Reviewer: foxar14509 Signed [Report This]
Date: December 06 2024 10:15 PM Title: Chapter 1 - Playing With Fire

I'll keep it short.

My one and only disappointment was realizing that I had finished reading it, and that I must wait to be able to read the next part.

But seriously, it was very good!

The premise alone is exciting, and this first chapter is well written in my opinion. 

I particularly like the dynamic between Jake and Daheera.

A poor, pathetic young human who, for some puerile reason, summons a giant demoness.

A hellhound (or Cerberus daughter), as powerful as she is sexy, terrifying and hungry (in more than one sense), but with a sweet, cute side.

Very promising stuff! Great work!

I'll end by saying that, knowing the content of the next chapters, stuff I've got a weakness for, and this first chapter. Having to wait is already unbearable for me.

Author's Response: This review really warms my heart, thank you a lot.

I wasn't sure about the characters, they are pretty different than the protagonists i usually write about, so i was a bit worried, but I'm glad I managed to get their main traits across, and create an engaging dynamic. 

Regarding the following chapters, I'm already drafting them, and i can say that while the more violent part will not be there for a couple more, there will be some interesting content and developments in the meantime. So stay tuned, I promise it will be worth ! Lets just say that when Daheera will manage to get out of her indentured servitude, she will have a lot more freedom in doing what she wants.

Thank you again, and please check my other story if you like my writing !