[Report This]Date: January 01 2011 3:51 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet Johny
"You're not so every day black clothe female ninja with enough weapons then I could count."
Ha ha ha, oh wow.
On a more serious note, this story's kind of all over the place. I appreciate your deviation from the standard "Small boy meets big girl," but I feel like this is too much of a deviation.
Future chapters might not make it a bad read, but, I'm having a hard time seeing it turn out erotically.
Author's Response: Truth be told. I didn't know what to write when I started so I just made this up without a plot.
Now I have a plot!! And I have an idea of where this will go.
So yeah hang around a little =]
[Report This]Date: December 31 2010 7:50 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet Johny
was johny shrunken?
an if the minotaur woman wasnt so evil, shed be hot lol.
cant wait for more
aaron
Author's Response: You'll see in the next chapter but thanks for reading.
Date: December 31 2010 10:01 AM Title: Chapter 1 - Meet Johny
This is good. As for a plot, well you'll have to elaborate on why the ninja woman took Johny there. That could be part of the plot in any case. She wouldn't take him there for no reason. It'll be interesting to see what the ninja girl does. Perhaps the minotaur has some treasure? I wonder what you'll decide to do.