Just finished up to chapter 4 and I'm loving this story so far. A pair of spoiled brat princesses coming to a tiny world and callously wrecking havoc on what was supposed to be a diplomatic meeting.  From little we saw of their mother in chapter 1 it seems the queen is a genuinely good person who just can't seem to realize her daughters are spoiled rotten.  I wonder how she's going to react to finding out what her daughters did because it really seems like she thought they would behave properly.

Then there's the matter of what the other planets in the empire will think when they find out. It's like, they know the queen is a good ruler but her daughters murdered a planet for fun and they are next in line. No one is going to want them on the throne so the empire might fall into civil war or many planets will simply leave the empire but this is just speculation.

Another thing I like about your writing is how detailed it is. My mind just glosses over many details when I write but yours really pulled me into the story. Plus the parts from the tiny people's point of view, how terrifying the giant princesses are.  You were quite descriptive from both POVs of mass numbers of people being killed. The weapons from the ship's armory were especially cool/scary.  The fact that the gauntlets just tickles Ava while painfully melting the tinies into pink glitter was cool. Maybe the weapons don't work on "big" people or maybe some of these weapons are actually the queen's toys and the tiny people are too delicate.

Anyway, I'm excited to read the rest and see where the story goes.

I've not read the latest chapter just yet, but I see you've still not received any feedback on this one so I thought I should say something since no one else has. Still want to reiterate that I'm not really a fan of the whole "Twins" dynamic thought. :)

But I did like the idea of how they casually wiped out an entire city simply by landing their spaceship down ontop of it. :)

As for the "Cold Sea" not actually being cold as the name implied, it kinda reminds me of how Greenland really isn't very Green at all, and Iceland (though it does have some glaciers) is actually the much more hospitable and greener place of the two. Without knowing anything about these places other than the names alone, one would probably guess Greenland was the more hospitable place, and yet it is not.

Maybe this gets explained in the recent chapter (which again, I've not read yet), but the reason its called the "Cold Sea" might have something to do with something from the history and lore of this world. "Cold" can mean other things aside from literal temperature, of course. Maybe these seas were associated with some famous or legendary figure on this world who was very cold-blooded and ruthless, and the sea got the name from that despite being actually quite warm temperature-wise?

This leads me to what I feel is another sort of issue this story faces. Its in this weird grey zone between the very short stories you've written, and your long master-piece Incident stories. In The Incident stories, they last long enough to build the world and get to know the characters, and they don't get erased too quickly (well, some do but others don't); but yeah, in the short stories its understood everything is going to be erased almost as quickly as it comes so there's no time to really build the world or get to know the characters. But then there's this medium-length story which is like somewhere in between. I feel like this is a fatal compromise where on one hand it is long enough to where readers may want to learn more about the characters and the world; but on the other hand its too short to really be able to... if that makes sense. And I believe you said it was planned to be 20 chapters and so its already about half over. For the really short stories like that one you did with the British woman teleporting cities into her house, since they're so short you can just focus purely on the action and forego the world building or character development entirely.

But for these sorts of medium-length stories that fall in the middle, its tricky to strike that perfect balance, you know?

I think it's your best story yet. I really like the setup. Two bratty girls casually destroying everything in their wake without a care in the world. I really like that you went the extra mile and wrote the backstory chapter, so I could feed my imagination with details.

The story got me thinking, if such a catastrophe is the only scenario in which Earth could be united. I mean, think about it: do the Twins really kill more than current conflicts? It's the scale, the ease of escalation that's so scary from a Thalomenian perspective. But other than that, the statics should be favourable... That's of course, if you don't count the spirit crushed worldwide.

I'm not sure if that's your goal to critique the current events. But still I thought you could find it interesting how others interpret your words.

As for the erotica, I really like your use of bodily fluids. It sets the scale like no other tool. With just a few words you can feel how the mundane for one party can be destructive for the other. I wish you utilized it more, as you slowly started in "Mom's secret rooms".

Shame it's already 25% of the planned 20 chapters, haha.

Looking forward to the story developments.

