Date: January 24 2025 4:47 PM Title: Back to college
I'm really liking this story, I think it's a nice mix of porn with plot. One thing I would really like to read. Is for julia to give ashlynn free reign of her body without Julia forcing her.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
I have something like that in mind, but I don't know in how many chapters it'll happen. Perhaps the next, perhaps later.
[Report This]Date: January 24 2025 12:49 PM Title: Abudcted
I'm actually not that much of a fan that the MC is essentially broken at that point and basically has no fight left, instead going along with everything that's thrown at her no matter how bad.
While it might be crass, she would actually have a way to assert dominance over Julia. And that's threatening with suicide.
She was already close to it during the first two weeks. It wouldn't actually be that much of a jump. The fact that she could basically throw that into her face and completely destroy that giant asshole by doing so would be the cherry on top. Julia is thrown between making her suffer, and love. However, actual damage would completely throw her off. Ashley wouldn't even have to go all the way. Every kind of damage to her body would suffice. Next time shock collar, cut open your wrist. Or simply bite it open. Or bite through your tongue. Ram your head against the wall. The main point would be that Julia is too crude to even prevent it. She can't do first aid, she can't even successfully restrain her from harming herself, because she is harm herself. All she knows is violence and terror, but you can't terrorize someone who essentially has given up and does those things based on the fact that living without Julia making heavy concessions would be too bleak. It's even a question if hospitals still treat tinies, which would make those threats all the more severe. If she'd show Julia that for any attempt to make it worse for her, for any demeaning action she'd be one step closer to losing her, yep, that would have effect. If the next time she pushes her ito her panties, them slowly filling with her tongue blood may do wonders.
(Not sure how that appeal/openly declaring that one's dying would work, but it might at least be officially questionable if it comes out that people are killing tinies, or that Julia's "care" is doing so, yet given what we saw the Registration Act is essentially an ethnic cleansing, so that may not work)
The story riled me up quite a lot, because I feel with the "slaves" in this kind of story. If one wants to be free they should be able to at least fight for it with everything they got. Do everything one can to make the oppressors realize their mistake. And if they on't cause enough harm that it becomes apparent.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review !
I agree with basically all of it, but self-mutilation and suicide (even threatened) are something that really, really make me squirm. Not that it won't happen in the story, everything is possible. But it's really something I'm not comfortable with. However, I definitely wants Ashley to fight for her rights, and Julia to understand that, for her to truly form some durable and (relatively) healthy with Ashley, she needs to allow her friend to get out of the bad spiral she's in. Which is extremely difficult for her, considering her personality. The shift from a one-shot to a longer story means that I got a true end point to reach and somewhat of a slow-burn (not too slow, hopefully!)
What I'd want is for Ashley to use her life outside the house to regain some form of confidence in herself, to reassert herself, slowly but surely. It'll also be a great opportunity to showcase what the "registered individuals" truly go through, and how it affects them and the Futanaris around them. Of course, Julia remains largely a threat to her self confidence, but the events of chapter 4 will have had an effect on our giantess threat also. Ideally, I'd like the story to finish on the two of them in a healthy-ish relationship, with Julia truly doing efforts and attemps to better herself for Ashley's sake, while Ashley will find a balance between the submissive tendency her owner had induced in her (a return, with a vengeance, to who she had been when Julia grew as a teenager) and her more dominant, outgoing, natural personality.
Of course, it is one of my darker stories, so the imbalance between the two won't entirely be erased (it is, in any case, inherent to the Giantess genre, as one partner is often smaller than the other, considerably so, and thus at the mercy of the Giantess' whims and desires). But overall, now that it isn't just a grim one-shot, I want submission from Ashley's part to be freely given, hers to give so to speak, and not something Julia forces on her. Which isn't the case currently, of course, and it's something that Julia herself will need to recognize and try to correct, basically undoing her actions (both the one when she was 15 and in grief, and those of the last two weeks).
[Report This]Date: January 24 2025 6:17 AM Title: Family Dinner
Really great chapter!
I liked seeing Agatha’s much healthier relationships and the effect that has on Julia. Agatha definitely needed to talk some sense into Julia, and Ashley needed the support. It reminds me of Kat and Mouse. It does seem extremely naive of Julia, bordering on gaslighting, to act surprised that Ashley was afraid to tell her she wanted to stay in college.
The psychopath reveal was nice. Killing animals is a pretty severe expression of the disorder. We’ve seen Julia be pretty mean to Ashley, but that’s a whole other level. Julia just doesn’t come across that scary. Maybe it’s all the pink. It might be a nice contrast if you can put her in a situation where she can be really violent towards someone else, so we can see what she is capable of doing to Ashley but chooses not to.
