2012 5:09 PM Title: Chapter 28: We All Scream for Ice Cream
Fantastic! Like any good story, I can't tell if I enjoy the suspense or the action more, but you're amazing at executing both. I hope you pursue writing as a career (or already have done so).