I think I should leave a review since you're not getting much feedback, even though you should. Most readers just don't give feedback. That's just how it is. It also doesn't help that this site requires people to make an account in order to leave feedback, so that's an extra step that I think blocks a lot of people from giving reviews. Its also why you will sometimes see people say "I made this account in order to say..." and stuff like that. I think things would be better if this site had the ability to leave feedback without having to create an account in order to do so. But that's neither here nor there.

As for the story, I read it, but to be honest it doesn't appeal to me as much as some of your other stories but I felt you should receive some feedback since you're not receiving any, so I'll give you some of my thoughts on it all the same.

The concept of Mega-princesses conquering a planet of small people is a pretty cool idea. But the "Twin" thing seems unnecessary and just kinda ruins it for me. I think the idea could have worked much better if they weren't twins. They could have been sisters (but not twins). One being older than the other, and the two of them having very different personalities. I think that could have been a very cool dynamic. But with them both being twins its a real struggle to try to tell them apart. At that point I think it actually would have worked better if this diplomatic mission had just involved one lone princess. I don't know if any other readers feel the same way as I do on this, but I just have to say I'm not a fan of the "Twins" idea. I just feel its redundant to have two competing characters who are also identical to one another. I can't think of any instance where I've been a fan of twin characters in any sort of work, but that's just my own opinion.

I think it might have been cool if the two princesses weren't even related, or even of the same dynasty. Like, what if there were two or more of these galactic kingdoms and this planet wanted to join one of them, but wasn't sure which, so this diplomatic mission involved two rival princesses from each opposing kingdom trying to convince them that their realm is the better one, and maybe some fighting between them or something.

As for these two Twin Princesses, it was mentioned that they will inherit the realm from their mother. This reminds me of the Roman Emperors Caracalla and Geta who became co-Emperors after their father's death. They discussed dividing the empire in half between themselves, but their mother talked them out of this, and so they each had their own courts and their mother mediated things between them, but this arrangement only lasted for about a year or two until Caracalla murdered his brother and then he became the sole emperor.

I'm not sure if these two Twin Princesses will end up like Caracalla and Geta, but this mentioning of them becoming co-rulers after their mother's death reminded me of that. Two differences they have over Caracalla and Geta which might allow them to work things out where those Roman siblings failed are 1) they're twins. 2) they're females. Maybe that will allow things to work for them. Or maybe not. I don't know.

Okay, so these princesses got to board this luxury spaceship of their mother's which has every amenity but... where are the servants? That was something else I was thinking. Shouldn't there have been a maid and maybe some guard sent along with them, to serve and protect them, respectively? I think those additional characters (and they could be female btw) could have helped alleviate the... let's say "lack of diversity" of these two twin princesses being nearly identical to one another. At this point in the story its probably too late to worry about it now, but I also don't think its been clarified just how large that ship really is, so maybe there is another giant aboard which the Princesses don't even know about? Maybe a spy which their mother secretly assigned to keep an eye on them? Or maybe some unauthorized stowaway?

I kinda hate to say this but... in that part where the one princess had the power glove thing and it seemed as if she might kill the other one.... uh, yeah, part of me kinda hoped that she actually did do that... just to end this whole "Twins" thing. :)

But yeah, it is kinda strange their mother sent them off on this mission with no escort to protect them, AND this ship filled with all these advanced and extremely dangerous weapons. So much could have gone terribly wrong. And for the tiny people on this world, so much actually HAS gone wrong. Maybe the mother felt sure that since these people are so tiny they couldn't pose any threat to her daughters, BUT we know that's not entirely true since they were able to cause some injury and damage the ship, so potentially they could have been killed by the tinies, but beyond that the arsenal of all these powerful weapons the girls don't understand how to wield is another danger. Why didn't the mother consider that when setting up this mission?

I'm sorry it most of this feedback seems negative, but again it's not really my cup of tea. I just wanted to share my own thoughts which are honest even if they are negative, since no one else was giving you any feedback at all, and I'm sorry for that.

I really love this new story—it’s absolutely amazing! I’m into this strong sense of contrast, and it’s so humiliating. I also love reading about Christine’s mom’s story. Can’t wait for your updates!

Really well written! Please continue!