[Report This]Date: February 24 2025 1:01 AM Title: Chapter 9: What Lies Beneath
I had assumed Naomi was somehow instrumental in Ava's change in stature, I can only assume the vials play some part into that?
Not convinced its a control agent, it feels too easy as an out for Ava, perhaps Naomi thinks it is but it'll become a realisation down the line that no - she's the one in control now, and that's when the smirk will be wiped off Naomi's face completely.
Oh... the cultists absolutely fed her the dead soldiers oof.
Author's Response:
Thanks for the review, Supe! All good theories, time will tell how close you all make it to the mark.
[Report This]Date: February 23 2025 3:03 AM Title: Chapter 9: What Lies Beneath
I feel like Sabrina Carpenter is the biggest real life inspiration for Ava‘s character (the description of her look/backstory in the first chapter, and the story title “larger than life”… A twist on “short ‘n’ sweet“?). However, it’s a line from a hit song by Sabrina‘s fellow pop star, Taylor Swift, that sums up my thoughts on Ava‘s journey Thus far: “must be exhausting always rooting for the anti-hero“…
Yes, yes, it has been exhausting… In the best way.
Thankfully, if this chapter is anything to go on, us readers might not be the only ones rooting for her going forward. In hindsight, it made perfect sense that Hector could be a potential ally for Ava (he was the only one to warn her of the approaching army convoy in the last chapter), but until reading this most recent installment, I had no idea he was acting as a “double agent“ of sorts, going behind Naomi‘s back to help Ava out.
On the topic of “double agents“, I’m still really confused as to what Jason‘s true Motives are. We haven’t gotten a true objective, outside view of Ava‘s relationship with him so far. It’s mostly been ”he said she said” to this point, with both sides blaming each other for the Messy breakup. We know Jason is currently working for Marlowe, but a few details about that arrangement still don’t quite add up for me. First, it didn’t exactly seem like Jason was looking to pick a fight with Ava until Marlow roped him into her plan. She literally needed to send a squad to track him down and haul him to her office. Second, he seemed quite hesitant to join Marlowe’s cause once he had been summoned. Perhaps he simply knew the plan would involve him being used as live bait, and understandably didn’t want any part in it, but based on how you describe his complex feelings while looking over the surveillance photos of Ava, I’ve got a feeling his reluctance runs deeper than a mere survival instinct.
I’m also curious if Naomi knows something about Ava’s relationship with Jason that Marlowe and her team (and us readers) don’t yet know; something that could turn the tide in her favor. While Marlowe obviously did her research before recruiting Jason to her side, she’s not a crazed super-fan like Naomi, who’s read every tabloid and watched every interview from Ava. What’s more, she’s already dealt a devastating blow to Marlowe in a similar manner (I have a very hard time believing that Caylin being the cult sacrifice was a mere coincidence).
Finally, as for where I think the story will go next, we’ve already seen that the army has little to no effect on Ava. While they could always use more powerful weapons against her, that would also increase the risk of collateral damage, and more importantly, not make for a very exciting story; we’ve already seen them battle with Ava a couple times at this point. Instead, I think the next threat that Ava will face is another giantess, specifically Naomi.
Yes, crackpot theory, I know… Naomi has gotten others to do her dirty work throughout the story, plus, the story tags (which have been accurate up until this point) don’t suggest such a twist (no “age 30-39“ tag). However, as other readers have pointed out, Naomi is likely responsible for Ava‘s growth. If she feels the situation is slipping out of her control, who’s to say she couldn’t use the same potion on herself to take matters into her own hands? And of course, all practical reasons aside, Naomi would simply make a great giantess. While many readers (myself included) see her as the main villain of the story, she’s still a very attractive woman, and something tells me that a 500 foot tall Naomi unleashing her pent up rage would be the Phanservice that many readers are looking for.
Regardless of where the story goes from here, as per usual, can’t wait for the next chapter! Based on your responses to other readers, it sounds like chapter 10 will be a big one!
Author's Response: I always look forward to your reviews, man. Thank you for always taking the time to engage with the material and share your theories. It warms to heart of a writer like me to see a reader speculate on this level! You bring up a lot of great points. Are you in the GiantessWorld Discord, by chance? We actually have a story discussion thread in there where other readers have been spit balling theories and I've been exercising my best restraint not to give anything away, lol. If you're not already in there, you should drop in sometime and chat! Thanks again
[Report This]Date: February 22 2025 2:05 PM Title: Chapter 9: What Lies Beneath
Very interesting! Naomi's plot thickens...
