




Date: July 18 2025 3:09 AM Title: PART 30
Poor Becca bit off more than she could chew with that bet but knowing how most soccers games seem to end in a tie or super low scoring she likely thought hedging her bet on both scoring was a smart one.
Amber's little show at the store was as always incredible in both brattiness but execution, I was actually quite stunned to see a fellow giant person actually stand up for the little ones for once. But given the fact it was for the profit of the store I completely understand her reasoning behind it.
The idea of giant bratty tomboys/goth girls/jockettes etc bossing around tiny pageant queens is actually a pretty hot one. Like they get to win the beauty pageant and get heaps of praise and love rained down upon them but they also still carry as much importance as a gym sock depending on the situation.
I feel terrible for Scarlett not getting into her chosen school but I have a sneaking suspicion that this leads to her and Amber going to school together somewhere. Likely with Becca in toe(pun intended) and making trouble for the tinies who end up in their dorm...maybe tiny sorority pledges but who knows.
Becca wanting to stay makes total sense given her love for them both and her determination to not just be another token tiny in the world. She may not win but she will most definitely put her best tiny foot forward to make sure she at least does her best to try and take down the tiny Barbies.
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I FUCKING LOVE NATASHA!
Especially the foot stuff early on, just such a wonderfully delicious scenario especially with Becca forced to take it all without breaking...truly wonderful stuff!
The fart sequence was quite the surprise though as I truly thought she'd get another dose of the royal tootsies but you really ramped it up there and added another layer to Becca's subjugation.
I truly hope her speech about Queens not needing to rule with fear or bullying etc reached the right ears...Amber is one but hopefully she made the lives of a few tiny ladies and some dudes easier with that dialogue.
The Punk Princess outfit idea was a wonderful touch, especially the boots!
I am honestly surprised Amber and Scarlett managed to rescue her, I fully expected Natasha would escape with her setting up the next chapter entirely. That said now that Amber knows about her and the earful she will likely get from Becca about her that Domica will possibly come after her at some point.
Which honestly kind of makes me a little excited for a Anna/Naomi/Penelope/Natasha super group of big bads to rival Domica and her power. Helena is a definite wildcard but if she has a group like that behind her maybe she really could make a run at Domica especially if it involes losing Celine.
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You know I always kind of expected they'd end up together in some sort of love triangle or triad if you will. Scarlett's seemingly growing adoration of Becca along with the latters care for her and Amber's care for both of them really leads me to believe they will eventually end up as a couple in some poly form.
However that plays out is anybody's guess but this chapter ending really gives me inklings that things are headed to a Big GF/Little GF/Big GF situation with those three.
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I LOVED IT!
And to answer the next question I LOVED Natasha.
The whole thing was great in practice at first but REALLY ratcheted up for me when Natasha started subjecting her to humiliation/torture when she couldn't react without blowing the competition. The fart sequence was humiliating also as was the clothing rip but the first couple acts of sabotage/humiliation ESPECIALLY subjecting her to her ripe feet then making her curtsy to them was ABSOLUTELY DELICIOUS!
Yes Becca having to soldier through for Scarlett both tugged on the heart strings of the sensible reader and the fetish loins of the depraved viewer. Knowing she suffered for Scarlett was both endearing for their growing relationship and quite lovely knowing Natasha had her by the short hairs without even having to lift a toe.
As I stated earlier I fully expect this to end up in a three way poly situation with Amber likely serving as the fiery dominant force, Becca as the strong willed shoulder to cry/lean on and Scarlett as the loving yet sometimes firm handed or footed friend whom is there for them both when needed as guiding light when things get dark or out of hand.
Author's Response:
"Poor Becca bit off more than she could chew with
that bet but knowing how most soccers games seem to end in a tie or super low
scoring she likely thought hedging her bet on both scoring was a smart
one."
Yeah, it definitely sounded like a safe bet at the time! But
she seriously underestimated how badly those girls wanted her in that Tiny
Princess Pageant. Better luck next time, Rebecca!
"Amber's little show at the store was as always
incredible in both brattiness but execution, I was actually quite stunned to
see a fellow giant person actually stand up for the little ones for once. But
given the fact it was for the profit of the store I completely understand her
reasoning behind it."
Yeah, I needed to work some kind of fetish action into that
segment, and I’m really happy with how it turned out. Not only did we get some
classic bratty footplay from Amber, but we also got a glimpse into how
Scarlett’s views on bullying tinies contrast with Amber’s… that is to say Scarlett
was not happy about it! So in the end, we got both a character moment
and some spicy action... Now that's a 2 for 1 deal I can get behind :D
"The idea of giant bratty tomboys/goth
girls/jockettes etc bossing around tiny pageant queens is actually a pretty hot
one. Like they get to win the beauty pageant and get heaps of praise and love
rained down upon them but they also still carry as much importance as a gym
sock depending on the situation."
Yeah, I gotta admit, there’s so much potential in thia pageant format, and I feel like I barely scratched the surface here. There's
just so many cool (and hot!) things that could be done with that dynamic. Who
knows? Maybe we’ll see another competition down the line...
"I feel terrible for Scarlett not getting into her
chosen school but I have a sneaking suspicion that this leads to her and Amber
going to school together somewhere. Likely with Becca in toe(pun intended) and
making trouble for the tinies who end up in their dorm...maybe tiny sorority
pledges but who knows."
Yeah, it was pretty crushing for her, especially with how
dedicated she is to soccer. But as the saying goes, when one door closes...
another opens. And you know wherever those girls go next, there’s bound
to be some tiny trouble.
"I FUCKING LOVE NATASHA!
Especially the foot stuff early on, just such a wonderfully delicious scenario
especially with Becca forced to take it all without breaking...truly wonderful
stuff!
The fart sequence was quite the surprise though as I truly thought she'd get
another dose of the royal tootsies but you really ramped it up there and added
another layer to Becca's subjugation.
I truly hope her speech about Queens not needing to rule with fear or bullying
etc reached the right ears...Amber is one but hopefully she made the lives of a
few tiny ladies and some dudes easier with that dialogue."
Yessss man, that stuff was so fun to write, especially
the foot scenes. I loved writing Natasha as being on her feet all day before
the competition, so they were just ripe for poor tiny Rebecca. And I’m
really glad you singled out Rebecca’s speech, giving her a chance to push back,
to strike a blow against that toxic ‘Queen’ culture, was so satisfying.
And yeah... the fart punishment? Full-on humiliation.
Honestly, I’m not usually into fart stuff that much, but that landed hard for
me too. It got me going when I was writing it lol
"The Punk Princess outfit idea was a wonderful
touch, especially the boots!
I am honestly surprised Amber and Scarlett managed to rescue her, I fully
expected Natasha would escape with her setting up the next chapter entirely.
That said now that Amber knows about her and the earful she will likely get
from Becca about her that Domica will possibly come after her at some point.
Which honestly kind of makes me a little excited for a
Anna/Naomi/Penelope/Natasha super group of big bads to rival Domica and her power.
Helena is a definite wildcard but if she has a group like that behind her maybe
she really could make a run at Domica especially if it involes losing
Celine."
Thanks for highlighting the Punk Princess outfit, I spent way
too long figuring out what Rebecca would wear if she had full creative control.
It had to be defiant, rebellious, anti-establishment... totally her.
And yeah, it got scary for a moment there. Almost
stolen by Natasha to be some doll for what I’m sure are her equally
bratty daughters. Good save by Amber and Scarlett.
And man, I love this little Axis of Evil you’re
assembling… first Annabel, Naomi, and Penelope, now adding Natasha to the mix?
That’s one dangerously dominant crew!
"You know I always kind of expected they'd end up
together in some sort of love triangle or triad if you will. Scarlett's
seemingly growing adoration of Becca along with the latters care for her and
Amber's care for both of them really leads me to believe they will eventually
end up as a couple in some poly form.
However that plays out is anybody's guess but this chapter ending really gives
me inklings that things are headed to a Big GF/Little GF/Big GF situation with
those three."
Yeah, them being a trio is definitely the popular theory right
now! Though I keep asking myself… would Amber really share Rebecca?
Would Scarlett? Does Amber have a little poly in her like her mother? So many
possibilities... and so much fun to explore!
"I LOVED IT!
And to answer the next question I LOVED Natasha.
The whole thing was great in practice at first but REALLY ratcheted up for me
when Natasha started subjecting her to humiliation/torture when she couldn't
react without blowing the competition. The fart sequence was humiliating also
as was the clothing rip but the first couple acts of sabotage/humiliation
ESPECIALLY subjecting her to her ripe feet then making her curtsy to them was
ABSOLUTELY DELICIOUS!"
Dude, I am LOVING all the Natasha love. She was an absolute
blast to write… petty, entitled, bratty, and Becca’s perfect old-school
nemesis. This chapter was pure joy to create for me because it had all the
ingredients I love in giantess erotica.
And the foot curtsy? Oh man, that was one of the first
things I imagined when I came up with the pageant concept. It’s awesome to hear
that scene resonated, because it was so satisfying to write.
"Yes Becca having to soldier through for Scarlett
both tugged on the heart strings of the sensible reader and the fetish loins of
the depraved viewer. Knowing she suffered for Scarlett was both endearing for
their growing relationship and quite lovely knowing Natasha had her by the
short hairs without even having to lift a toe."
So happy to hear that, because honestly? If that didn't work, the whole chapter falls apart. Rebecca would’ve just told Natasha to shove it and walked away. But she’s fighting for Scarlett’s soul, her belief that people can do better, that good things can come if you just endure. Even if it means pressing her face into Natasha’s reeking feet to prove it.
Thanks for the insights man... and don't forget there's chapter on Monday :D
See ya then!





Date: July 17 2025 10:38 PM Title: PART 30
So I just read S1, and before I say anything else, I just want to commend you on writing up that soccer sequence. Soccer isn't a sport I watch a lot, but you not only made that sequence during the game easy to follow, but it was incredibly thrilling as well! I could the excitement that can only come from that big game feel radiating off of word! You also did a great job of selling that underdog vibe with Amber and Scarlett's team, building up Wesford Hall as a really big deal in a very short amount of time.
By the time Amber scored that game-winner, it felt like she had just accomplished the impossible. And in a story like this, where we pretty much know that's going to happen (because we all expected/wanted to see Rebecca in a pageant environment from the second Scarlett brought it up), that's really tough to do.
So yeah, awesome job here. I love all the attention paid to such a fun part of the chapter, even though it really doesn't add any fetish value to it. Things like this are what make this story so rich and easy to invest in!
You know, we've talked before about what makes for a great gentle scene, and this whole segment is a great example of that, and in the subtlest of ways, too.
When Scarlett first suggested that Rebecca take part in the pageant, the two giant teens begged Rebecca to say yes. Begged. An inch-high woman. I loved that so much. Their pleas were thunderous to little Rebecca, a power that could easily force her to become a pageant princess pounding her through body with their voices alone. There's something special about them asking her something in such a sweet, innocent way while at the same time deafening her through sheer size and power alone.
It's part of that whole restrained power thing I mentioned before. They love and respect Rebecca enough that they wouldn't dream of forcing this on her, but they so very easily could if they wanted to. Hell, I half-expected Amber to throw out a "Master says yes" just to see if it would work. She seems to have pulled back on that quite a bit since the fight over Naomi, though, and I'm not really sure how Scarlett would respond to that.
But on Rebecca's part, I love that she didn't feel forced because of their size but rather because she knew their ceaseless cute begging would wear her down eventually. It also makes sense that she would hate the idea of doing a pageant, as that lines up perfectly with what we already know about her past. The girls' reasoning for wanting her to do it was pretty flattering, though, saying that she that she's amazing enough to win even at something as ridiculous as that and that they just wanted to show the world how gorgeous she is (that's a pretty bold thing for Scarlett to say in front of Rebecca's girlfriend, now isn't it? Don't you get my hopes up for another three-way relationship, dammit!).
The bet was a great way for Rebecca to try to get out of the whole thing, and, again, you did a fantastic job of selling just how much of an uphill battle this would be for our two towering teens. That Amber rose to a higher level to get the job done was compelling enough, but for the two of them to look back at Rebecca as they were still celebrating, making it pretty clear that they were more excited about her becoming a pageant princess than their athletic accomplishments themselves was both sweet and another subtly gentle moment.
Again, and I can't emphasize this enough, they could easily make Rebecca do this. Or anything, really. So not only did they agree to a bet that it looked like they had no chance of winning, but they busted their asses and upped their game, upsetting a huge favorite, all just to fairly get Rebecca to do the thing they wanted her to, to do things on her terms instead of theirs, shows a deep level of care, love, and even devotion for Rebecca, without even saying a word. It was an incredible moment, even if Rebecca would disagree!
And by the way, I really enjoyed Rebecca getting lost in the moment and losing her mind cheering for her girlfriend before the reality of the situation kicked in. She should be happy that Amber pulled off such an amazing play and won the game for her team, and a former player like her is going to focus on what's happening in-game first and foremost. So I appreciate that you acknowledged that before we saw her start to sulk.
I think Scarlett is going to end up being a good influence on Amber. The way Scarlett was quick to scold Amber when those shoes came off in the tiny dress story and apologized for and glare at her after the shop attendant reprimanded Amber reiterates just how pro-tiny Scarlett is. That contrasted well with Amber going back to her old ways a bit, thinking that being a giant means that she can do what she wants in the presence of tinies. Still, though, she wasn't being intentionally malicious here, I think. She just wanted to free her feet and simply didn't care about what the tinies thought about it.
I really think that, deep down, Amber knows tinies are people just like her and not lesser beings. That's why she got such a kick out of tormenting Trevor in the earlier days; it was the fact that one of her mom's boyfriends was small enough that she could fight back (preemptively, even) that drove that. She would've gotten bored with it pretty quick if she really believed what her mom believes. That's also the reason that she was able to build her relationship with Rebecca, even when they were at each other's throats. I'd even go so far as to say this is why we haven't seen Amber kill a tiny yet, even though her beliefs appear to sometimes drift in the direction of people who do that shit regularly. It's just that, between the influences of her old friends (like Sara) and her mother, that simple truth has gotten buried deep inside her, letting her embrace some of those primal instincts that she knows she needs to rein in (which is why she asked why she does bad things to Rebecca a few chapters ago during that Naomi fight).
So having someone like Scarlett around, someone who really cares about her and actually spends time with her (and isn't an inch tall; sorry, Rebecca!), I think will keep Amber in check and even help draw out the part of Amber that doesn't think of tinies as inferior.
At the same time, though, don't think I didn't notice that Scarlett stopped complaining when Amber started gently dominating Rebecca like that. Granted I think she would have stepped in if Rebecca had acted grossed out by Amber's foot or didn't look like she was into it. But clearly, Rebecca was into it, and while we didn't get a look inside Scarlett's head in that particular moment, my mind went back to that video Scarlett was watching on her phone when she first "met' Rebecca. I'm pretty sure Scarlett went quiet because she was into what she was seeing, especially given her "condition." It seems Scarlett enjoys watching these two in their natural environment, so to speak.
Again I say, stop teasing me! I'm really starting to build up hope that we're going to see Amber and Rebecca welcome a third member into their relationship.
Speaking of Scarlett, much like the soccer match stuff, you did a hell of a job making Verdanne a big deal and then taking it away, all in one segment. I figured we'd hear more about the college after it was first mentioned, but damn, I didn't expect it to be that quick or that decisive in the outcome. But like Rebecca said, it certainly helped explain why she went all drill sergeant on Rebecca like that. This pageant became her focus, her distraction, something for Scarlett to throw all her energy into and not have to worry about being rejected from her dream school and feeling like everything she spent the past four years working toward was lost. That was a nice little mini-twist.
But aside from that revelation, I loved the contrast between Amber and Scarlett throughout the prep scenes. Scarlett was dialed in, doing research on which stores to go to, being meticulous with having Rebecca try things on, buying everything and relentlessly having Rebecca try every possible combination, and drilling the tiny on every event she would see at the pageant. By contrast, Amber mostly relaxed and complained, poking her head into the process here and there, but mostly keeping her face buried in her phone.
And that's the difference between them, probably the reason Scarlett will be playing soccer somewhere at the next level and Amber won't. They both worked hard to get Rebecca to go along with this, but Amber wants to enjoy it now and have some fun. Scarlett is focused on winning, though, and she's willing to put in the work to do so, as well as demand the same from those around her. Scarlett's fun comes from the real win, in this case Rebecca at the pageant. Getting Rebecca to do it was just the first step.
And again, I know Scarlett had extra motivation because of her rejection, but Amber pointed out that this is how Scarlett was on the soccer field all the time. So Scarlett's intense drive and Amber's lazier mentality after accomplishing the initial goal really stuck out to me here. I think there's merit to both approaches (Scarlett's work ethic is going to pay off more times than not, but if you don't take it easy once in while like Amber, you can miss out on a lot of fun along the way), but I love their opposing approaches here.
But back to Scarlett being rejected, I was so happy with Rebecca's response. She could have easily gotten out of the pageant after the girls saw how serious the whole thing actually was and how the other giants there didn't seem to care about fun (or very much for their tinies, for that matter) like they did. But Rebecca recognized that Scarlett needed a win, and she was willing to put herself through this nonsense to give it to her. That's dedication. That's friendship. That's ... maybe something more?
Oh, and as I've been praising the nuanced gentleness of this segment, I'd be remiss if I didn't bring up how adorable it was when Rebecca took control and bossed the two bigs around at the end there. The way Scarlett and Amber jumped at that "NOW!" was cute and empowering, and to see them scramble to follow Rebecca's orders, a complete flip on how every other tiny-giant dynamic backstage, was so gratifying to read.
The pageant itself should be interesting. If I had to venture a guess, based on the way you handled the Verdanne and Wesford stuff, I'm guessing that Natasha is going to show up in some way, shape, or form before the end of the chapter. It just seems too coincidental that Rebecca would think about her and that we'd get a bit of backstory on her without seeing her in a pageant environment.
Author's Response:
"So I just read S1, and before I say anything else,
I just want to commend you on writing up that soccer sequence. Soccer isn't a
sport I watch a lot, but you not only made that sequence during the game easy
to follow, but it was incredibly thrilling as well! I could the excitement that
can only come from that big game feel radiating off of word! You also did a
great job of selling that underdog vibe with Amber and Scarlett's team,
building up Wesford Hall as a really big deal in a very short amount of time."
Oh man, thank you for saying that! I debated for a long time
whether to trim that section down. I wasn’t sure how many of my readers were
into sports, and I worried the pacing might drag. But any time I tried to
shorten it, it just didn’t work… the scene needed space to breathe and build. I
put a ton of work into the flow, so hearing it came across as clear and
thrilling (especially for someone not into soccer!) really means a lot. It took
a lot of rewrites to get there.
I always get nervous adding non-fetish content, especially
something as extended as a sports sequence, but it felt like a genuine part of
the story. It helped bring out the character in all three girls, so I’m really
glad I stuck with it… and even more glad to hear it landed for you!
"It's part of that whole restrained power thing I
mentioned before. They love and respect Rebecca enough that they wouldn't dream
of forcing this on her, but they so very easily could if they wanted to. Hell,
I half-expected Amber to throw out a 'Master says yes' just to see if it would
work. She seems to have pulled back on that quite a bit since the fight over
Naomi, though, and I'm not really sure how Scarlett would respond to
that."
Yes! I’m really glad you brought this up, because you’re
right, Amber could have pulled the “Master says yes” card, but she
didn’t. And that’s exactly because of the Naomi fight.
Remember when we talked about not over-explaining things?
About letting readers feel the shift instead of spelling it out? That’s
what I was trying to do here. Back in Chapter 27, I almost added a line like
“something changed in their dynamic,” but it felt clunky and forced. Instead, I
wanted that change to come through naturally. Rebecca took some ground back.
She stood firm. And Amber (despite the possessiveness that still lingers) pulled
back.
It’s not gone, of course. That “Master” is still in Amber’s
blood. But I love how fluid and complicated it’s all become.
"The bet was a great way for Rebecca to try to get
out of the whole thing, and, again, you did a fantastic job of selling just how
much of an uphill battle this would be for our two towering teens. That Amber
rose to a higher level to get the job done was compelling enough, but for the
two of them to look back at Rebecca as they were still celebrating, making it
pretty clear that they were more excited about her becoming a pageant princess
than their athletic accomplishments themselves was both sweet and another
subtly gentle moment."
Oh man, thank you for this! Once again, I thought about
skipping the entire sports sequence and just starting the chapter with them all
agreeing to enter the pageant. But that just didn’t feel earned. It didn’t feel
like Rebecca. As you mentioned elsewhere… pageants are so not her.
The bet gave it emotional stakes. It allowed the arc to
start with some weight behind it and it gave Rebecca a clear reason for
entering the pageant. Also, I don’t know if you caught it, but I loved slipping in that
“tiny mob boss” line for Rebecca. It just fit her energy in that moment,
and I cracked up writing it.
"Again, and I can't emphasize this enough, they
could easily make Rebecca do this. Or anything, really. So not only did they
agree to a bet that it looked like they had no chance of winning, but they
busted their asses and upped their game, upsetting a huge favorite, all just to
fairly get Rebecca to do the thing they wanted her to, to do things on her
terms instead of theirs, shows a deep level of care, love, and even devotion
for Rebecca, without even saying a word. It was an incredible moment, even if
Rebecca would disagree!"
This is exactly what I was aiming for. Rebecca ended up
doing something she claimed to hate, but the way it happened mattered.
The teens rose to the occasion, and Rebecca was the one who put them there.
That’s its own kind of victory.
It might have been an athletic, high stakes bet, but there
was a softness underneath. At least, that’s how it felt when I was writing it
(Damn… the gentle stuff is getting to me!)
"And by the way, I really enjoyed Rebecca getting
lost in the moment and losing her mind cheering for her girlfriend before the
reality of the situation kicked in. She should be happy that Amber pulled off
such an amazing play and won the game for her team, and a former player like
her is going to focus on what's happening in-game first and foremost. So I
appreciate that you acknowledged that before we saw her start to sulk."
Yessss. I’m so glad you noticed that! I added that moment
the DAY BEFORE RELEASE. Reading it a final time before publish, the
scene felt off… Amber scores, and Rebecca immediately groans. It didn’t work.
I realized it was missing a beat of honesty. Of heart. Of
course Rebecca would cheer first. Of course the ex-player in her would get
swept up in that goal. Scored by her giant girlfriend. Once I added that moment
of raw celebration before the dread kicked in, everything snapped into
place.
"So having someone like Scarlett around, someone who
really cares about her and actually spends time with her (and isn't an inch
tall; sorry, Rebecca!), I think will keep Amber in check and even help draw out
the part of Amber that doesn't think of tinies as inferior."
Yeah, things have shifted a lot for Amber lately. First, she
and Rebecca grew close. Then she had that hard break from her old “friends”
after the confrontation with Sara. Now she’s building something new with
Scarlett.
But still, she was raised by Donnica. And she’s still (at
least a little) possessive of Rebecca. So yeah, all these forces are pulling on
her at once. She wants to be good. And I agree with you… deep down, she is a good kid.
But she’s still a teenager. Still forging who she is. And that’s a messy
process.
"At the same time, though, don't think I didn't
notice that Scarlett stopped complaining when Amber started gently dominating
Rebecca like that. Granted I think she would have stepped in if Rebecca had
acted grossed out by Amber's foot or didn't look like she was into it. But
clearly, Rebecca was into it, and while we didn't get a look inside Scarlett's
head in that particular moment, my mind went back to that video Scarlett was
watching on her phone when she first "met' Rebecca. I'm pretty sure
Scarlett went quiet because she was into what she was seeing, especially given
her "condition." It seems Scarlett enjoys watching these two in their
natural environment, so to speak."
Ahh, you caught that, huh? Yeah… she went quiet.
Was she just giving the couple space? Not her business? Or
was something else going on behind those sharp, observant eyes?
Guess we’ll find out ;)
"Speaking of Scarlett, much like the soccer match
stuff, you did a hell of a job making Verdanne a big deal and then taking it
away, all in one segment. I figured we'd hear more about the college after it
was first mentioned, but damn, I didn't expect it to be that quick or that
decisive in the outcome. But like Rebecca said, it certainly helped explain why
she went all drill sergeant on Rebecca like that. This pageant became her
focus, her distraction, something for Scarlett to throw all her energy into and
not have to worry about being rejected from her dream school and feeling like
everything she spent the past four years working toward was lost. That was a
nice little mini-twist."
Ah yes… story time on the adventures of pantsing:
Originally, the girls were just going to be intimidated by
the pageant and want to bail (there was no Verdanne rejection) and Rebecca was
going to push them to stay because they’d already come so far.
But that felt hollow. It didn’t feel like enough.
At the same time, I felt like Scarlett was too
intense during the prep, like, when I went back and re-read it, she kind of
felt just a tad bit out of character.
Then I had one of those “aha” moments.
What if Scarlett had just faced her own heartbreak?
Soccer… next-level play… university… rejection!
It all clicked.
I went back and added that Verdanne part at the start of the
segment with that ad for the pageant, and boom… it all came together. Suddenly
her intensity during the prep made sense and the pageant suddenly had MUCH
higher stakes.
"And again, I know Scarlett had extra motivation
because of her rejection, but Amber pointed out that this is how Scarlett was
on the soccer field all the time. So Scarlett's intense drive and Amber's
lazier mentality after accomplishing the initial goal really stuck out to me
here. I think there's merit to both approaches (Scarlett's work ethic is going
to pay off more times than not, but if you don't take it easy once in while
like Amber, you can miss out on a lot of fun along the way), but I love their opposing
approaches here."
Yeah, just jumping back, that was definitely the goal with
this segment... I really wanted to show Scarlett’s personality by contrasting
her against Amber’s. She was always going to be the full-on drill sergeant,
that part never changed. But at the same time, she’s got a soft spot for
tinies, so I started to wonder if maybe I’d pushed her too far during the
pageant prep. Then the Verdanne rejection clicked into place, and suddenly it
all made sense. It gave her edge a reason, gave her drive some heartbreak
behind it. Felt like it rounded her (and the segment) out perfectly.
At least... that’s what I was going for!
"Oh, and as I've been praising the nuanced
gentleness of this segment, I'd be remiss if I didn't bring up how adorable it
was when Rebecca took control and bossed the two bigs around at the end there.
The way Scarlett and Amber jumped at that "NOW!" was cute and
empowering, and to see them scramble to follow Rebecca's orders, a complete
flip on how every other tiny-giant dynamic backstage, was so gratifying to
read."
Haha YESSS. I love that moment. Especially when Rebecca
slams her little foot right before yelling “NOW!” She’s always putting others
first, even at her own expense. And I knew you’d appreciate the power flip,
especially after our talk about restraint in gentle scenes.
So glad you enjoyed this stretch of the story. Soccer,
pageants, gentle moments... it’s been a ride. But the real excitement?
Oh, that’s just about to begin in segment 2 ;)





