Reviewer: It Was Me Signed [Report This]
Date: February 06 2025 1:30 AM Title: Maneater

Seemingly ignorant of the nuance of Darcy’s personhood.

There are a lot of incredibly well-written metaphors (Grace's heart "compelling Darcy's into submission," as another great example) and general descriptions, but there's just something about the one above that really resonates with me. it's haunting, in the best way. I've never really given the indifference of a throat much thought before, let alone found it so threateningly sensual!

I can't say enough how much I love the symmetry of this story! Closing out the first segment of the story with Grace discovering Darcy's secret in not the best of ways (to put it mildly) and following it up with us seeing how Darcy deals with this was intriguing enough. But to end the second segment with Grace basically showing Darcy her own secret and how the giantess deals with that plays off that first-half reveal so well! However, what I really like about this is that not only do Grace and Darcy try to reassure each other that their secrets are okay and that they still accept each other, but the subtlety with how they did this really reflects on the core of their characters, I think.

Grace is someone who's always putting other people first, sometimes to her own detriment. We see this a lot early on, with Grace worrying about how her cooking isn't going to live up to those great restaurants she had taken Darcy to, how she felt the need to dial back the story about how she lost her arm because she didn't want to make Darcy too uncomfortable (even though that was more or less the original goal, given she wanted to play up the shock value), and how easily her confidence in her cooking was shattered the second that she detected that Darcy had an issue with the food (when Darcy first took a bite, not when the shell started malfunctioning; that was obviously justified there).

So, while it wouldn't have been my first guess as to how Grace would handle this situation, it made a lot of sense to me that, once the initial shock wore off, she handled Darcy's big reveal by prioritizing Darcy's comfort. From the moment she offered her palm to Darcy, Grace acted as though everything was normal despite being such an unusual situation. She even suggested that they get back to dinner and talk about this whole thing casually (it would have been completely understandable if she had bombarded Darcy with questions on the spot). And why did she do that? Because she heard Darcy's stomach growl. She put Darcy's comfort above those pressing questions circling around in her brain. She's such a sweetheart!

I don't want to say Darcy is the opposite of Grace, because that would make it sound like Darcy doesn't care about other people as much as Grace, and I don't think that's true. However, she's certainly not as quick to notice how other people are feeling as Grace is. But I think that has more to do with Darcy's excited, rambunctious nature more than anything. She's very adventurous and really direct. She gets wrapped up in things quite easily, and that's why it took her a minute to realize how badly Grace was dealing with things in the last segment.

That's why it just felt right for Darcy to get caught up in the moment, but face the problem head on once she finally saw how bothered Grace was by everything. Once Darcy realized that the egg thing was really a cover for Grace's vore fetish (at least that's how I took her o-shaped mouth when Grace told her about how human stomach acid isn't meant to break down unchewed food, which pretty much runs counter to what she told Darcy about the egg thing in the first place), it didn't take long for Darcy to just straight up ask. Unlike Grace, who wanted to make Darcy comfortable when her secret was revealed, Darcy uses the opposite approach, realizing that, in order to get past this, they're going to have to dwell into uncomfortable territory (for Grace, anyway; Darcy was loving that conversation!).

That doesn't mean that Darcy is brutal about it. Just the opposite, in fact. She's God damned adorable throughout that whole last segment! And when she realized that Grace was truly ashamed of her fetish and wasn't taking Darcy's light teasing in the good fun that she intended, she again gently took control, asking to be picked up (that "Lift me higher" was so fucking cute here, too!). Then Darcy kissed Grace's cheek, told the big girl that she loved her, and hit the subject head on, reassuring Grace that everything was fine in the most direct way possible.

I just really enjoyed their differing approaches to their respective secrets (and, you know, Grace accidentally eating Darcy) and how that contrast really shows how well these two compliment each other. And both of them having the same reaction ("I've fucked it all up between us!") during the "unofficial" unveiling of their respective secrets was super cute, too!