Last chapter was great, and I think really showed off Ava's character well. Her struggle to get the helicopter guys out of her chest and to saftey (though with a stern warning) was great. Especially juxtaposed against her crushing the death squad. Brutal kill, btw. I'd just recently been thinking that handheld crushing was pretty rare to see.
And damn, Hector for the win! It's lovely to see someone in the cult who isn't hopelessly brainwashed, and it's nice to think that Ava might have a genuine ally in the future. Especially against Naomi. The drugging concept is interesting, lots of ways it could go. The simplest theory I can muster is that it's what caused, and is maintaining her giant size, which matches my prior theory that Naomi is somehow responsible. That might just be confirmation bias though lol.
I'm still team Ava! Poor girl needs some real love. Hopefully things don't go too badly with her ex!
Author's Response: It's nice to see I'm not alone in appreciating a good hand crush! I was looking to save that for a moment of maximum impact. Definitely a big turning point for Ava, but hopefully her goodwill hasn't been entirely used up in the eyes of you readers. I don't want her to be seen as a full-on villain, but I understand if the sympathy is waning after the shift she's been experiencing over the course of the story. I think Chapter 10 will be another watershed moment in Ava's "alignment" so to speak. Thanks for reviewing!
[Report This]Date: February 12 2025 4:20 PM Title: Chapter 8: Sanctuary Under Siege
Sigh…Captain Marlowe thinks she’s won by bringing Jason into the fold, but she doesn’t realize she just sealed her fate along with everyone else’s. If things are going the way I expect… well, shit’s about to get a whole lot worse.
But besides that, the chapter was amazing overall! 10/10. There were so many subtle hints that Ava is slowly but surely giving in, inch by inch, to Naomi’s plan. Just this one passage alone shows how strong Naomi’s manipulation runs over Ava:
“She had stood tall as they chanted her name, and she hadn’t stopped them. A final flare-up of doubt stirred again, but as Naomi looked at her, eyes fierce with conviction, the doubt flickered and was snuffed like a wax candle in the wind.”
And this line:
“I don’t know if I can be what you want me to be,” Ava said.
She was addressing Naomi, not necessarily the cult itself. That distinction alone is chilling. I can’t wait for the next chapter!
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! I must have managed to really tap into something writing Naomi, she seems to have drawn the ire of many readers now. No one likes a manipulator. Can't wait to drop the next chapter!
[Report This]Date: February 12 2025 4:39 AM Title: Chapter 8: Sanctuary Under Siege
I’ve enjoyed this story a lot so far!
I really like how realistically you portrayed her initial growth. The chaos, her panic. It was vivid.
The relationship between Ava and Naomi is great. I love that Ava has experienced an abusive relationship and is fully aware of what Naomi is doing, but still feels trapped to go along with it.
I like how you’ve been gradually turning up the dial on Ava’s behavior. The most recent jump to killing in malice was excellently delivered. I think you could do more to connect Ava’s enjoyment of her destructive behavior with how tightly controlled her life was before. I think you’ve brought it up in relation to her relationships with Jason and Naomi, but it helps inform her desire for control too.
The vore scene was beautifully portrayed. Ava’s repeated reluctance played well against their religious fervor. And what a twist! I wish we could have seen Caylin’s PoV post-swallow.
Not the best military tactics. Helicopters within swatting range? Foot soldiers???
You’ve done a great job making us root for Ava, even though she’s rapidly going down a dark path. Eager to see how Jason plays into this.
Author's Response:
Thank you for the review! Sorry for the delay in responding, it's been busy.
"I think you could do more to connect Ava’s enjoyment of her destructive behavior with how tightly controlled her life was before." Couldn't have said it better myself. It's a delicate balance trying to have a character authentically enjoy destruction without having violent tendencies prior and still clearly valuing human life, but I've strived to make it as gradual as I can make it within the confines of this genre. I don't pretend to think it's depicted realistically, but at least delving into the psychological background is something I've had at the forefront of my mind while writing this story. As you pointed out with the questionable military tactics, ya gotta let a few things go to deliver the fun! Stay tuned.
