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Reviewer: Tigernach Signed starstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: January 05 2016 4:08 PM Title: Chapter 10

Having just now finished reading the 3 Hayone Saga stories, (Scapegoat, End of an Era, and Between an Orc and a Hard Place), I must now appologize for thinking that the first was too short, and should be made longer. I had read your work for the first time, and didn't know that there were further stories set in that worldline, with Raquel as the 'star' character. Very nicely done (though in all honesty, I must admit that I was looking for a much different ending on the first story...) But then, it is your story, not mine! Keep up the good work.

Reviewer: monstermaker Signed [Report This]
Date: February 03 2011 6:26 AM Title: Chapter 1

How can you make such a suspenseful plot?!? It combines fear with action and also is very descriptive. Very VERY good. I wouldn't be able tocriticize you, because I've never made a story. But anyway, awesome, cool, the best, going on my favorites!

Reviewer: T-Rex Signed starstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: July 29 2010 10:03 PM Title: Chapter 1

Great read. This was the story that made me a Pixis fan. It's so good to see these kind of stories with an actual plot and characters. The airship was cool too.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 26 2010 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 10

Kudos to both of you on a job, well done. :-)

Reviewer: aaron Signed [Report This]
Date: July 24 2010 4:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

* sorry pixis

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 24 2010 3:00 PM Title: Chapter 10

Wow I've really enjoyed this magical and incredibly imaginative tale. And I thank you both for writing it...
Man oh man what an awesome ending.
I only wish that you both could possibly do a spinoff story with Raquel and pixie... But I guess that's asking too much... At any rate this is by far my favorite adventure tale on this site. And thanks again

Aaron

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 08 2010 12:04 PM Title: Chapter 9

damn... this story is awesome. but what i really love are cliffhangers and plots that keep me guessing. well done.
also like the exploding airship...

aaron

ps of course raquel was finaminal as usual.
thanks again for this awesome adventure tale please keep going.

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 08 2010 10:26 AM Title: Chapter 9

Uh-oh! I didn't see that one coming, at all. I wonder if Raquel will be able to catch it in her outstretched arms?

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:43 AM Title: Chapter 8

Now, THAT is what I call a suspenseful cliff-hanger. Double bravo!

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Date: June 29 2010 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 7

Gets better and better with each chapter. :-)

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarhalf-star [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:36 AM Title: Chapter 6

I'll have to deduct one star for poor grammar. A "swan-off" rifle? That's as bad as omitting the "not" in Gunther realizing he was NOT alone!*

*Little kids are SO lucky I don't teach elementary school. ;-)

Author's Response: Yeah, I saw that afterward and was kicking myself. I'm an editor myself and usually catch these things. Doh!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:25 AM Title: Chapter 5

I see I wasn't the only one who noticed the similarity. Bravo!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:21 AM Title: Chapter 4

Hmmmmm! I wonder if Lee and Company are ex-Sturmgewehr? I guess the only way to answer that is to high-tail it to chapter 5!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 3

You know; people often criticize steampunk fiction for anachronistically depicting tanks twenty-something years before their real-world invention. But, in actuality? It would have been feasible for a tank to have been developed in the late 19th century! Simply by combining the principles of the horseless carriage with the iron-plated wagons that used to deliver Union Army payrolls during the Civil War.

In short; well done!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:04 AM Title: Chapter 2

Granted, he has somewhat better cause. But, this version of Sir P still sounds too much like Krazy Klaus!

Reviewer: Carycomic Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 29 2010 11:00 AM Title: Chapter 1

Love it! I'm off to chapter two.

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 26 2010 11:18 PM Title: Chapter 8

umm... can you say EPIC!!!
cause that is the one word phrase that best describes this (in my opinion of course).

aaron

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 15 2010 1:19 PM Title: Chapter 7

the plot thickens... poor rachel. only wish that pixis would have shown his fighting chops though. now the question is when will kroth and his crew catch djoland? or how will they be stopped? cant wait for the next installment of this great adventure epic.

ps airfield?? what??

aaron

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: June 08 2010 12:25 PM Title: Chapter 6

holy $#!T!! that's an impressive chapter. the build up to the climactical conclusion was spectacular.
was worth the wait indeed.
especially liked the way that pixis and raquel's relationship is progressing.

can't seem to say enough 'good' things about this tale. peace

aaron

Reviewer: aaron Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: May 20 2010 10:59 PM Title: Chapter 5

Wow this adventure never let's up. Well done. Great character development.
Aaron

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