While Grace being into vore was pretty obvious from the start, I liked the little clues you sprinkled throughout the first segment about Darcy secretly being a tiny. From how Darcy could seemingly handle way more alcohol then you would expect to the "you guys" moment (although that rural vs. urban thing as a smart cover, as that's very much true). Then there's that sense of wonder that Darcy seems to have from the moment we meet her, like she's seeing and hearing some of these things for the first time (which, for all we know, could be the case!).

Then there was the adorable way Darcy mimicked whatever mannerism she saw from Grace, which the reader, by that point, could clearly recognize as Darcy trying not to stand out or look awkward to her giant girlfriend. That we're told that Grace recognized this tactic not only with the arm thing at dinner but in general over their five dates shows how out of place Darcy actually made herself look by doing that, which not only makes sense, as "trying to fit in" is the best way to ensure that you don't, but is also funny as fuck!

I thought this was a great lead-in to the reveal of Grace's prosthetic arm, too. Actually, when Grace deflated her arm, I half expected her to look Darcy dead in the eye and deadpan, "Your move."

That Orion is Disney's rival is something that I find so funny, if not a bit ironic. All these years into the future, with all the technological advancements they've made, it all still boils down to borrowers fighting a mouse over the same space!

But given Grace's fear of robots, I'm really curious how she will handle being around Darcy in the shell from now on. Will it freak  her out, or will knowing that it's Darcy at the controls be enough to keep her calm? Will she make a rule that Darcy has to get out of the shell as soon as the tiny girl arrives her place? Will Darcy be able to help her overcome this fear? I find the whole scenario to be really, really funny! If you do end up coming back to this (and I'm excited that it looks like that's an actual possibility!) I really hope this aspect is explored!

I also love the way you maximized the third-person limited perspective throughout the story. I'm a big believer in that style of writing, so I know there were probably spots where you were tempted to jump between characters to give a complete picture of a scene, like Darcy's thoughts when Grace walked in on her face-open, what was going through Grace's head during the proper reveal, and/or what Grace was thinking in the moments leading up to and including "the swallow."

But you did an incredible job of using the age-old (and not always correct but effective here) adage of "show, don't tell" to turn those potential disadvantages into highlights of the story. Take that moment when Grace begins to reach for Darcy for example. We see Darcy's blend of fear and affection, but we have no idea what Grace is thinking as her hand approaches. But then, Grace hesitates, lays her palm flat, and politely asks, "May I?" That was such a satisfying moment, seeing Grace have that recognition that this was a person, this was still her Darcy that she was about to grab and making such a cute, wholesome adjustment.

I feel like that wouldn't have been nearly as effective had we been privy to Grace's inner thoughts at the time. That air of uncertainty and the relief and joy that followed just wouldn't have been there.

But my favorite example of the use of this perspective was that first big kissing scene. We see Grace scoop up Darcy and begin to return the litany of compliments and reasons that she fell for the tiny woman, with a seemingly insignificant mention that Grace had taken a few steps. The compliments are then sandwiched between adorably sexy kisses (with Grace's lips and how they shape around Darcy's body beautifully described, by the way), and we become wrapped up in how delightfully overwhelming this all is for Darcy.

Then, suddenly, we find our two leading ladies in Grace's bedroom with the giantess completely naked, which shocks Darcy even more than it does us as readers. I quite literally said "Holy shit!" when I read this part, as it caught me so off guard.

We didn't just see things from Darcy's perspective here, we got lost in it, and that's fucking brilliant!

I've mentioned your descriptions a couple times now, but some of your best work in that area was when Darcy first saw Grace after leaving the shell. You sold Grace's size so phenomenally well here! That sense of wonder that we saw in Darcy before was increased tenfold, and her pointing out that she only then noticed the flecks of green in Grace's brown eyes, the feeling of walking on Grace's fingers to reach her palm, all of the breath stuff (I was a big fan of all of that!), and, of course, all the intimate details of those lips assaulting the tiny girl were all fantastic!

I'm also a huge mouthplay guy, so that whole scene with Grace taking each limb in her mouth and sucking on it? So fucking choice! Ooh! And that taste bud action? Fuck! Even the way Darcy had to be squeezed into Grace's stomach face first was just perfect! And all that stuff about everything around Darcy being Grace? I love when smut scenes cut deeper, getting to the core of what a fetish is really all about like this!