[Report This]Date: February 06 2025 6:23 PM Title: Chapter 8: Sanctuary Under Siege
Great chapter! Each one continues to be better than the last! I don't know how you'll keep it up, but great work!
I was immediately struck by your use of literary devices early in this chapter. You used so many similes (just search the word "like" for reference) and they ALL felt natural and enhanced my immersion in the story. Perhaps mixing a few more metaphors in would help diversify a bit, but they only enhanced the story for me. I know sometimes these artsy things can come across as self-indulgent, but I thought they did a perfect job setting the scene and conveying what was happening.
Again we get new characters and again their characterization is handled fantastically. We get a sense of the Colonel's values (good choice of rank, btw) and motivations such that his conflict with Ava feels natural. Captain Marlowe continues to be a real person, too, as despite all the reasons she has to dislike Ava personally, she is still fairly objective about her analysis of her. She recognizes Ava doesn't kill without reason, which is shocking to me considering what she just did to her daughter. The NYPD badge was a nice little detail, too! Also, I fucking hate Naomi so much. I don't care who the real villain of the story turns out to be; in my mind it's already her. I'm also not a fan of Jason already. Admittedly, I was already prejudiced against him by Ava's accounts, but he's clearly a selfish prick and once again you did a great job of giving us an insight into his values and personality in just a few words. It will be curious to see how he contributes to the plot, though. Perhaps a little psychological warfare?
Finally, I think you may have created a plausible scenario that I hadn't read in this genre before. The helicopter crash into the boobs and the rappelling out of the wreck was done extremely well and with great detail (you also used my favorite word for cleavage: "canyon"). I've certainly seen aircraft crash into a giantess' tits before, but I don't think I've seen the crew evacuate and escape to the ground safely. Normally this stuff occurs at much larger sizes and the giantess isn't nearly as merciful. Then again, maybe they should have been flying higher, but it's a giant monster story and low-flying aircraft are a trope of the genre, so it didn't affect my immersion at all.
I honestly don't have any critiques at all, so you'll just have to settle for something I'm lukewarm about. Ava killing the soldiers felt a little abrupt to me. However, I don't think it was inherently problematic. She is in an extraordinary situation under extraordinary pressure. She gave them a chance to flee and they didn't take it. And perhaps most importantly, they were threatening people whom Ava considered to be innocent and powerless. I think the contrast between her mercy toward the helicopter crew that attacked her versus her cruelty to the soldiers that threatened her followers is a good distinction and serves to highlight her own attitude toward (for lack of a better term) bullies. She seems to still put others before herself and is willing to forgive people that wrong her personally, but seeks justice against those who prey upon the innocent and helpless. That said... it still felt a little sudden to me. But it could have just been a spur of the moment thing and like I said: there's a lot happening right now. I think for story purposes, it will do well to facilitate her transition to whatever she ends up becoming. Her killing people that threatened but did not actually harm others seemed odd after her previous show of mercy, but again this may just serve to highlight her own values and state of mind. I think the distinction between the two scenarios is important to bear in mind. Besides, it's not like having the soldiers shoot a cultist for no reason would be any more plausible, though I kinda question why they would aim at them in the first place. Everybody's different; some people are trigger-happy or just get off on the feeling of control. Strange things happen fast in combat and some momentary hesitation or a fearful instinctive reaction can prove fatal in close proximity to a being as fast and powerful as Ava.
Anyway, fantastic chapter! You continue to outdo yourself. I'm looking forward to seeing where it goes next.
(I really want Naomi to die)
Author's Response: Thanks, man! We usually get into the meat of things in the Discord but your reviews have been such a boon.
[Report This]Date: February 06 2025 5:18 PM Title: Chapter 8: Sanctuary Under Siege
Caught a minor scale issue (or maybe just a typo?) in the middle of the chapter. You mention how one of the cultists is roughly the size of Ava’s big toe. According to the giantess converter, though, her little toe (not her big one) would be roughly as long as the average person is tall. For some more context/scaling, each of Ava’s feet would be roughly as long, and triple the width of, a semi truck/trailer.
