[Report This]Date: February 03 2025 8:44 AM Title: Chapter 1: Getting Acquainted
Love the cyberpunk setting, a lot of stories in this setting tend to waffle on the terminology and technology but you keep it clean and easy to understand for the viewer-
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The corpos want me to talk exclusively about the smut, so I'll go straight to that.
it good.
The way you describe the little robot body to maximise its fragility is what really made this click for me, a broken plastic panel there, a cracked visor, all from a subtle touch, the way the clone can process sense and touch only to be programmable to be augmentable to the cruellest extremes added a juicy edge to Aiko (The robot doll could do with an updated tongue implant for upgraded authentic awareness possibly down the line), it could've entirely worked she was just a regular sadist but I enjoyed her being someone who was downtrodden by the billionaires who worked people like her father to death.
We love to see a working class gal winning, and this gives us it in spades.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed the amount of jargon, went back and forth on that for a while.
[Report This]Date: January 28 2025 4:29 AM Title: Chapter 1: Getting Acquainted
You have the makings of a something really good here. The cyberpunk setting you've built here works to your narrative's advantage nicely, serving to effectively flesh out the compelling dynamic between your two role-reversed characters who lie on opposite ends of a class divide. The dystopian future setting doesn't feel tacked on for aesthetics as one might assume with a story like this, either. Well done, and I hope to see more in the future.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I’m glad you enjoyed the setting and characters!