Lastly, you killed it with the worldbuilding! Not only did you create a really intriguing world based loosely off of borrower lore (I love that they've evolved past literal "borrowing"), but you eased us into it in a way that was both engaging and seamless, which I'd argue is even more important (no matter how interesting a world might be, I'm probably not going to enjoy reading paragraph after paragraph going into every little detail about it all at once).  The dialogue between Grace and Darcy flowed perfectly throughout the story, especially when they hit on worldbuilding topics like Orion and whether tinies have secretly infiltrated the government ("Is there?" fucking hilarious!). I loved learning about this world, at least as much for how the information was conveyed as what the information was.

So yeah, this was such a fun read and so well written! Like I said before, I'm really excited at the prospect of you coming back to this at some point, even if that won't be for some time (or ever, possibly). I think you've got the perfect ending here, but man, I'd love to spend more time with these two!

Author's Response:

Ahhhhh! Thank you so much for the review! It’s an honour.

I’m really happy to hear you enjoyed that line. It’s among my favourites that I wrote. And thank you for the kind praise toward by metaphors in general!

It’s funny, at first the symmetry of the story’s structure was more incidental than not. In the sense that Grace’s secret was inevitably going to be revealed after the vore scene haha. But once I noticed it I really leaned into it, and I’m super happy it paid off!

You’re making my heart melt with all this praise! It’s incredible reading someone analyzing my characters in such detail, thank you so much for your time.

Grace’s commitment to others emerged from me singling out cooking as her core interest, I think. It can be an inherently servile thing, if you’re cooking for others, and I think that care over making people happy and comfortable ended up forming the soul of her character in this story.

I did kinda write Grace and Darcy to be quite different to one another, yeah. A big contrast for me was Grace being level-headed, where Darcy is more spontaneous. And that definitely slows her uh, ‘empathy reaction time’ I guess you could call it lmao. I kinda imagined a hyperactive puppy in her as she came together, and she’s definitely the type to literally run around in circles for a few minutes until she realizes something’s wrong xD.

But yeah, she’s not exactly subtle when it comes to addressing Grace’s fetish haha. You’re right about her being a lot more direct, yeah. She doesn’t have the subtlety for Grace’s approach, so she handles it in a very ‘Darcy’ way :)

I’m really happy you enjoyed Grace and Darcy’s dynamic. It took me a little while to get right, but I’m happy I put in the effort.

I’m happy you noticed all the little details about Darcy’s true nature at the start. It was a lot of fun to sprinkle those in. Darcy’s sense of wonder was a little tricky for me actually, cause I realized that if it was just tied to being a fish out of water, it could end up cheapening her character later on once she gets settled. So, it evolved into a broader infatuation with novelty and spontaneity as she developed.

I’m glad the lead-in to the reveal of Grace’s arm felt natural to you. I struggled a little with those early parts to make sure everything wasn’t too contrived.

I didn’t even notice the borrower / mouse joke! God, that’s funny actually.

Don’t worry, I’ve got some pretty fleshed-out ideas on how to explore Grace’s fear of robots in the future. It’s just dripping with untapped drama. I’ll get back to it one day, just you wait.

Thank you for the kind words about my writing style! You’re totally right, I’m constantly tormented by the things it forces me to leave out haha. I’m really happy it works for you though.

The ‘May I?’ scene was like, the second scene I came up with in the whole story, I’m really glad to hear I did it justice to how powerful it was in my head.

I am quite dedicated to the style, despite the occasional drawbacks though. It keeps things simple for my brain, and I don’t have to worry about when or when not to hop between perspectives.

I was really happy with how that first kissing scene turned out. And you’re spot on about being swept up into it. It’s one of the reasons I like writing like this so much. I feel like hopping back to Grace’s perspective would have dampened the moment in a lot of ways.

I’m really happy the pan out into Grace’s bedroom worked haha. I love hearing about reactions like that from readers. I’m glad to hear you were that wrapped up in the story <3

I’m really happy you like my descriptions so much! I think you do a great job of it in your own work, so I’m flattered. I’m really happy with how that first handheld scene turned out. I’m in love with those kind of ‘first-encounter’ scenes, so I really busted out all the stops to truly sell Grace’s sense of scale.