Otherwise, this was another entertaining chapter, with a good action sequence and an intriguing ending that leaves me wondering where the story will go next. I didn’t expect Marlowe to rope Jason into working to take Ava down, and was surprised at how reluctant he seemed to join the fight… perhaps he isn’t as much of a villain as previous chapters have made him out to be?
In contrast, I’m growing more and more wary of Naomi with each chapter of the story… just search up r/niceguys and you’ll quickly see why. Agree with ProbablyIX that there’s a deeper conspiracy/plot twist brewing, and Naomi’s behind it.
Can’t wait to find out what happens next!
Author's Response:
Thank you for the scaling catch! I'll make a revision at some point. Glad you're still being kept guessing. Jason's motivations will become more clear as we progress. Your review is appreciated as always!
[Report This]Date: February 03 2025 8:32 PM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
i liked the vore, more of that please
please don't delete this review thx i logged in just to make this
3/10
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[Report This]Date: February 01 2025 2:26 PM Title: Chapter 3: Crash And Burn
Alright, i read the first three chapters, so i figured that it would make the most sense to review it here. I might leave another review in later chapters thoughts that are specific to the follow-up story, but for now i will focus on these introductory parts.
This is one of the best first works i've seen on the website. The imagery is vibrant, the prose, except for a few minor spelling mistakes here and there, conveys what is happening really well. I particularly liked the description in the initial growth scene.
Also, as other have said, the underlying theme of the idolatry, senseless devotion that people reserve to celebrities is interesting. I would also add that is much less tongue-in-cheek than what i expected it to be, it still feels somewhat grounded.
The hints of the emotional journey that Ava is going through are also well-placed and anticipate a fascinating character arc.
Well done.
Author's Response:
Thank you! I'm curious what you'll think as you continue through, and I'm so happy the themes are coming across well. I really wanted to put my own signature twist on a subgenre (growth/rampage) I don't typically feel comfortable writing in because it can often be kind of one-note.
[Report This]Date: February 01 2025 10:13 AM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
God damn. I'm not usually a big growth fan, but this story might just turn me around. Why didn't I read this sooner!?
Steller work, for real. Ava's character through the story is super engaging, and the way you deal with the consequences of her growth is captivating. There's a real sense of scale to what's happening, and a kind of almost body horror to Ava's plight. As she watches herself transform into something that shatters the earth with a step.
Reminds me of that old quote about monsters by Ishiro Honda: "Monsters are tragic beings. They are born too tall, too strong, too heavy. They are not evil by choice. That is their tragedy. They do not attack people because they want to, but because of their size and strength, mankind has no other choice but to defend himself. After several stories such as this, people end up having a kind of affection for the monsters. They end up caring about them."
Most growth stories I've read kinda just have a giantess stomping around and that's it. Though I feel like this story kinda started out at that place of 'what now?' and is building something out of that uncertainty.
Naomi certainly is, at least. She's quite the interesting antagonist(?), subtly manipulating Ava to her vague ends. This chapter especially makes me sus of her. Crack theory, but I reckon Naomi was somehow responsible for Ava's growth in the first place. She was at the concert after all, and all of this cult activity seems far too planned to just be spur of the moment inspiration. I'm keen to see where it all goes, and if Ava can find someone that actually sees her as a person, and not an icon.
On that note, super interesting theme! You're navigating the space of fame and idolatry in a super interesting way. It's heartbreaking that Ava is either seen as a terrifying danger, or as a deity to be worshipped. Caylin was super cute, and close to maybe being that for her. Too late now though.
I'm super interested to know how Caylin felt in the immediate aftermath of the swallow. Being digested probably hurts like a bitch, and I wonder if Ava would be able to hear her screams with those heightened senses.
The twist that Caylin was Marlowe's daughter that was mentioned was a really good one. Well-established enough that I could guess it, but still shocking. I'm interested to see how Marlowe's revenge will play out, and how it might clash with everything the cult has going on.
Shockingly well done, seriously. Can't wait for more!
Author's Response:
Glowing praise from one of my favorite writers in this space. I'm humbled by the words! I appreciate your theory on Naomi too. I think you'll like where I'm going with it all. The quote you referenced is so good, too. I hadn't heard it before but it definitely captures the spirit of that I'm going for with Ava being unwillingly thrust into her newfound size.
