[Report This]Date: May 25 2010 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 7: Sophie's Oblivion
great chapter, i'm hooked. cant wait toe see what happens next to our little hero.
ps does Lila or Sophie have painted toes?
aaron
Author's Response: Thanks man! And yes: Sophie had pink toenails and Lila has black. XD
[Report This]Date: May 24 2010 5:45 PM Title: Chapter 6: Lila
Let us hope so. So far, she's the only one who HASN'T benefited from his new-found talents!
;-)
[Report This]Date: May 24 2010 12:32 PM Title: Chapter 5: Sophie's House
Hmmmmm! Lila must've been wearing "skorts." Otherwise, her under things would not have been _visible_ to Gnat. I mean; Nate!
[Report This]Date: May 23 2010 8:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: The first day
great story. loved the scenes with sophie's mom. hope she catches him again and makes him rub her feet
aaron
Author's Response: Thanks man! And we'll see, wont we? xD
[Report This]Date: May 18 2010 9:29 PM Title: Chapter 4: Kate
How about six of one/half-dozen of the other?
Seriously, though: thanks for posting a fourth chapter. When I saw the word "yes" under the completion heading, I was afraid I'd have to wait for a sequel to see if he and Sophie crossed paths!*
* What can I say? When it comes to engrossing stories, I have patience issues. ;-)
Author's Response: Thanks! haha I accidently pressed "yes", since it still isn't complete. I'm changing it to "no" until I finish it. xD There will be a few more characters introduced, and we'll see what Sophie does with him! ;)
Date: May 18 2010 8:25 PM Title: Chapter 4: Kate
Great story so far, keep it up!
[Report This]Date: May 12 2010 7:44 AM Title: Chapter 3: Hannah's revenge
I hope he escapes again. Only to be recaptured by Sophie!*
*Of course, it's _your_ story. So, it's within your rights to dash anyone's hopes. ;-)
Date: May 11 2010 2:25 PM Title: Chapter 1: The first day
Thanks! Yes I originally had the chapter 2 in proper dialogue but when I uploaded it in a txt file it came out 'different'. But thanks I'll edit it. :)
[Report This]Date: May 11 2010 2:12 PM Title: Chapter 2: Alyssa
Chapter 2 needs a lot of re-editing, to separate the dialogue from the text. Otherwise? Not too bad.
[Report This]Date: May 10 2010 10:11 PM Title: Chapter 2: Alyssa
hmmm... riveting chapter.
on to chapter 3
aaron
Date: May 10 2010 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 2: Alyssa
Amazing story! Keep up the great work!