[Report This]Date: February 21 2025 2:41 AM Title: Chapter 1
A truly intriguing piece of writing that indeed seems like an introduction to a bigger story. And it does manage to take the reader out of their comfort zone... Absolutely unique in terms of evoked feelings and utterly remarkable! Definitely deserves and probably needs a follow-up!
[Report This]Date: February 20 2025 3:30 AM Title: Chapter 1
This story was... off-putting for me. It's definitely outside of my comfort zone and it left me with a range of emotions.
With that said, there is some intriguing worldbuilding going on here. Honestly, it felt like you were teasing me without giving me more of the lore, but I still got just enough information to appreciate it. I really liked the comforting scenes within the story (not crazy about the idea of living in a vagina, though) and the dialogue is very solid. It's an intriguing premise, but it feels like the setup for a greater story (in terms of length).
Honestly, this reads to me like a prologue to a novel/novella. So much is set up here, but the "plot" seems to only hint at some greater adventure, rather than introducing a conflict that it resolves. I won't push for it, but this just feels so promising to me as the setup for a bigger story. Perhaps Cassie's "regrowing" goes wrong and she becomes the giant for a change and she has to deal with her agoraphobia at gigantic size and the inversion of her relationship with Mindy. Maybe Mindy herself decides to shrink, but Cassie regrows regardless. Maybe they both live as tinies. There's so much room for flashbacks back to Cassie's decision to shrink, her mental and emotional journey, and I'd be interested in seeing Mindy explored more, too.
Anyway, even though this was a massive departure from what I normally read, you can mark me down as "intrigued." You managed to accomplish so much with so few words here and I'm left wanting more, which is the mark of a good story. Well-done!
Author's Response:
I never thought a review that starts by calling the story "off-putting" could be so good, haha. I'll admit, you're almost making me reconsider my intention to leave this as a one-shot. I wrote it very spur-of-the-moment, the lore just being added as I went along, so at the moment there's not actually much there beyond what you see. I'm glad it was still intriguing enough to leave you wanting more.
If I were to write more, my idea was to focus on the internal conflict; how Cassie feels torn between her old and new life. Your ideas are very interesting, too. I hadn't considered Mindy changing sizes, but there is potential in that kind of role reversal. Hmm.
That this story also made you venture outside of your comfort zone is a very big compliment as well! I assure you though, the shrink genre has plenty of other good stories to offer :)
Thank you for the review!
[Report This]Date: February 20 2025 12:06 AM Title: Chapter 1
I loved that story and for so many reasons I can't put into words.
Author's Response:
Thank you!
[Report This]Date: February 19 2025 10:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Nice to see that harassing you into publishing finally paid off! This is such a cozy little one-off. You have a talent for economic storytelling that leads itself very well to bite-sized blitzes such as these. What shines here the most, in my opinion, is the way you depict a layered relationship between a tiny and her owner without it ever feeling expositionary. Mindy's unique plight as a once-willing tiny with a case of buyer's remorse is genuinely moving, and hits on a deeply human level that suits your gentle genre style like it was tailor-made. Bravo!
Author's Response:
Heh, I need to get better at the "publishing" part of the story process. Thank you for your very kind words. "Cozy" is a word I like, and I'm happy you'd use it to describe this story. And "layered relationships," wow! That really means a lot, especially coming from a writer of your caliber. Interesting that you thought the economic storytelling worked well here. Others apparently think it should be longer lol