[Report This]Date: January 31 2025 9:22 PM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
This story is excellent, I wish I could write something with this strong of a build-up. As I read chapters, I'd wonder if the followers would eventually rally to her and then two chapters later they do. There's a great progression and timing.
The other neat thing about this story is that it has realism. It's fascinating to see her become a monarch, a figure ahead and take on all that that means. Her resistance makes it endearing.
I also enjoy the motifs. More size stories need to use singing.
One final thought - an idea that I've been planning to use in a story is that people consumed by a giant are alive in her dreams. She can build a sort of heaven for them in her head. Could add a fun divine aspect.
Author's Response:
Thank you for taking the time to share your appreciation for the story! Reviews are what keep me motivated to make this story as engaging as I can make it. I hope you like the direction I go from here.
[Report This]Date: January 31 2025 12:25 PM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
Great new chapter! You did a great job at highlighting the horror of "the act" from both Ava and Marlowe's perspectives. Naomi's manipulation is also very fun to see, and I wonder how much of Caylin's sacrifice came from her own mind or from her charismatic leader.
Author's Response:
High praise coming from you! Thank you for your thoughtful review.
[Report This]Date: January 31 2025 3:20 AM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
Wow, there’s so much to digest in this chapter (no pun intended).
First, I like how you’re doing a better job at conveying the sense of scale as the story goes on. It seems like you’re starting to nail exactly how big Ava is in comparison to those around her. I know some of this was done intentionally, as you want the reader to get a sense of her size more slowly, but some of the earlier stuff just felt off. In particular, the previous chapter, where Ava picks up the man from the ground, made her seem far too small. I can definitely tell you get some of your influence from Jacksmith/Ackbar like we discussed earlier, as that scene would’ve perfectly described an omega picking up a normal sized person. However, Ava is about four times bigger than an Omega. To put it another way, her fingers would be roughly 4 times longer than the average person is tall. This means, instead of picking someone up in her fist, it would make more sense for her to gently pinch them between thumb and index finger.
Contrast that with some of the scenes from this chapter. The scene with Ava handling Caylin, and the fact that Caylin could easily fit in Ava’s mouth/throat both felt more believable than the previously mentioned scene from the last chapter.
For future reference, as others have said, definitely use the giantess converter on this site, and if you’re looking for written examples, go to the omega series, and pay attention to how the omegas interact with Betas; the size difference is larger than you’re looking for, but that combined with the giantess converter and your great writing should get you there.
Second, you did a great job with the various twists and turns. At the end of chapter 6, I really didn’t know what the ritual would entail (my initial idea was completely different from what it ended up being). When I first read the chapter title, and saw the “vore” tag, I knew a sacrifice would be involved, and how the cult intended to do it, but I had no idea who would be chosen (my guess was completely wrong). And then, of course, there was the final big reveal at the end of the chapter. This was also a surprise, but that was due to a typo/misprint in chapter 3. Marlowe’s daughter had a different name when I first read through the story, so the end result was me feeling more confused than shocked. I personally think entirely leaving out the fact that Caylin is Marlowe’s daughter until the big reveal in this latest chapter would give an even bigger shock for readers (it’s too easy to figure out otherwise), but then again, it all depends on what tone you’re wanting to set with your story.
Finally, in addition to being entertaining, this story has honestly been pretty thought-provoking. I know you mentioned at the beginning of the first chapter how the story was meant to be a tongue-in-cheek commentary about the excesses of fame/celebrity fandom, and I can definitely see that angle, but I’d say it goes deeper than that. The story feels like a metaphor for folks’ views on people they find attractive (celebrity or not). In real life, many people separate into the two camps that we’ve seen in the story so far. They view someone who they are attracted to as either a threat to be controlled/avoided or a God/goddess that can solve all their problems; this story does an excellent job of explaining how/why either approach ultimately leads to heartbreak for all parties.
With the main story threads/arcs coming together, things are really getting exciting. I have no idea where things will go from here, and that’s a very good thing!
Can’t wait for your next installment!
Author's Response:
Thank you for your kind words! You are not the first to point out how I can do better with scaling. I'm going to be more mindful of that moving forward and probably tighten up some inconsistencies in previous chapters when I get the chance. I'm glad you're enjoying the narrative despite some shortcomings in immersion.
