[Report This]Date: March 15 2025 4:34 PM Title: Was It All a Dream?
Wow ….that was …intense
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm gonna be real though, I couldn't figure out where I could cut it into two chapters. Also, thanks for actively reviewing my story, I appreciate <3
[Report This]Date: March 13 2025 4:01 PM Title: Oh Shit!
I never felt so happy seeing and an unaware ass/fart scene!!!! It was amazing!
I hope we see more but overall the story is great dude
Author's Response: I appreciate your feedback! I think you'll like the newest one even better though!
[Report This]Date: March 13 2025 8:50 AM Title: The Return Home
For a first story you've actually done incredibly well here! Please keep writing!!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll do my best to keep the train going.
[Report This]Date: March 12 2025 12:25 PM Title: Welcome to Hell.
Wow this was perfect!!!!
just the pure detail and description was unbelievably great and amazing
Clara and his mental struggles and Ethan dealing with ass and smell of it was perfect.
keep of the great work and of course ….. more BOOTY action lol
Author's Response:
Your word is my command, J-Vader.
Date: March 11 2025 4:35 PM Title: What's a Boundary?
Already off to a good start. So far this story is amazing, I hope it remains gentle like in Close by Gheed but if not that is fine as well. I am supprised that she did not use the shrinking device on herself and make herself and let her son carry her around. Assuming he would be ok with that. I can't wait for more chapters! Please keep it up!
Author's Response: I actually thought about that! The direction I'm going for has a mix of both; you'll see in later chapters! :D
Date: March 11 2025 6:41 AM Title: What's a Boundary?
I noticed you kept changing tense throughout the chapter, you should stick with the past tense, for example:
Ethan slides forward on the carpet, instantly feeling like coarse sandpaper was raking across his skin. Every prick and scrape registers with unsettling clarity in his mind, sparking an urgent, needle-like burn all along his face, chest, and thighs. He tenses, fully expecting to glance down and see raw, angry welts—perhaps even torn skin. But there's nothing. His flesh is perfectly intact, not a hint of damage, despite the pain screaming otherwise.
should be:
Ethan slid forward on the carpet, instantly feeling like coarse sandpaper was raking across his skin. Every prick and scrape registered with unsettling clarity in his mind, sparking an urgent, needle-like burn all along his face, chest, and thighs. He tensed, fully expecting to glance down and see raw. angry welts, perhaps even torn skin. But there was nothing. His flesh was perfectly intact, not a hint of damage, despite the pain screaming otherwise.
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll fix that. I wrote this a little tired lmao
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'll fix that. I wrote this a little tired lmao
[Report This]Date: March 10 2025 10:01 PM Title: The Return Home
Wow continues to be a very interesting story - ohhh maybe added Clara’s best friend or work colleague in the story
in terms smut if more is added I won’t lie I’m major ass/odor fan with close second being vore so I hope we see more of that personally.
overall great work
Author's Response: Funny you say that because something similar is coming
[Report This]Date: March 10 2025 6:55 PM Title: To be Small is to be Stuck
Awesome
Author's Response:
Fantastic to hear! Where do you think this should go?
Date: March 10 2025 5:38 PM Title: To be Small is to be Stuck
Nice! An excellent start! Keep it up!
Author's Response:
Thanks! I already have the next few chapters written out. I'm trying to slow down the pace and savor the juicy stuff, but I'm curious to know where you think this story should go!
[Report This]Date: March 10 2025 3:09 PM Title: The Return Home
Wow really good start so far
Author's Response:
Thanks! I'm still fleshing out Ethan and Clara's characters and personalities, who do you think I should add?