Date: May 02 2010 10:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
hope that the mom does find him in the next chapter, but would little bit of cum even be noticed by her? well im definitely waiting to find out.
for some reason i like this story...
eventhough im not a big fan of incest, the foot scenes are very well written.
aaron
Date: May 02 2010 8:11 PM Title: Chapter 7
This is turning into a great story. I love the whole voyeur aspect, please continue as I am really enjoying it!
Date: May 02 2010 7:46 PM Title: Chapter 1
It's good, but you cannot for a second claim to have produced a 'quick moving story' when your main character has spent seven chapters laying in one spot.
Author's Response: Well, Sandwich, I guess that depends on your definition of "quick moving." I wasn't suggesting my character was going to be running alongside a train--I simply intended to spend more time on "things happening" and less time on inner monologue and character development. But, thanks for the comment nonetheless.
Date: May 02 2010 11:52 AM Title: Chapter 1
i like where this is going. please continue..
Author's Response: Wow! Quick response. Thanks!