It's lovely as a story so far, I have grown to rather hate certain pundits over the years so that part did it's job in the story and made me empathize with our hero.  It's well written and has a very nice pace to the writing, just enough detail, while avoiding describing the boring unimportant details. Hopefully she gets a challenge beyond just annoying critics and her own self confidence, or shady men trying to control her. Someone to really fight who goes wild with power.

Great addition! I like how we're continuing to learn about Maxima's lore, as well as her limits (all great superheroes have them). I see you're setting up multiple conflicts and I can see how they might all eventually intersect, but I'm looking forward to seeing how you execute on them.

Your descriptive language is top-notch and I read several phrases in this chapter that I have never encountered in any other works of literature before, all of which felt clever, natural, and appropriate. I appreciate some of the character details you've added, not only to Maxima herself, but also side characters like the agents. Lizzie (and a lot of the social commentary in her proximity) is starting to feel a little one-dimensional, but I suspect this will change given that Zoe has actually begun interacting with her. That said, I also don't think Lizzie necessarily needs to be any more complex than she is right now. It kinda just depends on what the plot calls for and what her role in the story is. If she's a stand-in for the supportive public or a source of comfort and reassurance for Maxima, then I don't think she needs much more characterization. 

All that said, this chapter felt very ominous to me. A lot of conflicts were introduced at once and they feel somewhat insurmountable. Perhaps this was because of the conspicuous height of 400ft and the repeated mentions of her dogs (these kinda felt like easter eggs referencing "The Dog Mom"), but I also attribute this unsettling tone to Zoe's abrupt and frequent rampage fantasies. At this point in the story, I don't know if these mental diversions are fanservice or foreshadowing, but I'm torn as to whether they are a positive or negative addition to the story. On the one hand, they build up tension and complicate Zoe's personality. On the other hand, these complexities somewhat undermine Zoe's characterization and relatability. I understand that Zoe is stressed and grappling with a lot of hard decisions, but it strains belief that the girl who grieves and mourns every casualty also fantasizes about mass murder. Like I said: it complicates the character, but it verges on contradiction.

It's also somewhat unusual that the superheroine who was just bested by a building fire seems to genuinely believe she is capable of taking on the military. I imagine that anger clouds her judgement and on some level she's bluffing in an attempt to preserve her independence, but I'm kind of surprised she didn't react to her failure with more humility. The size tags in this story suggest to me that she is capable of reaching greater statures, but she's nowhere near powerful enough to combat, say, the air force. Jets fly at tens of thousands of feet and they carry payloads much hotter and harder than the inferno that just did a number on her...

Then again, I think this conflict with the government is going to be resolved in the court of public opinion, not with a show of force. That seems to be the thematic direction of the narrative, plus it just feels more plausible to me. Then again, this is a Panzer story, so who knows? Maybe she'll just snap and kill everybody. XD

I see a lot of potential with this story. There are a lot of thematic parallels with my own flagship story (which I have removed but may re-release in time), so I've put a lot of thought into these concepts. Keep up the great work!

Author's Response:

Hey!  I love a good feedback comment.  My biggest struggle right now is to make sure I don't have any plot-holes so wish me luck. 

I really, really appreciate the kind words about my descriptions.  There was a moment back in Grove View Apartments' later chapters where I decided I wanted to really learn how to write and since then I've really tried to improve my style.  

Lizzie is definitely a one trick pony right now, I promise that chapter 3 will be the last of her being just an annoying podcaster type, I aim to develop all my characters in some way so please stay tuned with her.  I'm going for lots of tropes and cliches on purpose to the point where I almost want to make this story a satire, but with a lot of dark and emotional elements that might pull people in.  

Yes, the dog mom was a cool little reference, thank you for noticing!  

I hope the next chapter reveals why Zoe has mental breaks and fantasizes about going crazy, but we'll just have to see how she handles it and herself.  

I think as long as this story doesn't go too far over the top and obvious when it comes to the size fetish stuff (and so far I don't think it has) then you could probably post this onto some appropriate site for superhero stories, where people there might also be able to appreciate it. Not just exclusively here on a giantess site. I know you want to receive feedback, so I think your best bet for that is to post it to as many places as you can. There already are some superheros and villains with size changing powers, so this story wouldn't seem strange to those who are into super hero stuff, but which might otherwise not be into giantess stuff in general. If you know what I mean. Just so long as you don't plan to go too over the top with that stuff, or if you do, you could make a toned down version for those platforms. That's just an idea anyway.

I mean, the amount of feedback you might in theory receive on a mainstream superhero type of site might very easily dwarf the feedback you'd ever get on here, because this the whole giantess fetish is sadly a pretty niche thing you know.

Wow, I am intrigued. I never expected to see the great Panzer write a gentle story and a lot of the tags are eye-raising. As if a gentle story with violence and gore were not surprising enough, there's a tera tag on this thing. I'm very curious to see where this goes (I have a feeling she's going to save Earth from an asteroid or alien invasion at some point, but we'll see). 

I always try to make my reviews constructive, but frankly there is very little to improve upon so far. There were a few places where a hyphen was missing or I felt the phrasing could have been marginally better, but your prose is exceptional and you do a great job of painting scenes without writing a full paragraph of imagery that would disrupt the story's pacing. Seriously, the writing quality is better than most of the stuff at the front of bookstores nowadays. My nitpicks are extremely minor, like why a 500 foot-tall bank apparently has 150 foot-high ceilings (presumably closer to 100 feet since Maxima was crouching) or why SWAT officers would be wearing "riot gear" as opposed to tactical gear (big difference), but these are really superficial things. 

As for what you do well: the list is abundant. As mentioned before, your prose is exceptionally good. Your attention to detail with scales is immaculate, with the 150 foot figure being my absolute favorite in the genre (and one I've employed extensively myself, so I know your math on the "little people" in her midst is accurate). The worldbuilding is a perfect paradox of absurdism (appropriate to the genre of superhero fiction) combined with a degree of realism that makes the setting feel both believable and humorous. You've done a great job of introducing the protagonist, but you've also maintained a level of intrigue that keeps much of her past, powers, and personality obscure (though I expect we will learn more in future chapters). Frankly, I could go on and on, but I want to keep this paragraph somewhat brief and I don't want to risk causing you to overthink anything. Suffice it to say: great work! 

I'm looking forward to future installments. I'm a little curious how much you have outlined already and if this will be a novella-length work or a proper novel (it feels like the latter). Admittedly, I am not a big fan of gore or superheroes, but I've added this story to my favorites and intend to read every chapter so long as I am capable of doing so. 

I also saw that you mentioned adding pictures at some point. Would I be correct in assuming that Gravel will be furnishing some more great art for you?