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Reviewer: Jojy Asmir Signed starstarstarstar [Report This]
Date: July 18 2025 11:17 AM Title: Chance Meeting

I'll echo Jsmith's comment; Very solid start! Could do with a little more description, but I like the characters and the story overall so far, and I'm excited to see where things go :)

Reviewer: Jsmith20 Signed [Report This]
Date: July 18 2025 8:00 AM Title: Chance Meeting

I normally don't read stories that have chapter lengths this short. But, I happened to click on it and I liked it. I think it's a good start, I'm intrigued and want to keep reading. There's an earnestness to the characters. 

The description could be fleshed out, I don't have an idea of what Mia looks like - in general, the whole chapter could be improved if it was expanded. (Example for how you could do that is when Mia is in the hole, there could be a sentence talking about the covering her from her (insert hair color) to her feet.) Don't take that to think that this wasn't good. It was good. 



Author's Response:

Hey, thanks for giving it a shot! Yeah, I've been struggling with short chapter syndrome as of late. I'm hoping to pull myself out of it with these next few chapters

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