Date: June 29 2023 11:48 AM Title: Luna's Ascension
I wish all mature moms and milfs were Ascended
[Report This]Date: June 22 2023 1:41 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
I wish Luna's mom grows even bigger and hotter.
We need huge sexy moms in the new world, much bigger than young girls!
[Report This]Date: October 03 2015 10:05 AM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Wow! One of my favorite stories of all time has been given new breath. You've done an absolutely superb job of maintaining the voice of the original series, and you clearly nailed the personalities through your coordination with SpookyTaco. I really hope you decide to keep going with this. You've done exceptional justice to the original work, and I'm just as spellbound by your words as I was by those of SpookyTaco.
I was suprised at how powerful you've made the glimmer effect on men. It seems to steal even their mental coherence and ability to maintain their own desires, let alone actions. They are truly powerless if their own desires can be subverted by the women around them. Very titillating stuff. Also, and perhaps its just too early to see, but given her misgivings in the first series, I expected to see a bit more reservation on Luna's part regarding the use of her new "powers". Instead, it seemed to only bolster her enjoyment of her new position of superiority.
Also, with Luna's recognition that sharing her man is only right and fair, I feel it's changed his role somewhat. Maybe this is by design to undermine his control even more, but something about her statement about not sharing him now seeming illogical and selfish seems to shift him from a soulmate and lover to a sort of pet that should be shared to bring enjoyment to other women. I'd be very curious to see if her new feelings on the matter drive her to compel him to service other women, perhaps even against his wishes. So far, he's appeared to prefer manogamy.
Of course, as a (very amateur) writer myself, I understand that you really need to write the story you envision. I hope I haven't offended you; I'm just trying to communicate what I was thinking as I read.
Your continuation of this story has truly grabbed me and you can be sure I'll be devouring any future chapters you put out. Fantastic work.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the comments! It's always great to hear how readers interpret the story.
The main thing I'll take credit for with the glimmer is naming it, since in the original story it had no name. The final Luna/Ash kissing moment in the original story already showed Luna's kiss glimmer forcing Ash into an immediate need for sex. I did heighten that a little with stammering and potential loss of conciousness.
I agree Luna hasn't expressed much reservation about her new ascended 'power'. Part of this is natural (her entire experience of life has changed), and part of this is writer's impatience, growing her into her new self too quickly. Hopefully future chapters will give me the chance to show small amounts of the original Luna peeking through, and show us that compared to other ascended women, Luna is already acting with great restraint.
As for Ash, it's impossible for Luna's ascension not to change his situation. The questions are how fast? and how much? I have many future chapters planned and outlined. Enjoy them as I post them.
Date: September 30 2015 10:06 AM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Beautiful, just plain beautiful and honestly I believe it is great seeing little Luna now fully ascended and going through an awakening of sorts for seeing her husband Ash for how wonderful he is and also how beautiful she has become.
Date: September 28 2015 9:00 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Great chapter! I can honestly say that this one was the best so far, it was so detailed and sexy!
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 5:15 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Wow, two chapters at once! I almost didn't notice this second chapter. I recommend spreading this out more next time. :)
This was a great chapter tho! We got to see Ash and Luna 'interact' after her full ascension and while it went as expected, in some ways, that's a good thing.
You do a good job of portraying Luna's enhanced intellect. Let's hope her brilliance doesn't become more of a burden than a boon.
You mentioned at one point that she pulled his head into her stomach, just under her breasts. Would he be that tall? I think he's only 5'9. So he'd perhaps reacher her lower abdomen, unless she was coming up the stairs or something.
Author's Response:
Good catch on the height mistake. I fixed it.
I considered posting the update as a single chapter, but it makes more sense as two.
[Report This]Date: September 28 2015 4:49 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Not too much going on in this chapter. Nice how you linked to the first story with the jewelry shop tho.
There are so many easy ways Ash could get money, e.g., selling his services to the highest bidder. However he opts for 'traditional' employment. Hopefully experiences like this, the inability to afford things, don't change his mind. :)
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 6:43 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Interesting. Definitely a departure from what I'd envisioned with the knife bending thing, but I like it! I think it would be good to add an explanation of 'glimmer' at some point since I don't think it was mentioned in my original story. I do like the name for it tho, has an 'enchanting' connotation. I also like the way you portrayed Addison. I like how she explained the altruistic intentions of Ascended, i.e., they're intelligent enough to know the benefit of healing and the value of sharing their male partners to survival of their race in general. Jealousy in the classic sense doesn't exist in the same way. Kissing is held in higher esteem as something shared for true intimacy since healing (i.e., sex) serves other more critical functions beyond intimacy/pleasure.
