Date: May 20 2006 8:19 PM Title: Chapter 4
It is a fine story you tell, Nostromo. I relish a story inwhich a wee man has a grand adventure, beats the odds, and finds true love in the end.
Author's Response: Thanks a lot, Ringmaster! I was fond of the couple of the first chapter, and felt compelled to save the day for them! :-)thanks a gain for reading!
Date: May 20 2006 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 4
As I said before, a very gripping story.
Excellent. And your grammar is improving. I was only sad to see it end.
I liked the scene where Helen swallows him, and then he wakes from a dream. A good surprise.
Author's Response: thanks , Stan, i was sad myself to finish it. But really there was no other way. Had I started another thread (escape + revenge for instance), i would have lost the plot i think.
Date: April 29 2006 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 1
Excellent work. You've got a great setup and some very nice characters here. I'm looking forward to what comes next.
Author's Response: thanks a mil NFalc! I enjoyed writing this one and ihope that shows. I wonder what's next next indeed, i never plan anything :-)
Date: April 29 2006 2:53 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice job. Good plot. Can't wait for chapter two.
Gloria In Excelsis DEO
-theInformer
Author's Response: thanks for reading informer! i'll get to it soon ihope.
Date: April 28 2006 10:21 AM Title: Chapter 1
A very gripping story and well written too. I am looking forward expectantly to the next chapter. Your stories always hold my interest.
Author's Response: Thanks again for your comments, Stan!! I may have put myself in a tricky situation here: i really love my two characters now and i don't wish them harm any longer. How am i going to sort things out? hehe i'll find something, i'm sure.