Date: September 06 2011 8:18 AM Title: Girls Night in
Heh! Tara sounds like a TV cop-show rapist.
Date: September 06 2011 1:07 AM Title: Girls Night in
Hmm I'm half expecting an experience that put Jake off sex becuse when he was talking Nique in the last chapter I felt you dropped some subtle hints. I wonder if Mchelle will save him...
[Report This]Date: September 05 2011 10:20 PM Title: Girls Night in
aww.. great update. awesome job.
aaron
[Report This]Date: September 05 2011 12:04 PM Title: Friends in common
I wonder what kind of entertainment she has in mind: Spin-the-bottle; Twister; or Chippendale Dancer?
[Report This]Date: September 05 2011 12:00 PM Title: Melody
Ah! A friend for him, at last.
*Sniff-sniff!*
Sorry; just hay fever.
[Report This]Date: September 05 2011 6:52 AM Title: Friends in common
awesome lead to the next chapter. an nique is awesome.
aaron
Date: September 05 2011 1:42 AM Title: Melody
Wow, seeing someone as to hold a little guy is a first. Nobody does that but then why would Alaina tell Nique about him after not wanting Michelle to know? I guess I'll just have to find out...
[Report This]Date: August 19 2011 7:51 PM Title: Melody
aww.. i like this character nique. an id liked to hear more about michelle. cant wait to see what happens next.
aaron
[Report This]Date: August 19 2011 3:59 PM Title: Michelle
very good. i really like this story. keep it up.
aaron
[Report This]Date: August 18 2011 8:50 AM Title: Michelle
Hmmmmmm! I don't know whether to be relieved or disappointed that Jake wasn't discovered. But, I know I love the improvement in your sentence structures! Definitely more legible.
:-)
Date: August 13 2011 7:28 AM Title: At her feet
You do need to double-check your spelling and capitalization a bit more often, though.
[Report This]Date: August 13 2011 7:27 AM Title: The Caretaker
A bit of a closet dominatrix. Isn't she?
[Report This]Date: August 13 2011 7:24 AM Title: At her feet
I agree with Scrumptious. You're off to an action-packed start, here. And, I feel it's better to have a good, fast-paced sm-novella with even a mediocre ending, than a long, high-brow sm-novel with no ending at all. The latter should be an occasional exception. Not the frighteningly increasing rule!
[Report This]Date: August 07 2011 3:06 PM Title: At her feet
awesome. absolutely love this story. an cant wait for another update. an i love the size differences between jake and.. well pretty much anyone lol.
aaron
Author's Response:
hahaha, glad you like it dude
[Report This]Date: August 06 2011 6:38 AM Title: The Caretaker
Very good start to this story.
An I want to see more.
Aaron
Ps if Jakes mother wanted to keep him outta the lime light why would she take out an ad saying that he was tiny?
Author's Response:
well the press wouldnt know who she sent him off with
[Report This]Date: August 04 2011 3:03 PM Title: Relocation
I'll disagree with Stubbornstain. I like that you got to the point. I think it would not be best if this turns into one of those long novels that never gets finished (I have one of those).
With the vore foreshadowing, I'm eagerly awaiting your next installment. :)
Author's Response:
I'm glad you noticed, i'm a huge vore fan myself, but unfortunately it may take a little while to get there :/
Date: August 03 2011 3:48 PM Title: Relocation
Great start! I'm super excited to read more :)
Author's Response:
i'm glad to hear you like it, and I can't wait for YOUR next chapter!
[Report This]Date: August 02 2011 8:59 AM Title: Relocation
Intriguing opener! Will there be a second chapter?
Author's Response:
there will, i just need to find some time
Date: August 01 2011 1:20 PM Title: Relocation
I think this is going to be a very good story but I don't like how most of back story is crammed into the summary and I felt chapter 1 could be developed a bit more. Perhaps having a prolouge might be a good idea? I don't tend to get on with prolouges myself but here I think one could work espcially since it can be told from a different perspective to the other chapters being a prolouge.