Reviewer: gtsfef Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2025 5:32 PM Title: Maneater

Absolutely love this, really cute!!

Reviewer: TerryLarka Signed [Report This]
Date: January 20 2025 10:45 AM Title: Maneater

Opening with Hall and Oates playing was all I needed to know I was about to read an instant classic, and everything that followed more than lived up to that.

Grace and Darcy make such an adorable pair. I love all the little details we see them obsess over, like how much Grace adores Darcy's wondering eyes and curious nature. How Darcy is always throwing herself into new situations, asks a lot of questions, is so eager to learn new things from Grace's life and perspective, and mimics her girlfriend’s movements and gestures are not only great bits of characterization, but they also do a tremendous job of hinting at Darcy's true nature. It was really interesting reading about a tiny essentially inhabitating a big's body and seeing how those borrower mannerisms translate into how a “regular human” behaves.

I also liked both of their designs and how they’re juxtaposed: Grace is a plus-sized woman with black hair in a black dress and Darcy is a more petite blonde wearing white and pink. The visual polarity emphasizes their dynamic and how well they fit together, and they both sound so pretty. Learning later on that Grace isn’t wearing underwear beneath her dress made her all the more enthralling.

I wasn’t expecting Grace to have a prosthetic arm, but I love how that ties into Darcy’s whole situation through the company that makes these shells and prosthetics. It was also a great narrative payoff how Grace’s traumatic experience led her to a fear of robots/animatronics and how that plays into her girlfriend literally piloting one. Her fearing robo-Darcy whirring to life while its pilot was in her hand, and Darcy reassuring her that won’t happen, was cute. 

Coriander is such an oddly specific weakness lol, but I love the new lore that the soap gene actually came about from all the tinies living amongst us. I'll be on the lookout for people with this gene. I, unfortunately, do not have it, but maybe I can meet some tinies who do lol. 

The details when Darcy stepped out of her face and onto Grace’s hand were so vivid. All the small things, like feeling the warmth and pulse beneath her skin, to noticing the specks of green in her brown eyes, to the breath washing over her and blowing her hair, showcased the difference in scale between the two splendidly. And I love how mesmerized by it all Darcy is. There were plenty of nods suggesting she has a size fetish (or is at least attracted to big people, which maybe isn’t a size fetish the way we see it given tinies actually exist in this world), and the thought of her being stuck in her robot seeing Grace at her height when she could actually live out the size diff dream and probably wants nothing more then to step out and do so is a compelling thought, and heightens that moment when she can finally be her real self around Grace.

Darcy watching Grace eat in front of her was another great moment displaying the disparity in size. And her envisioning herself tangled up in noodles made for an appetizing visual. I really enjoyed Grace’s vore fetish and the different ways it shown through before she actually gulped her lover. The fact both of them had these big secrets they were anxious to share but found comfort in finally doing so was so sweet (ok, Grace’s kink ain’t nearly as big a deal as what Darcy was hiding, but it was still a big deal to her lol). 

Those mixed-size twins Darcy read about sounds like some fake news. I can’t even imagine how that’d possibly work.

Goddamn, I can’t properly convey how much every time Grace whispered something got to me. The way you described the breath washing over Darcy as the human got in close was so good. And that first “real” kiss was excellent (hell, the “fake” one back near the beginning was already stellar, but that paragraph detailing the softness and how her lips molded around the tiny was superb). But the one shortly after, where Grace describes what she loves about Darcy and every line is divided by a description of her assaulting the tiny with kisses, that’s probably my favorite paragraph out of the whole story. It was so easy to visualize and the dialogue there is so captivating.

And the fact all that stole Darcy’s attention enough that she didn’t notice either the change in scenery or her partner’s change in wardrobe was the cherry on top. And damn, Grace is so hot. It’s no wonder she practically stunned Darcy silent. 

The things Grace did with her tongue … hoo boy. I’m impressed, both with her and the author. Holy hell. The mouthplay that followed was simply divine. I liked Grace’s moaning reverberating throughout her mouth. That was a cool detail, along with the different textures across her tongue and taste buds. And the vivid details didn’t stop at the mouth. Grace’s heartbeat being strong enough to dominate Darcy’s and force it to follow its rhythm was another awesome display of the size difference. I know you really liked that line in Twin Sizes about Jackie and Pierce’s hearts syncing up, and I’m guessing this part was inspired by that, but I like what you did with the idea more, it not just syncing up but physically overwhelming the tiny’s into following suit. So good!

The description of the inside of the stomach was, of course, fucking great, but I adored how Darcy recognized that everything around her was Grace. Every facet of her world, everything she could see, hear, and feel, even the air itself was the woman she loved, and if it weren’t for the kissing paragraph I mentioned earlier, this would be my favorite paragraph in the story. (It’s a really close second. It might even surpass it, honestly). 

In the swallow’s aftermath, I loved Grace’s fear that she ruined their relationship in the heart of the moment, and when Darcy struck that fear down, it shifted into worrying she broke the little lady lol. That had me in stitches. Getting her out with dental floss was a nice touch as it implies she couldn’t just throw her up (I imagine a woman who can swallow boiled eggs whole doesn’t have a gag reflex lol). 

And that vore confession was so sweet. Again, the fact Grace got so worked up over that is hilarious given the secret her girlfriend just revealed maybe an hour prior. But yeah, that peck on the cheek made my heart melt. Something about that “A little pink,” was really funny to me lol.

All that to say, you really went above and beyond with this story. The quality on display here only makes me more excited to see what’s in store for Breaking Through (and possibly this story if you decide to expand on it). Fantastic work!