[Report This]Date: January 30 2025 10:41 PM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
Wow, the writing here is so well done. The dialogue in particular is fantastic and the relationship between Marlowe and Caylin was a good twist. The characterization is so great, too, and I'm starting to get a better sense of the future character arcs. Seriously, though, this is among the best dialogue I've ever read. I like it even more than mine. Dialogue isn't just words, but also the actions around the words and you do a great job with the pacing and spacing of the dialogue on top of the word choice.
Now for the criticism xD:
The cultist storyline is starting to strain my belief a bit. I appreciate that you're taking your time to develop Ava's character, but I feel like the cultists themselves are suffering in the characterization department. Naomi has a lot of potential and I like how things are developing with her, but I hope this isn't the last we see of Caylin (obviously she's dead, but I feel like her character is a great opportunity to give us an insight into the rest of Ava's devoted followers). I know people can be indoctrinated to do crazy things, but this process is usually pretty slow, especially when they're indoctrinating themselves. Ava grew like... two days ago? And people are offering themselves as human sacrifices now? This can be remedied in future chapters as Marlowe reflects on her experiences with her daughter, but it's something I'm having a little trouble with at the moment. Maybe she felt hopeless and isolated (neglected by her mother?) and was suggestible. We got a sense of this from her dialogue, but I think it should be fleshed out more.
Also, something I have to both commend and critique you for is the whole ritual sequence. It is a fantastic passage and it feels like Ava is right in the heart of the action. However, I also have to point out that at her current size, a person is less than an inch tall to her. The mental image of a giantess being peer pressured and saying "no, I can't possibly" to a group of people chanting around a circle likely smaller than her kneecap is a little comical. Maybe it's a bigger congregation, but they're all still less than an inch tall to her. Again, the great writing disguises this and really kept me invested in the scene, but my neurotic brain couldn't help but recognize how absurd the situation is from an outside perspective.
I got a hint of this in the last chapter when Ava's "five massive fingers" curled around the abusive guy, which isn't really practical unless the guy is 20 feet tall (and she'd probably have to dig up the earth underneath him). It's a relatively minor nitpick, but remember what I said in my first review: pay attention to your giantess' scale!
All that said, this is a fantastic story and even though I have some nitpicks here and there, I feel it's getting better and better with each chapter. Again, I tend to focus on the critiques in the review for the sake of improvement, but you did so many things well here. The dream sequence, the foreshadowing, the prose and literary elements, the tone of the chapter... they're all excellent. You're doing so many things so well that aren't in this review, so don't get hung up on it.
Author's Response:
We discussed it mostly in the Discord but thank you for the review! I'm gonna modify and adjust some scaling issues in light of this.
[Report This]Date: January 30 2025 8:58 PM Title: Chapter 7: Consumed
I knew it! I just knew what the celebration was going to be about, but I didn't predict that Caylin was going to be the sacrifice or that she was the captain's daughter until I was halfway through the chapter. Man, what a twist! You've caught me completely off guard. Naomi's got her influence wrapped around everybody in that cult. I feel really bad for Ava; she didn’t really want to do it, but in the end she gave in, and there's no going back now. Captain Marlowe isn't going to stop until she finishes Ava one way or another. Excellent writing, super engaging. Now you got me completely invested in this story. I can't wait to see how this ends. I'm fiending for the next chapter. I hope Ava is able to break free of her control and commitment toward others and make her own decisions on what she truly wants and to see Naomi get her comeuppance.
Author's Response:
Not to get all sappy on you but this is precisely the kind of review I've dreamed of getting! The fact that someone not only read this far, but can't wait to see what happens next is so gratifying. It makes the hours of work feel more than worth it, so thank you! I have everything mapped out from here so you will definitely see the intrigue heighten as we go. I envision this as about the midpoint of the story, so all these setup threads are going to begin coalescing as we approach the endgame. So pleased to see the characters are resonating with people and that the twist landed as intended. Stay tuned!
[Report This]Date: January 24 2025 1:23 AM Title: Chapter 6: The Protector's Dilemma
The longer this story goes on, the more of an Omega vibe I’m getting… that’s a very good thing.