Date: July 15 2025 12:21 AM Title: PART 30
hey dude how are you doing ! Also great chapter and uhhhhhh …… YEEEEEEEES FART CONTENT FINALLY!!!!! Hell yeah it hit the right spot it was perfect in every way!
Anyway - love the sense of love between the girls and showing how much they care about each other it’s great to see!
Natasha is my favorite giantess at the moment at least in terms of cruelness lol
overall great job
Author's Response:
Haha man, I figured if anything would bring you back to the review page it would be a fart scene ;)
And I am going to be honest with you, I initially wrote it to experiment a little with the fetish (and throw you a little something!) but I actually got a little turned on writing it! Maybe you are on to something...
Loving the feedback on Natasha, she was so fun to write! The evil queen ruling over her tiny princess. I had initially wrote her for just this chapter, but she might need to come back!
Anyways man it was great hearing form you again, I was wondering if you were still reading after I took my break. You should chime in more often, messages like these keep me going ;)
Thanks for the support!





Date: July 14 2025 11:41 PM Title: PART 30
What an incredible chapter. I don't expect any of that to happen. I can't wait to go deeper with the longer review. Thank you for this chapter, and congratulations on another milestone: 30 chapters. What a journey since this dinner with Donnica, Trevor, and Amber!
Author's Response:
Yes wow! It's been a crazy ride starting all the way back in chapter 1 at dinner with Trevor, Amber and Donnica!
I had no idea I would write this much back then. I'm glad you are still enjoying the story and there is plenty more to come :)
Thanks for the review and of course I always look forward to your more in-depth analysis!





Date: July 12 2025 4:23 AM Title: PART 29
That shoe removal section and Helena's diatribe about how powerful feet are some of the hottest things I've ever seen put to keyboard here. Just truly excellently crafted verbiage in the midst our fetish porn.
Them trying to take down the government funded tiny protection programs are giving me a bit of real life heebie jeebies to be honestly. Sadly none of our current oppressors are likely as hot ruining everything as Helena and Dominica.
I still wonder how Trevor and Becca despite their devotions to their respective rulers/lovers would feel about the blatant destruction of lives we saw today. There has to be -some- of the old fire for tiny protection still inside them and if they knew about this I imagine it would come out full force.
Especially if they learned about the attempted to break down the government protection agency and send millions of tinies into harm's way just like the shanty town.
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Poor Naomi being taken advantage of by Anna just because her horrible mother had sent her there to follow the prim and proper footsteps of her friends. Becca would be must bummed if she knew what the girl was going through just for the sake of status and relationships to her mothers friends.
Of course she likely wouldn't be thrilled about how Naomi treated that helpless guy but Anna sure seemed interested in its outcome. Almost as if she spotted a future breaker in amongst all that gangly teenage flesh she mocked so carelessly earlier.
A union between Naomi and Anna could be a solid one for one or both of them but I am not sure the possibility of pissing off Amber due to it would be the right move for Anna at this current juncture.
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Ricci and Vikki seem to be the first time we've captured Tiktok in living form, really if this wasn't such a tight knit story I'd rather enjoy a one of them ruling over a few tinies with their bubbly yet overbearing ways. They definitely give me mall brat/pampered princess vibes but with the added bonuses of being smarter than your average findom or influencer.
Celine cooking Trevor's code was a nice touch, she'd be free as a bird with her skills if not for that dastardly Status C looming over her head. I would venture to guess eventually they find a way to bring her into the Becca/Trevor fold under the royal family but it will most likely be a herculean task for whomever embarks on it.
Celine really does seem like if another universe without the horrors of your typical giantess shenanigans she'd be Queen of the Tinies and a valued asset to whomever had her or worked with her instead of Helena's tiny maiden.
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Holy shit, here goes:
1.I must have misread as I really thought the Dynamic Duo were also big but the point of enjoying them in another universe interacting with tinies still stands.
2. Trevor gaining access to The Kingdom does seem ripe for shenanigans if he was so inclined. Helena seems to be bringing Domica slowly into her web but I would venture that Domica has ideas of her own on doing the same to Helena.
3. I would never have guessed Juliana was Helena's sister or at-least close enough to call her that. I understand it could be just a term for bigger women to use with each other in The Kingdom but it adds an interesting wrinkle if legit.
4. She used Celine's name! I'm stunned we're seeing the first real cracks of Helena's steely guise here. For a woman hellbent on bringing Domica to heel she might be in for a rude awakening if this slips any further especially around her minions or rivals/potential allies.
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Fuck you do a wonderful job of casting the people who ruthlessly and brutally murder tiny people as sympathetic in their own ways. Seriously you can feel the heartbreak and sadness and eventual joy for a girl escaping her shitty situation whom moments ago was willingly about to murder another living person under her fist.
Anna and Naomi could be a dark horse ensemble in this interlocking tale if they both manage to hold firm in the face of people like Domica and Naomi's mother. I could honestly see Penelope working her way into the group somehow after being shunned by Helena.
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I fucking LOVED the entire execution of the destruction from lead up to carnage. I honestly forgot about the tiny Helena had captured but judging by her slip up with Celine she will either survive for a few more chapters or being immediately killed in a show of force. I wouldn't be surprised if Helena was playing Domica to bring her into her fold as minion or oblivious ally but I would be a million dollars I don't have that it would end up the other way around.
I kind of figured there was a special relationship between the two given how valuable Helena saw her and how she went out of her way to torture and guard her but the Status C was a definite shock and something to expand on later I would assume.
Trevor gets a lot of W's it would seem, even ones that cover up a tiny settlement getting destroyed by a certain soccer playing titaness that also led to another settlement being destroyed by her domineering mother. I mean he means well but compared to Celine he seems to have gotten off rather easy in the shrinking game.
I need an alternative universe tale of Vikki and Ricci with their own tinies. Seriously seems like it would the most adorably oppressive regime we've ever seen on this website.
I'm happy they found each other honestly...I mean not for the tinies but as far as characters go those two definitely needed a win. I'd still be down for Penelope to join them at some point but not sure given if Anna found out it was her who screwed her other with the whole Status C thing there would be hell to pay.
I want to see how the Domica/Helena power struggle pays off as it likely ends with one of them either claimed by the other or as a terrifying duo of destruction. The Celine/Helena dynamic also heated up quiet nicely in this chapter. I'd also be lying if I didn't want to see Amber/Scarlet ruling over some tiny folks with their mighty soccer feet.
Author's Response:
"That shoe removal section and Helena's diatribe
about how powerful feet are some of the hottest things I've ever seen put to
keyboard here. Just truly excellently crafted verbiage in the midst our fetish
porn."
LOVE that you singled this out! I had such a blast writing
it… it was one of those moments I kept circling back to and tweaking. So glad
to see someone appreciate that stretch of dialogue!
"Them trying to take down the government funded tiny
protection programs are giving me a bit of real life heebie jeebies to be
honestly. Sadly none of our current oppressors are likely as hot ruining
everything as Helena and Dominica."
That really is the tragedy, isn’t it? Maybe we’d all be more compliant if our real-life destroyers were towering goddesses with giant, smelly
feet!
"I still wonder how Trevor and Becca despite their
devotions to their respective rulers/lovers would feel about the blatant
destruction of lives we saw today. There has to be -some- of the old fire for
tiny protection still inside them and if they knew about this I imagine it
would come out full force."
Definitely something worth thinking about, though I don't
think it would change Rebecca's feelings toward Amber much. Her mother? Sure.
But Amber and Rebecca are still locked into a more conventional, emotionally
insulated relationship… for now, at least. That larger political world hasn't
breached their bond yet.
"Of course she likely wouldn't be thrilled about how
Naomi treated that helpless guy but Anna sure seemed interested in its outcome.
Almost as if she spotted a future breaker in amongst all that gangly teenage
flesh she mocked so carelessly earlier. A union between Naomi and Anna could be
a solid one for one or both of them but I am not sure the possibility of
pissing off Amber due to it would be the right move for Anna at this current
juncture."
You think Amber would flip out about a Naomi/Annabel
partnership? That’s an interesting angle. I do wonder if she (and Rebecca) might
eventually get caught up in their orbit. A union between the breaker and the
goth girl certainly seems to be brewing by the end of this chapter. ;)
"Ricci and Vikki seem to be the first time we've
captured Tiktok in living form, really if this wasn't such a tight knit story
I'd rather enjoy a one of them ruling over a few tinies with their bubbly yet
overbearing ways. They definitely give me mall brat/pampered princess vibes but
with the added bonuses of being smarter than your average findom or
influencer."
Haha yes… except they're actually tinies themselves!
Appreciate you catching that. I may need to tweak the clarity of their
introduction a bit. Feedback like this helps a ton, thank you.
"Celine cooking Trevor's code was a nice touch,
she'd be free as a bird with her skills if not for that dastardly Status C
looming over her head. I would venture to guess eventually they find a way to
bring her into the Becca/Trevor fold under the royal family but it will most
likely be a herculean task for whomever embarks on it."
That Status-C drop was meant to hit hard. We spent so much
time showing how rare and serious it is (how deep the commitment has to go to even get it) and
it lands even heavier given the bitter rivalry between Helena and Celine. I
hope readers felt that whiplash of “Wait, how the hell did that happen?”
"Celine really does seem like if another universe
without the horrors of your typical giantess shenanigans she'd be Queen of the
Tinies and a valued asset to whomever had her or worked with her instead of
Helena's tiny maiden."
Absolutely. She’s got an iron will, and you can sense
there’s a deeper history there… moments of triumph in her past. I’m excited to
dive into her backstory soon, and even more excited to show you where she’s
headed.
"1.I must have misread as I really thought the
Dynamic Duo were also big but the point of enjoying them in another universe
interacting with tinies still stands."
Haha yeah, easy mistake. But I love the idea… glittery,
overbearing princess-types with their own fleet of tinies? Would be fun as
hell. And they do have that sweet energy that sets them apart from most
of the giantesses in this story.
"2. Trevor gaining access to The Kingdom does seem
ripe for shenanigans if he was so inclined. Helena seems to be bringing Domica
slowly into her web but I would venture that Domica has ideas of her own on
doing the same to Helena."
Exactly. This so-called Kingdom is definitely going to be
fertile ground for all kinds of things. Trevor’s in now, so whatever’s waiting
down there… he’s about to find out.
"3. I would never have guessed Juliana was Helena's
sister or at-least close enough to call her that. I understand it could be just
a term for bigger women to use with each other in The Kingdom but it adds an
interesting wrinkle if legit."
You were right to question it, they’re not actual sisters.
But yes, that term points to something deeper within another culture they’re apart
of… something Helena’s not quite ready to fully explain. Not yet anyways.
"4. She used Celine's name! I'm stunned we're seeing
the first real cracks of Helena's steely guise here. For a woman hellbent on
bringing Domica to heel she might be in for a rude awakening if this slips any
further especially around her minions or rivals/potential allies."
Right? That was one of my favorite Helena moments… watching
her slip. And it was Celine who drew that out of her. There’s definitely
something between them.
"Fuck you do a wonderful job of casting the people
who ruthlessly and brutally murder tiny people as sympathetic in their own
ways. Seriously you can feel the heartbreak and sadness and eventual joy for a
girl escaping her shitty situation whom moments ago was willingly about to
murder another living person under her fist."
Thank you, that’s honestly one of my favorite things about
writing this genre. I love crafting a giantess morality that feels as alien and
towering as they are… operating on their own scale of ethics. Naomi’s personal
life versus how she treats tinies? That contrast is a goldmine to write.
"Anna and Naomi could be a dark horse ensemble in
this interlocking tale if they both manage to hold firm in the face of people
like Domica and Naomi's mother. I could honestly see Penelope working her way
into the group somehow after being shunned by Helena."
Haha you know, someone pointed out that in CH28, both
Penelope and Annabel failed their respective alpha women. So yeah, maybe
they’ve got more in common than they think…
"I fucking LOVED the entire execution of the
destruction from lead up to carnage. I honestly forgot about the tiny Helena
had captured but judging by her slip up with Celine she will either survive for
a few more chapters or being immediately killed in a show of force. I wouldn't
be surprised if Helena was playing Domica to bring her into her fold as minion
or oblivious ally but I would be a million dollars I don't have that it would
end up the other way around."
Oh yeah, don’t forget about the little keepsake ;) There’s
definitely something brewing between Helena and Donnica, at least from Helena’s
perspective. She keeps hinting at something more… the Kingdom, her estate,
calling Juliette “sister,” and don’t forget Penelope referring to herself as a “goddess in
waiting.” What does it all mean?
"Trevor gets a lot of W's it would seem, even ones
that cover up a tiny settlement getting destroyed by a certain soccer playing
titaness that also led to another settlement being destroyed by her domineering
mother. I mean he means well but compared to Celine he seems to have gotten off
rather easy in the shrinking game."
He really does seem to coast through chaos a bit, huh? Well…
except when Penelope captured him and raped him. Oh, and now he’s
technically Helena’s property. Maybe the dice are starting to turn...
"I'm happy they found each other honestly...I mean
not for the tinies but as far as characters go those two definitely needed a
win. I'd still be down for Penelope to join them at some point but not sure
given if Anna found out it was her who screwed her other with the whole Status
C thing there would be hell to pay."
I really follow my gut with this story… sometimes I just get
a pairing or a moment in my head and go, “Yup. That has to happen.”
Annabel and Naomi was one of those. Total slam dunk the second I realized it.
I’m so glad early feedback on them is clicking. more to come from those 2 for sure!
"I want to see how the Domica/Helena power struggle
pays off as it likely ends with one of them either claimed by the other or as a
terrifying duo of destruction. The Celine/Helena dynamic also heated up quiet
nicely in this chapter. I'd also be lying if I didn't want to see Amber/Scarlet
ruling over some tiny folks with their mighty soccer feet."
Oh just you wait, the Helena/Donnica and Celine/Helena
tensions are about to explode in the coming chapters. It’s going to be a lot.
As for Amber and Scarlett… well, let’s just say we may be
checking in on those two (and Rebecca) next chapter ;)
And speaking of next chapter, heads up! I’ll be releasing back-to-back
chapters over the next two Mondays. One tomorrow, one on the 21st. It was
originally one massive chapter, but it was too big for a single drop, so I
split it. Can’t wait to share it all with you.
Your feedback always makes me re-engage with the material in the best way, thank you so much!





