[Report This]Date: February 24 2025 12:42 PM Title: Chapter 1
An excellent story in its early draft that's even better now! I have already said that cruel rampages aren't my usual thing, but it turns out that when a story is good, it's good. Everything from the setting to the descriptions to the plot is elaborately crafted, without overwhelming the reader. And I just love how you take inspiration from real history and religion! I wish more writers would do it. Special shout out to the similes too; in what other story on this site can you read that someone writhed through a hole like a newborn shark?
I admire the gall you must have to worldbuild such a unique and memorable city, only to destroy it all in a mere 6000 words. You will be sorely missed, Capriote o7
Frankly, this story just goes hard. Other rampage writers, take notes. I'm excited to see what you write next.
[Report This]Date: February 24 2025 12:18 AM Title: Chapter 1
I was cautious going in as this isn't my usual fare from this site but the story sucked me in instantly, the world building is absolutely top notch, you make it look effortless there's no fat or filler here, every word feels purposeful to paint a richer canvas. I've seen others try and fail doing this often leading to a discordant read that struggles to grab the reader as its more confusing then engaging, here you bypass that with ease. Eternity herself is a massive triumph, this otherworldly oddly alien/monstrous creature with the occasional flourish of something oddly mortal and normal buried within her brutal bronze shell. Excited to see what you write next!
[Report This]Date: February 22 2025 2:08 PM Title: Chapter 1
I'm not usually one for rampage, but damn was this a good read. The way you sprinkled in the perspectives of specific characters really sold it for me.
I am a sucker for worldbuilding though, and man does this story have some crazy good worldbuilding. I'm super fascinated about the world, and the religious imagery / influences give the setting a real texture. I love it!
Eternity was a fun big. I think my favourite bit was when she licked that steel plate and left furrows in the surface, terrifying poor Regina.
This was a lot of fun to read! I'm eager to see what you come up with next <3
[Report This]Date: February 22 2025 3:17 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved reading this. I seldom write reviews, I’m mostly a lurker but I would love to see an additional chapter with her actually coming back to have sexual relations or anything with the human who she said she was coming back to! Beautifully written and incredibly descriptive. One of my favorite reads on here. Incredible work.