[Report This]Date: June 02 2011 7:12 AM Title: Chapter 1
yet again, great work. your descriptions are vivid without getting overly wordy, and i particularly appreciate the effortlessness with which you bypass the speed bump of doubt required to get past the reason for the main character shrinking. normally this aspect pulls me out of the story a little, but you did it admirably here
[Report This]Date: March 02 2011 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 1
reread this story, yet again. hoping that you will update it.
aaron
Date: February 22 2011 10:25 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great so far, when can we expect to see a new chapter?
Date: October 11 2010 2:56 PM Title: Chapter 1
please write more
[Report This]Date: August 05 2010 10:24 AM Title: Chapter 1
cant wait for more
Date: August 03 2010 6:27 AM Title: Chapter 1
You're one of my favorite authors on here and with good reason. Another good job. Is this all or should we expect future chapters? :)
Author's Response: Planning on some future chapters, although the Carrie storyline will probably wrap up sooner than some folks would expect. There are so many stories I want to tell here, and the whole psychotic ex-girlfriend thing is only the tip of the iceberg =)
[Report This]Date: August 02 2010 1:36 AM Title: Chapter 1
A well told story, I love the way the story switches from past to present, it really gives you a small insight into the characters, as for Carrie, you've done well in making a character that is really easy to hate. I've experienced arguments and fallouts like this and I think you've really nailed them for realism. Eagerly awaiting the next chapter.
Author's Response: Thanks, Critic! I've always been partial to realistic (and hopefully complex) characters, and Carrie is definitely one close to my heart. Glad you're enjoying the story!
Date: July 30 2010 4:06 PM Title: Chapter 1
Great story, mate. Carrie is an excellent, believable antagonist. I can't decide whether I want this story to be one where the good guys win or the bad. Either way, I'm sure it'll be interesting. Keep it up.
Author's Response: Thanks, Dudicus! When I started the story, I knew I wanted to give Aaron a psychotic ex-girlfriend to torment him as she shrank. But the more I wrote Carrie, the more I liked her. Now I'm just hoping I haven't written myself into a corner with her story, because I'd really like to do more with her.
Date: July 30 2010 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 1
hey didnt think id see u back here
gotta be honest bud, this is story number three, but already it feels a little stale, and it shows in your descriptions of things. i think a major improvement would be a cap on the word 'playful' or 'playfully'; only so many times i can see that in a passage that it loses meaning altogether. could also be that i dont like arbitrary descriptions, but i still think that you need to add some more words to your regular vocabulary ('foregone conclusion' was a nice touch)
btw, you write a lot. i mean a lot. is the whole story already finished? drop me a line son
Author's Response: The GTS stuff I write is just to blow off steam when I'm working on something mainstream. I usually give it a cursory glance for editing, but don't usually do any heavy revisions or rewrites. So I sometimes end up a little repetitive, or (as you pointed out) overusing the occasional word. I also have a few tropes that I absolutely love, and tend to revisit over and over again. Sorry if you think it's stale, or if you find my regular vocabulary lacking. Definitely haven't finished the story yet. Not even 100% sure what's going to happen next, as I didn't plot this story out like I did my last two. Thanks for reading, and I hope you find the future chapters a little more to your liking.
Date: July 30 2010 11:46 AM Title: Chapter 1
I can say with confidence that many people were waiting for your next story!
As always, realistic feel, amazing chapter, true personalities. I loved it. Hope you're thinking about actually updating this frequently!
Author's Response: Thanks, ZeR0x. Glad you liked it! I'll try to update this one more frequently than I did my previous two stories, but I make no promises ;-)
[Report This]Date: July 30 2010 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 1
One word: EXCELLENT!
Author's Response: Well, THANKS!
[Report This]Date: July 30 2010 1:53 AM Title: Chapter 1
HOLY CRAP!! lol...
(had to get that outta my system)
man this was an awesome chapter cayce. i mean even though carrie is kinda... unbalanced, i'd still find it hard not to be attracted to her. but the whole b'n'e scene was so suspenseful, HOLY CRAP!!(lol sorry)
love the fact that he shrank to just over 3". love how the story goes from pass, present(or whatever order)... you've made it flow seemlessly. well done.
loved his dollhouse(of course, 'the him being bigger in the dollhouse' was a welcomed and unexpected suprise).
well, just wanted to say welcome back and cant wait to read more about carrie's feet, or how things are going to pan out...
ps this carrie character seems familiar... but ill wait and see on that.
Author's Response: Whoa! My protagonist totally has your name =) Glad to be back, Aaron. I'm happy you liked the story, and I'm relieved the past/present thing wasn't too difficult to follow. Would love to know who Carrie reminds you of... another character of mine, a character from someone else's story, or a person you know in real life?