Write more please! :)
Author's Response:
The 'power within' concept was born out of my desire to make the advantage that induced acendants have take a tangible part in the story, rather than Luna just "being passively smarter". This is what happened in chapter 1 with Luna and her moment of focus / intellect.
However, I didn't want the 'power within' (might need a better name) to be exclusive to induced (or exclusive to intellect), since that seemed too weird. Thus the 2-3% of women who cultivate their inner connection (i think of it as a zen/enlightenment thing)
Combine this with my desire to find some way to make Addison unique, and I decided she needed to have access to this rare gift, especially for strength. This explains why she's a police officer, and why she's such a 'catch' for a sexpot like Regan. It also expains how Addison is really the alpha among them, even if she doesn't always seem it. (though who knows how that will change now that Luna's induced!)
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 6:23 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Another excellent chapter. Your 'day at work' is much better than what I'd started. You keep the interactions one-on-one, which allows us to focus on dialog and characters without being overwhelmed by the number of people at work. You show man as 'boss' in a tongue-in-cheek sense -- an ususual mixture of 'extremely valuable' and 'hopelessly dependent/inferior'. Even though it's a 'safe' environment, they don't even let him go to the bathroom unaided. Yet Ash takes it all in stride simply because he knows of no different existance. Women are likely jealous of Amy and her regularly being the first person Ash calls for aide. She, of course, is thrilled. Assuming 1 man marries 4 women on average (who knows the exact ratio), women only have a 1 in 25 chance of getting married so it's like winning the lottery. This type of society opens itself up to all kinds of other facets. The world would be a dream come true for a lesbian, even though most partners would prefer a man. I imagine the sex toy industry would also get a lot of business. With Ascended fluids having such an effect, I wonder if women would try to 'spike' the drink of a man. Now I'm just rambling but you got me thinking again. :)
Author's Response:
Thanks!
In my mind, nobody in this world would fit our definition of "lesbian". No ascended woman prefers female intimacy to healing, since it's like an orgasm x 10, plus the health and life benefits. That said, with so few men, and no taboo about F/F relationships, it's natural for women to fall in love, build strong relationships, and marry. With healing easy (if pricy) at healing centers, they can enjoy each other and healing too.
Addison is the current character closest to a lesbian. She's a very strong woman, attracted to strength only other ascended women can offer her. She also can hold off her urges towards men much better than most women. That said, she still needs and desires healing. It's just part of ascended physiology.
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 5:35 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Even if this wasn't a continuation of my story, I'd want to read this. You're a skilled writer, and you bring the characters to life in a unique way. The jump from first person to third person omniscient works quite well, as it highlights the shift between authors, and provides new perspective. I enjoyed the movement from Luna's to Ash's mind toward the end of this chapter. Normally I find such transitions jarring, but the intimacy allowed a natural transition. You almost perfectly matched the Ash and Luna in my mind, especially Ash. And Luna was tricky because she's Ascended and should behave a bit different. I liked how you portrayed her new intellectual gift, as something available but perhaps not always 'on' unless she chooses to access it. Please continue. :)
Author's Response:
I'm glad I matched your mental image of Ash and Luna. That's high praise, coming from the original author.
I find writing Luna the hardest, since she should remember the way she treated Ash before, and the way she treats Ash should change -- but not too fast. It's a tough balance. I mostly worry she's changing too fast, so I try to slow it down as much as I can. - Thanks for the feedback!
[Report This]Date: September 21 2015 2:12 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
I liked the 3rd chapter as well, Luna is definitely enjoying herself as an ascended. I feel like it's going to be difficult for her to take her husband seriously and treat him as an equal like she did before now that she's ascended. I get the impression that ascended women have ascended ego's too, if that makes any sense...It comes with the package. Anyway, I too agree with Nostory, this chapter was hard to read in it's current state, the first chapter had the perfect format!
Date: September 21 2015 2:02 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
I support Nostroy's request for more space paragraphs to make easy the reading. However good 1st chapter.
Date: September 21 2015 9:53 AM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Sorry could you include more spaces between paragraphs ? A bit difficult to read. Other than that, great chapter! Never knew ascended women had ESP at all but its awesome! Luna is also just about discovering the full extent of her new body. Cannot wait to see more from you.
Author's Response:
Oops. The posting tool ate my paragraphs for ch2/3. Fixed now.
Luna's experience isn't supposed to be ESP, it's just supposed to be vastly heightened focus and intellect.
Date: September 20 2015 7:41 PM Title: Luna, Ascended.
I read some of the stories on your website, I think some of them should be released here, they're good enough for that.
Author's Response:
I don't resist posting here because I don't think my stories are good enough. I'm exclusively interested in amazon/minigts stories, and I find the UI here cumbersome to hunt these down and ignore the rest. (I have to use advanced search, and exclude filters, it takes quite some time) I primarily post on Giantess City forums, because there we just use subject tags like "minigts" and I find it easier to pick out the stories I like this way.