Date: July 11 2025 8:19 PM Title: PART 29
Another fantastic chapter! First, I want to say I really love how segment 1 can be transposed to our world, with rich people never visiting the areas of lower-class people, the fact that some live in palaces while others in the same city are homeless, and even the destruction of the cardboard place, which can be compared to moments when homeless people and animals are forced to leave during major events (for example, the Paris Olympics, when many homeless people were sent elsewhere to present a good image of the city). The laws also make life even harder for tiny people, reflecting real-world policies that worsen conditions for the middle and lower classes.
To speak more about the chapter, the start adds even more royalty to Helena’s character. The way you describe her in the city feels like a queen visiting a peasant village. Her approach to the situation with Donnica is incredibly smart, which adds depth to her character. For a long time, she was described as the “mean Donnica,” but in this arc, we see she’s far more complex. While she shares some similarities with Donnica, she’s distinctly different, thinking more strategically while Donnica is often driven by emotions, as we see again in this segment. Before the big conversation, the best moment comes when Helena shows Donnica the cupboard town. It’s great because it reveals more about how tiny society is structured in America, and with the information about their status, we see how messed up this system is. The highlight of this chapter is when our two goddesses remove their shoes, letting the tiny people experience the heat and smell of their powerful feet. It’s well-executed, creating a paradox where people are dying and suffering while the two giantesses engage in a heated conversation. The only thing that could’ve enhanced it is a perspective from the tinies to heighten the paradox, but as you mentioned in the review of “It Was Me,” it would’ve made the chapter too long. I also love how Helena uses Donnica’s emotional nature to her advantage, leading her exactly where she wants: helping her to suppress even more rights for the tiny people. What I like most about Helena in this chapter is when she makes Donnica realize she’s a hypocrite. Donnica turned the office into a hellish place for tinies yet got upset when something happened to Trevor. It’s refreshing to see someone other than Trevor confront her. I also enjoyed the subtle moment when they look at each other’s shoes, both thinking about switching them. It was sexy and felt like a moment of mutual acceptance, seeing each other as equals. The ending, when Helena tells Donnica she’ll need Trevor to stay out of trouble, really highlights his status-C reality—he’s now nothing more than an object.
Now, onto S2 with poor Annabel, who is rejected by Donnica, her name removed from Trevor’s status-C, and worst of all, forced to “babysit” Naomi, who isn’t the greatest assistant for Annie. For Naomi, it’s the worst time to be associated with Annabel. She’s so angry, sad, and disappointed that she projects all her struggles onto Naomi, making her life as difficult as possible first with boring administrative tasks Naomi fails at, then with pointless manual labor, like moving huge quantities of paper for the printer (which they don’t even use) or carrying water for the fountain despite the delivery man offering to do it. Worst of all, Annabel uses Victoria as a threat to force Naomi to obey every command. Inevitably, Naomi drops the water, it was far too heavy. When she goes to clean the mess, luck finally smiles on her. While grabbing a mop, she spots a tiny, unclaimed, perfect for her to play with. She has something she really wants to do: rub her sore feet. For Edward, however, it’s the opposite. He was just a regular man working when he contracted the virus and shrank in the worst place possible—Donnica Cernovich’s office. I love that everyone knows how awful this place is for tinies. The fact that the virus is still active is crucial information (please, let Victoria catch the virus and end up in the hands of the worst possible giantess, or maybe on Azurea Island, exposed to rich women). Adding context to Edward’s character deepens this dystopian world. Unlike many dystopian stories where only the poor suffer, in DAW, anyone can be affected, which is compelling. Back to Naomi and Edward, the emotions they experience are well-crafted. Edward moves from fear to hope to despair, while Naomi’s journey is the reverse—she starts in despair, finds happiness when she realizes she can torment Edward, then feels fear when Annabel catches her, and finally hope when Annabel doesn’t care and even encourages her to crush him. This segment is also really hot, with Naomi using Edward to soothe her feet. Another great moment is Annabel discovering Naomi barefoot, playing with a tiny man—the fear in Naomi, the brief hope in Edward, and then Annabel casually placing her high heel on him, showing how she views tinies. Finally, the crushing moment under Naomi’s huge feet is fatalistic. The little sentence at the end, hinting that Naomi and Annabel will grow closer, is a nice tease.
The highlight of this chapter is undoubtedly the third segment: Trevor meeting Celine again. Before this, we’re introduced to new characters, like Alexandra, the “new” Annabel, who, sadly for Trevor, is far less kind to him. He tries his best to get Annabel back, but Donnica is too angry to allow it for now. I feel like this aspect of Donnica’s personality will backfire eventually, as Annabel, despite her mistake, is the best at keeping Trevor safe since she genuinely cares about him. Donnica even keeps Trevor in her ass for a few days to assert control over him. This segment also reintroduces Juliette, one of Helena’s assistants who supervises for her clan, and two new tiny women, Vikki and Ricci, sent from Helena’s estate to ensure Trevor and Celine don’t do anything to harm Helena. These two tiny women are special in a good way. I really enjoy the contrast between Helena and Donnica. Even though Helena isn’t fond of tinies, she recognizes their value as assets, unlike Donnica, who only uses them as office slaves, regardless of their potential, even after seeing how useful Chelsea was before meeting Annabel’s shoe. It doesn’t seem like Donnica wants to change. This segment truly begins when Celine appears, providing more context about the “kingdom” and her role as an outcast—an intriguing title that could mean many things. Perhaps she was the queen before shrinking, or something else entirely. There’s so much potential around Helena that could change the world of DAW forever. The fun starts when Celine calls Trevor a hypocrite, which is interesting since Helena said the same about Donnica in segment one. It’s true maybe that’s why Trevor and Donnica need each other. Personally, I think Trevor only cares about tinies with a strong will to fight and change their situation, like Rebecca or Celine. For the broken ones, he feels nothing or even anger, possibly reflecting his fear of becoming like them—a tiny submitting to giantesses to survive, something he’s fought since the beginning despite his attraction to powerful giantesses. Before they can dive deeper, they have a mission to complete, and it’s incredible. The discovery of Vikki and Ricci, who are both brilliant and hilariously dumb, is perfect. It’s refreshing to have tinies who are lighter and less traumatized, enjoying life, joking, and living in their own colorful world. Some lines are just perfect, like: “You’re handsome,” she said plainly, like she was noting the weather. Then, something shifted between the duo. That one statement landed like a revelation. The two of them locked eyes, gasped, then immediately began whispering and giggling like schoolgirls who’d just discovered a new celebrity crush. Trevor turned back to Celine, chuckling. “They don’t seem so bad.” Celine’s slight jealousy is also fun. The best moment of this segment is the competition between Celine and Trevor, with Vikki and Ricci commenting in the background. To everyone’s surprise, Trevor wins, but while he’s celebrating, Celine does the impossible in just a minute, completing the full Minar-Legal-Sync integration to prove she’s the best. The most significant part, though, is the revelation about Celine and Helena’s relationship: Celine has a status-C, and Helena is her owner. This raises so many questions, as status-C is hard to obtain and requires the tiny’s strong desire. How did Helena manage it? So many intriguing possibilities. This segment is one of, if not the best in the entire story, with new incredible characters, funny moments with Vikki and Ricci, and, of course, Celine. The next segment takes us to Helena’s palace during a review of the meeting between Trevor and the Outcast. I was surprised by how kind Helena is toward Vikki and Ricci, acting like a sister or mother, which was a pleasant twist. It’s also interesting that she calls Juliette “sister,” which feels like the kingdom operates like a sorority. I wonder how it works—ranks for tinies seem based on their value to the kingdom (e.g., Vikki and Ricci’s coding skills are incredible assets), but we later learn they’ve also “met” Helena’s body, so perhaps ranks are based on time spent in the kingdom for both giantesses and tinies. It would be fun to see low-ranking giantesses below high-ranking tinies to teach them humility. I also appreciate that Helena listens to Vikki and Ricci, not just Juliette, showing she’s smart enough to value all her assets, regardless of size—an amazing aspect of her character. The conversation between Helena and Juliette about Donnica is intriguing. I wonder why Helena wants her so badly Donnica seems like she could be a liability with her personality. It must be something significant, as even Juliette doesn’t understand. The line that stood out most was: “You seem to have an awful lot of faith in a woman who’s done nothing but spit in your face. You’re staking quite a bit on someone who hasn’t even been tested.” What does this “test” mean? The big part of this segment is the conversation between Vikki, Ricci, and goddess Helena. It was fun and heartwarming. I was worried Vikki and Ricci would be scared around Helena, but they remain their funny, slightly naive selves. Helena stays kind, calmly listening to her “cute” tinies, offering a different view of her typically dominant or mean persona. The highlight is when Helena learns Trevor outsmarted the other tinies, but the real climax is her confrontation with Celine. Despite Celine’s defiance, she can’t stand up to a giantess. When Helena cries out Celine’s name, which is forbidden in the Kingdom, it shows there’s more than just rivalry between them. Ultimately, Vikki and Ricci win—Trevor will enter the Kingdom. The final segment focuses on Naomi and Annabel, whose relationship has evolved significantly since segment 2. We find them in a familiar place: Annie’s workshop, where she reveals her secret—she’s a breaker. Naomi’s reaction is like a kid in a toy store, which is fitting despite the workshop being anything but. It’s heartwarming to see Naomi start to trust Annabel, despite her fear of adults due to her mother. When training begins and Annie uses the ruler on Naomi, she notices something’s wrong. The moment Annie realizes what happened is perfect she knows exactly what to do, likely thanks to Trevor’s earlier advice. Giving Naomi the key to her place and permission to visit shows another side of Annabel. I also liked how she regrets using Victoria as a threat against Naomi, paralleling Donnica’s regret for slapping her. These parallels between characters are always compelling. The chapter ends sweetly with Annabel teaching Naomi to be a breaker, though it’s less sweet for the tinies who’ll suffer.
In conclusion, this chapter is amazing, adding context and raising countless questions. Vikki and Ricci are perfect additions, bringing much-needed humor to this dark story. The evolving Naomi-Annabel relationship has the potential to change a lot. However, I’m starting to worry for Donnica—her situation could become dire if Helena changes her mind and goes after her.
Author's Response:
"Another
fantastic chapter! First, I want to say I really love how segment 1 can be
transposed to our world, with rich people never visiting the areas of
lower-class people, the fact that some live in palaces while others in the same
city are homeless, and even the destruction of the cardboard place, which can
be compared to moments when homeless people and animals are forced to leave
during major events (for example, the Paris Olympics, when many homeless people
were sent elsewhere to present a good image of the city). The laws also make
life even harder for tiny people, reflecting real-world policies that worsen
conditions for the middle and lower classes."
This is exactly why I treasure these reviews… you bring in
real-world parallels I hadn’t consciously considered. But you’re absolutely
right: maybe I am constructing a kind of real-world narrative beneath
all the madness. The example of the Paris Olympics was such a sharp comparison
too; it really struck me. Thank you for making me see the chapter through a new
lens.
"What
I like most about Helena in this chapter is when she makes Donnica realize
she’s a hypocrite. Donnica turned the office into a hellish place for tinies
yet got upset when something happened to Trevor. It’s refreshing to see someone
other than Trevor confront her. I also enjoyed the subtle moment when they look
at each other’s shoes, both thinking about switching them. It was sexy and felt
like a moment of mutual acceptance, seeing each other as equals."
Yessssss, that shoe moment was such a charged scene… and
you’re absolutely right, it wasn’t just them admiring footwear. It was this
strange, intimate gesture of mutual recognition. For the first time in a long
while, they were on equal footing again... ironically, by literally looking at
each other’s feet. I’m so glad that landed for you.
"For
Naomi, it’s the worst time to be associated with Annabel. She’s so angry, sad,
and disappointed that she projects all her struggles onto Naomi, making her
life as difficult as possible first with boring administrative tasks Naomi
fails at, then with pointless manual labor, like moving huge quantities of
paper for the printer (which they don’t even use) or carrying water for the
fountain despite the delivery man offering to do it."
Yes! Great read here. I honestly don’t think Annabel
would’ve been quite this ruthless to Naomi under normal circumstances, but
something deeper was definitely going on. It reminded me of when she first met
Trevor and spiraled over George ghosting her. For all her cruel confidence,
Annabel can be surprisingly emotional, and that volatility is part of what
makes her such a fascinating chaos engine. I just hope she and Donnica find
their way back to each other someday...
"Before
this, we’re introduced to new characters, like Alexandra, the “new” Annabel,
who, sadly for Trevor, is far less kind to him. He tries his best to get
Annabel back, but Donnica is too angry to allow it for now. I feel like this
aspect of Donnica’s personality will backfire eventually, as Annabel, despite
her mistake, is the best at keeping Trevor safe since she genuinely cares about
him. Donnica even keeps Trevor in her ass for a few days to assert control over
him. "
Absolutely. Donnica's letting her emotions steer the ship
here, and her anger clouds what should be obvious, that Annabel is uniquely
suited to protect Trevor. Still… after the wild ride Trevor just went through,
maybe some time in Donnica's ass wasn’t the worst place to recover. :D
"The
fun starts when Celine calls Trevor a hypocrite, which is interesting since
Helena said the same about Donnica in segment one. It’s true maybe that’s why
Trevor and Donnica need each other."
I love that you caught this! It hadn’t even occurred to me
until you pointed it out, but yes, two of our leads being called hypocrites in
the same chapter, and by different people, no less. That parallel is chef’s
kiss. Maybe that’s what binds Trevor and Donnica together in the end; they
each reflect and reinforce the other’s flaws... and fantasies.
"The
discovery of Vikki and Ricci, who are both brilliant and hilariously dumb, is
perfect. It’s refreshing to have tinies who are lighter and less traumatized,
enjoying life, joking, and living in their own colorful world."
I love this take! Ricci and Vikki are such a joy to
write, even if I was nervous at first, those kinds of exaggerated, comedic
characters are a bit outside my usual rhythm. But giantess fantasy is wild and
over-the-top by nature, so it makes room for characters who are just as
outsized in personality. They totally flowed once I let them go. And don’t
worry… you’ll be seeing plenty more of them!
"The
most significant part, though, is the revelation about Celine and Helena’s
relationship: Celine has a status-C, and Helena is her owner. This raises so
many questions, as status-C is hard to obtain and requires the tiny’s strong
desire. How did Helena manage it? So many intriguing possibilities. "
I'm thrilled people are reacting to that reveal the way I
hoped! I spent several chapters establishing just how wild and difficult
Status-C is to achieve, it’s more than ownership, it’s a kind of legal love
pact that has to be entered willingly. And at the same time, I built up how
much Celine & Helena hate each other. So yeah... when that truth dropped,
that Helena had Celine’s Status-C, I wanted readers to go, “Wait, what?”
and immediately start theorizing. I’m so glad it landed that way!
"This
segment is one of, if not the best in the entire story, with new incredible
characters, funny moments with Vikki and Ricci, and, of course, Celine."
Thank you so, so much for that. Segment 3 of this chapter
honestly went through the most rewrites I’ve done yet… it had to do so
much: introduce major new characters, deepen others, carry its own internal
arc, and deliver a twist that would ripple forward. It’s probably my
favorite stretch I’ve written so far, so hearing you single it out means a lot.
"The
line that stood out most was: 'You seem to have an awful lot of faith in a
woman who’s done nothing but spit in your face. You’re staking quite a bit on
someone who hasn’t even been tested.' What does this 'test' mean?"
Indeed, what does the test mean? You caught something
very important here. That line is going to echo into Donnica’s future in a big
way. Let’s just say... her exam is coming sooner than she thinks.
"I
also liked how she regrets using Victoria as a threat against Naomi,
paralleling Donnica’s regret for slapping her. These parallels between
characters are always compelling."
I knew this moment would resonate with you! It was
such a relief to write Annabel reflecting like that. As much as I love her,
that moment where she threatened Naomi using Victoria, it hurt for me to write!
But characters grow through missteps, and her apology was soothing. And yes… you’re
spot on, Donnica’s own regret about the slap makes the parallel even sharper.
That contrast with Victoria… that’s where the real divide lies from her and
women like Annabel and Donnica.
"In
conclusion, this chapter is amazing, adding context and raising countless
questions. Vikki and Ricci are perfect additions, bringing much-needed humor to
this dark story. The evolving Naomi-Annabel relationship has the potential to
change a lot. However, I’m starting to worry for Donnica—her situation could
become dire if Helena changes her mind and goes after her."
It really does feel like Donnica and Helena are headed
toward something seismic, doesn’t it? The tension’s growing on both sides and
you’re right, the stakes are escalating. What’s Helena really planning? How
much danger is Trevor in… or Donnica for that matter? And is this mysterious
“kingdom” even real?
I guess we’ll find out soon enough!





Date: July 11 2025 6:39 AM Title: PART 29
Still, as she stepped into the room, she couldn’t help but feel her guarded nature rise up. She didn’t trust older people, especially ones who said they wanted to help. That said, these past few days had been... fun. Since the incident in the closet, the manual labor had all but disappeared, replaced by something lighter, more indulgent. And best of all? The little people.
That highlighted part right there says so much without giving any specifics at all. It explains Naomi's behavior throughout the rest of the segment, too. It seems as though Naomi's mother (fuck Victoria!) isn't the only adult to let the poor girl down. I wonder how many authority figures she trusted with the truth before and why they all refused to help her in the end.
If the abuse goes back far enough, I imagine Victoria had enough money and influence to make that sort of problem go away as much as she needed to back when she was married (I believe she's having financial problems nowadays, if I remember right). And now Naomi can't even trust anybody enough to say aloud that her mom hits her.
So now it makes even more sense why Naomi loves crushing tiny adults. We saw her make the decision to crush Edward back in S2 after he tried to use his "dad" voice and take control of the situation, and Naomi was caught in a crushing trance after not quite math teacher lady tried to lecture her on tinies being people. And before that, she took pure glee in yelling at that "bug" to kneel.
Authority has clearly been a crushing force to Naomi for her whole life, so of course she's desperate to crush it back whenever she sees it in a tiny. She had similar thoughts during her crushing session on the island too.
This also explains why she was never very responsive to Annabel, even before pissing the breaker off. Annie was just another authority figure to fear, to eventually betray her, to pretend to care only to reveal later that she never did. But Annabel, because of her own issues and guilt, cut right to the cruelty, not having the patience for what she thought was laziness and ineptitude from Naomi. So Annabel was unwittingly feeding Naomi's fears about her. It only makes sense that Naomi was so slow to trust her with the truth, even after they had started to get along better after the closet incident (RIP Edward).
On a bit of a lighter note, I think it's adorable that Annabel keeps calling Naomi "child" despite the small age difference. I'm not sure how much time has passed since Trevor gave that fateful advice to Annabel that changed her life (but not the lives of the tinies in her charge), but I remember that she was only 24 at the time. And Naomi was 18 at the island (and she's still in school, so maybe not a lot of time has passed?). So that's six years. Six years, and Annabel is calling her "child" and "sweet baby girl" like she's Naomi's grandmother! It made me laugh, but it was still very Annabel of her to do that.
Not only that, but I feel like it was part of Annabel expressing her joy at being able to pass her knowledge on to another person! She was excited from the start that Naomi shared her ... interest in tinies, and it was more than just having something in common with the younger girl. Annabel wanted to be a mentor, and after getting past her initial frustrations with Naomi, she saw someone she could mold and help shape into a good a breaker as she is. Maybe she just wanted the distraction after what happened with Trevor and Donnica. Maybe she's feeling lonely after being shut out by Donnica. Maybe some yet-to-be revealed fallout with Annabel's own family has her eager to connect with someone, feel that bond, and she jumped at the chance with Naomi.
I'm not 100 percent sure what was driving Annabel to want to mentor Naomi, but her excitement at the prospect of doing so was straight-up adorable!
Back to the family fallout thing, Annabel figured out what the deal with Naomi was pretty damn quick. She recognized the signs of abuse and knew exactly what they meant once she saw Naomi react to the ruler a few times. And even then, she knew something was wrong right away, but she tried to bury that feeling, convince herself it wasn't a big deal or any of her business. But after seeing it a second time with that tap to her arm and that other one to her hand as confirmation, it clicked for Annabel a lot faster than I would have expected.
So now I'm wondering if Annabel went through something similar or maybe even just knew somebody who did. That might explain the whole "goddess mother' and "little brother Trevor" talk, as well as the motherly way she comforted Naomi at the end of the chapter. Seriously, though, the way Annabel softly offered to let Naomi crush not quite math teacher lady and Naomi agreed with that "Okay" struck me as a mother comforting their child and giving in to some small thing to make them feel better. But yeah, if Annabel herself went through some trauma like that, it would help explain a lot about her state of mind for sure!
Then again, the one memory we've seen that she has of her father seemed to be a positive one (I Wanna Know What Love Is), so maybe that theory is bunk? Or maybe she's clinging to the one good memory of her childhood. Who knows? I mean other than you?
But man, it was so satisfying to see Annabel figure it out and immediate soften up the way she did. She no longer blamed Naomi for the way she carried herself at the office. Annabel knew it wasn't laziness that caused that. And she felt like shit for using the threat of Naomi's mother against the teen, not knowing until that very moment just what it was she had been hanging over Naomi's head the whole time.
Moments like these are why I love Annabel so much. She can be remarkably immature at times (RIP Chelsea) and bitter and cruel at others, but she also has this tremendous capacity for empathy. We saw it when she fell in love with Trevor, and we saw it here as well. I really enjoy seeing this side of Annabel, and it's those moments when this seems entirely absent from her being that make scenes like this one so sweet!
I was glad to see Annabel give Naomi a safe place to run to if she ever needs it, as well as a car service to get to Annabel's place. That was super nice of her, and, again, I love how much she cares about Naomi now that she knows what's going on. Of course, knowing the general tendencies of fiction, I can't help but worry that Naomi's access to Annabel's place is going to lead to some unforeseen complications somewhere down the road.
What a great way to close out the chapter! You kept hinting that we'd get back to these two by the end of it, but I didn't expect things to go in this direction so quickly!
Author's Response:
"So
now it makes even more sense why Naomi loves crushing tiny adults. We saw her
make the decision to crush Edward back in S2 after he tried to use his
"dad" voice and take control of the situation, and Naomi was caught
in a crushing trance after not quite math teacher lady tried to lecture her on
tinies being people. And before that, she took pure glee in yelling at that
"bug" to kneel.
Authority
has clearly been a crushing force to Naomi for her whole life, so of course
she's desperate to crush it back whenever she sees it in a tiny. She had
similar thoughts during her crushing session on the island too."
For sure,
Naomi has a deep-rooted issue with parental figures and adult authority. Even
going all the way back to the island, she gravitated toward putting people in
their place for daring to speak to her like she was a child or just for having
the nerve to look older than her (I remember she picked Trevor up off the table
for him asking her to take the choker off so she didn’t fight with her mother.)
That instinct has definitely marked her character throughout the story, and you
nailed the throughline: when someone reminds her of power she's been abused by,
her first response is to crush it.
"On
a bit of a lighter note, I think it's adorable that Annabel keeps calling Naomi
"child" despite the small age difference. I'm not sure how much time
has passed since Trevor gave that fateful advice to Annabel that changed her
life (but not the lives of the tinies in her charge), but I remember that she
was only 24 at the time. And Naomi was 18 at the island (and she's still in
school, so maybe not a lot of time has passed?). So that's six years. Six
years, and Annabel is calling her "child" and "sweet baby
girl" like she's Naomi's grandmother! It made me laugh, but it was still
very Annabel of her to do that."
Haha yes...
this made me laugh too. Naomi is 18, Annabel’s 24, so the age gap isn’t big at
all, and yet somehow, there is a gulf between them, not in years but in life
lived. What’s funny is I hadn’t actually planned for Annabel to call her
“child”, it was just something that came out naturally when writing her voice.
It felt so right for her in that moment, and I totally agree: it’s the most
Annabel thing imaginable.
"Not
only that, but I feel like it was part of Annabel expressing her joy at being
able to pass her knowledge on to another person! She was excited from the start
that Naomi shared her ... interest in tinies, and it was more than just having
something in common with the younger girl. Annabel wanted to be a mentor, and
after getting past her initial frustrations with Naomi, she saw someone she
could mold and help shape into a good a breaker as she is. Maybe she just
wanted the distraction after what happened with Trevor and Donnica. Maybe she's
feeling lonely after being shut out by Donnica. Maybe some yet-to-be revealed
fallout with Annabel's own family has her eager to connect with someone, feel
that bond, and she jumped at the chance with Naomi.
I'm not
100 percent sure what was driving Annabel to want to mentor Naomi, but her
excitement at the prospect of doing so was straight-up adorable!"
I think
you’ve mainly hit the bullseye here. That guilt from feeling like she failed
Donnica and Trevor? It’s absolutely pushing her to seek redemption elsewhere...
and mentoring Naomi is her shot at doing something right again. You’re so right
that it’s not just about having someone who shares her twisted interest in
breaking, it’s about connection. I also think the dynamic is really interesting
because with Donnica, Annabel gets to act like a kid. She lays all her
insecurities out, gets to be messy, emotional, vulnerable. But with Naomi? She
has to be the opposite. She has to hold it together. Be the adult. Maybe even
something like a mother figure. I’m genuinely excited to see where that takes
her.
"Back
to the family fallout thing, Annabel figured out what the deal with Naomi was
pretty damn quick. She recognized the signs of abuse and knew exactly what they
meant once she saw Naomi react to the ruler a few times. And even then, she
knew something was wrong right away, but she tried to bury that feeling,
convince herself it wasn't a big deal or any of her business. But after seeing
it a second time with that tap to her arm and that other one to her hand as
confirmation, it clicked for Annabel a lot faster than I would have
expected."
Yeah, this
is one of those places where Annabel’s background as a breaker really shines
through. She’s not just intuitive, she’s trained to detect pain. Trained to see
the little flinches, the tells, the ways people hide their fear. I actually
think she probably would’ve figured things out even faster if she wasn’t still
caught up in her own emotional mess post-Trevor. But once that second tap
happened? It was game over. She saw it all. And once she knew, she couldn’t
un-know it.
"But
man, it was so satisfying to see Annabel figure it out and immediate soften up
the way she did. She no longer blamed Naomi for the way she carried herself at
the office. Annabel knew it wasn't laziness that caused that. And she felt like
shit for using the threat of Naomi's mother against the teen, not knowing until
that very moment just what it was she had been hanging over Naomi's head the
whole time."
Totally
agree. Annabel’s unpredictable (so it could have gone a hundred ways) but I
loved writing her complete softening here. That moment of recognition, when she
sees someone like her in pain (and like you pointed out in your S2 review...
they are very similar) and all the cruelty just drops. It was honestly a treat
to write. I’m so glad you felt the shift land.
"What
a great way to close out the chapter! You kept hinting that we'd get back to
these two by the end of it, but I didn't expect things to go in this direction
so quickly!"
Haha hey,
I’ve got a lot of story to tell! I don’t have time to mess around! These two
have an arc coming that’s going to stretch and twist and (hopefully) hit hard.
I’m just getting started!