Author's Response:

Thank you so so much! I'm super happy you enjoyed it as much as you did. 

Also, damn, this is probably the fastest I've gotten a review ever lol. I'm sure you already had your thoughts in order anyway, but thanks!

It took me a handful of tried to get Grace and Darcy right. Darcy was pretty easy - in part because she's kinda my type lol - but it took a bit of tinkering to get Grace down. At first my image was more basic. Long black hair, default figure, kinda sultry. But the more I refined her the more I started to really vibe with her character, and the dynamic between her and Darcy followed. I'm quite happy with Grace now, I think she might be one of my better characters (at least to me). But yeah once I had both of them down I put a lot into making them click together, and I'm glad to see it paid off.

I've been kinda obsessed with the idea of characters of a usual size experiencing the opposite (big becoming small, small becoming big) lately. The whole thing with the shells ended up being a really fun way to explore that. It's funny, it kinda lets me cheat in a way. Cause Darcy is a natural-born tiny, but stepping out of her shell lets me write that whole 'woah I'm suddenly small, that's crazy' vibe you normally get from shrink stories. Having my cake and eating it too haha. 

I'm really glad you like Grace's look. She's not the most 'conventionally' attractive - whatever that means. But I think she's quite pretty - at least the way I picture her. I'm glad you do too :)

The whole idea with Grace's prosthetic kinda just showed up in my head one day, and it ended up staying once I realised it fit pretty well with the worldbuilding. I think the part where Grace is reeling over the fact that the people that made her arm also make robot suits for tinies lmao. On that note, at first I was a little worried that introducing the arm, and telling the whole backstory behind it might have been gratuitous. Though I ended up realising that it led the viewer's suspension of disbelief perfectly, introducing the idea of lifelike robot parts on a small, known scale, and thus making the whole reveal with Darcy's shell easier to swallow. I'm glad I wasn't just coping when I thought that lol. 

And oh yeah, I've got a lot of fun drama in mind for if I ever come back to this story. Grace's whole fear of robots being a big one. She and Darcy are definitely going to have to navigate that later. 

The whole thing with coriander is easily my favourite bit of the worldbuilding lol. When I first came up with the basic story idea, it was just 'something' in the food that made the shell shut down. I didn't really think too deep into it. But sometime around then I must've been reminded of the soap gene, because the ideas ended up mingling in my mind. Then with the implication that anyone with the soap gene would be a tiny in disguise locked it in for me. That, and it's a fun weakness for what have the potential to be very dangerous machines. My advice? Make some coriander spray, in case you get jumped by tinies. Hanging some above the door to your home might be good too. You never know.

I could probably write faster if I didn't spend so much time on the intricate sensate details of size difference, but goddamnit, it's worth it. I'm very happy you liked it haha. I knew I was going for the whole, 'Grace is everything' angle later, so I tried to really lay the groundwork in the scene where they first interact between sizes. That, and, it's super interesting to write. Especially given Darcy's nature, constantly in wonder of things. 

And you're right about Darcy lol. She might not yet realise, but the sheer scale of Grace is definitely a huge turn on for her. When I come back to this, one of the first lines will probably be about how Grace has ruined regular sex for her haha. 

When I was writing them eating together, I just had to insert a horny daydream lol. I couldn't resist. I enjoyed figuring out ways of integrating Grace's fetish into her character. Frankly it's just nice writing a character who's just upfront into it to be honest. It's funny, I didn't really set out for the parallel theme of them both having a secret (at least, I don't remember doing so) but it ended up working quite well I think. I at least noticed it in the edits, and leaned into it more haha. I'm happy to hear that it comes off well. 

Yeah, idk about the whole 'mixed size twins' thing either. Darcy must've read it in a tabloid or something, next to the article about mitosis aliens. 

I'm super happy you liked all the breath / mouth stuff. I remembered you mentioned mouths being your next big thing after size in some QOTD while I was planning, so I tripled down on it wherever I could >:) Super happy to hear that it paid off haha. I think the paragraph with the bombardment of kisses is my favourite one too, at least structurally. I'm quite proud of it. 

I pulled out all the stops for the mouthplay. Both cause I needed Darcy to be overwhelmed, and cause I knew you'd love it. And yeah I definitely emulated the heartbeat thing from Twin Sizes haha. I'm flattered you like my take on it so much, and I love it in the same way. It's such a powerful visual. 

The whole 'everything is Grace' angle was definitely the capstone for the whole sequence, and I'm super happy to hear you loved it. It was also the groundwork for Darcy not freaking out, so I'm glad it landed lmao. 

I'm a sucker for 'oh god I broke you' gags, idk why. I had a lot of fun with the ending sequence. I imagine Grace as usually pretty cool and collected, so it was fun to write her completely flustered by Darcy immediately and accurately calling out her vore fetish lol. I think for her it was already embarrassing enough, but the shock of both suddenly realising it could now be possible, and having accidentally done it in a potentially unsafe way, kinda amplified the shame for her. Luckily for her, Darcy thought it was awesome. I actually quite like the sexual dynamic they've got. I think I wrote somewhere in my notes that "Grace is definitely the freakier of the two, but Darcy is 100% down for pretty much anything". Which sums it up pretty well I think haha.

Again, I'm thrilled that you enjoyed! I was worried I might've been a little rusty / out of my depth, but I'm happy that seems to not be the case. As for Breaking Through, I've actually been sitting on a chapter since December (sorry lol). It's just waiting on another edit though, so expect it soon! 

Thank you so much, again.