We now have a pretty good idea of Julia’s motivations, but it’s still not clear what Ashley wants, or if she herself even knows. I was surprised that you seem to be going in the direction of Ashley enjoying some of the humiliation aspects. I should have seen it coming when she got aroused from eating sperm last chapter, but I thought it might be an effect of the sperm itself. But it was really intense that she chose to keep the collar on. I know she said it was to avoid total nudity, but I suspect the real reason is that she finds what it symbolizes thrilling.
I think Ashley and Julia are finally ready to have an adult conversation about what they want their relationship to be. Ashley now understands that she still has some rights in the relationship, and Julia has… let the pressure release? I hope they can set some boundaries while exploring this D/s dynamic in a healthier way. The psychopath thing needs to be addressed - Ashley needs to feel safe in the relationship. And I think she deserves more of an apology for being forced to sleep on a rag, eat dog food, etc. But there’s hope. Can’t wait for more!
Author's Response:
They'll need to have a discussion indeed. It'll probably happen in chapter 5, considering the flow of the story. It'll force Ashley to confront what she wants out of it, knowing that what she would truly crave (ie, not being a registered individual) is completely impossible to achieve for her, just out of her hands. She's also stuck, as someone who discovered her sexual attraction to other people far later than Julia, in a strange phase where she doesn't really know what she likes, what she wants out of any relationship, how she can feel and how she may want to feel in such a dynamic. It's particularly difficult for her considering her situation, where equality has basically be stripped out of her. She's in need of some serious soul-searching to achieve a more balanced understanding of herself, her relation to Julia and her new place in the world.
I chose to have Julia be a really severe case to better highlight the fact that she truly is in love with Ashley and tries to show it in a more conventional way - and fail miserably. She is striving to be better, and you'll see in chapter 4 that revealing herself in chapter 3 may have done more harm than good in that way, at least on a short term level. But chapter 4 may have given something very much needed for Ashley to thrive : space for herself.
God, chapter 5 is coming sooner or later... and it won't be the last... It was supposed to be a one-shot XD
[Report This]Date: January 22 2025 2:16 AM Title: Two week after
Wow! I have a lot of thoughts I will list in no specific order.
Obviously this sucks for Ashley, but the reality is that someone is going to own her. Julia might really be her best option, considering all futas appear to be sex-crazed slavers.
Are all futas sex-crazed slavers? Are some more reasonable? Julia doesn’t seem all bad - she wants Ashley to leave the house at least. I can’t tell if Ashley’s assertion that she is just “a way for Julia to feel better” is true.
I love the complexity of the relationship. The pain of the rape attempt combines beautifully with the effect on Ashley’s sexual development. Julia really is the only futa that could have this confusing effect on her.
The core question of the story is whether Julia really loves her. If she doesn’t, Ashley’s current situation is as good as it will get for her. But if she does, I think Ashley could leverage that. I’m a bit confused. Julia says she’ll give her anything in return for love, but immediately pivots back to making demands. Is this controlling behavior who she is, or the only way she knows how to be? Can Ashley coax a different kind of love out of her?
I definitely want to see more of the parents. Did they put up a fight when Agatha came? What are they going through now? I prefer the 3m size to 6m, especially for characters with dicks, otherwise insertion is impractical. Does Agatha harbor vengeance towards men after her wife’s death?
This setting is ripe for other stories too. The passing of the act is a great catalyst for action. E.g. rushing to nab a crush and hunting them down. Or a non-futa desperately trying to get to their futa partner before being claimed by someone else.
Great work!
Author's Response:
Not all futas are as unhinged as Julia, no. I think we'll see Agatha has a far healthier take on relationships with normal peoples, once she'll have settled down from the crush she has had, for a long time, on Ashley's parents.
We should see next chapter (if I stick to it) how Julia feels truly and who she is and why her relationship with Ashley is so intense, obsessive and important to her. So far I have made her obliviously cruel, but I am toying with the idea of making her truly a sadist who has fallen utterly in love with Ashley, and struggles to reconcile her own needs in such a relationship which what she knows is good for Ashley. Not sure I'll go that route yet, we'll see.
In any case, it is a certainty that Julia loves Ashley. The question is can she manage to love her in an healthier way, and why do she feels the need to be so controlling. It should be adressed next chapter, later in the week, if I can stick to it, as I said above.
We won't see too much of Agatha and Ashley's parents, but some nonetheless, since I want to focus more on Ashley and Julia, and their relationship.
As for the setting, the Registration Bill was a spur of the moment inspiration haha ! I didn't plan beyond "huge futa abduct her childhood friend". I agree that six meters is too huge for penetration but initially I had planned to end the one-shot chapter by a cock-vore scene. I still plan to have one down the line, hence why Julia's cock grew even more monstrous this chapter.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2025 4:29 PM Title: Abudcted
Amazing story, really dig deep into humillation, love it
Please continue it
Author's Response:
Thanks a lot for the review !
I may add at least one more chapter, as some ideas are in my head already. No promise yet however !