I've also had problems here with the story submission forms eating my effort a few times, and that's really annoying and time consuming. It happens because in an incognito window, the login cookie seems to only last ten minutes or so, and when it times out before I submit the form, the site eats my form submission and tells me to login again.
That said, I'm also not opposed to posting more stories here. I'll try to find some time to put more stuff up soon.
Date: September 20 2015 9:23 AM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Im a big fan of spookys stuff, this series included! As for your writting id say youve matched his style in many ways, I actually thought u were him, no joke. Then I saw the author and realized it was someone else! So far youve captured the characters personalities to the letter too! I can safely say ill be looking forward to updates from this, good luck.
Date: September 20 2015 8:19 AM Title: Luna, Ascended.
Great to see this story here, I love what you've written. You should start a series called Ascended with Spooky. Group Luna's Ascension and this under that banner.
[Report This]Date: September 20 2015 7:36 AM Title: Luna's Ascension
I've posted the first chapter of my continuation, "Luna, Ascended." Looking forward to any feedback!
http://giantessworld.net/viewstory.php?sid=5461&index=1
Author's Response:
Btw, you did an excellent job with the continuation. I'm considering continuing from your continuation.
[Report This]Date: July 26 2015 12:14 PM Title: Luna's Ascension
A couple other questions have come up while digging deeper drafting my continuation... sorry if it's a bit too much.. and again I *love* the story..
Most are some version of "what has life been like for them for the four years before the story, since Luna met Regan?" What have they been doing?
1) Where are they? (it says Topeka, as in Kansas?) Where did they goto college? Where did they grow up? (says L/A grew up together, but I didn't see any refernce to where)
2) what season is it? There is a reference to it being cold, but no mention of snow, so it sounds mildly cold, like fall or spring.
3) How long have R/A been guardians for L/A? How did it happen? The closest time reference I can find, is Ch7, where Luna admitted Regan has "lived with this for the last four years", where I think "this" refers to being in proximity of Ash. However, if they are all 23, 4 years ago they would all be 19, which sounds like when Luna and Regan would have met as roomates in college. So the four years could just be how long Regan has known and been around Ash.
Did college require them to get guardians? (aka, was Luna instantly her guardian, and thus her roomate?) That would sort-of make sense, in a world difficult for and potentially dangerous to small people. Ash could have been independently assigned Addison as a guardian, but it seems improbably though that L/A would marry, and their individually assigned guardians would marry.
4) Why did R/A marry so young? L/A have been married for a "couple of months" (so still age 23), and R/A have been married "a year longer" (maybe age 22). Society requires *men* to marry young, but it doesn't require this of women. Is it common for women to marry eachother so young?
5) Why is Ash still complaining about riding in a car-seat? Why is this the first time they've been on a long hike, or needed a carrier? Why are these issues only coming up now? Did they only recently become guardians? Did they recently move to a new city (after graduation from college perhaps)? If so, that might explain why good hiking trails are newly available. Where did they go to college? Where did they grow up? (we know L/A grew up together, but I don't think we know where)
6) What is the timeline? The tail end of chapter 9 "morning wakeup" says it's Monday. Which would mean their "checkup" hospital visit was Sunday, Luna's ascension was Saturday. When did they visit the mall? Was that Sat morning? If so, it seems quite the rushed day to have discovered her tumor Sat afternoon, and have her at home ascending Sat night. Though I guess once the decision is made, no point in waiting.
7) Regarding the very end of Ch9... Ash seems insistant on going to work. His wife just had a life-threatening tumor, which resulted in her undergoing induced ascension. Why wouldn't Ash expect to take several days off work?
8) Regarding the hospital checkup visit (sunday), seems like too much focus on the tracking implant. They are riding in the car to make sure Luna's life-threating tumor is taken care of, and all anyone is talking about is the tracking implant. Seems more like they would be all there for Luna, and then when they randomly saw a sign at the hospital that the implant clinic was open (on a sunday!) they would get Ash to do it. Maybe even after they figured out Luna was in the clear. -- (though what's done is done, just a bit of a critique)
Thanks again for the incredible story, world, and characters.
Author's Response:
Wow, I wish I could answer all your questions. :) Unfortunately, I can't. It's been too long since I wrote this story. I'll try to give some thoughts.
1) If it says Topeka, yes, I'd have to say Kansas as that's what comes to my mind when I think of Topeka. As for college and growing up, if the story doesn't mention it, I have no answer. Your guess is as good as mine. I could open my 'outline' but I prefer to rely on the story as the source of 'truth'. The outline is merely a suggestion-box of potential paths.
2) I want to say Fall.