Date: July 10 2025 6:28 AM Title: PART 29
Ooh! Ooh! I'd like to solve the puzzle, Alex!
Okay, maybe I don't have all the answers yet. Shit, maybe I don't have any of them. But I feel like S4 gave us a lot of information and that I now have a better understanding of what's going on here.
I'll admit that Helena calling Juliette "sister" threw me for a loop at first. Of course, my first thought was that this was some revelation that the two of them were family, but that didn't feel quite right. Given the way it was used and the other information at our disposal, I pivoted to them sharing another kind of sisterhood, one that was more ... organizational than familial.
Because Juliette definitely didn't talk to Helena like a normal subordinate in this segment. At times, it almost felt like she was debriefing Helena rather than the opposite. And Helena, when questioned about Donnica, consciously avoided telling Juliette the whole truth (that we don't even know, as that conversation between Donnica and herself took place off screen) but gave her something. Juliette even objected to Trevor being brought on estate grounds, and the way she did this didn't sound like a personal complaint but rather like she was invoking some sort of code or law to which they were both bound. Combine that with the reserved demeanor with which Helena addressed Juliette and Helena's tolerance for her subordinate's questioning, and it becomes clear that something different is going on here.
Then, as Juliette's concerns about Donnica were dismissed, she called Helena a "goddess," but she hadn't acted as though she worshipped Helena throughout the whole conversation. It came off more as title than something devout. This made me think back to Penelope whining about being a "goddess in waiting." as well as all that talk about her "fellowship" for that matter. It's starting to become clear why Helena holds the young Brit's mother in such high regard.
Then there was this passage:
Because Donnica was unreadable, always just outside the sphere of full comprehension. Unyielding, yes. Obstinate, often. But it was precisely those qualities that hinted at the makings of a sovereign. All rulers had to be a little isolated, a little unreadable, a little immune to the consensus of lesser minds.
Sovereign sure seems to refer to something specific here, rather than a generic ruler of tinies. And there are multiple "rulers" by the sound of it, each meeting a certain standard that Helena is utterly convinced Donnica meets.
Then there was Juliette mentioning that Donnica hadn't even been "tested" yet. For a second, I thought this might refer to the virus and a need to ensure that Donnica was immune before moving forward with their plans. I quickly dismissed that notion, though, factoring in this new piece of information with everything else that this segment (and some of the ones before it) revealed. I now think that this test ties in with the sovereign and ruling stuff.
Not to mention how strict certain rules seem to be within Helena's inner circle. Arguments about who can and can't be on the property or see the kingdom. Even Helena being concerned at saying "the Outcast's" name (oh, don't worry; we'll get to that!) before realizing that Vikki and Ricci weren't going to call her out on it. Hell, Helena was concerned about the two BFFs being traumatized from hearing Trevor say Celine's name. Even the "subject" and "slave" designations seem rigid and fixed rather than loose terms Helena made up for her amusement.
Piecing all this together, I think I had things all wrong from the start. My assumption was that Helena was masterminding some grand plan, and maybe she is doing her own thing in this instance (I don't know for sure), but it seems to me that she's part of some greater organization, and I don't believe she's at the top of it. I think Penelope's mother is highly respected within this organization, though, which is the connection that led to Helena taking the British brat into her emply (and probably her link back into the story).
Furthermore, I think Goddess is a rank within this organization, one that comes with its own kingdom (so that would mean there are several of these kingdoms around somewhere). And Helena wants to bring Donnica into the fold, making her a "goddess" as well, given all her thoughts on Donnica as a sovereign. Helena hasn't told her this yet, though, maybe because she can't. But now that bit at the end of the first segment where Helena notes that she can only tell Donnica part of the truth by showing her the Kingdom makes a lot more sense now.
Of course, I still don't know what this organizations larger goals are (or if it's even actually a thing!) or if what Helena is doing is aligned with said goals or if she's trying to advance her own agenda or move up the rungs of the organization on her own terms. It's also still not clear why they need Donnica, maybe for those government connections Helena is so worried about? Or perhaps it's more personal than that, with Helena's admiration of Donnica clouding her judgment a bit. And what could they need Trevor for within the Kingdom? Something Vikki and Ricci, with their "terrifying competence" can't solve? Nor could Celine? Or did Celine sabotage the thing in the first place and that's why Trevor is needed? That private hotspot from the previous segment is starting to make a lot more sense, too.
Speaking of making sense, this theory would explain why Juliette is still around when so many other "Helena girls" have disappeared. She's a plant for the organization. Hell, maybe Helena approached Donnica about working at the firm because of the organization in the first place, although I do also believe Helena when she says that she respects that Donnica didn't beg Helena to work for her like all the other firms. Both things can be true, though.
There's still a lot to learn about this situation, but I feel like it's coming together. Or maybe I'm wrong, and you're doing an awesome job at throwing me off the scent! Wouldn't it be hilarious if virtually everything I just said, all those words, is completely wrong?
And while we're talking about revelations coming together, I think I missed something obvious about all this Outcast stuff before. Mainly the outcast part. That certainly implies that Celine was part of the Kingdom at some point, doesn't it? Maybe whatever she did to fuck shit up in the Kingdom is why she was exiled? And does this mean that she was a "subject" at one point? I can't imagine a slave having that kind of access to whatever system she fucked up. And it sounds like being the Outcast means being a slave, so that would seem to suggest that Celine wasn't a slave before. So did Celine volunteer to be part of the Kingdom, and if so, why?
This is all really intriguing, but I still don't think we have enough information to know if any of this is true for sure. It's a nice working theory, though, I think.
Aside from theories and guesses, I was very much surprised with how Helena treated and regarded Ricci and Vikki. I didn't expect her to show such warmth and care for tinies. It was actually really sweet. Of course, it helps that the two tinies were being absolutely adorable in her presence, but this made me wonder if Helena feels similarly about all her "subjects" or if these two are just the exception. Either way, I really enjoyed seeing that motherly demeanor from her when dealing with them!
Of course, at least on the surface, this looks like hypocrisy on her part, which would be kind of ... pathetic (hey look, I said the thing!).
Oh, and like I mentioned briefly above, I find it really interesting that both Helena and Vikki and Ricci all seem bound to the same set of rules, despite their differences in size and rank. I'm really curious about this possibly nonexistent organization!
Also, seeing Helena think about Trevor continues to catch my attention. At first glance, it seems like she simply hates Trevor, but like before, I get the vibe that there's more to it than that. When she thought that Trevor wasn't exceptional, I didn't pick up any disdain in it; I felt like it was almost denial (maybe it was just the ellipses?). I feel like she didn't want to admit that Trevor was smart enough to rival Vikki, Ricci, and Celine (at least in some ways) but that, deep down, she already knew it was true, and she was trying to convince herself that it wasn't. I mean, with how quickly she lied about Trevor not being able to enter the Kingdom, immediately admitting to herself that it was, in fact, very possible, it was like she was fighting against something. Maybe admiration, begrudging though it may be? Or has the Trevor charm struck again, and Helena is caught up in its wave, helpless as a tiny dropped into the pool (fuck Victoria!).
Then again, it seems Celine has Helena's heart, whether she wants it or not.
That smut scene was intense! Unlike Penelope's rape of Trevor, this was something much deeper to Helena, and that jumped off the page here. And I love Celine's constant defiance, even after she was taken out, but the fact that Helena wouldn't be denied (and that this seems to be the first time she even thought to do this) was hot as fuck! As always, your descriptions were awesome, and you captured both Celine's anguish and Helena's triumph perfectly.
But more than that, the transition from Helena's triumph, that moment where she finally made her rival into a mere plaything, to Helena feeling something deeper, more emotional regarding Celine was handled perfectly! Oddly enough, in that moment when Helena had well and truly won, Celine got the upper hand without even trying (not that trying would have helped). Helena screaming out the Outcast's real name like that, breaking something she held sacred in a moment of unbridled passion, was an incredible moment!
Celine is living rent-free in Helena's head, no matter how much Helena wants to limit her to just being a slave or a worthless tiny. Not being able to look at Celine as the tiny stared angrily, defiantly back at her told the whole story, as did Helena setting her back in the cage so gentle after grabbing her abruptly right before. Honestly, I don't even know how Helena would feel if she ever actually broke Celine.
And just what are Vikki and Ricci up to? Behind all that giggling and silliness, there's something else going on there. Are they just smitten with Trevor? Or do they have some plans of their own? I really have no clue what these two or thinking at this point.
I also wanted to highlight this line:
Helena reclined in her chair with languid precision, one leg crossed over the other as she leaned back in a smooth arch of posture that spoke of ancient confidence, the kind born from eons of being obeyed.
This may be the most original way of conveying that someone is from old money that I've ever read.
So yeah, this segment either unveiled or added a lot of mystery to what's going on with Helena and company, and it even humanized her a bit. Again, seeing her gush over Vikki and Ricci was so cute! Excellent segment overall and just one more to go!
Author's Response:
HAHA, okay
so I won’t dive too deep into the first half of your review since it’s mostly
theory… but let me just say: it’s prettttyyy damn perceptive! And honestly, I
love it. We’ve talked about this in DMs, but I’m a huge believer in not
hand-holding the reader. Letting you figure things out on your own not only
makes the story more compelling, but it’s also just way more fun to see where
your mind goes. So to watch someone actually start connecting the dots based on
the hints I’ve been dropping? Incredibly satisfying. I had a big grin on my
face the whole time reading this. My anti-spoiler code prevents me from
confirming or denying anything, of course… so all I’ll say is: keep reading. ;)
Also, I
loved that you jumped back to the Penelope bit from the previous chapter and
called out Helena’s reverence for her mother. I remember you originally
thinking the “goddess in waiting” line was just Penelope being entitled… but I
like that your tune’s shifting a little now… maybe there’s more going on there
than it seemed! (although, just so we’re clear: Penelope is still definitely
entitled!)
"And
while we're talking about revelations coming together, I think I missed
something obvious about all this Outcast stuff before. Mainly the outcast part.
That certainly implies that Celine was part of the Kingdom at some point,
doesn't it? Maybe whatever she did to fuck shit up in the Kingdom is why she
was exiled? And does this mean that she was a "subject" at one point?
I can't imagine a slave having that kind of access to whatever system she
fucked up. And it sounds like being the Outcast means being a slave, so that
would seem to suggest that Celine wasn't a slave before. So did Celine
volunteer to be part of the Kingdom, and if so, why?"
I loved
this section of your response, and honestly I was a little surprised it hadn’t
come up in your S3 review (look at me getting greedy with your reviews now!)
You’re absolutely right: the word Outcast isn’t just a label, it’s a whole
story in itself. It implies a fall from something higher, and I think you’re
reading Vikki and Ricci’s familiarity with Celine the right way. There’s
clearly history there, way more than a random assignment of roles. Celine was
no common slave.
"Aside
from theories and guesses, I was very much surprised with how Helena treated
and regarded Ricci and Vikki. I didn't expect her to show such warmth and care
for tinies. It was actually really sweet. Of course, it helps that the two
tinies were being absolutely adorable in her presence, but this made me wonder
if Helena feels similarly about all her "subjects" or if these two
are just the exception. Either way, I really enjoyed seeing that motherly
demeanor from her when dealing with them!"
Right?! It
was such a shift from the cold, commanding Helena we’re used to. For a second
she almost seemed like... a mom. Like she was trying to manage two
sugar-high toddlers while keeping her empire afloat. It was a nice
reprieve, even if it didn’t last long… before she went back to doing Helena
things (like, uh, raping Celine). And it does make you wonder if these two
(Vikki and Ricci) are treated as subjects rather than slaves, what does that
mean for the rest of the subjects under her charge?
"Oh,
and like I mentioned briefly above, I find it really interesting that both
Helena and Vikki and Ricci all seem bound to the same set of rules, despite
their differences in size and rank. I'm really curious about this possibly
nonexistent organization!"
There you go again with your nonsense about secret organizations and alleged Kingdoms! I don’t know where you’re getting this from. There’s no elaborate societal hierarchy operating in secret.
Probably...
"Also,
seeing Helena think about Trevor continues to catch my attention. At first
glance, it seems like she simply hates Trevor, but like before, I get the vibe
that there's more to it than that. When she thought that Trevor wasn't
exceptional, I didn't pick up any disdain in it; I felt like it was almost
denial (maybe it was just the ellipses?). I feel like she didn't want to admit
that Trevor was smart enough to rival Vikki, Ricci, and Celine (at least in
some ways) but that, deep down, she already knew it was true, and she was
trying to convince herself that it wasn't. I mean, with how quickly she lied
about Trevor not being able to enter the Kingdom, immediately admitting to
herself that it was, in fact, very possible, it was like she was fighting against
something. Maybe admiration, begrudging though it may be? Or has the Trevor
charm struck again, and Helena is caught up in its wave, helpless as a tiny
dropped into the pool (fuck Victoria!)."
This is
such a great read. My take is that Helena sees Trevor as the primary obstacle
standing between her and Donnica. From her perspective, he’s the thing keeping
Donnica at arm’s length; a pest, a barrier, a complication. And yet… there’s a
growing note of begrudging respect there, isn’t there? Maybe even fascination.
It’s like she’s trying to convince herself he’s not a threat, even as he keeps
popping up in her plans. (Not to mention the fact that she technically owns him
now… awkward.)
And yeah,
Helena’s whole worldview feels like it’s rooted in some kind of old code. She
doesn’t just believe in hierarchy, she embodies it, maybe even religiously. I
wonder where she gets it from…
"But
more than that, the transition from Helena's triumph, that moment where she
finally made her rival into a mere plaything, to Helena feeling something
deeper, more emotional regarding Celine was handled perfectly! Oddly enough, in
that moment when Helena had well and truly won, Celine got the upper hand
without even trying (not that trying would have helped). Helena screaming out
the Outcast's real name like that, breaking something she held sacred in a
moment of unbridled passion, was an incredible moment!"
Yes! I love
that you caught that beat. Even in the smut, I try to make moments like that
matter, to reveal something deeper. That was Helena unraveling, emotionally and
ideologically, all in one breathless moment. And I’m so glad you picked up on
her gently laying Celine back in the cage afterward, that was absolutely
deliberate. She won, but it didn’t feel like a victory. It felt like
surrendering to something she can’t control.
"And
just what are Vikki and Ricci up to? Behind all that giggling and silliness,
there's something else going on there. Are they just smitten with Trevor? Or do
they have some plans of their own? I really have no clue what these two or
thinking at this point."
indeeeeeeeeeeed what are those 2 little glitter bombs up to!
I mean they are scheming something, I wonder what it is... in either event they
seemed to have gotten Trevor access to the (alleged) Kingdom, so I guess we'll
find out at some point.
"I
also wanted to highlight this line:
Helena
reclined in her chair with languid precision, one leg crossed over the other as
she leaned back in a smooth arch of posture that spoke of ancient confidence,
the kind born from eons of being obeyed.
This may
be the most original way of conveying that someone is from old money that I've
ever read."
Ah man, you
know I always light up when you point out the prose. That one was one of my
favorites too… it said so much with posture alone. The lineage, the power, the
entitlement, and her place of significance in the scene. She was born to be obeyed, and
everything about the way she moves screams it.
Appreciate you pulling that line out… and as always, thank you for such an incredible review! I had a lot of fun with this one!





Date: July 09 2025 7:32 AM Title: PART 29
This whole exchange between Trevor and Celine in S3 was so captivating!
Celine doesn't seem bitter so much as annoyed that Trevor, who is helping Donnica dominate all tinies, is trying to save her. I almost want to say that she likened him in her own mind to Ricci and Vikki at first, obedient tinies looking to serve their respective masters while living in the fantasy that this gives them some degree of agency. The only difference between them in her mind is that Trevor feels some degree of guilt for what he's doing, and she just happens to be the charity case he's trying to use to make himself feel better.
For someone of Celine's former pedigree, that's more an insult than a kindness.
But as Trevor persists, as well as show his frustration and smugness, which I'm assuming makes him different from the other tinies in Helena's Kingdom (Ricci and Vikki seem a bit brainwashed to me, but maybe that's just their personality; and yes, I said singular personality for the both of them! Ha!). Whatever it was, Celine finally got the message that he was legitimately trying to help her, not for personal gain or to alleviate any guilt (again, who "Jordan's" ensuring the integration of a system being used to subjugate a group of people and feels guilty about it at the same time?). And seeing those walls of hers start to crack was satisfying for the briefest of seconds, only to be followed by intense sadness at realizing that, underneath that crazy, calculated, unbreakable demeanor is someone just as broken and depressed as anyone else in her situation might be.
Still, I'm happy Trevor found a way to get through to her, and I'm hoping he can pull off the impossible and find a way to actually save her.
That's not to say that Celine didn't make a lot of good points. I continue to love there being someone to call out Trevor for his role in enslaving people his own size, and that point about Donnica maybe starting to think like them was chilling. Of course, this also shows that, for everything Celine does know, she doesn't actually know Trevor at all. At least part of him doesn't mind what happens to the average tiny at all! In fact, what's about to happen to them makes him more special in the eyes of the two women he loves, as the power not only loves him but it holds him above everyone else his size (and everyone normal size, for that matter) too.
However, Trevor caring about Celine raises an interesting question: Does Trevor really not care about his fellow tinies? Because it's frighteningly easy to not give a fuck about people you don't know, but Celine? He knows her now, and he seems determined, almost obsessed, with saving her. If he had only heard of her situation and never met her, would he care at all? And for that matter, if he had personally knew each and every one of those tinies Annabel killed to prove her point to him in her workshop, would he have been more worried about her than he was at the loss of life?
Or maybe it's Celine's talent that makes him so eager to help her. Maybe he sees in her how the world underestimated him because of his size before, that feeling that made (and still makes, given how seriously he takes his job) him feel like he has to prove how competent he is in everything he does, especially when giants are involved. And Celine's smug, unflappable exterior definitely has to remind Trevor of himself at least a little bit!
I don't know. I'm trying to figure out what it is that makes Celine such a special case to Trevor, and these is the best theories I can think of.
The "contest" was built up so well, too! Celine's sense of superiority and inability to even consider that Trevor's program might be able to handle her own made his victory so sweet! And his celebration and gloating were hilarious ... and well-deserved, given the way Celine was talking him down right up until the moment of her defeat.
Based on the way she "studied" that 83 percent so hard, I'm almost inclined to think that she's never lost at anything before. And given what we know about her "rivalry" (more on that in a minute) with Helena, that could very easily be the case!
But for her to go ahead and basically do a whole day's work in less than a minute while he was still basking in the glow of his win? Incredible! All the wind left his sails in the span of that minute, and Celine didn't even see fit to brag about it. That comment about grunt work hit hard, though!
But mostly, I love how Trevor's code was crude and ugly, yet it did the job so much better than Celine imagined it could. Even she had to admit that, even if she was as insulting as possible in the process.
Now, onto that Status-C revelation.
First, I want to commend you on what I think was a very nice, subtle hint at what was about to come. When Celine was "warning' him about what would happen if Donnica started thinking like them, she said that Trevor might end up in a cage right next to her. It was small, but I felt like this was a telegraph about Celine's Status-C, er, status. She had berated him before about being stupid enough to voluntarily give Donnica his Status-C, so, looking back (because I didn't make this connection right away), her telling him that he'd be in her exact position seems like a tiny tell that her registration status was the same as his.
As for the revelation itself, it makes a lot of sense. I was wondering how Helena could get away with treating Celine this way, as Celine is smart enough to have figured out some way to get word out about her capture if she wasn't literal property at this point. The question is how this happened.
My main theory is that, as I speculated on when "the rival" first turned up in the story, Helena's rivalry with Celine was one-way. I don't think Celine even realized they were competing (because, let's face it, we've seen enough to know that Celine would destroy Helena in anything that isn't physical now, let alone when they were the same size). I'm willing to bet that Helena cozied up to Celine, secretly hating her for being superior while Celine herself believed Helena to be a legit friend. Then, after Celine shrank, Helena used this relationship to get everything from Celine, even her Status-C. Because, as Trevor noted, Celine would have had to have voluntarily gone through the long process, so her doing so of her own free will would make the most sense.
Of course, Helena could have used the yet-to-be-seen sister as leverage to ensure Celine's cooperation, but then I have to wonder what said sister's status is. I don't know if Celine would have cooperated if her sister was also going to be forced through the process.
Unless Helena duped the sister into giving Helena her Status-C first! Now we might be on to something!
Ricci and Vikki seem like a lot of fun! I was expecting Vikki to counter Ricci's cheerful nature with a darker, more domineering one, given how she was dressed. But her matching Ricci's exuberance was a pleasant surprise. And the way they fawned over Trevor was cute! That prime number bit threw me for a loop, too. I'm assuming that's correct, but I'm not checking because I'm not a math nerd!
But yeah, all three of these tiny women outclassed Trevor with their intellects, yet each one came away impressed by him in their own way (because, yes, even though she didn't show it directly, I think Celine was impressed that Trevor beat her). I'd call that a win for him!
So everyone in the Kingdom is either a subject or a slave, huh? That's intriguing. So it seems as though not every tiny is destined to be a giant's slave in Helena's plan. I wonder how one earns the right to become a "subject" and what exactly is expected of them. Based on Ricci and Vikki, my guess is that you have to be exceptional at something useful. Just what is Helena planning?
And it sounds like Ricci and Vikki aren't allowed to say Celine's name, either. I know Helena threw a shit fit when Trevor did that in the previous chapter. These are some interesting rules, for sure.
Oh, and I see that Donnica's emotions are getting in the way of her judgment again. Sending Alexandra with Trevor rather than Annabel didn't seem to have a negative outcome this time, but putting Trevor's fate in the hands of someone who doesn't give a fuck about him beyond their fear of Donnica herself is bound to bite her (and Trevor) in the ass at some point. I get that Annabel fucked up (although not nearly as bad as Donnica! Just sayin') and that Donnica is pissed at her, but she knows Annabel cares about Trevor and sees in him what she herself sees, so it's dumb to leave Trevor's fate in the hands of someone as indifferent as Alexandra when someone like Annabel is there to do the job, eager to do it, even. I think Trevor might be in trouble at some point.
Lastly, I want to backtrack to the beginning of the segment, this line in particular:
It was punishment — for going behind her back for the meetings with Helena's people, for letting himself get snatched, for letting her feel powerless — but more than that, it was protection.
I know this is from Trevor's perspective and not Donnica's, but he knows her so well that I think he captured her reasons for being angry perfectly well. I say that because the language here caught my attention. Donnica is pissed because Trevor let himself get snatched and let her feel powerless. This is interesting to me. It's an odd, selfless form of selfishness, if that makes sense. Like Donnica is making this about her with this language, making herself the victim, but the source of her "victimhood" is her love and worry for Trevor, a very empathetic, selfless concept. Not to mention that she thinks highly enough of Trevor to blame him for what happened; I mean, how many other people could make Donnica feel powerless? His place in her heart is massive, and sometimes it makes her vulnerable.
Given what I've theorized about her stance on weakness, I wonder if she'll ever realize that and, if so, what she'll do with that information.
Author's Response:
"This whole exchange between Trevor and Celine in S3 was so captivating!"
Thank you
for saying that! This segment went through a lot of rewrites. It didn’t rely
much on sizeplay, but it was packed with personality clashes and layered
conflict… internal, dialogue-driven, and external (the code-off!) Trevor’s back-and-forth with
Celine was the core of it all, so it means a lot to hear it landed as
captivating. I really do enjoy writing the two of them sparring, it’s such a
fun dynamic.
"However,
Trevor caring about Celine raises an interesting question: Does Trevor really
not care about his fellow tinies? Because it's frighteningly easy to not give a
fuck about people you don't know, but Celine? He knows her now, and he seems
determined, almost obsessed, with saving her. If he had only heard of her
situation and never met her, would he care at all? And for that matter, if he
had personally knew each and every one of those tinies Annabel killed to prove
her point to him in her workshop, would he have been more worried about her
than he was at the loss of life?"
Trevor’s
desire to help Celine definitely comes from a tangle of complicated places.
1) I think
he has a thing for women who give him a hard time. Donnica was a little icy and
maybe even threatening when they first met. Annabel was… well, not exactly
welcoming. There’s something in Trevor that gravitates toward that challenge.
2) Celine’s
genius is attractive to him. That, paired with her beauty, gives her this
exotic, almost rare-animal allure. I wouldn’t say he’s outright romantically
drawn to her, but there’s something magnetic there.
3) Since
finding his footing in the giant world, Trevor’s developed this compulsion to
stand up to giantesses, especially when he feels deeply about someone. Think of
when he defended Annabel from Helena mocking her romance novels, or when he
challenged Amber over putting Rebecca in her ass. He sees Celine caged, and he
wants to be her hero. (Cue Bonnie Tyler.)
So yeah,
his motivations are layered and sometimes contradictory. He wants to help
Celine. But he also wants to help the women he loves (Annabel, Donnica) despite
their politics. He’s a contradiction. He lives in that contradiction. What a
weird little guy.
"The
"contest" was built up so well, too! Celine's sense of superiority
and inability to even consider that Trevor's program might be able to handle
her own made his victory so sweet! And his celebration and gloating were
hilarious ... and well-deserved, given the way Celine was talking him down
right up until the moment of her defeat.
Based on
the way she "studied" that 83 percent so hard, I'm almost inclined to
think that she's never lost at anything before. And given what we know about
her "rivalry" (more on that in a minute) with Helena, that could very
easily be the case!
But for
her to go ahead and basically do a whole day's work in less than a minute while
he was still basking in the glow of his win? Incredible! All the wind left his
sails in the span of that minute, and Celine didn't even see fit to brag about
it. That comment about grunt work hit hard, though!"
This was
honestly one of the most fun parts of the chapter to write. I tried not to lean
too hard into techno-babble, just enough to make the scene legible and keep
things moving. And yes, that “grunt work” jab at the end? I’m glad you pointed
that out. Had to get one last sting in from her.
"But
mostly, I love how Trevor's code was crude and ugly, yet it did the job so much
better than Celine imagined it could. Even she had to admit that, even if she
was as insulting as possible in the process."
Right?!
That’s actually something a few people have pointed out. There’s a beauty in
ugly code that works… which is kind of Trevor’s whole vibe, honestly.
"My
main theory is that, as I speculated on when "the rival" first turned
up in the story, Helena's rivalry with Celine was one-way. I don't think Celine
even realized they were competing (because, let's face it, we've seen enough to
know that Celine would destroy Helena in anything that isn't physical now, let
alone when they were the same size). I'm willing to bet that Helena cozied up
to Celine, secretly hating her for being superior while Celine herself believed
Helena to be a legit friend. Then, after Celine shrank, Helena used this
relationship to get everything from Celine, even her Status-C. Because, as
Trevor noted, Celine would have had to have voluntarily gone through the long
process, so her doing so of her own free will would make the most sense.
Of
course, Helena could have used the yet-to-be-seen sister as leverage to ensure
Celine's cooperation, but then I have to wonder what said sister's status is. I
don't know if Celine would have cooperated if her sister was also going to be
forced through the process.
Unless
Helena duped the sister into giving Helena her Status-C first! Now we might be
on to something!"
I love all
these theories! There is so much it could be... coercion with the sister (very
interesting!) deception from Helena, hell who knows, maybe there is more to this so-called
rivalry and they were actually in love at one point! So many things it could
be! and ya never know, maybe there'll be more answers later in the chapter...
"Ricci
and Vikki seem like a lot of fun! I was expecting Vikki to counter Ricci's
cheerful nature with a darker, more domineering one, given how she was dressed.
But her matching Ricci's exuberance was a pleasant surprise. And the way they
fawned over Trevor was cute! That prime number bit threw me for a loop, too.
I'm assuming that's correct, but I'm not checking because I'm not a math
nerd!"
Haha, thank
you! Ricci and Vikki were my first real attempt at mostly comedic characters.
They were an absolute blast to write, and we’ll definitely be seeing more
of them later on in the story. And who knows maybe they’re not just comic relief... maybe there’s more going
on under the surface.
(And yes,
the prime number fact is totally real. You’ll have to take their word for it
though.)
"But
yeah, all three of these tiny women outclassed Trevor with their intellects,
yet each one came away impressed by him in their own way (because, yes, even
though she didn't show it directly, I think Celine was impressed that Trevor
beat her). I'd call that a win for him!"
That’s what
made it fun! Trevor might not have their raw brainpower, but he held his own. It’s funny, because the women in his life tend to be
powerful in some form or another, whether through size (like the giantess) or
intelligence (like these girls!) and yet he somehow manages to endear himself
to all of them. He’s just got that scrappy charm.
"So
everyone in the Kingdom is either a subject or a slave, huh? That's intriguing.
So it seems as though not every tiny is destined to be a giant's slave in
Helena's plan. I wonder how one earns the right to become a "subject"
and what exactly is expected of them. Based on Ricci and Vikki, my guess is
that you have to be exceptional at something useful. Just what is Helena
planning?"
Kingdom?
What Kingdom? What are you talking about? There’s no miniature society tucked
away in some secret place. That would be ridiculous.
...Right?
"And
it sounds like Ricci and Vikki aren't allowed to say Celine's name, either. I
know Helena threw a shit fit when Trevor did that in the previous chapter.
These are some interesting rules, for sure."
Nice catch!
Yep, that’s absolutely true. The rules of Helena’s little domain are very
specific. And we’ll definitely be getting into further… possibly even later
this chapter.
"I
know this is from Trevor's perspective and not Donnica's, but he knows her so
well that I think he captured her reasons for being angry perfectly well. I say
that because the language here caught my attention. Donnica is pissed because
Trevor let himself get snatched and let her feel powerless. This is interesting
to me. It's an odd, selfless form of selfishness, if that makes sense. Like
Donnica is making this about her with this language, making herself the victim,
but the source of her "victimhood" is her love and worry for Trevor,
a very empathetic, selfless concept. Not to mention that she thinks highly
enough of Trevor to blame him for what happened; I mean, how many other people
could make Donnica feel powerless? His place in her heart is massive, and
sometimes it makes her vulnerable."
I loved
this take. It’s the kind of thing only you would catch and articulate so well.
You’re right, Donnica’s anger is rooted in love, but it twists into something
selfish because she needs Trevor to be safe, for her. It’s not the first time
she’s been vulnerable like this (Amber!), but with Trevor it hits differently.
He’s not her daughter… he’s her possession, and her lover. That’s dangerous for
a woman like her. Watching how she handles that vulnerability will definitely
be something to keep an eye on moving forward.