I’m glad you enjoyed the smut part so much! To be honest I worried that it might’ve been a little stream-of-consciousness in parts, even if that did kinda fit the haze Darcy was in at the time. I was very happy with the whole ‘Grace is everything’ angle, though, and I’m super happy that hit home for you, too!

I might’ve gotten a little too into the worldbuilding lmao. Blame Defunctland. But I’m happy you think it flowed well! I totally agree, a world can be interesting as all hell, but if it’s not communicated well, it’s hard to care. I’m glad to hear that I did a decent job of it. My personal favourite bits are also how the borrowers evolved out of old-fashioned borrowing, and the coriander thing lmao. Remember to keep some on you! You never know when tinies in disguise might try to steal your cheese.

I’ve got some plans for expanding on the stuff I presented in this chapter (mostly around how the tinies keep themselves hidden in the information age), so look forward to it! (Whenever I get back to this story lmao. Breaking Through is gonna take while.)

This is one of the sweetest reviews I’ve ever gotten. You’re truly too kind. I definitely plan on returning to these two, don’t you worry. I’ve already got a bunch of characters in mind, like Grace’s weird gloomy sister, Darcy’s weightlifting buff sister, Darcy’s family’s pet jumping spider, a pair of anti-human and anti-tiny villains respectively, Grace’s funny scientist friend, Darcy’s shell-obsessed tiny friend, and [REDACTED]!

But yeah, I’ll definitely be back to this someday. I hope to see you then!

 

(again, seriously, thank you so much.)

Reviewer: MXP20 Signed [Report This]
Date: January 25 2025 10:00 PM Title: Maneater

Sorry it took me forever to get around to this story! It’s been on my mind since you posted it, and I haven’t had a block of time to read it. But behold! I had time today and finished it!

Oh, I noticed a small typo in your story. You should do a find & replace for the word coriander and replace it with cilantro. Hahah. Okay, okay. That’s the last time I’ll bring it up. But yeah, the soap gene. Thank God I don’t got that gene and neither does my wife. I can’t imagine not being able to eat my favorite Latino foods because of it. Though … with the revelation of this lore, maybe I do wish I had the soap gene!

Which, by the way, I love the lore you built into your world. Everything from the tinies coming from a borrower race to living in secret with humans using a robotic avatar. I thought that was brilliant and wasn’t expecting it. I thought Darcy was a one-off tiny and not part of this worldwide conspiracy. But I gotta say, this is a conspiracy I can get behind!

Oh, can I say just how fucking cute it was for Darcy to wear the same clothes as her avatar? That was an awesome detail and I don’t know why I found it so adorable. But I did! Loved it.

The entire setup and prelude to the climax of the story was enjoyable. I like all the backstories with both characters and I especially loved Darcy explaining everything to Grace. I wonder how much of a secret tinies are? I mean, can Grace can’t be blabbering to everyone about crab people—I mean, tinies.

The smut was hot. F/f, gentle, and vore!!!!???? The trifecta! I was so curious how the vore was going to come to place. I half-expected Grace to pull out a bag of tinies, revealing to Darcy she already knew about tinies, hahaa. Your way was much better. God! That swallow was fucking hot. But in the end, I was happy to read about Darcy getting out of it and being so cool about it. Ol’ girl has a vore fetish and a tiny girlfriend? That shit sounds like a match made in heaven.

Beautiful story and great world-building. I would encourage you to continue expanding on this world through Grace/Darcy or even other characters, or whatever you’re feeling. I loved the idea since you first pitched it on the GW discord, and was stoked to finally read it. It came out as an endearing F/f story as imagined it.

Thank you for writing and sharing this story!

Author's Response:

Hey, thanks for the review!

Once I came up with the soap gene idea I couldn't get it out of my head, especially because of the implications lol. I'm glad you've enjoyed it. And yeah, I can't imagine being blocked off from a whole swath of foods just cause of a gene. In a way, the lore is utopian, since everyone can enjoy the spice lmao. 