3) Can't remember. Pretty sure college marke the age when guardians became necessary.
4) No answer. But I can say that this post-Ascension world has a different view of sexuality which may play a factor.
5) Lol. I strive for realism even in giantess stories. When I first read this, my initial thought was: 'ut oh...did I drop the ball here?' :) I vaguely remember it was their first long hike (which seems entirely plausible...not everyone hikes a lot). I also know Ash has his own car (hence doesn't always ride in back-seat car-seat), and that he complains about things in general in a way that may seem juvenile by our standards. It can be hard to imagine the mentality of a young man in this society...someone who has spent his entire life treated like a kid in some sense. Is it entirely unrealistic that he acts 'immature' on occassion? Yet at the same time mature and wise beyond his years on other occassions? An odd mix perhaps, but it's fun to imagine how environment and upbringing can impact one's mentality.
6) In many of my outlines, I have a timeline. I checked and couldn't find the timeline for this story. Perhaps it's 'rushed' but given the nature of Ascension's requirements, I can see why they didn't want to waste time. :)
7) I actually wrote part of chapter 10: Ash's life at work. Created the characters for it and everything. Then I decided to chunk it, i.e., if I ever came back to this story, I wouldn't have him at work. It was just a situation where what I'd written felt wrong. I had some other ideas, but who knows what will eventually make it to paper.
8) Well, he *has* worked as a healer before. So he knows what a healer is capable of doing (there's a reason for the title of 'healer'). It's just part of Ascension biology -- the landscape of medicine in this world is entirely different, primarily focused on aiding men. As for women, 'healing' is the ultimate (albiet expensive) cure for most ailments. Plus we saw other things like Luna's vision improving dramatically, etc. Given the nature of Healing, Ash's (perhaps) blind faith in it, and his sporadic moments of immaturity, the car ride conversation around the implant seems a bit more plausible to me. :)
[Report This]Date: July 21 2015 12:56 PM Title: Luna's Ascension
Love the story, the world, the characters. Awesome work. One of my favorites in Gentle/Amazon/MiniGTS.
I have a few questions:
1) How did Regan/Addison get to be both neighbors and guardians? The suggestion is that they were guardians first (because Regan was Luna's college roomate). However, in our world, it's very unlikely to find two places next-door and both available at the same time... There might be two units in a large apartment building available, but Ash's weight room being in the 'basement' suggests a smaller building, like a house or townhouse. -- Were they just lucky finding two townhomes near eachother? Would they have all lived in a single place if they hadn't? Is it common for several neighbor places to be rented together, because of the frequency of polygamy?
2) Why didn't Regan and Addison take advantage of Ash prior to Luna's ascension? Was it merely the threat of breaking the law? There is such a big deal made of how unsafe it is for them to be in certain "zones" without a Guardian escort, it sounds like it's pretty commonplace for un-ascended to be bothered, harmed, abducted, something. Is that because a large percentage of society ignores the laws? The laws are hard to enforce? A small minority is very active? How does this relate do Regan and Addison? Are they just some of the "good ones"?
3) I've been working on a continuation of the story... I'll use a different title, but I'd like to use the same character names, unless you have an objection. If you want to chat about it, PM me @ giantesscity.com
Author's Response:
1. The role of guardian is taken seriously in the society. It's very rare to have an unascended woman with a man. I suspect the government aided in making the arrangements and yes, they would have likely inhabited the same house if two couldn't be found adjacent. They wanted to give Luna and Ash some semblance of independence.
2. Regan would never do that because of how much she cares for Luna. And Addison wouldn't ever do that because she's involved with law enforcement herself. Addison can be a scary character in terms of stoic straight-faced enforcement...at least in what I had planned for her. Addison had never been 'with' a healer or a man and she, oddly, never felt the drive as strongly as others. As for the rest of the world, yes, men are at risk in unsafe zones simply because of their relative rarity and the benefits they can provide. Guardians help ensure men don't get too much exposure in the real world, thus reducing the need for law enforcement. The law isn't corrupt or anything, ascended women simply have varying degrees of ability to resist their instincts. Most don't have harmful intentions toward men, they simply have an attraction based on the scarcity of the opposite gender, the nature of ascension's cravings, etc.
3. Go for it. I wish I had time to continue it. Send me an email (see my profile) once you post it and i'd love to read it!
[Report This]Date: May 30 2015 9:39 AM Title: Luna's Ascension
Just wanted to let you know that this is one of my favorite GTS stories. The characters and world you have developed are just superb. As a new author myself I now have an appreciation of what feedback can do for a writer, so I wanted to offer my kudos for your most excellent story. Really hoping you decide to continue this when you get a chance.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm a bit inspired at how you manage to continue writing in spite of a job and caring for a family. I'm tempted to see what I can do in the near future.