Date: July 05 2025 9:31 PM Title: PART 29
Well fuck! I just got done saying that Donnica better not have been too hard on my precious Annabel after realizing that so much of this Status-C stuff was her own fault, and now we find out that Annie has been shut out entirely! Am I a bad person for being more pissed at this than I was Donnica carelessly stepping on the tiny city dwellers in the previous segment?
I think you did a great job of showing how much Donnica's wrath has affected Annabel. She wasn't traumatized are scared of her goddess-mother's blatant overreaction and thundering (I loved the use of this word in that part, by the way, separating it from yelling and making it its own thing). She was heartbroken that she had lost Donnica's trust and her chance to co-own Trevor, one of the only two people on the planet that she loves. I really enjoy how different this reaction is to virtually everybody else (other than Trevor) when dealing with an angry Donnica, even Amber.
And the way Annie accepted her punishment with a smile despite hating it so much was perfect! Even when cast out of paradise, she's still willing, desperate even, to serve. I've said before that there's nothing either Donnica or Trevor could do to lose Annabel's devotion at this point, and I felt a little validated when I read that part.
I also love how she beat herself up a bit about missing the portal status change. She had one job! That she felt humiliated at this makes a lot of sense, and I was wondering how she'd feel about her mistake. I was still left wondering if she felt any actual guilt about what happened to Trevor because of it, and I'll admit that I would have loved to have seen that pop up here, but maybe the fact that it didn't come up at all answers that question in and of itself?
But Trevor still did creep into her thoughts, and the loving way she remembered his "hope wrapped in kindness" was an endearing moment in this sea of self-pity and sorrow. I could feel her love from him jump off the page with those words. It also makes sense that she sees the problem as more of a permanent thing, not worried about recovering so much as lamenting that she'll now never be truly bound to the two objects of all of her affection. Of course, that may not end up being true, I think, as, even if Donnica doesn't change her mind before the transfer of ownership is complete, I'm sure that can always be adjusted later, after Trevor has finally convinced Donnica to forgive Annie (which I'm sure he'll be working on if/when he's back with Donnica).
Also, depending on how Helena and Donnica are handling the transfer of Trevor's ownership, the fact that Annabel's name was on the original paperwork could be a factor. Or are they just straight-up letting Helena "own" him and having her transfer that ownership to Donnica as a whole new transaction?
I'm curious if Naomi's incompetence in the office is a product of her abuse or if this is a bit of social commentary on modern teenage work ethic! That's a half-joke, but I could see Naomi's trauma playing a role in that for real. Maybe the immense pressure put on her by (Fuck) Victoria causes her to shut down and leaves her unable to think when she feels the slightest bit of pressure. Or maybe you just really hate teenagers (Amber and Scarlett notwithstanding)!
Annabel loving to threaten Naomi just by telling her mom that she's doing poorly is a very Annabel thing to do (you mentioned that emotional leverage, and I immediately went "Yep!"), but fuck does the context behind that feel like a swift punch in the gut. Annabel thinks Naomi is just some spoiled teen afraid of upsetting mommy. She has no idea of what will happen to Naomi if she tells Victoria anything negative about the girl's work habits. That bit about sensing Naomi's fear and using it like she would in her breaking duties particularly hit home for me. This was agonizing to read, and I mean that in the best way. This also has me curious about how Annabel would react if she ever found out the truth (and you doing this means you have to do that at some point; it's literary law, dude!).
Also, seeing Annabel enjoy the physical torment Naomi is suffering because of the job was really sad to me. The pointlessness of Naomi's tasks only made it worse.
I get that she's frustrated both with Naomi and her general situation and that this is her way of taking it out on someone, but all that empathy that Trevor had instilled in her (for anyone who isn't tiny) is completely absent here. I do think this makes sense, though, as Trevor's lesson was more about considering what the people who are terrible to you may be going through, not what people in Naomi's position as a struggling underling are dealing with. Ironically, Annie has become one of those bullies that picked on her to take out their frustrations on someone, and I don't think she'd like it very much if she saw herself in the mirror while being this way. Who knows, maybe Naomi will get that lesson in empathy somehow?
Also, it was a nice little detail that Trevor's new streamlined system is saving trees! It's always cool to see the little effects of his efforts hanging out in the background from time to time.
... staggering toward the cooler with a gait like a baby deer on ice.
Your prose is always so vivid, decadent, and clever, so I usually don't bring up a lot of specific examples, as I'd be here all day basically copying your chapters verbatim, but the creativity of this one really stuck out to me for whatever reason. What a very specific picture this simile paints. I know it's not a sexy or smutty part at all, but this one made me smile.
I was wondering how Annabel's breaking business was going now that she was (emphasis on was now, I suppose) part of Donnica and Trevor's relationship, so it was cool to get a little update on that. Sounds like things are thriving, and Annabel's frustration makes even more sense now that we know that watching Naomi has gotten in the way of that. It's not even the business aspect she thinks about when she's bothered by this; it's the loss of her "sanctuary." Because if there was ever a time that she needed something like that, it's right at this particular point and time, and here Naomi is unwittingly getting in the way of it.
Hmm, I wonder if her problem might become her solution at some point, given how this segment ended!
I thought the introduction of Edward led to some great ...worldbuilding (what's happening to you?!) here. First, we now know the shrinking virus is, in fact, still going around, which seems to imply that no one is safe and the hubris of the giants is greatly misplaced. Second, we got to see just how widespread the reputation of Donnica's firm has become. It's funny to think a firm once run by a tiny is now known as the most anti-tiny rights firm around. And that no one seems to be able or willing to do anything about it, for that matter. And third, we got a little detail into how Donnica has been able to get away with enslaving and murdering all those tinies on firm property. It wasn't much, but learning even a little bit of the legalese behind that counts, so congratulations on a three-pronged worldbuilding assault!
And holy fuck did you make me feel something for Edwards. Between his situation and what we learned about his family, that Naomi was probably his daughter's age, made him so relatable, even more than some of the other tinies we've seen meet similar fates. And the hope he felt at seeing "innocent" Naomi, only to have it fade away once he realized her true nature? Damn, that was powerful.
As for the scene itself, the whole thing was hot as fuck, but that simple act of Naomi crouching down to see Edward better, then slowly raising herself up to seemingly "pull the rest of the room up with her" was so fucking amazing! I use the word mesmerized when talking about your writing a lot (and justifiably so), but your description of this part fully captivated me. Shit, I think I was more into that than the footplay or Edward actually getting crushed (which were both really hot in their own right). Just a brilliant piece of writing there.
Okay, back to Naomi. With her natural feelings about tinies (particularly tiny adults), I found her approach here interesting. Before we saw her just crush people left and right, soaking up the feeling of literally crushing those who, in a general sense, look like the source of her own torment. But here, Naomi really took her time. Annabel had been riding her so hard, and she relished having someone at her mercy for a change. Naomi just didn't want to give that up too soon or waste this gift. So her rolling Edward around on her sole like that really matched her mental state at the time, I think. Nicely done!
Seeing Annabel's feelings on Naomi completely change once she realized that the teen loves playing with tinies as much as she does was a really sweet moment (for everyone other than Edward, anyway). Also, I love the way Annabel shut Edward up with a tap of her toes (with shoes on!) and a simple command. Her precision in getting obedience from the tiny ones is impressive! And while, as I mentioned before, I felt terrible about what happened to Edward, at the same time, I really enjoyed that bonding moment between Annabel and Naomi.
Because these two really have a lot in common. Like I said before, Annabel had kind of become just like her old bullies here, and I think part of that was because Naomi is kind of similar to how Annabel herself used to be. Both of them would be considered "weirdos" by the mainstream. Even Annabel's love of vampire romance novels isn't that far removed from goth, I think (if anyone reading this is a goth person, please don't hit me for saying this!).
But my larger point is that, like Annabel before her, Naomi has been judged for her interests, and that's fucked up. I'm so happy that Annabel, even if she hasn't noticed that yet, has started to take a liking to Naomi. Here's hoping that lasts!
Author's Response:
"Well
fuck! I just got done saying that Donnica better not have been too hard on my
precious Annabel after realizing that so much of this Status-C stuff was her
own fault, and now we find out that Annie has been shut out entirely! Am I a
bad person for being more pissed at this than I was Donnica carelessly stepping
on the tiny city dwellers in the previous segment?"
Haha, when
I read your first review, I had a quiet little laugh to myself knowing you
probably weren’t going to be happy when you hit S2. Totally valid to feel more
pissed about Annabel getting shut out… those tiny city dwellers in S1 were just
anonymous little specs, but this? This is our Annie!
"I'm
curious if Naomi's incompetence in the office is a product of her abuse or if
this is a bit of social commentary on modern teenage work ethic! That's a
half-joke, but I could see Naomi's trauma playing a role in that for real.
Maybe the immense pressure put on her by (Fuck) Victoria causes her to shut
down and leaves her unable to think when she feels the slightest bit of
pressure. Or maybe you just really hate teenagers (Amber and Scarlett
notwithstanding)!"
It’s
definitely the trauma. I mean, how could it not be? When you’re that young and
the one person in your life who’s supposed to protect you (your own mother) becomes
your abuser, that has to bleed into everything. I’m sure Naomi would still
grumble at doing unpaid work (hell, I would’ve too at that age), but Victoria’s
constant pressure and neglect? That absolutely seeps into her ability to
function under even the slightest stress. It’s heartbreaking, but it tracks.
"Also,
seeing Annabel enjoy the physical torment Naomi is suffering because of the job
was really sad to me. The pointlessness of Naomi's tasks only made it
worse."
That one
stung, yeah. Especially since we know what Naomi’s going through. But I think
it shows that Annabel’s not as okay as she’s pretending to be. Guilt, shame,
self-loathing… they all twist people in different ways, and Annabel’s pain is
so raw right now that it’s snuffing out her empathy in moments like this. Which
is tragic in itself, because you nailed it; Naomi is so much like a younger
version of Annabel. The recognition’s there, even if Annabel’s not ready to
name it.
That said,
there was something of a shift between them at the end of the chapter. A silent
thread connecting them. Maybe we’ll see more of that soon… maybe even later in
the chapter.
"...
staggering toward the cooler with a gait like a baby deer on ice.
Your
prose is always so vivid, decadent, and clever, so I usually don't bring up a
lot of specific examples, as I'd be here all day basically copying your
chapters verbatim, but the creativity of this one really stuck out to me for
whatever reason. What a very specific picture this simile paints. I know it's
not a sexy or smutty part at all, but this one made me smile."
Yessssss. I
was really proud of that line too! Funny you called it out… I remember writing
it and just grinning because it snapped the visual together so perfectly. Not a
smut line, sure, but it landed with exactly the tone I wanted. I figured it
might fly under the radar, so it’s awesome to see it get some love.
"Hmm,
I wonder if her problem might become her solution at some point, given how this
segment ended!"
Hmmmmmmmm...
I wonder too...
"I
thought the introduction of Edward led to some great ...worldbuilding (what's
happening to you?!) here. First, we now know the shrinking virus is, in fact,
still going around, which seems to imply that no one is safe and the hubris of
the giants is greatly misplaced. Second, we got to see just how widespread the
reputation of Donnica's firm has become. It's funny to think a firm once run by
a tiny is now known as the most anti-tiny rights firm around. And that no one
seems to be able or willing to do anything about it, for that matter. And
third, we got a little detail into how Donnica has been able to get away with
enslaving and murdering all those tinies on firm property. It wasn't much, but
learning even a little bit of the legalese behind that counts, so
congratulations on a three-pronged worldbuilding assault!"
Haha! Look
at you praising worldbuilding like it’s not a guilty pleasure now. But
seriously, yeah, I’ve been meaning to flesh out Donnica’s firm for a while, so
it was great to finally crack that open. And revisiting the virus adds another
layer too. I’m really excited to start exploring how being giant (or tiny) alters
someone’s psyche and worldview. The shrinking virus isn’t just background lore
anymore. It’s going to matter.
"As
for the scene itself, the whole thing was hot as fuck, but that simple act of
Naomi crouching down to see Edward better, then slowly raising herself up to
seemingly "pull the rest of the room up with her" was so fucking
amazing! I use the word mesmerized when talking about your writing a lot (and
justifiably so), but your description of this part fully captivated me. Shit, I
think I was more into that than the footplay or Edward actually getting crushed
(which were both really hot in their own right). Just a brilliant piece of
writing there."
Bro. That
part might have honestly been my favorite part of the whole encounter. I’m a
huge foot guy, don’t get me wrong, but that whole motion (the slow descent, the
scrutinizing gaze, the rise) just landed so well. I didn’t even have that
sequence in the first draft. I added it during rewrite, thinking the scene
needed more build before we got to the foot/crush smut. But man, it might’ve
ended up being the most arousing part of the whole scene for me too. So seeing
you call it out? Awesome.
"Seeing
Annabel's feelings on Naomi completely change once she realized that the teen
loves playing with tinies as much as she does was a really sweet moment (for
everyone other than Edward, anyway). Also, I love the way Annabel shut Edward
up with a tap of her toes (with shoes on!) and a simple command. Her precision
in getting obedience from the tiny ones is impressive! And while, as I
mentioned before, I felt terrible about what happened to Edward, at the same
time, I really enjoyed that bonding moment between Annabel and Naomi."
Ahhh yes,
the lovely bonding-over-cruelty moment. Edward might disagree, but I thought it
was kind of sweet as well! And yes, that tap of the toe? With her shoe on?
Annabel’s precision is something else. She’s like a concert pianist… except her
piano keys are squirming tiny people. I wonder what other “skills” she might be
able to pass on to Naomi. Maybe even a whole... discipline?
I wonder...