Thank you for your kind words about the lore, I had honestly far too much fun coming up with it. I've got a lot of plans to further explore it whenever I get back to this story. But yeah, keep an eye out for anyone who doesn't like coriander! They're probably a tiny in disguise...

I flip flopped a little over what Darcy would've worn in the shell. Eventually I figured Darcy was earnest enough to wear the same outfit as her shell, though I did allude to the other option with Grace's comment haha. 

I'm super happy to hear you enjoyed all the setup, I was a little worried it meandered around a little too much before the payoff. And yeah, Grace has definitely stumbled into a strange world by meeting Darcy. I'm sure some Orion rep will make her go through a bunch of paperwork at some point lol. 

I'm happy you enjoyed the smut haha. I really gave it my all, since it's been a while since I wrote a dedicated sex scene like that (Most of the smut in Breaking Through is incidental to the plot). I'm a big fan of eager tinies personally, so writing Darcy like that was a lot of fun haha. And yeah, Grace is really living the dream right now. I'm jealous.

Thank you so much for the kind words, again. I'm really happy with how this one turned out. And don't worry, I've already got plenty of cool little ideas cooking for continuations and characters. It might just be a while is all, I try to keep focused on one thing at a time. 

Thanks again for the review! I always cherish kind words from authors I admire. 

Reviewer: gtsfef Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2025 5:32 PM Title: Maneater

Absolutely love this, really cute!!

Author's Response:

Thank you!!! 

Both for reading, and for the review :)

Reviewer: TerryLarka Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2025 10:45 AM Title: Maneater

Opening with Hall and Oates playing was all I needed to know I was about to read an instant classic, and everything that followed more than lived up to that.

Grace and Darcy make such an adorable pair. I love all the little details we see them obsess over, like how much Grace adores Darcy's wondering eyes and curious nature. How Darcy is always throwing herself into new situations, asks a lot of questions, is so eager to learn new things from Grace's life and perspective, and mimics her girlfriend’s movements and gestures are not only great bits of characterization, but they also do a tremendous job of hinting at Darcy's true nature. It was really interesting reading about a tiny essentially inhabitating a big's body and seeing how those borrower mannerisms translate into how a “regular human” behaves.

I also liked both of their designs and how they’re juxtaposed: Grace is a plus-sized woman with black hair in a black dress and Darcy is a more petite blonde wearing white and pink. The visual polarity emphasizes their dynamic and how well they fit together, and they both sound so pretty. Learning later on that Grace isn’t wearing underwear beneath her dress made her all the more enthralling.

I wasn’t expecting Grace to have a prosthetic arm, but I love how that ties into Darcy’s whole situation through the company that makes these shells and prosthetics. It was also a great narrative payoff how Grace’s traumatic experience led her to a fear of robots/animatronics and how that plays into her girlfriend literally piloting one. Her fearing robo-Darcy whirring to life while its pilot was in her hand, and Darcy reassuring her that won’t happen, was cute. 

Coriander is such an oddly specific weakness lol, but I love the new lore that the soap gene actually came about from all the tinies living amongst us. I'll be on the lookout for people with this gene. I, unfortunately, do not have it, but maybe I can meet some tinies who do lol. 

The details when Darcy stepped out of her face and onto Grace’s hand were so vivid. All the small things, like feeling the warmth and pulse beneath her skin, to noticing the specks of green in her brown eyes, to the breath washing over her and blowing her hair, showcased the difference in scale between the two splendidly. And I love how mesmerized by it all Darcy is. There were plenty of nods suggesting she has a size fetish (or is at least attracted to big people, which maybe isn’t a size fetish the way we see it given tinies actually exist in this world), and the thought of her being stuck in her robot seeing Grace at her height when she could actually live out the size diff dream and probably wants nothing more then to step out and do so is a compelling thought, and heightens that moment when she can finally be her real self around Grace.

Darcy watching Grace eat in front of her was another great moment displaying the disparity in size. And her envisioning herself tangled up in noodles made for an appetizing visual. I really enjoyed Grace’s vore fetish and the different ways it shown through before she actually gulped her lover. The fact both of them had these big secrets they were anxious to share but found comfort in finally doing so was so sweet (ok, Grace’s kink ain’t nearly as big a deal as what Darcy was hiding, but it was still a big deal to her lol). 

