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Reviewer: Curvograph Signed [Report This]
Date: December 17 2025 1:16 PM Title: Chapter 8

1) Solid chapter overall, though there are a few details that could be improved upon. Especially in the middle part, the overcrowding of very similar or outright same expressions took away some joy from reading experience. It's a long installment, so proofreading must have been tiresome, but it would greatly benefit from some editorial changes. Pay special attention to words like 'softness', 'firm', 'steady', 'maternal', etc. and constructions of the form 'X yet Y'.

2) Who is the 'real' Stephanie? I honestly do not know. We know some facts from her life, but too little in general to contrast it with what she is to represent as Ruby. Consider some flashbacks in future chapters to show (not tell!) who she was before and how she approached life. Right now the forced transition has less weight from reader's perspective than how it most likely feels from hers.

3) Kinks are nice, but they should never shroud the story (I am not speaking for the purely erotic one shots you can find even on this site - most of which I find annoying and empty). In my view: intricate plot > character development > worldbuilding > kinks in terms of importance for an ambitious novel(la).

4) I won't comment on the plot, as I am not the Author of this tale. Attempting to insert oneself and one's ideas into another's opus is mostly detrimental to the final result as it loses cohesion and the beauty of singular vision. So I can only write this: do not listen to ANY who want to tell you where your story should go. This tale belongs solely to you.

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 15 2025 6:36 PM Title: Chapter 8

This was really good I love the balance of care and cruel of emily with Ruby and her almost control of her inner desires to play with Ruby 

while Ruby expressed her feelings and fears where good and acknowledge by the couple

also lets go more ass play please and thank you lol

this Was really good I wonder what the next arc will be  



Author's Response:

man I appreciate every comment you leave. You have commented on every chapter and It means alot. 

There will be more ass. I am an ass lover myself. ANd there will be ass play. But I am also trying to balance with other kinks as well.

Reviewer: Curvograph Signed [Report This]
Date: December 10 2025 3:24 PM Title: Chapter 7

As the arc comes to an end, a review is in order. I have to admit, your tale is one that is both exciting and extremely uncomfortable to read at times (and it  is not even due to kinky/potentially disgusting stuff). You are very good at creating tension, keeping readers on edge and mixing gentle and absolutely dehumanising tropes. I have seen a fellow reviewer draw parallels between your story and the massive and still unfinished one by WriteofPassage. I can see the similarities in concepts and general ideas, but I am even willing to argue your vision is much more dystopian in nature:

1) In "To Break in a Pet" (TBP) the sosciety is generally supportive of people affected by genetic trait, they live with their families/loved ones and while definitely challenged in everyday life they are recognized as humans and are free individuals. The villlains are a group of magnates, immoral to the core and operating outside of official institutions through briberies, extortions, bullying and intimidation. Basically capitalist elites with facsist tendencies. The protagonist fights for her freedom against a clear enemy and has hope - despite the fight taking toll on her psyche.

2) Your story depicts a sosciety that normalises dehumanisation of its members on reguar basis. It is incredibly self-destructive as a demi may be born in any family and their condition is determined after many years. Then all the emotional investment and bonds formed and nurtured  are supposed to be cut and a demi ceases to be person, they become a commodity to be sold and bought. Moreover, it is expected for their families to sell them immediately! This is one of the bleakest scenarios I have seen, one that deprives demis of hope alltogether as their enemy is the whole country/world. Stephanie does not have it even the worst, she's probably in the top one percent of most fortunate - yet even her fate bears the same marks of hopelessness. This setting does not even need violence to exude a truly dark aura.

3) Even the government agency members, responsible for demi affairs, show total nonchalance (admittedly, they are not tasked with protecting demis but rather the interests of owners). Agent Estevez is not particularly cruel, but she just does not recognise Blackie as a person, merely an  accessory meant to be used as she sees fit. He claims he is happy, but is it even close to happiness? The way I interpret it, he is a broken individual, who does not believe in better future...

As to the chapter itself, some minor pacing issues, but a great job nevertheless. Cannot wait for the second arc...



Author's Response:

First off thank you for the thoughtful review. I appreciate it greatly. 

I also appreciate the comparison to 'to break in a pet' my personal favorite story in this genre. 

Yes my story is very dystopian. I didn't realize at first how much it was until much later. i actually fill bad about the world I have created for Demi's. (might one day see if something can be done about that.)

As for Estevez,(who is an easter egg for gamers, Alan wake 2 specifically) she is actually a 'good owner'. And yes Blackie has been so traumatized by his previous owners, that he was willing to accept any kindness at all.

The agency, primary purpose is to track and catalog Demis. There is a few reasons every one is required to send in their medical data at 17. The agency does indeed keep the trade going. Being the primary government enforcement for trades. It does occasionally catch the monsters.

But to give an idea of what isn't a monster consider the 4 princes of 'To break in a pet." The conspiracy that they parents run would fall under the jurisdiction pf the Demi agency. THE girls though, how they treat the protaganist would be fine. She 'healthy', alive, has a place to call her own. Fed, has regular exercise. Outside of the atrocity's the girls wouldn't even get a talking to. Now as for the various attrocites, yea that would get them in massive trouble. You might see something about that later on.

I am hopeing that the 3rd arc which i will start planning soon, will help expand on the Agency. 


Thank you again for the review. I appreciate all constructive feed back

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 08 2025 4:09 PM Title: Chapter 7

This was very good and once again yeees to farts and scat !!!! 

I was a little confused from scene transition a little bit just a little bit but still good stuff

damn Ruby was knocked out that hard was shocking and is Emily just loud to Ruby because she just transformed into a Demi now or is that normals are just more loud and the other Demi never brought it up? 