Date: July 04 2025 1:36 AM Title: PART 29
"Shall we take our shoes off?" Helena asked lightly, her tone breezy, as if they were entering a spa or a hotel lounge, not standing above a mass of terrified, unregistered lives.
This made me laugh so hard! It wasn't the scene itself that was funny, but given how much we've talked about this sort of thing, I just fucking lost it here! I just pictured you getting to this scene and going:
"Okay, I checked shoe crush off the list last chapter, so now we can get back to real crush!"
But hey, I'm certainly not complaining! That cardboard city scene was fucking incredible from start to finish, with or without shoes! I love how you not only highlighted both Donnica and Helena's indifference as they walked through the city, but you even pointed out how a lot of giantesses would have reacted in this situation, which drew even more attention to every utterly uncaring step these two goddesses made into the city.
I think my favorite part was when Donnica took those absentminded steps as she contemplated Helena's plan to go after registration subsidies program. Even though Donnica was looking down in thought, she took absolutely no notice of her feet crushing a makeshift marketplace. There wasn't even any ill intent there; Donnica just felt like a few steps would help her process things and just didn't think or care about the consequences for the inconsequential beings so far below her.
But yeah, all of that scene was spectacular. Helena even picked up a little souvenir from the trip. How cute is that! I'm curious if that new pocket pal was just a bit of extra fun tacked onto the end of the scene or if she might end up becoming a character we might get more familiar with in the the chapters ahead.
And by the way, the detail you gave to city itself, describing all the garbage and debris the tinies used to build this "city," was awesome! Things like tin can taverns and tents made from banana stickers really helped paint a nice picture of the trashy towns (hey look, I did a thing!) the unregistered have to live in. I loved this!
Oh, and emphasizing that the tinies couldn't even comprehend Helena and Donnica's "seismic conversation" was a brilliant touch, too!
Okay, okay, I'm done gushing, I swear! I told you before that tiny city scenes are a favorite of mine, and I wasn't even thinking about garbage cities when I said that! You drew me into something I didn't even know I wanted until I read this segment!
Okay, really, I'm done now!
Honestly, my biggest takeaway from this segment is how much blame should really be placed on Donnica for everything that Trevor has been through with all this
Helena stuff. It's been at the back of my mind this whole time, but Helena straight-up telling Donnica that she created the environment that caused all this trouble for her tiny boyfriend really hit home for me. Helena may be terrible and pathetic, but she's not the least bit wrong here. Both the chair incident and Penelope claiming Trevor on Helena's behalf can be traced back to the office culture Donnica instilled ever since she overthrew John Turner (the one Helena cleverly tried to take half credit for installing, I noticed here). Not only that, but Trevor also told Donnica something similar to this when he tried to turn down the office manager job. Donnica didn't listen and just expected her force of will to be enough to make the office accept him anyway. As we've seen since then, that isn't enough to protect Trevor at all times, and she's definitely to blame for putting him in that spot.
But more importantly, it was revealed that Donnica knew about Helena's private system this whole time! This blew my mind! This was the whole source of the conflict between Trevor and Helena. Trevor has desperately been trying to integrate the office into LegalSync, thinking that Helena was being stubborn and hiding something, when really she was just abiding by the terms of her employment that Donnica had agreed to in the first place! Most of this could have been avoided if Donnica had just told Trevor this the first time he complained to her about Helena. Trevor would have never been with Penelope in the first place if he had known that!
So while Penelope is obviously still the most responsible for the Status-C debacle because she was the bad actor, Donnica is easily the second-most responsible here. Waaaaay more than Annabel for just not seeing the portal status change on her screen (she had better not have come down too hard on Annabel for that, knowing what I know now!). Trevor keeps paying the price for Donnica's cognitive dissonance, and as much as he's been able and willing to role with that, I'm beginning to wonder if there will be a point where he can't anymore. And he reaches that point, what does he do when he's literally owned by her?
Another thing I noticed here is the difference between Helena and Donnica when it comes to tiny people. Helena is dignified and subtle about it, but she really enjoys dominating those tiny people not unlike those women she looked at as lesser, digging in the dirt and screaming that they're the tinies' new goddess. Helena thinks the difference between people like Donnica and her and women like that is restraint, as is evidenced by the way Helena watched and evaluated Donnica when they laid eyes on the city for the first time.
But Donnica isn't like this at all. There was no evidence that she was savoring crushing the city and its residents under her heel. In fact, I don't think we've ever seen her truly enjoy punishing or killing tinies. She's mostly either angry at them or bored, maybe showing mild signs of amusement on rare occasion. I mean, how many times have we seen Donnica crush a tiny without any emotion at all? Even when she crushed that restaurant and all its patrons, I remember her looking down on a group of them with a bored curiosity before squishing them.
That's because, for Donnica, this isn't about indulgence or pleasure. She truly believes that this is a tiny's lot in life, scattering at her feet and hiding in literal garbage buildings at the sight of someone like her. In fact, she took more pleasure in thinking about how many of the tinies of the city were there because of her than she did actually crushing them!
I think this feeling comes from a place of bitterness for Donnica. From what we know about her past, she didn't have an easy life, growing up with parents who showed her little affection and were too heavy-handed when it comes to punishment for her. She was struggling as a single mom when Amber was young, dating men she didn't like who abused her daughter. She may not have known that last part, but it at least opens the possibility that Donnica herself had suffered some of that at their hands too.
So I don't think Donnica hates tinies. I think she hates weakness. And tinies, for the most part, are the embodiment of weakness, so that bitterness gets taken out on them. This would also explain why this bitterness doesn't apply to Trevor, as he has been a strong, supporting presence in her life when nobody else has ever been that for her before. That's why he's different from the other tinies in her mind.
But yeah, Helena is just an entitled, old-money monster who is using a thin veil of elegance to put herself above the common giant, while Donnica is channeling all the darkness and possible trauma of her childhood and early adult life into a disdain for the weakest class of people because she was raised to hate weakness and pulled herself out of a terrible life, leaving her with no sympathy for others who are stuck there.
Or that's my theory, anyway. I could be way off!
I do think that we saw this difference between them in a couple of their interactions, though. There were a couple times that Helena had to work to keep herself together and not yield under Donnica's authority when Donnica became upset. And Helena was afraid to even bring up keeping Trevor at her place until the transfer of ownership is complete (more on that in a minute). To me, that showed the weakness hiding under Helena's hard exterior, and we haven't really seen that from Donnica. Yeah, we've seen her break down emotionally over Trevor, but that was sadness, not fear. Helena was barely able to manage the might of Donnica's will at times here, even when she was expecting to get the brunt of it!
The government registration system was an interesting piece of ... worldbuilding (hey, good job!). It makes sense that the government would try to step in to fill the gaps left by the privatized system of registration and that this program would be half-assed. And to find out that what Donnica and company have been doing this whole time is choking paths to private registration to overload the public system and turn public opinion against it? That's as brilliant as it is evil. After hearing time and time again how Donnica has cost people their registration, it's good to finally have some insight into how she's been doing that, as well as the larger plan behind it.
And hundreds of thousands of tinies will suddenly become unprotected if they succeed? Fuck, that's hot! Uh, I mean, awful! Fuck, that's awful!
Then, you ended the segment on that little cliffhanger, hinting that Donnica was going to lay eyes on "The Kingdom." The fact that Helena decides that she has to tell Donnica the truth "in part" is pretty foreboding, though. Is she planning on cutting Donnica out of the "real plan" at some point (I don't think so, because my money is still on Helena having a thing for her)? Or is there a deeper reason that she wants possession of Trevor until this Status-C stuff clears up? Maybe Helena is thinking, "If I can't convince Donnica that Trevor is worthless, maybe I can convince Trevor about his real worth."
And it seems pretty obvious that Trevor will indeed end up spending some time at Helena's place in the near future, but I love Donnica's resistance to this, even after making up with Helena. I don't even think it was about a lack of trust in Helena but rather the fact that she wouldn't be living under the same roof as him for some time. We've already seen that she hates to take Trevor off her person, but to have him not even be in the same house? Agonizing.
Also, I was glad to see it clarified that the tinies that Donnica has taken have had families open investigations into her. I was wondering about that. To see her confidence at making those investigations go away was both chilling and sexy (given all the ways she chose to hide those tinies).
Great opening segment here. I love the fireworks to open things up!
Author's Response:
"I
think my favorite part was when Donnica took those absentminded steps as she
contemplated Helena's plan to go after registration subsidies program. Even
though Donnica was looking down in thought, she took absolutely no notice of
her feet crushing a makeshift marketplace. There wasn't even any ill intent
there; Donnica just felt like a few steps would help her process things and
just didn't think or care about the consequences for the inconsequential beings
so far below her."
Yes!
That was
absolutely the size-play centerpiece of the scene… two giantesses casually
discussing politics while their idle movements wrought cataclysm below. It was
unfamiliar ground for me, since I typically focus on shrunken men rather than
full city destruction, but I really enjoyed playing with that scale. Especially
lacing all that pesky worldbuilding throughout.
The only
thing I wish I’d had room for was a grounded POV from below. I think if I’d
introduced a temporary tiny character experiencing the devastation first-hand,
it might’ve added more smut tension to the sequence, but the chapter was
already pushing 6K and bouncing between perspectives would’ve been a bit much
structurally.
Still… I
had fun. So maybe next time I write a tiny city scene I’ll add a POV down there…
hrmmm… I wonder when that will be…
"And
by the way, the detail you gave to city itself, describing all the garbage and
debris the tinies used to build this "city," was awesome! Things like
tin can taverns and tents made from banana stickers really helped paint a nice
picture of the trashy towns (hey look, I did a thing!) the unregistered have to
live in. I loved this!"
You thought
so?? I’m glad you said that. Honestly, I felt weird writing that part. It’s not
my usual lane, and I kept second-guessing the tone. I fiddled with those
details a lot… kept circling back to the banana stickers, tin-can taverns, and
wondering if it was too silly or not gritty enough. So to hear that it landed
for you is a relief!
"But
more importantly, it was revealed that Donnica knew about Helena's private
system this whole time! This blew my mind! This was the whole source of the
conflict between Trevor and Helena. Trevor has desperately been trying to
integrate the office into LegalSync, thinking that Helena was being stubborn
and hiding something, when really she was just abiding by the terms of her
employment that Donnica had agreed to in the first place! Most of this could
have been avoided if Donnica had just told Trevor this the first time he
complained to her about Helena. Trevor would have never been with Penelope in
the first place if he had known that!"
Ah, I was
wondering if anyone would catch that! Yeah, this was kind of a big reveal, and
I loved how you broke it down. If you remember back through the earlier
chapters, Donnica always had this low-level dismissiveness about Trevor’s
complaints with Helena… not because she didn’t care, but because she already
knew the truth. She wasn’t shocked by Helena’s reluctance to integrate because
she’d agreed to it. But she never told Trevor.
Why?
Probably because she loved seeing him so engaged with the firm, believing he
could unify things. She didn’t want to puncture that optimism, even if it meant
keeping secrets. And I love how you noticed that, later on in your review, you
mention how Helena’s reluctant to be honest with Donnica, but here we see it
flipped: Donnica’s the one holding back… and ironically for her, it’s with a
tiny person.
"Another
thing I noticed here is the difference between Helena and Donnica when it comes
to tiny people. Helena is dignified and subtle about it, but she really enjoys
dominating those tiny people not unlike those women she looked at as lesser,
digging in the dirt and screaming that they're the tinies' new goddess. Helena
thinks the difference between people like Donnica and her and women like that
is restraint, as is evidenced by the way Helena watched and evaluated Donnica
when they laid eyes on the city for the first time."
I love this
take. Seriously, this might’ve been my favorite part of your whole review.
It’s
something I always worry about: readers not distinguishing between the two
alpha blondes. They’re both tall (though Donnica’s taller, naturally), both
powerful, both dominant… even the same shoe size. But as you said, there’s a
huge philosophical split between them. Their backgrounds, their values, their
approaches to power… it all feeds into how they relate to tinies.
I’m so
happy to hear they play out differently on the page! It’s always a concern of
mine.
And that
difference between them? It’s only going to become more important as their
fates tangle further.
"That's
because, for Donnica, this isn't about indulgence or pleasure. She truly
believes that this is a tiny's lot in life, scattering at her feet and hiding
in literal garbage buildings at the sight of someone like her. In fact, she
took more pleasure in thinking about how many of the tinies of the city were
there because of her than she did actually crushing them"
Yes, and
I’d add one more layer to that brilliant analysis.
Donnica’s
beliefs about tiny inferiority absolutely stem from her views on weakness, but
also from her self-perception. Her awakening didn’t just sour her on weakness… it
illuminated her strength. It gave her a sense of cosmic, almost divine purpose.
The question I want the story to explore is: did her disdain for weakness drive
that belief in herself? Or was the self-belief always there, buried under years
of suppression? Is her cruelty a reflection of her ideology… or some form of
godly entitlement?
We’ll see.
"And
it seems pretty obvious that Trevor will indeed end up spending some time at
Helena's place in the near future, but I love Donnica's resistance to this,
even after making up with Helena. I don't even think it was about a lack of
trust in Helena but rather the fact that she wouldn't be living under the same
roof as him for some time. We've already seen that she hates to take Trevor off
her person, but to have him not even be in the same house? Agonizing."
You nailed
it here.
This isn’t
about trust. This is about proximity. Donnica, for all her grandeur, needs
Trevor close. We've already seen she doesn’t like taking him off (out of?) her
body, let alone having him live under a different roof.
And yeah, this
whole transfer thing opens up all kinds of messy questions. Helena still holds
Trevor’s Status-C... she technically owns him. Sure, the way she got it could
be legally challenged, maybe even overturned in court if Donnica pushed hard
enough. But what would that mean if Trevor were harmed in the meantime? Or
worse, crushed? Once someone’s Status-C, there’s no legal protection. No
rights. A lawsuit might bring justice eventually, but it wouldn’t bring Trevor
back. That’s what makes this so dangerous. We’ve never seen Donnica in a
situation like this before, and I don’t think she could take it. She might act
calm, diplomatic, but underneath it all, she’s militant when it comes to
Trevor. Always has been.
So in a strange, ironic way, Donnica might have to let
Trevor go for stretches… just to keep things from falling apart. Because from
where she’s standing, she doesn’t really know what Helena’s endgame is. Doesn’t
know what might push her over the edge. What if one day Helena just shrugs and
says, “Screw it,” and crushes him? It’s an unknown, and Donnica’s not used to
playing blind when it comes to someone she’d tear the world apart to protect.
"Great
opening segment here. I love the fireworks to open things up!"
Thanks for
saying that! Giantess-level destruction stuff really isn’t my forte... I
actually kept putting off that scene and fun fact: it was literally the last
segment I wrote, even though it’s the first in the chapter. But hey, people
seem to be enjoying it, so I guess it worked out!





Date: July 01 2025 1:58 AM Title: PART 29
Fantastic chapter as always, but even more questions after reading it lol. But damn, S2 is so hot with Naomi's stinky feet, and this third segment is probably the best of the whole story. Everything is perfect in every aspect; it's funny and dramatic. And Vikki and Ricci are so funny they make me laugh during all of S3 and 4 and this moment with Helena and Celine in S4 was so hot. And the last segment with Annabel and Naomi is really the perfect end. Can't wait to see more about this duo. But the most interesting is the queendom of Helena. With Vikki and Ricci, we can see there is a really complex system in place.
Author's Response:
WOW! Thank you so much for saying that about S3... It was very long and it took a lot of re-writes/edits to make work. I love that you found Vikki and Ricci so funny, they are my first attempt at largely comical characters so I'm happy to hear them be received so well. You make an excellent point to at the end as well, the way Vikki and Ricci are treated by Helena make's their relationship with her seem more complicated than someone might first assume (like total enslavement) it'll be interesting to dive further into this so-called 'kingdom' later on in the story (if it even exist at all!)
Always enjoy getting feedback on the feet smut ;) and I'm also happy to see you finally give your approval on one of my crush scenes haha
Thanks as always man!
Date: June 30 2025 2:30 AM Title: PART 28
So poor chelsea. I really felt for her. Her fate was not the best, and it shows the likely fate of most tinies especially owned, that even if they are perfect, they can be destroyed by the wims of these cruel giantesses. This once again demenstrates that Trevor is insane for giving his rights up. Annebelle has shown that she isnt stable. Donnica would kill her if she ever did hurt Trevor, but what good does that due to an already dead tiny. I am glad that you didnt drag out the drama on him belonging to penny or helen for long., I never like that trope. Its not you, thats a me thing. JUst glad you didnt drag it out for multiple chapters. I am interested to see how things will play out now that he is fully owned and the property of Donnice and Annebell. Curious to see if he comes to regret it, or actaully love it.
I am seriously interested in where you are going with the Amber and Rebecca story line. I cant wait to see more of that.
Author's Response:
Just to clarify, Trevor is still technically owned by Helena, though she’s agreed to transfer him back to Donnica. There’s a deeper relationship she wants to explore with Donnica, so she wants to place nice... for now.
Annabel might be out there, sure, but I still think she’s loyal. I don’t see her ever hurting Trevor without something huge pushing her over the edge. Poor little Chelsea though... crushed under the weight of Annabel’s jealousy (and her giant heel!)
Yes I’m loving this new Amber/Rebecca/Scarlett storyline, even if it’s a little gentler than my usual vibe. Do you typically like gentle storylines? Or is this one in particular getting you interested.
Can’t wait to roll it all out!
Date: June 30 2025 2:14 AM Title: PART 28
nice chapter!
Author's Response:
Hey thank you for saying so :)
New chapter tonight! Can't wait for you to read it!





Date: June 29 2025 4:39 AM Title: PART 28
I just finished S8, and now I feel terrible for doubting Scarlett before!
But first, I liked that slight glimpse into Donnica's side of things after that call from Helena. I'm sure she was a wreck wondering where Trevor was before that moment, so that call had to be both a relief and a horror for her at the same time. You threw in some nice details to show how stressed she was, too. My favorite was her heels sounding like warning shots as she raced across the tile floor to go pick up Trevor.
Amber is really sweet to worry about her mom, and yeah, whenever someone says "Everything is going to be okay," that's usually the time you have to really start worrying!
Before we get into Scarlett proper, I wanted to commend you on how you (once again) masterfully set up the back half of this segment with the first half. There were so many little lines clearly designed to make us expect the opposite of what was going to happen, or maybe you just happen to be quite fond of irony. Things like Rebecca thinking about how Scarlet would be the kind of girl she'd be friends with if things were different, if they were the same size and she was younger, and all of those thoughts about how insignificant Rebecca thought she was to Scarlett and how indifferent the giant girl was to her existence were awesome to see flipped on their head later in the segment.
In particular, this line stuck out for me more after finishing the segment:
She was nothing to Scarlett. A speck in her world. A forgotten crumb.
Because, from the moment Scarlett discovered Rebecca's existence, this was not the case at all! Scarlett's first instinct was to save Rebecca's tiny life, an instinct I feel like most of the giants we've met so far don't possess in the least. Then, Scarlett was incredibly nervous and embarrassed at the state she was in while in Rebecca's presence. The opinion of that "forgotten crumb" was immensely important to Scarlett. She was extremely apologetic about her juices being on the fingers that saved Rebecca's life (most of the giants we've seen so far not only wouldn't have cared, but they would have expected Rebecca to be thankful that they'd bothered to save her at all and probably would have made her lick the juices from those fingers, too!), and when Rebecca saw that raunchy mixed-sized porn on Scarlett's phone, the giant was desperate to assure Rebecca that she would never do that to her or think of her as just some prop or toy.
Without even knowing Rebecca, the tiny immediately became extremely significant to Scarlett. There was nothing indifferent about the way she treated Rebecca.
Also, her nervousness was fucking adorable!
But this is why those doubts I had about Scarlett have gone away. This impromptu one-on-one time with Rebecca was unplanned and unanticipated. There were no witnesses to impress. Scarlett, when finding a seemingly random tiny in trouble, saved her and treated her more like a person than anyone else in the story has to a tiny. With Amber, there was always the possibility that she was trying to manipulate Amber to some end, as she had shown that potential when dealing with Amber before and therefore could have been doing the same again here. But with Rebecca, I can't think of any motivation for Scarlett to lie or deceive. This was just a random, genuine moment, and Scarlett showed us who she really is. And I liked the person I saw, maybe more than any other character in the whole damn story (and Annabel is in the story, so that's saying something)!
Not only that, but Rebecca immediately made friends with Scarlett. She calmed the big girl down and quickly went from fearing her to giddily admitting that she's Amber's girlfriend. And then she covered for Scarlett, lied for her! That's a great way to build trust and friendship. Scarlett seemed pretty grateful for the bailout, too!
Stepping back just a bit and revisiting Scarlett's time at the desk "alone," good God did every word of Rebecca's description of Scarlett leave me mesmerized! I shouldn't be surprised, given how strong your descriptions always are, but this one resonated with me in a way that was unique and enthralling. From the way the blue light from nightlight illuminating her facial features to the unwittingly cocky way she shifted weight between her feet and shrugged her shoulders, I don't think I blinked until the books started falling. I mentioned the irony and clever intention of Scarlett seeming indifferent to Rebecca's presence, but I also need to bring up how incredibly hot this was with how the whole thing was presented.
Even Scarlett's smelly feet (I'm not a smells guy, despite loving this story, if you can believe it!), but the way you tied that stench in with Rebecca feeling like a worthless speck in Scarlett's presence was just incredible! And Rebecca thinking of all the ways Scarlett could end her without even noticing? Chef's kiss!
Everything was so sensual in that scene. I know in the last chapter I speculated that Scarlett might end up being a romantic rival (unknowingly) fighting Rebecca for Amber's affection, but now I feel like maybe I should have been more worried about Scarlett fighting Amber for Rebecca's affection! Of course, this doesn't have to go the love-triangle route at all, and if this somehow ended up being a more ... traditional version of what Donnica, Annabel, and Trevor have going on, I'd be fucking thrilled! Seeing the three of them in such harmony at the end of the chapter was so sweet, and it got my imagination going a little bit, too.
I really have no idea what you have in mind for these three in the chapters ahead, but I feel like I'm going to be deeply into it regardless of what direction you choose to take them.
Of course, Amber woke up just in time to cut short what was turning out to be heart-melting moment between Scarlett and Rebecca, but I still love how protective Amber was of Rebecca here. Given how the last time a giant discovered Rebecca in Amber's room went (and thoughts of Sara were dancing in my head when Scarlett's hand shot down too fast for Rebecca to comprehend), her anger and concern are completely justifiable here.
Scarlett not only accepting but supporting their relationship was awesome too! She immediately figured out that Rebecca was not only the same girl Amber talked about so much but also Amber's girlfriend so quickly, and I feel like her natural open-mindedness played a huge role in that. Scarlett didn't once assume that Rebecca was Amber's slave or pet, and I get the feeling that Scarlett would have been disgusted if that had been what Rebecca was to Amber.
But we also found out some other interesting stuff about Scarlett in this segment. She has two moms, first of all. She's also a "microsexual" (I love this term!) and seemingly has dated tinies before. This is all interesting to me, because I had speculated in my head that maybe one of Scarlett's parents had either recently shrunk or people at her old school had found out, and that's why she transferred. That could technically still could be the case, but I really have no particular reason to think that. I thought that might justify why Scarlett might be nicer to tinies (I was hoping she would be, even if I did have my doubts about her), but the microsexual thing kind of helps explain that a little bit. I mean, if she's attracted to tinies, it only makes sense that she's gotten to know some and has a better understanding that they're just people.
Also, the fact that Scarlett is oversexed helps explain why she would just sneak over to her new friend's desk and start touching herself like that. It's a compulsion she struggles to control, apparently. I love that her parents gave her such good advice on it, though. It's nothing to be ashamed of. Just, you know, do a tiny search first next time!
You were right: This was my favorite segment of the chapter! And I'm so excited to see what's in store for these three. Rebecca already seems to know more than Amber and Scarlett's soccer coaches, so could we see Rebecca giving Scarlett some more direct coaching instead of doing it through Amber? Will Amber's relief at having another giant accept her relationship with Rebecca make her more willing to "share" Rebecca, or will Amber get more greedy about her Rebecca time now that there's another giant friend who might want to hang out with her tiny girlfriend sometimes? Will Rebecca ever get used to the smell of Scarlett's feet, and how bad a sign is that if she does?
Author's Response:
"But first, I liked that slight glimpse into
Donnica's side of things after that call from Helena. I'm sure she was a wreck
wondering where Trevor was before that moment, so that call had to be both a
relief and a horror for her at the same time. You threw in some nice details to
show how stressed she was, too. My favorite was her heels sounding like warning
shots as she raced across the tile floor to go pick up Trevor."
Thanks for pointing this out! I really do love when I can
connect segments like that, it gives the whole chapter a stronger sense of
continuity. It’s one of those little things that takes more thought than it
looks (I’d originally planned to start that scene in the bedroom), but I think
the story is much richer for it.
"Before we get into Scarlett proper, I wanted to
commend you on how you (once again) masterfully set up the back half of this
segment with the first half. There were so many little lines clearly designed
to make us expect the opposite of what was going to happen, or maybe you just
happen to be quite fond of irony. Things like Rebecca thinking about how
Scarlett would be the kind of girl she'd be friends with if things were
different, if they were the same size and she was younger, and all of those thoughts
about how insignificant Rebecca thought she was to Scarlett and how indifferent
the giant girl was to her existence were awesome to see flipped on their head
later in the segment."
Yeah I mentioned this in your last review too… when I’m
writing, I like to keep the climax of the segment clear in my mind and then use
the rising action to layer in as much setup as possible. It’s often slipped in
during transitions, when characters are moving or time is passing. When I need
filler of sorts. That’s where I love to plant those little actions or thoughts
that will pay off later.
"Because, from the moment Scarlett discovered
Rebecca's existence, this was not the case at all! Scarlett's first instinct
was to save Rebecca's tiny life, an instinct I feel like most of the giants
we've met so far don't possess in the least. Then, Scarlett was incredibly
nervous and embarrassed at the state she was in while in Rebecca's presence.
The opinion of that "forgotten crumb" was immensely important to
Scarlett. She was extremely apologetic about her juices being on the fingers that
saved Rebecca's life (most of the giants we've seen so far not only wouldn't
have cared, but they would have expected Rebecca to be thankful that they'd
bothered to save her at all and probably would have made her lick the juices
from those fingers, too!), and when Rebecca saw that raunchy mixed-sized porn
on Scarlett's phone, the giant was desperate to assure Rebecca that she would
never do that to her or think of her as just some prop or toy."
You’ve just made me realize how many crumb metaphors I used
in this chapter, lol. I guess I got such a high from how it landed in S1 with
Annabel that I just kept rolling with it. And “lick the juices from those
fingers”? Don’t give me any ideas, don’t you know who you’re talking to?
"But this is why those doubts I had about Scarlett
have gone away. This impromptu one-on-one time with Rebecca was unplanned and
unanticipated. There were no witnesses to impress. Scarlett, when finding a
seemingly random tiny in trouble, saved her and treated her more like a person
than anyone else in the story has to a tiny. With Amber, there was always the
possibility that she was trying to manipulate Amber to some end, as she had
shown that potential when dealing with Amber before and therefore could have
been doing the same again here. But with Rebecca, I can't think of any
motivation for Scarlett to lie or deceive. This was just a random, genuine
moment, and Scarlett showed us who she really is. And I liked the person I saw,
maybe more than any other character in the whole damn story (and Annabel is in
the story, so that's saying something)!"
Can you believe it? We might actually have a good kid
in this story! And what better tiny for her to meet than Rebecca? :D
And yeah, it really doesn’t get more raw than someone
catching you mid-masturbation. I’m thrilled she’s resonating with you like this,
she’s honestly immensely fun to write because she’s such a counterpoint
to most of the other giants. I can’t wait to keep peeling her arc open.
"Stepping back just a bit and revisiting Scarlett's
time at the desk "alone," good God did every word of Rebecca's
description of Scarlett leave me mesmerized! I shouldn't be surprised, given
how strong your descriptions always are, but this one resonated with me in a
way that was unique and enthralling. From the way the blue light from
nightlight illuminating her facial features to the unwittingly cocky way she
shifted weight between her feet and shrugged her shoulders, I don't think I blinked
until the books started falling. I mentioned the irony and clever intention of
Scarlett seeming indifferent to Rebecca's presence, but I also need to bring up
how incredibly hot this was with how the whole thing was presented."
Yessssss! I’m so glad you felt this. I was buzzing
writing that scene. There was such a sensual undercurrent to it all… the awe,
the danger, the unintentional eroticism. I really feel like it powered the
whole segment, and it’s one of the pieces I’m proudest of in the whole chapter.
So, thank you for calling it out.
"Everything was so sensual in that scene. I know in
the last chapter I speculated that Scarlett might end up being a romantic rival
(unknowingly) fighting Rebecca for Amber's affection, but now I feel like maybe
I should have been more worried about Scarlett fighting Amber for Rebecca's
affection! Of course, this doesn't have to go the love-triangle route at all,
and if this somehow ended up being a more ... traditional version of what
Donnica, Annabel, and Trevor have going on, I'd be fucking thrilled! Seeing the
three of them in such harmony at the end of the chapter was so sweet, and it
got my imagination going a little bit, too."
Very interesting indeed... I saw so many takes about
Scarlett trying to steal Amber from Rebecca, but I was waiting for
someone to float the reverse. That Scarlett might have eyes for Rebecca
instead. Would she risk the friendship with Amber for it? Is she even that
kind of girl? Or... maybe it’s what you said last: the three of them moving
toward something even more intimate. We’ll see ;)
"But we also found out some other interesting stuff
about Scarlett in this segment. She has two moms, first of all. She's also a
"microsexual" (I love this term!) and seemingly has dated tinies
before. This is all interesting to me, because I had speculated in my head that
maybe one of Scarlett's parents had either recently shrunk or people at her old
school had found out, and that's why she transferred. That could technically
still could be the case, but I really have no particular reason to think that.
I thought that might justify why Scarlett might be nicer to tinies (I was
hoping she would be, even if I did have my doubts about her), but the
microsexual thing kind of helps explain that a little bit. I mean, if she's
attracted to tinies, it only makes sense that she's gotten to know some and has
a better understanding that they're just people."
Haha I loved the microsexual term too! It just popped out
while writing and felt so right. And yeah, this segment definitely paints a
more complete picture of who Scarlett is: she’s from a very liberal household,
raised to be open, tolerant, and compassionate. She’s still got a competitive
streak, and she’s also a little… compulsive, shall we say? But her perspective
on tinies offers something totally new to the story. I’m excited to let her
worldview challenge the other giants.
"You were right: This was my favorite segment of the
chapter! And I'm so excited to see what's in store for these three. Rebecca
already seems to know more than Amber and Scarlett's soccer coaches, so could
we see Rebecca giving Scarlett some more direct coaching instead of doing it
through Amber? Will Amber's relief at having another giant accept her
relationship with Rebecca make her more willing to "share" Rebecca,
or will Amber get more greedy about her Rebecca time now that there's another
giant friend who might want to hang out with her tiny girlfriend sometimes?
Will Rebecca ever get used to the smell of Scarlett's feet, and how bad a sign
is that if she does?"
All very interesting questions... and for spoiler reasons I won’t single any of them out, but let’s just say, you’re definitely sniffing in the right direction. I had a feeling this segment would hit home for you and I can feel that it did through your review. Scarlett’s influence is going to be huge in this next arc, and I can’t wait to unfold it slowly.





