[Report This]Date: February 24 2025 12:23 AM Title: Chapter 1
A great short story, I feel like your onto a real winner here to expand further!
Author's Response:
Haha, thank you Super!
[Report This]Date: February 21 2025 11:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
This one’s really interesting. I love the pet/master dynamic on display here, with Cassie dependant on Mindy for emotional support and pretty much falling apart as soon as she’s confronted with anything that isn’t her master. I really enjoyed that sense of dependency, and it was awesome seeing how kind Mindy is and how hard she tries to comfort her pet. I also liked the other friends immediately becoming concerned at seeing Cassie cry. They seemed the brattier type at first glance, so that they’re all sweet and gentle too was a pleasant surprise.
I think the emotional breakdown at hearing that song was handled really well. Cassie has it really good as a pet, and this seems like a life she wanted at one point, but she misses the freedoms she had as a full-sized person. As someone who would gladly throw their current life away to be a big lady’s pet, this presents an interesting conundrum. Maybe I’d have regrets too (let’s be real: probably not, but it’s interesting to think about lol).
The ending strikes me as weird only because I feel like Cassie should know whether or not regrowing is possible (unless I’m reading it wrong, it seems neither her nor Mindy know). I would think the permanence of shrinking would be explained to you when you sign up for it. Also, if you’re gonna keep writing one-shots, can you stop giving them bummer endings lol. I mean, I’m on Mindy’s side on this one, but now we got this unresolved tension I have to sit with.
But yeah, great work as usual. I’m excited to see whatever you come up with next (but give whatever it is a happy ending this time lmao).
Author's Response:
Thank you! I love the pet/master dynamic and I'm happy to have finally written something with it. I always thought you were more of an equal rights for tinies-guy, so it's a bit of a pleasant surprise to hear you enjoy it as well. I appreciate that you think I pulled off the dynamic well.
Mindy's friends can be kind of bratty, yes, but they'd have to be real jerks to not care if someone's pet is in trouble, I feel. In that regard this world is fairly gentle.
I love that you think the emotional breakdown was handled well. That was what the story hinged on and it was my initial idea for it as well. The quiz part I added later and the ending conversation wasn't even there originally. If you remove that entire section, the story has a happier ending, but it also feels... weaker, I think. So unresolved tension it is lol.
Honestly, you're right about the ending. The idea wasn't that Cassie was asking whether it was physically possible to regrow or not, but rather if it was possible for her in her situation. I think. The way it's written makes both Cassie and Mindy look like clueless idiots, but it is what it is.
Ah, the classic dilemma of whether you should give up everything to become a big lady's pet. I'm with you lmao, I wouldn't have any regrets! But if I did, it would sure be a tough problem to solve. So tough that I haven't figured out a solution yet, which is another reason for the unresolved tension.
Again, thank you for the compliments. You have been one of my favorite gentle writers for a few years now, so it means a lot. And so does you telling me I need to write happier endings, haha. We'll see if I'll get better at that :)
[Report This]Date: February 21 2025 6:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
I love the concept and execution of this! Music is such a powerful psychological tool I don't see used much in media in general, let alone size fics.
I hope poor Cassie figures out what she really wants from her life <3
(Or at least gets to listen to more music lol. I would be foaming at the mouth if I went a full day without my music let alone years, even if I got to be pressed up against a pussy most of that time >~<)
Author's Response:
Thank you! This might sound blasphemous to you, but I'm one of those people who's not really into music, so it was a bit of a challenge writing someone having a very emotional response to a song.
Now that you mention it, it may have been a tad cruel of me to imply she's gone years without listening to music, but it is what it is lol.
[Report This]Date: February 21 2025 2:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
A truly intriguing piece of writing that indeed seems like an introduction to a bigger story. And it does manage to take the reader out of their comfort zone... Absolutely unique in terms of evoked feelings and utterly remarkable! Definitely deserves and probably needs a follow-up!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the compliments, they really do mean a lot. Don't know if I'd agree that it needs a follow-up lol.
[Report This]Date: February 20 2025 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story was... off-putting for me. It's definitely outside of my comfort zone and it left me with a range of emotions.
With that said, there is some intriguing worldbuilding going on here. Honestly, it felt like you were teasing me without giving me more of the lore, but I still got just enough information to appreciate it. I really liked the comforting scenes within the story (not crazy about the idea of living in a vagina, though) and the dialogue is very solid. It's an intriguing premise, but it feels like the setup for a greater story (in terms of length).
Honestly, this reads to me like a prologue to a novel/novella. So much is set up here, but the "plot" seems to only hint at some greater adventure, rather than introducing a conflict that it resolves. I won't push for it, but this just feels so promising to me as the setup for a bigger story. Perhaps Cassie's "regrowing" goes wrong and she becomes the giant for a change and she has to deal with her agoraphobia at gigantic size and the inversion of her relationship with Mindy. Maybe Mindy herself decides to shrink, but Cassie regrows regardless. Maybe they both live as tinies. There's so much room for flashbacks back to Cassie's decision to shrink, her mental and emotional journey, and I'd be interested in seeing Mindy explored more, too.
Anyway, even though this was a massive departure from what I normally read, you can mark me down as "intrigued." You managed to accomplish so much with so few words here and I'm left wanting more, which is the mark of a good story. Well-done!
Author's Response:
I never thought a review that starts by calling the story "off-putting" could be so good, haha. I'll admit, you're almost making me reconsider my intention to leave this as a one-shot. I wrote it very spur-of-the-moment, the lore just being added as I went along, so at the moment there's not actually much there beyond what you see. I'm glad it was still intriguing enough to leave you wanting more.
If I were to write more, my idea was to focus on the internal conflict; how Cassie feels torn between her old and new life. Your ideas are very interesting, too. I hadn't considered Mindy changing sizes, but there is potential in that kind of role reversal. Hmm.
That this story also made you venture outside of your comfort zone is a very big compliment as well! I assure you though, the shrink genre has plenty of other good stories to offer :)
Thank you for the review!
[Report This]Date: February 20 2025 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved that story and for so many reasons I can't put into words.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: February 19 2025 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice to see that harassing you into publishing finally paid off! This is such a cozy little one-off. You have a talent for economic storytelling that leads itself very well to bite-sized blitzes such as these. What shines here the most, in my opinion, is the way you depict a layered relationship between a tiny and her owner without it ever feeling expositionary. Mindy's unique plight as a once-willing tiny with a case of buyer's remorse is genuinely moving, and hits on a deeply human level that suits your gentle genre style like it was tailor-made. Bravo!
Author's Response:
Heh, I need to get better at the "publishing" part of the story process. Thank you for your very kind words. "Cozy" is a word I like, and I'm happy you'd use it to describe this story. And "layered relationships," wow! That really means a lot, especially coming from a writer of your caliber. Interesting that you thought the economic storytelling worked well here. Others apparently think it should be longer lol