Those mixed-size twins Darcy read about sounds like some fake news. I can’t even imagine how that’d possibly work.

Goddamn, I can’t properly convey how much every time Grace whispered something got to me. The way you described the breath washing over Darcy as the human got in close was so good. And that first “real” kiss was excellent (hell, the “fake” one back near the beginning was already stellar, but that paragraph detailing the softness and how her lips molded around the tiny was superb). But the one shortly after, where Grace describes what she loves about Darcy and every line is divided by a description of her assaulting the tiny with kisses, that’s probably my favorite paragraph out of the whole story. It was so easy to visualize and the dialogue there is so captivating.

And the fact all that stole Darcy’s attention enough that she didn’t notice either the change in scenery or her partner’s change in wardrobe was the cherry on top. And damn, Grace is so hot. It’s no wonder she practically stunned Darcy silent. 

The things Grace did with her tongue … hoo boy. I’m impressed, both with her and the author. Holy hell. The mouthplay that followed was simply divine. I liked Grace’s moaning reverberating throughout her mouth. That was a cool detail, along with the different textures across her tongue and taste buds. And the vivid details didn’t stop at the mouth. Grace’s heartbeat being strong enough to dominate Darcy’s and force it to follow its rhythm was another awesome display of the size difference. I know you really liked that line in Twin Sizes about Jackie and Pierce’s hearts syncing up, and I’m guessing this part was inspired by that, but I like what you did with the idea more, it not just syncing up but physically overwhelming the tiny’s into following suit. So good!

The description of the inside of the stomach was, of course, fucking great, but I adored how Darcy recognized that everything around her was Grace. Every facet of her world, everything she could see, hear, and feel, even the air itself was the woman she loved, and if it weren’t for the kissing paragraph I mentioned earlier, this would be my favorite paragraph in the story. (It’s a really close second. It might even surpass it, honestly). 

In the swallow’s aftermath, I loved Grace’s fear that she ruined their relationship in the heart of the moment, and when Darcy struck that fear down, it shifted into worrying she broke the little lady lol. That had me in stitches. Getting her out with dental floss was a nice touch as it implies she couldn’t just throw her up (I imagine a woman who can swallow boiled eggs whole doesn’t have a gag reflex lol). 

And that vore confession was so sweet. Again, the fact Grace got so worked up over that is hilarious given the secret her girlfriend just revealed maybe an hour prior. But yeah, that peck on the cheek made my heart melt. Something about that “A little pink,” was really funny to me lol.

All that to say, you really went above and beyond with this story. The quality on display here only makes me more excited to see what’s in store for Breaking Through (and possibly this story if you decide to expand on it). Fantastic work!

Author's Response:

Thank you so so much! I'm super happy you enjoyed it as much as you did. 

Also, damn, this is probably the fastest I've gotten a review ever lol. I'm sure you already had your thoughts in order anyway, but thanks!

It took me a handful of tried to get Grace and Darcy right. Darcy was pretty easy - in part because she's kinda my type lol - but it took a bit of tinkering to get Grace down. At first my image was more basic. Long black hair, default figure, kinda sultry. But the more I refined her the more I started to really vibe with her character, and the dynamic between her and Darcy followed. I'm quite happy with Grace now, I think she might be one of my better characters (at least to me). But yeah once I had both of them down I put a lot into making them click together, and I'm glad to see it paid off.

I've been kinda obsessed with the idea of characters of a usual size experiencing the opposite (big becoming small, small becoming big) lately. The whole thing with the shells ended up being a really fun way to explore that. It's funny, it kinda lets me cheat in a way. Cause Darcy is a natural-born tiny, but stepping out of her shell lets me write that whole 'woah I'm suddenly small, that's crazy' vibe you normally get from shrink stories. Having my cake and eating it too haha. 