Date: June 28 2025 7:49 PM Title: PART 28
Now it’s time to discover a bit more domain of Helena, but first a bit more of Penelope and Trevor. I really like the way you describe the difference between Penelope and Trevor. With a Trevor in a bad chape while Penelope is glowing.
But the best about the beginning of this segment is how Penelope acts toward Trevor for her is nothing more than an object , it’s funny how their ‘relations’ evolve.
After that we can have a fast description of how incredible Helena palace is. It gives a nice kingdom vibe, or maybe a queendom since there is no king. This vibe is perfect since you really put a lot of effort into making everything around Helena about royalty.
And come another fun moment, the happiness of Penelope almost like a child who brings goods grades to her parents. She called Helena even if of course her goal is to please Helena so she can say good things to Penelope’s mom (looking forward to knowing more about Penelope lineage in England)
But sadly she soon realized her initiative toward Trevor wasn’t something she should have done because it was the opposite of what she expected Helena wasn’t happy at all she was beyond furious and Penelope was the one who suffered from it first she had to face the wrath of Helena but she was only using her words until she ask the question: ‘’what did you do to Trevor?” And the answer was the end of Penelope her little moment of joy with him ends up in the most powerful slap she even got. I really enjoy that because it’s a perfect parallel to the relations Donnica Annabel. Two powerful women with two girls who kinda act like teenagers, it’s also funny to see how similar Donnica and Helena are like the two faces of the same coin. But sadly If Donnica explode but forgive it’s not the case with Helena her anger stay. Penelope goes from one of her ‘girls’ to nothing. But it didn’t end for her now she need to take care of Trevor while Helena tries to save the situation with Donnica. And to add to the punishment of Penelope she can’t arm Trevor. And of course he took advantage of it to humiliate Penelope even more. It’s nice to see a giantess fall from grace even if unlike Chelsea she doesn’t end up as a slave or crush.
Finally, she just put Trevor in a cage to be free from him, but this cage is already occupied by someone a tiny woman.
After a few tentative failed tentative Trevor finally got an answer from the tiny woman. And to is surprise it’s Celine the named behind M.I.N.A.R, the person he was looking for weeks to help him with the integration of M.I.N.A.R and LegalSync; but she is not just an incredible with coding she is also a funny woman with a really strong will to not surrender and help the other tiny like an other amazing tiny of the story Rebecca and she also have the Trevor sense of Humor and will to always provocate the giantess especially Helena. But before they could continue their conversation, Helena appear even more furious than earlier Penelope make another big mistakes Celine shouldn’t have any one with her especially Trevor. And when Celine kissed Trevor to pissed even more Helena, we could see her anger have no limits the was even ready to crush Trevor even if that would ruin her live.
But she contains herself and start some bargain with Trevor to make sure he doesn’t talk about what happened with Penelope. But the best moment is when Trevor ask for Celine Helena become furious again. Showing there is way more than just the rivalry between those two woman. Another good think is the relation Helena Trevor being less tense maybe they could become closer in a near future it could be really interesting.
And come the last segment with Amber and her new best friend Scarlett. And I have to say after all this segment with lot of pressure around Trevor it’s really nice to have a lighter one, it’s allow to rest a bit, and this segment is amazing in many ways, first Scarlett is a lovely character, and it’s really nice, for Amber it’s perfect to having a friend can help her and relieve some pressure on Rebecca who was really scared about Amber.
But all the action start when Amber ask Scarlett to stay thanks to the advice of Rebecca. While Amber is asleep Scarlett feel the need to masturbate, sadly for Rebecca she do it on Amber office chair and she start by putting her feel where Rebecca is hiding making her suffer with her stinky feet, but the best is the clumsiness of Scarlett, to help her masturbate she put a video but failed with the sound, but the worst could have happened, she the book almost fall on Rebecca but Scarlett was fast enough to save her, but with her hand who still smell like her pussy, making her so sorry toward Rebecca, and I have to say it’s fantastic to have a character who liked tiny. But the best is probably the reaction of Amber, we can feel all the emotions she feel, anger, fear and finally hapiness when she realize Scarlett is on her side and she also liked Rebecca, end the end with all 3 of them enjoying some good time is the perfect end to this heavy chapter.
A perfect chapter who improve a lot the worlds of DAW with the info about how Europe deal with tiny it’s good to know more about the worlds and who knows maybe in the future we gonna move away from America. But of course the most important is about our character how Donnica Annabel relations gonna evolve after this mistake. The one between Donnica Helena since now Trevor is now by law the property of Helena and now she legally own the most precious thigs of Donnica
How Trevor is going to deal with all of that, being again in a difficult situation with is status-c will he try to get closer to Helena, how he gonna try to get close to Celine.
What's going to happen to Penelope?
And of course, the evolution of the Amber-Scarlett-Rebecca relations.
Author's Response:
"After that we can have a fast description of how
incredible Helena palace is. It gives a nice kingdom vibe, or maybe a queendom
since there is no king. This vibe is perfect since you really put a lot of
effort into making everything around Helena about royalty."
Yes! I love that you picked up on this. It was really
important for Helena’s estate to feel like a Kingdom, almost as if the
title were literal. Everything about her demands reverence… but what exactly is
going on in there, hmm?
"And come another fun moment, the happiness of
Penelope almost like a child who brings goods grades to her parents. She called
Helena even if of course her goal is to please Helena so she can say good
things to Penelope’s mom (looking forward to knowing more about Penelope
lineage in England)"
It’s definitely been strongly hinted that Penelope’s family
is important, especially to Helena. But why? Why would they send her across the
world to intern here? What ties could Helena possibly have with an old English
bloodline? So many questions...
"I really enjoy that because it’s a perfect parallel
to the relations Donnica Annabel. Two powerful women with two girls who kinda
act like teenagers, it’s also funny to see how similar Donnica and Helena are
like the two faces of the same coin. But sadly If Donnica explode but forgive
it’s not the case with Helena her anger stay."
Such a great observation, and absolutely something I leaned
into when building this chapter. Both Donnica and Helena are surrounded by
younger women who desperately seek their approval, yet approach it in such
different ways. And yeah, Donnica may forgive, but Helena holds grudges. The
tension between them is growing. Can anything (or anyone) hold that in check?
"but she is not just an incredible with coding she
is also a funny woman with a really strong will to not surrender and help the
other tiny like an other amazing tiny of the story Rebecca and she also have
the Trevor sense of Humor and will to always provocate the giantess especially
Helena."
I love this take; she really is kind of a hybrid between
Trevor and Rebecca. She has Rebecca's drive to protect others and stand up to
power, and Trevor's humor and unshakable defiance. She’s quickly becoming one
of my favorites to write. I can’t wait to give you more of her.
"But she contains herself and start some bargain
with Trevor to make sure he doesn’t talk about what happened with Penelope. But
the best moment is when Trevor ask for Celine Helena become furious again.
Showing there is way more than just the rivalry between those two woman.
Another good think is the relation Helena Trevor being less tense maybe they
could become closer in a near future it could be really interesting."
This scene with Trevor and Helena in the study is such a
turning point. Back in the cage, you could chalk Helena’s fury up to Penelope’s
incompetence. But here? Calm, alone, composed, and still Celine’s name
sends her over the edge. There's something deeper between those two, for sure.
And yeah, there might be a shift happening with Helena and Trevor too... maybe.
"And come the last segment with Amber and her new
best friend Scarlett. And I have to say after all this segment with lot of
pressure around Trevor it’s really nice to have a lighter one, it’s allow to
rest a bit, and this segment is amazing in many ways, first Scarlett is a
lovely character, and it’s really nice, for Amber it’s perfect to having a
friend can help her and relieve some pressure on Rebecca who was really scared
about Amber."
I’m so glad you appreciated the shift in tone here. My
stories can definitely get heavy, so I try to build in space to breathe and
this was the perfect spot for that. I love writing the softer sides of these
characters. Even though things still got a little tense for Rebecca, it was
such a welcome break.
"...and I have to say it’s fantastic to have a
character who liked tiny. But the best is probably the reaction of Amber, we
can feel all the emotions she feel, anger, fear and finally hapiness when she
realize Scarlett is on her side and she also liked Rebecca, end the end with
all 3 of them enjoying some good time is the perfect end to this heavy
chapter."
Amber’s emotional rollercoaster was definitely intentional.
This is the first time someone her age learns about Rebecca… and yeah, Trevor
knew, but he’s Trevor. Scarlett is different. She could be a friend. A real
friend. I also loved having a giantess who’s kind from the start, even if she
was a little awkward about getting caught... doing you know what lol. It’ll be
fascinating to see how Scarlett affects both Amber and Rebecca going forward.
I’m so excited for their arc.
"How Trevor is going to deal with all of that, being
again in a difficult situation with is status-c will he try to get closer to
Helena, how he gonna try to get close to Celine. What's going to happen to
Penelope? And of course, the evolution of the Amber-Scarlett-Rebecca
relations."
All fantastic questions! Trevor’s Status-C keeps him
tethered to Helena, which is already causing friction. And now that Celine’s in
the mix? Things could get very complicated. As for Penelope... well,
with her mom's connection to Helena, she might not be out of the story just
yet.
And Amber-Scarlett-Rebecca? Buckle up. That triangle’s going to get wild.
Thanks so much for this amazing review… I seriously love
getting to dig into them like this!





Date: June 27 2025 3:59 AM Title: PART 28
I know I called Penelope fucking up in my last review and thought she'd get a rude awakening once Helena found out what she had done, but fuck was the whole of S5 so, so satisfying!
You set it up so perfectly too. Building off of all that queenly stuff in the car, Penelope was so smugly elated once they arrived at Helena's place. She envisioned how happy Helena would be, how proud her mother would be for once after hearing that she had finally succeeded, and hell, there was even the fellowship (I'm assuming some sort of family fortune type thing?) to consider! Even her happiness at the reveal of Trevor to Helena fed into this.
And as soon as I saw Helena's immediate reaction, I was grinning from ear to ear. I figured Helena would be upset, but this went above and beyond my expectations. I mean, I knew Donnica was important to her somehow, but I didn't think it had reached the point where a few words from Trevor were enough for her to slap the shit out of Penelope!
To be fair, though, I think there was a little more to that slap than just the consequences Penelope raping Trevor might bring on Helena, although I have no doubt that was a factor. Based on the way she chastised Penelope when the young Brit called herself a "goddess-in-waiting" (I love how massively overinflated so many of your characters' egos are!) makes me think there's a code when it comes to owning tinies (owning in the general sense, not just the Status-C stuff). That whole "don't mess with another woman's pet" line makes me think that some of that anger came from Penelope being too petulant to understand that an "owned" tiny is off-limits, goddess or not. I found that to be pretty interesting.
But yeah, seeing Penelope's world crash down all around her was so enjoyable. I'm normally not the type to revel in the suffering of others, even fictional characters (unless it's hot, I mean!), but damn was her agony at Helena putting her in her place immensely gratifying!
And then the deeper implications sunk in for Penelope. I was so happy to see that she was concerned about this triggering an investigation. I mentioned before that I thought there had to be real consequences to someone (even with Helena's special status) just swiping someone's Status-C claim without reason and that Helena would be aware of that, so it was awesome to see that actually be the case! Not only that, but Helena has other reasons to fear an investigation, which is quite a curious development.
It seems as though this Kingdom of hers is probably what she's worried about the government discovering. I love the mystery you introduced simply by having your characters repeat that word a few times (and as a proper noun, of course!). So Helena has subjects? Man, my imagination is racing at the possibilities!
Does Helena have her own little city of tiny slaves? If so, is it Medieval themed? Saudi themed? Have I mentioned that giantesses in tiny cities (or city-like places) is one of my absolute favorite things in this fetish? I mean, the Kingdom could be something different entirely, but the possibilities here are really exciting!
Oh, uh, terrible. I mean, it's a terrible thing Helena is doing to those poor tinies, whatever it is (assuming they're mistreated).
But man, that threat Helena laid on Penelope just before carelessly handing off Trevor (I love the emphasis on that carelessness, by the way) was chilling. I still don't know if Helena's "need' of Donnica is more personal or professional in nature, but it's certainly really important to her!
The start of S6 was brilliant as well! Between the description of Penelope holding him away from her body in both disgust and fear and Trevor's attitude coming right back to him, this was handled so, so well! I love how Trevor so dryly taunted her. He had warned her about this (okay, maybe not exactly this, but that there would be consequences for her claiming him), and despite what she did to him, how she made him feel, he didn't even hesitate to kick her while she was down. Trevor is so fucking awesome
And Penelope whining and telling him to shut up is just perfect. She had the world at her feet five minutes ago and now she has nothing. Her fit about hating Trevor was great, like he would actually care about that. She's a brat who doesn't know how to deal with not only not getting her way but having someone there to mock her the way she mocks others. It's delicious!
And then she gets kicked out (and surely fired?) after putting Trevor in the cage with Celine. She just acts without thinking and assumes ignorance will save her, but that shit doesn't work in the real world, especially not with someone like Helena.
And just why does anyone even mentioning Celine, let alone seeing her, piss Helena off so much? Is she just desperate to have Celine be completely isolated from the rest of the world? Is she afraid that Celine is going to reveal some deep dark secret or blow up her plan? Does a part of her secretly like Celine and want her all to herself, burying that feeling with hate and anger? I mean, she did flip out way more after seeing then "entangled," and I'm not sure if that was jealousy or something else entirely.
Speaking of Celine, I'm pissed at myself. I briefly thought that Celine might be the rival before, but I dismissed the thought entirely. There's no way someone like Helena would lean so heavily on a tiny like that, and she definitely wouldn't rely on her hated rival!
So now Helena is pathetic and a hypocrite!
As for Celine herself, I can see why she always finished ahead of Helena in life. She's incredible! For most of this chapter, we see Helena flipping out and being angry because things aren't going her way (granted that investigation sounds like a pretty legit concern for her). Celine's life is hell! She lives in her rival's cage (assuming Celine even viewed Helena as a rival) and is tormented by her every day. Yet not only is she defiant, only willingly giving Helena anything at all because of her yet-to-be-introduced sister, but she's calm, cool, and collected the whole time! Sure, she seems a little ... unbalanced, but that comes off more as a personality trait, a way to keep people guessing about her, than it does something caused by everything that's been done to her.
And she's incredibly smart, too! She already knows damn near everything! And the way she pieced together what happened to Trevor with minimal clues to go off of (and Helena had to be told instead of figuring it out on her own) was honestly impressive. Not only that, but the way she says things makes her totally unreadable. Is she bitter that Trevor is helping the giants destroy tinies' rights or does she not give a fuck at this point? Does she just enjoy needling him or is she giving him a hard time because of that? Why did she jump him? Did she want to make Helena jealous? Does she know of some other reason Helena would hate that? Did she think it would get Trevor in trouble?
And holy shit! The way she called out to Trevor and asked him to visit her again in a sing-song voice (and right after being flicked away, too!) was hilarious. She's trapped in that cage and forced to service Helena's feet and ass, but somehow she still seems like the one in control in some ways. I really like her!
The negotiation between Trevor and Helena was interesting. Again, I thought Helena would never "stoop so low" as to make a deal with a tiny, especially Trevor of all people, but their conversation was mostly civil. She even set him down on the desk gently. I almost feel like there's a begrudging respect between them, even if neither of them will ever admit it. Whether Helena can accept it or not, Trevor has been a worthy adversary for her in the office, and apparently they're battling for Donnica's soul now? And for Trevor, we've already seen him admit to himself that the office needs Helena now.
I also love how Trevor handled this, knowing when to push and when to back off. I thought it was brilliant how he outsmarted Helena to get a session with Celine, demanding weeks or months with her, only to be thrilled that he got the one session he really needed guaranteed to him!
Helena, on the other hand, actually gave Trevor some information before shutting down and thinking of him as a pest. That probably wasn't so bright on her part, but maybe that's just her underestimating him? Or maybe she thinks Donnica coming back into the ideological fold is inevitable, so why not get her "pet" ready for what's coming?
Now we just need to wait and see what happens with Trevor's status. It seems like Helena is eager to get him out of her name, but will she change her mind and find a way to use this? Will Donnica demand that this be settled as soon as possible and get this settled quickly? I'm really curious if this Status-C ambiguity is going to stick around for awhile or if it's served its purpose and things get cleared up quickly.
So yeah, S5,6, and 7 were a great back end to all the drama you set up with 2-4. You gave us a legitimate scare and had us thinking maybe Trevor was really fucked this time, then gave us a satisfying conclusion (for now) and even teased us a bit on the larger story ahead. I really enjoyed this!
Author's Response:
"You set it up so perfectly too. Building off of all
that queenly stuff in the car, Penelope was so smugly elated once they arrived
at Helena's place. She envisioned how happy Helena would be, how proud her
mother would be for once after hearing that she had finally succeeded, and
hell, there was even the fellowship (I'm assuming some sort of family fortune
type thing?) to consider! Even her happiness at the reveal of Trevor to Helena
fed into this."
The bigger they are, the harder they fall, right? And you
really couldn’t get much bigger than Penelope in that moment. She was at her
peak… absolutely convinced she had it all figured out. Honestly, when I’m
writing a scene like that, I always try to build the most delicious high just
to make the crash that much better. The car rape scene was originally just
supposed to be one round (just ass!) but I kept layering more and more into her
character (her ego, her need for validation, her family legacy) until I had
something that felt ripe for collapse. By the time she steps into Helena’s
study, everything was set. I’m a big believer that the journey has to be just
as compelling as the destination, and I think it paid off here. None of these
scenes were filler… each one was meant to deepen the spiral, and Penelope’s
arrogance made the perfect fuel.
"To be fair, though, I think there was a little more
to that slap than just the consequences Penelope raping Trevor might bring on
Helena, although I have no doubt that was a factor. Based on the way she
chastised Penelope when the young Brit called herself a 'goddess-in-waiting' (I
love how massively overinflated so many of your characters' egos are!) makes me
think there's a code when it comes to owning tinies (owning in the general
sense, not just the Status-C stuff). That whole 'don't mess with another woman's
pet' line makes me think that some of that anger came from Penelope being too
petulant to understand that an 'owned' tiny is off-limits, goddess or not. I
found that to be pretty interesting."
There may very well be an unwritten code, one Helena didn’t
feel the need to explain until it was broken. Or maybe
"Goddess-in-Waiting" is more than just a braggy little nickname.
Could even be tied to that mysterious fellowship she was talking about... but
nah, surely not...
Probably…
"It seems as though this Kingdom of hers is probably
what she's worried about the government discovering. I love the mystery you
introduced simply by having your characters repeat that word a few times (and
as a proper noun, of course!). So Helena has subjects? Man, my imagination is
racing at the possibilities!
Does Helena have her own little city of tiny slaves? If
so, is it Medieval themed? Saudi themed? Have I mentioned that giantesses in
tiny cities (or city-like places) is one of my absolute favorite things in this
fetish? I mean, the Kingdom could be something different entirely, but the
possibilities here are really exciting!"
You know my no-spoilers policy, so I won’t say too much...
but if this kind of worldbuilding is your thing, you’re definitely going to
want to keep reading ;)
"The start of S6 was brilliant as well! Between the
description of Penelope holding him away from her body in both disgust and fear
and Trevor's attitude coming right back to him, this was handled so, so well! I
love how Trevor so dryly taunted her. He had warned her about this (okay, maybe
not exactly this, but that there would be consequences for her claiming him),
and despite what she did to him, how she made him feel, he didn't even hesitate
to kick her while she was down. Trevor is so fucking awesome."
This part of S6 was such a blast to write. Trevor’s
self-control is like a switch… he can be cautious when he needs to, but the
second he has even an inch of leverage, he’s right back at it. And of
course, Penelope’s still clinging to that spoiled-brat energy even when her
world is falling apart. I wonder what’s next for her... it’s hard to imagine
her just walking back into the office like nothing happened (especially with
Donnica around), but her mother did seem pretty important to Helena,
didn’t she? We’ll see.
"And holy shit! The way she called out to Trevor and
asked him to visit her again in a sing-song voice (and right after being
flicked away, too!) was hilarious. She's trapped in that cage and forced to
service Helena's feet and ass, but somehow she still seems like the one in
control in some ways. I really like her!"
That sing-song line was maybe my favorite thing to write in
the whole chapter. I’m thrilled you called it out! Another reader mentioned
that Celine feels more like an active prisoner than a passive one, and
that’s exactly what I wanted. She’s unsettling, magnetic, clever and her role
in this arc is only just beginning. She might actually be my favorite character
to write right now.
"The negotiation between Trevor and Helena was
interesting. Again, I thought Helena would never 'stoop so low' as to make a
deal with a tiny, especially Trevor of all people, but their conversation was
mostly civil. She even set him down on the desk gently. I almost feel like
there's a begrudging respect between them, even if neither of them will ever
admit it. Whether Helena can accept it or not, Trevor has been a worthy
adversary for her in the office, and apparently they're battling for Donnica's
soul now? And for Trevor, we've already seen him admit to himself that the
office needs Helena now."
Under normal circumstances, Helena wouldn’t even entertain
the thought of negotiating with Trevor. She despises giving ground to a tiny,
and even more so to him. But after what happened (Penelope raping him)
she had no choice. She needed his silence and they both knew it. Still, you
might be onto something with that whole ‘begrudging respect’ angle… he really
does hold his own against her, and he’s never bowed the way others have. Of
course, the fact that he’s now legally her property? That complicates things a
bit.
"Now we just need to wait and see what happens with
Trevor's status. It seems like Helena is eager to get him out of her name, but
will she change her mind and find a way to use this? Will Donnica demand that
this be settled as soon as possible and get this settled quickly? I'm really
curious if this Status-C ambiguity is going to stick around for awhile or if
it's served its purpose and things get cleared up quickly."
Yeah... this gray zone might stick around a bit longer.
Status-C is a massive legal shift, and Trevor is stuck right in the middle of
its murkiest loophole. Earlier you called the conflict between Trevor and Helena
the battle for Donnica’s soul... but the real fight might be for Trevor
himself.
For now though there seems to be an uneasy peace.
For now…
"So yeah, S5, 6, and 7 were a great back end to all
the drama you set up with 2-4. You gave us a legitimate scare and had us
thinking maybe Trevor was really fucked this time, then gave us a satisfying
conclusion (for now) and even teased us a bit on the larger story ahead. I
really enjoyed this!"
I appreciate this so much. These segments were some of the most plot-intensive I’ve written in a row, and I wasn’t sure how they’d land, especially with how long the chapter turned out. But hearing that it worked for you, and gave that payoff after the tension, means the world. And yeah, I think I teased just enough to keep the fires lit... because there’s still so much more coming.