The Omega series mostly features gentle interactions, with some violence thrown in (more or less the opposite of this story), but the overall feeling I get from both is very similar, especially when I consider that the Omegas, despite their good intentions (or maybe because of them) were anything but gentle when they first came on the scene.
Although there isn’t an Omega prequel story, detailing the namesake giants’ rise to power, I’d imagine it would’ve played out very similar to the dynamic currently going on between Ava and Naomi - a staunch advocate for a downtrodden segment of society (Kayla for the Betas and Naomi for all women, in Omega and this story respectively) becomes the leader of a group of godlike giants (or a single giantess in Naomi’s case), willing to do anything it takes in their pursuit of shaping the world to how they think it should be. If Naomi’s vision of the world is anything like the world depicted in the Omega stories (seemless infrastructure that allows for people of three size tiers to coexist, insane medical/tech breakthroughs, etc.), you could make a pretty good argument as to why Naomi’s grand vision is better than the current state of affairs… but if getting to that point in the Omega stories first required untold levels of death/destruction (similar to what Naomi wants Ava to do), I’d imagine most of the original Omegas would’ve been feeling very similar to how Ava currently feels.
***Long winded Omega rabbit-hole aside, this chapter was great, and left me with a bunch of questions regarding future installments… Will Ava run into Jason, and if so, will she be able to control herself? How are giantess fetishists in this world reacting to Ava’s transformation? Will we hear Ava sing again, and is this the key to folks recognizing her humanity despite her size? Guess I’ll have to keep reading to find out the answers.
As always, keep up your excellent writing!
Author's Response:
I'm familiar with the Omega series so the comparison is flattering, thank you! It's actually pretty interesting to think of this as a prequel to that. You've been a great cheerleader for me as I've made my debut in this space. It doesn't go unnoticed. I can't give anything away but I think you'll continue to appreciate the direction I take with the story.
Date: January 23 2025 8:00 PM Title: Chapter 6: The Protector's Dilemma
Finally dropping a review of the new stuff!
It's been fun to see the story begin as something of a farcical deconstruction of celebrity culture to transform into a more emotional tale. I think the song she sings really solidifies a lot of character development.
While the story doesn't really do much for me erotically I think it's interesting, and could possibly make for some observations about culture without necessarily needing to be hot. I'm just simply not into growth/destruction.
I think the character development is key, and I like the direction it's headed. The main factor that was missing (for me) for a little while was motivation: it seemed a little unclear what Ava wanted besides trying to essentially escape the narrative. It was also unclear what the 'cult' wanted, besides to worship.
Now both of those are beginning to coalesce into a greater story framework, fertile ground to explore the relationship of fans vs celebrities and possibly entertainment as a whole. The direction is clear, if the destination is still a little obscured. That's a good thing!
Well done. I can't promise I'll keep up reading but I might revisit now and then. I'm a bit out of my element to review the erotic content but I think it's interesting nonetheless.
Author's Response:
Hey man, I appreciate the constructive candor! I'm glad you decided to revisit, at least long enough to see their was a reason to my madness lol. Thanks for the review!
[Report This]Date: January 20 2025 7:12 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Anthill
My previous review was mysteriously deleted, which is a real shame because it was just the most heartfelt, outpouring of love. Now it’s lost to the void of the internet.
In its place I will provide a short summary of my previous review.
5/5, good.
Author's Response:
Much more heartfelt this time around. Thank you, my friend. Stay tuned.
[Report This]Date: January 20 2025 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 5: Cult Of Personality
I think what stands out to me is how you ground the giantess and social satire antics with a sense of genuineness these stories can often lack, Naomi despite being on the surface a crazed cultist makes this work for Ava when giving her side of the story.
Looking forward to more.
Author's Response:
Thanks for taking the time to review! Means a lot coming from you. It's reassuring to hear that the story still feels somewhat grounded through characterization despite the extraordinary circumstances. That's something I hope to maintain as things escalate.
[Report This]Date: January 19 2025 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 5: Cult Of Personality
A wonderful addition! Looking forward to how her character develops further.
You did a great job at making Naomi sympathetic but also clearly manipulative, and I'm happy that Naomi can sense the truth in the woman's words but also the hint of malice
Author's Response:
Thanks for your review! I'm glad that's coming across. More of that to come in the next chapter for sure.