Great stuff again dude



Author's Response:

You will see in the next chapter but it was just from the initial change her bod

Reviewer: expenti0 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 02 2025 5:10 PM Title: Chapter 6

But I need to say, I think it's not all that great that Stephanie's character development comes down to basically brainwashing. If she's simply made to have no opinions of her own, mind forced to go along because of her biology, this takes a lot of the immersion and makes all of her thoughts and experiences quite a bit flatter. 

Also, the agent could at least look into Heather's demi, if she wants to see how the system doesn't work.



Author's Response:

The imprinting isn’t quite as one sided as I made it seem, let’s just say certain parties don’t want the true capabilities of the omega known even classified

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 02 2025 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 6

Holy fuck holy shit holy balls !!!!

that was amazing and I legit cried reading towards the holy fuck !

this grade A plus chapter 

damn just damn that was fire 

I got no criticism for this just overall perfect character and story chapter!

keep up the great work 

Reviewer: expenti0 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: December 01 2025 11:05 PM Title: Chapter 6

She seriously should, at the very least, have negotiated a safe word for things that should truly be off-limits/would leave her crying. 
As far as it was understood, there was the chance to reverse the transaction if something comes out later about them not fulfilling the terms of ownership,.

Maybe Heather's name should've been dropped to make the callback to the first chapter easier.



Author's Response:

Dang it. I thought I put heathers name in. Yes that was heather

Reviewer: 70lber Signed [Report This]
Date: December 01 2025 10:30 PM Title: Chapter 1

Can’t wait for the action to start in this one, so good

Reviewer: jake123 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 01 2025 9:28 PM Title: Chapter 1

Is the omega class inspired by "to break in a pet"?



Author's Response:

Yes it is I was really intrigued by that and wanted to explore it in my own story

Reviewer: JStaway Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2025 11:22 PM Title: Chapter 1

Wow, I was already liking the story but the flirting between Emily and Stephanie this chapter really ramped it up. I hope Emily is as much an ass girl as Stephanie and I, because I'm excited to see where this goes.



Author's Response:

Enily is very much an ass girl, and you will find out how much come chapter 7


Reviewer: jake123 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 24 2025 9:50 PM Title: Chapter 1

It's nice start, hoping to see some action soon 



Author's Response:

chapter 7 will start the action 

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 24 2025 5:36 AM Title: Chapter 5

DAMN !!!

that chapter hit hard on the emotional beats !

great job dude 

I think the transition from scene could be a little more smooth but overall it bad 

can’t wait to see what next and god I love Emily’s personality 



Author's Response:

thanks for the reply, and i will work on the transition change. 

Yes emily is awesome.

Reviewer: expenti0 Signed [Report This]
Date: November 17 2025 9:45 AM Title: Chapter 4

I feel like Roxy should've added to ease the new tiny into the situation, and regarding sex, pay attention to their experience on this matter.

Not everyone is a professional sex worker, and with someone who was a minor, not too long ago, they'd have to pay double attention not to go too hard too soon.

Especially if they want to establish a degree of trust.

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 17 2025 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 4

Holy moly this story keeps getting better and better!

I love the Emily and Mikes beliefs are so strong to protect Demi but also to willing to do all kinds of stuff with them

also Emily asking for advice was a nice touch 

keep up the great work

Reviewer: expenti0 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 11 2025 5:46 PM Title: Chapter 3

Now I'm very interested in the next chapter.

Will she actually be genuine and capable of showing compassion for someone who got the equivalent of a death sentence?

For now, she seems to be highly based on a whim induced by her friend, and mostly wants it because it's trendy.

Yet it would be nice if she could actually empathize and maybe also think of things that could make Steph genuinely happy (based on the things she learned about her), and make her feel like a person, instead of forcing everything onto her, after tricking her mother into believing that she cares.
Obviously, still in exchange for getting her way at times.

Reviewer: J - Vader Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 11 2025 4:04 AM Title: Chapter 3

Wow I already like the set and introduction of Emily and Mike they seem like fun and now I hope they get Ruby lol

so far the writing has really improved and the spacing between dialogue has been much better 

overall great work 

Reviewer: NUB Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 03 2025 12:48 AM Title: Chapter 2

Interesting concept so far...! 

Reviewer: expenti0 Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: November 02 2025 10:33 AM Title: Chapter 2

The interactions sound quite interesting. I can see them as actual characters, instead of mere templates standing in for such.

Though, I really, really hope this story will have at least a degree of consent and gentleness. The MC is already screwed enough, so adding pure mindbreak to this would just be sad.

Not like in "Growing Closer", which has a similar premise, is quite well written, and makes me seriously sick whenever I skim through the chapter. 

The tormentor in this one is such a manipulative piece of filth that I can't even come up with a suitable punishment for how she's torturing the MC to make up for it. It's hard seeing evil getting rewarded, while the likeable MC in a bad place gets just worse and worse.

I see at least a degree of gentleness with the characters for now, and I hope they'll at least try to empathize with a being worse off than them.

(And hopefully not get into this weird "I'm a goddess, because I can bully someone weaker than me" mindset)



Author's Response:

Ok so there will be gentleness, and no the owners wont be like the owner in growing closer. There will be playful cruelty, but no out right gaslighting, or torture. 

Reviewer: theprinceh Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 28 2025 1:47 AM Title: Chapter 1

Very interested in where this goes and who gets her. 

Reviewer: Enollats Signed starstarstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: October 27 2025 5:58 PM Title: Chapter 1

Very Strong beginning. Keep going. Looking forward for more. 

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