I'm really glad you like Grace's look. She's not the most 'conventionally' attractive - whatever that means. But I think she's quite pretty - at least the way I picture her. I'm glad you do too :)

The whole idea with Grace's prosthetic kinda just showed up in my head one day, and it ended up staying once I realised it fit pretty well with the worldbuilding. I think the part where Grace is reeling over the fact that the people that made her arm also make robot suits for tinies lmao. On that note, at first I was a little worried that introducing the arm, and telling the whole backstory behind it might have been gratuitous. Though I ended up realising that it led the viewer's suspension of disbelief perfectly, introducing the idea of lifelike robot parts on a small, known scale, and thus making the whole reveal with Darcy's shell easier to swallow. I'm glad I wasn't just coping when I thought that lol. 

And oh yeah, I've got a lot of fun drama in mind for if I ever come back to this story. Grace's whole fear of robots being a big one. She and Darcy are definitely going to have to navigate that later. 

The whole thing with coriander is easily my favourite bit of the worldbuilding lol. When I first came up with the basic story idea, it was just 'something' in the food that made the shell shut down. I didn't really think too deep into it. But sometime around then I must've been reminded of the soap gene, because the ideas ended up mingling in my mind. Then with the implication that anyone with the soap gene would be a tiny in disguise locked it in for me. That, and it's a fun weakness for what have the potential to be very dangerous machines. My advice? Make some coriander spray, in case you get jumped by tinies. Hanging some above the door to your home might be good too. You never know.

I could probably write faster if I didn't spend so much time on the intricate sensate details of size difference, but goddamnit, it's worth it. I'm very happy you liked it haha. I knew I was going for the whole, 'Grace is everything' angle later, so I tried to really lay the groundwork in the scene where they first interact between sizes. That, and, it's super interesting to write. Especially given Darcy's nature, constantly in wonder of things. 

And you're right about Darcy lol. She might not yet realise, but the sheer scale of Grace is definitely a huge turn on for her. When I come back to this, one of the first lines will probably be about how Grace has ruined regular sex for her haha. 

When I was writing them eating together, I just had to insert a horny daydream lol. I couldn't resist. I enjoyed figuring out ways of integrating Grace's fetish into her character. Frankly it's just nice writing a character who's just upfront into it to be honest. It's funny, I didn't really set out for the parallel theme of them both having a secret (at least, I don't remember doing so) but it ended up working quite well I think. I at least noticed it in the edits, and leaned into it more haha. I'm happy to hear that it comes off well. 

Yeah, idk about the whole 'mixed size twins' thing either. Darcy must've read it in a tabloid or something, next to the article about mitosis aliens. 

I'm super happy you liked all the breath / mouth stuff. I remembered you mentioned mouths being your next big thing after size in some QOTD while I was planning, so I tripled down on it wherever I could >:) Super happy to hear that it paid off haha. I think the paragraph with the bombardment of kisses is my favourite one too, at least structurally. I'm quite proud of it. 

I pulled out all the stops for the mouthplay. Both cause I needed Darcy to be overwhelmed, and cause I knew you'd love it. And yeah I definitely emulated the heartbeat thing from Twin Sizes haha. I'm flattered you like my take on it so much, and I love it in the same way. It's such a powerful visual. 

The whole 'everything is Grace' angle was definitely the capstone for the whole sequence, and I'm super happy to hear you loved it. It was also the groundwork for Darcy not freaking out, so I'm glad it landed lmao. 

I'm a sucker for 'oh god I broke you' gags, idk why. I had a lot of fun with the ending sequence. I imagine Grace as usually pretty cool and collected, so it was fun to write her completely flustered by Darcy immediately and accurately calling out her vore fetish lol. I think for her it was already embarrassing enough, but the shock of both suddenly realising it could now be possible, and having accidentally done it in a potentially unsafe way, kinda amplified the shame for her. Luckily for her, Darcy thought it was awesome. I actually quite like the sexual dynamic they've got. I think I wrote somewhere in my notes that "Grace is definitely the freakier of the two, but Darcy is 100% down for pretty much anything". Which sums it up pretty well I think haha.

Again, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed! I was worried I might've been a little rusty / out of my depth, but I'm happy that seems to not be the case. As for Breaking Through, I've actually been sitting on a chapter since December (sorry lol). It's just waiting on another edit though, so expect it soon! 

Thank you so much, again.