Date: June 26 2025 10:00 PM Title: PART 28
First, I want to thank you for always delivering such quality with every chapter. Now, let’s dive into this chapter segment by segment.
S1: I really like the approach you took with this one, showing the reality of the office through Chelsea’s eyes. We can see how awful the women who work there are toward Tiny, especially those who knew Chelsea before the shrinking. It’s also really interesting how you highlight the differences between the giantesses, particularly the meaner ones. We see how weak they truly are, needing to humiliate a tiny to feel a small rush of power. This is even more evident with those who were far less accomplished than Chelsea before she shrunk, humiliating her to convince themselves they’re better than her. It shows how pathetic they are while thinking they’re strong women.
It’s even better with how you portray Donnica as a truly strong woman. She doesn’t need to play these games; she’s a goddess who doesn’t need to speak or scheme—she just takes what belongs to her, including Chelsea.
The second thing I really enjoyed in this segment is how Annabel reacts. Her bratty, childish persona always seeks approval, even if it means crushing others. In this case, that’s exactly what happens, even putting Donnica in an uncomfortable position.
To end this segment, the inevitability of the tiny office slave’s fate is fantastic. Chelsea falls from her position as main assistant to nothing but a pussy slave, initially useful to Donnica, only to be crushed by Annabel because of her jealousy over Chelsea’s talents. This really shows how messed up this world is. It’s an amazing way to start this long chapter. Also, the way you describe Chelsea’s work as a slave is really hot.
S2: In this new segment, Trevor is trying to save the office, which is on the verge of collapsing due to the cold war between Helena and Donnica, caused by the “ass accident.” Trevor is the one who has to make things work thanks to his system, but despite his goodwill, there are two major issues: Donnica, who is overprotective of him, and Helena, who refuses to use LegalSync because she already uses her own system, M.I.N.A.R. So, Trevor is forced to work with Helena’s crew, and she pairs him with a new girl from a wealthy family in England: Penelope. This bratty woman only wants one thing—to dominate tinies, which is much easier in America since the laws are more lenient and less protective toward tinies without money. While the start of her new journey goes well, she faces a difficult job ahead: working with Trevor, the tiny office director, to “help” him connect LegalSync and M.I.N.A.R.
Their working relationship is bad from the start. Trevor does everything to succeed, even if it means pushing and criticizing Penelope, while she doesn’t give him an inch. As they’re forced to work together, their relationship becomes dire, especially when Penelope puts Helena’s name on Trevor’s Status-C, legally making him Helena’s property. It looks like a certain giantess whose name starts with an “A” failed at the easiest job ever.
With that, the dynamics shift completely. Trevor, who was in command, is now nothing but a slave to Penelope—a tiny, or worse, an object. I really enjoy this part, which shows the harsh reality of this world for tinies; with one action, Penelope changes his entire life. The clicker was an amazing idea; it makes this segment feel like a horror story, where danger is coming, and calling for help is useless. This feeling grows throughout the segment, with Penelope becoming more aggressive and dominant toward Trevor as he tries to save his life. To add to this sense of horror, he ends up in her pocket, locked in a dark place, unaware of what she has planned for him.
The next segment is more classical but still really good, starting with Penelope leaving the office with Trevor still trapped inside her pocket. However, he isn’t trapped for long, as she gets into her car to have fun with Trevor. Her vision of “fun” involves putting Trevor through hell, forcing him to be used as her sex toy or ass slave, being as mean and dominant as possible, and making sure he regrets every time he disrespected her. After she’s done with him, she taunts him by telling him what awaits him in Helena’s lair.
Author's Response:
"It’s even better with how you portray Donnica as a
truly strong woman. She doesn’t need to play these games; she’s a goddess who
doesn’t need to speak or scheme—she just takes what belongs to her, including
Chelsea."
I love this take! You’re absolutely right… there’s a sharp
contrast between the other giantesses who use Chelsea, driven by their whims
and insecurities, and Donnica, who rules with absolute certainty. She doesn’t
have to plot or manipulate. She simply takes. That’s the difference between
being dominant and being divine. It’s what makes Donnica who she is!
"To end this segment, the inevitability of the tiny
office slave’s fate is fantastic. Chelsea falls from her position as main
assistant to nothing but a pussy slave, initially useful to Donnica, only to be
crushed by Annabel because of her jealousy over Chelsea’s talents. This really
shows how messed up this world is. It’s an amazing way to start this long
chapter. Also, the way you describe Chelsea’s work as a slave is really
hot."
Even long before this particular story arc came together, I
had that scene in mind… Annabel crushing a tiny who got too close to Donnica,
purely out of spite. It’s one of those moments that really hones in on
something primal: jealousy, insecurity, power, and fear all boiling together.
And yeah, I’m really glad it resonated, it’s been one of the most talked-about
scenes so far, and that makes me happy.
"Their working relationship is bad from the start.
Trevor does everything to succeed, even if it means pushing and criticizing
Penelope, while she doesn’t give him an inch. As they’re forced to work
together, their relationship becomes dire, especially when Penelope puts
Helena’s name on Trevor’s Status-C, legally making him Helena’s property. It
looks like a certain giantess whose name starts with an “A” failed at the
easiest job ever."
Yes! I’m so glad you picked up on Trevor’s drive to succeed…
how far he’s willing to go to make things work, even risking his own safety.
Meanwhile, Penelope’s entitlement is just off the charts. She gets such a
thrill out of impeding him, and in the twisted logic of this world, she gets
rewarded for it by ending up with Trevor as her slave. Brutal. And as for that
giantess whose name starts with “A”... yeah. Let’s just say mistakes were made.
"The clicker was an amazing idea; it makes this
segment feel like a horror story, where danger is coming, and calling for help
is useless."
I’m so glad that landed for you! I really wanted something
to dial up the tension in those moments, and the clicker became the perfect
device. I always worry about whether things like that will come off as filler
or too gimmicky, so hearing that it worked and added to the suspense is hugely
encouraging… thank you for pointing it out!
"The next segment is more classical but still really
good, starting with Penelope leaving the office with Trevor still trapped
inside her pocket. However, he isn’t trapped for long, as she gets into her car
to have fun with Trevor. Her vision of “fun” involves putting Trevor through
hell, forcing him to be used as her sex toy or ass slave, being as mean and
dominant as possible, and making sure he regrets every time he disrespected
her. After she’s done with him, she taunts him by telling him what awaits him
in Helena’s lair."
Haha you know me, I’ve always got to work some smut in there
somewhere! One of my favorite things about writing these scenes is trying to
make the eroticism feel completely organic to the story. It’s tricky, but when
it clicks, it’s incredibly satisfying… and yeah, I feel like this one hit just
right.
Sorry about the lack of foot action in this one though…
maybe next chapter ;)





Date: June 24 2025 10:11 PM Title: PART 28
So I just finished reading S2 through S4, and man, you weren't kidding about the consequences of Annabel's mistake playing out really soon! Actually, I think the fact that she was so annoyed and frustrated over everything that she missed his name in the portal makes it even worse than if this had happened while she was spinning in Donnica's chair (you're right, that is a fun visual, by the way!).
Since I've already brought her up, I'm really curious what Donnica and Annabel's reactions to him getting claimed will be. The last time something happened with Trevor, Donnica went full scapegoat on Annabel (and it wasn't even her fault). With this new dynamic between them, I really have no idea how Donnica will react now that something so serious that was partially Annabel's fault (because let's be honest, this was almost entirely Penelope's fault, even if Annabel should have been paying attention to the portal). That should be interesting to see as the chapter progresses.
But I already know how Annabel will handle it. Even if Donnica puts all the blame on her and unleashes her fury on her, it'll be nothing compared to what Annabel puts herself through. Despite that bratty attitude, she deeply loves both Donnica and Trevor. Seeing what she put her goddess mother through will be bad enough, but after she finds out what Trevor went through, what she could have prevented with just a little bit more diligence, she might break. Again. That guilt is going to weigh her down for some time, I think.
But while we're playing the blame game here, we might as well throw some Trevor's way as well. It was noble of him to try to do what was best for the firm, for Donnica despite herself, even when it went directly against Donnica and Annabel's demand that he always be accompanied around the office. But this was also pretty stupid of him, especially since he really, really wanted to avoid using that emergency clicker.
Even without this Status-C stuff, it was only a matter of time until one of Helena's girls (or just anybody in the office, really) decided to do something stupid and put him in jeopardy, protected status or not. He even knows Helena hires fuck-ups exclusively (although not intentionally, I'm sure), so he should have made sure to remove himself from any situation that they could take advantage of, if even for a fleeting minute. So to put himself in the same room as Penelope, let alone test the posh Brit's limits (something Trevor loves to do with hostile giants), was a tremendous mistake on his part, one he's currently paying the price for.
But I don't think this is going to last, though. Trevor's status can't stay this way. You put too much emphasis on what all someone applying for Status-C has to go through to be granted it, both in the previous chapter and in this one. The "loophole" Penelope found, using Helena's position to override Donnica's claim, strikes me as more of a system thing than a legal one. As in someone like Helena could step in and override things if it's in the best interest of the tiny, not to claim them for themselves. There's no way the government would make you go through such an extensive process, one that many willing applicants have failed for fickle reasons if S1 is anything to go by, only to just allow someone else, even someone like Helena, to just swoop in and claim an applicant for themselves.
So yeah, this isn't going to last. I don't know if Helena is smart enough to realize this or if Donnica is going to have to file a lawsuit to regain her property, but Trevor's time as a true slave is limited. You're not fooling me, even if I still have that sense of dread in the pit of my stomach worrying about Trevor. Because as much as I believe I'm right on this, I can't really know that for sure. And even if I am, that's not going to help Trevor much in the short term, as we saw in S4 (which I'll circle back to shortly).
All of this, in my mind, makes Penelope nothing more than a gorgeous, entitled idiot. I don't see how she's going to come back from this, unless Helena can think of some legal basis to justify the claim override, like a false claim of abuse or something. That being said, you set her up as being the one to do this quite well. She thinks that tinies in America are basically up for grabs, that it's only a matter of waiting until their registration status changes and then no one cares. That last line about her loving America really drives this point home. She really thinks it's that simple here, and that she, a regal brit with a queen complex (I loved every single one of those royalty references, by the way!), can just grab Trevor up and take him, even though he was supposed to be claimed by Annabel and Donnica.
I also love that she actively sought to date registered tinies and tried to force them to serve her anyway. I'm also not surprised that some of them actually obeyed (and not just because you're the one writing the story!). There's that primal force going around that we've seen Amber and Rebecca trying to navigate (and even Trevor felt it during that big confrontation with Helena), so of course there are other tinies that fall victim to that when an obnoxiously dominant giant like Penelope taps into it. I'm actually surprised that some walked away from her, although I love that Penelope describes as having "the nerve" to walk away. Now that's bratty entitlement!
Also, it was interesting to hear that the UK (and presumably a good portion of the world) inherently protect tinies status as people rather than privatizing it like the U.S. does. That certainly plays into the greedy Americans stereotype pretty well, and the fact that this makes the country the envy of people like Penelope, foreign visitors who want to own a tiny with a will of their own, makes a lot of sense. I was intrigued that it was mentioned a couple times that Penelope had owned tinies before, though, and broken-in ones at that. The tiny trafficking trade must be alive and well under the shadows of Big Ben and Old Bailey!
Penelope "informing" Trevor of his new status was handled so well! Her pompous attitude, her challenge for him to hit the button on his clicker, her turning her laptop around to show him, let him see for himself his new lot in life: Everything was perfect! Then she picked him up like a loose thread on her desk (I love that simile!) and smashed his stuff and brushed the rubble aside like crumbs (I found the other crumb line!). As dumb, or maybe deluded is a better word here, as Penelope is, all of this was really fucking hot, right down to the way she shifted her fingers to remind him that she could drop him at any time.
But the pocket might have been my favorite part of these three segments.
I've praised your emphasis on giant footsteps quite a bit, but this was such a unique take on it! I love how carelessly she stuffed him in her skirt pocket, but it was how his whole world was utterly rocked with each step as she strutted through the office that really got me. You had me at the word thigh! That was such a great detail, her thigh knocking him down as it rushed up to meet him in the pocket over and over as she walked without a care in the world. So good!
And then there was the rape scene. There wasn't a lot of dialogue here, for obvious reasons, but I was hanging on every poshly spoken word to slip out of Penelope's lips. Her attitude, her demeanor, pretty much everything about her once they get into the car was so alluring and sexy but in the darkest of ways. To see her truly indulge in owning Trevor was hypnotic, and it really drew me in.
Speaking of her "owning" him, I was intrigued by how she kept thinking that, despite the fact that he's registered to Helena. I couldn't tell if this was more delusion, her fantasizing in the moment, or if she really thinks that Helena will let her "own" Trevor and just keep him under Helena's name for legal reasons. Regardless of why she's thinking this, I think she's in for a rude awakening at Helena's place (based on that line about Helena's estate and visiting him often, I'm assuming that's where they're going). Even if Helena is happy with owning Trevor and there aren't consequences for what Penelope did, I can't really see Helena sharing him. He'd be a special prize for her, not as special as the rival, but someone she'd want to keep for herself for all the trouble he's caused her.
So even in the best case scenario for Penelope, this is probably as good as it's going to get for her.
Anyway, back to the smut, your luxurious writing style worked its magic here. The way she lowered him to her panties so slowly, making him take in every inch of her, was awesome! Uh, disgraceful! I meant disgraceful! What a menace Penelope is. A sultry, bratty, sexy British menace. Um, what were we talking about again?
Oh right! Her pussy! What a fantastic job you did of showing Penelope's bliss and Trevor's suffering with that insertion scene. That unspoken command was great! Distinguishing the loving touches of Annabel and Donnica from Penelope using him was perfect! And your descriptions, as always, were on point and well detailed.
Then, of course, Penelope shoved him up her ass. I like how you tied this in with the bathroom incident with Helena, mentioning back in S2 that all of Helena's girls knew about that and made fun of him for it constantly. So Penelope talking about his skills inside an asshole wasn't random at all. I admit that I didn't see this coming back in S2, but I feel like I should have!
Jumping back to S2, there were a couple things about Helena that stood out to me. First, her racking up legal victories and seemingly working like mad to make herself indispensable was interesting. Given what she said about having Donnica by her side in the last chapter, I'm guessing that Helena, who probably wouldn't have much trouble getting into another firm, is motivated by something other than professionalism. Donnica is giving her the cold shoulder and Helena goes into overdrive? Sounds like Helena's trying to get back into Donnica's good graces, something Penelope's actions certainly won't help with.
I'm even starting to wonder if Helena might be interested in Donnica romantically or something. There's not nearly enough there to draw that conclusion yet, but the way Helena is approaching this issue with Donnica has put the thought in my mind.
The other thing that jumped out at me was how often Helena is rotating assistants and that they aren't even being fired. My first thought was that hiring a bunch of fellow bigots is probably a part of the problem, with her likely prioritizing their sizeism over their merit. In my mind, that certainly applies to Penelope.
But thinking about it a bit more, I'm wondering if something is happening to these girls. Maybe I'm reading too much into this and their "disappearances" are just another example of how Helena bucking the office system is creating problems, but I kind of suspect that Helena is actually doing something to these girls. Unlike Donnica, who, even before all this goddess mother stuff, felt fond of her assistant, Helena has shown her own no love. I would think that them being fired would have to go through the system in some shape or form, so what's happening to them?
The conspiracy theorist in me wants to believe that Helena has figured out some way to weaponize the virus and that the penalty of for failing her is the loss of her assistants' "godesshood." That's a completely random theory I'm throwing out there and probably completely wrong (I mean, how would any of that even work?), but you made the thought pop in brain, so deal with it!
Oh, and I didn't forget about Celine and MINAR. When we first learned that Helena was being shady, I suspected that she was planning a coup, something we now know isn't the case. But that she has her own system and has been keeping track of things her own way the whole time is mind-blowing to me. I just assumed she was being difficult, but now we know she has something to hide. Namely Celine. Who the fuck is that? Is it even actually a person? Maybe some kind of codename or AI? What a great mystery you've sprung on us!
Damn, these three segments were gut-wrenching, yet intensely erotic as well! If this is how you do plot, fucking sign me up!
Author's Response:
"Since I've already brought her up, I'm really
curious what Donnica and Annabel's reactions to him getting claimed will be.
The last time something happened with Trevor, Donnica went full scapegoat on
Annabel (and it wasn't even her fault). With this new dynamic between them, I
really have no idea how Donnica will react now that something so serious that
was partially Annabel's fault (because let's be honest, this was almost
entirely Penelope's fault, even if Annabel should have been paying attention to
the portal). That should be interesting to see as the chapter progresses."
Thanks for calling this out! I've seen a few people come
down hard on Annabel (and sure, she absolutely messed up) but you're right:
this was mostly Penelope’s fault. She made the claim, she crossed the line, and
she did all the awful things that followed. Annabel should’ve been paying
attention, yes, but she didn’t orchestrate this. As for how it all turns out...
well, you’ll see what fate has in store for Penelope soon enough.
"But while we're playing the blame game here, we
might as well throw some Trevor's way as well. It was noble of him to try to do
what was best for the firm, for Donnica despite herself, even when it went
directly against Donnica and Annabel's demand that he always be accompanied
around the office. But this was also pretty stupid of him, especially since he
really, really wanted to avoid using that emergency clicker."
Another solid point! Trevor definitely shares some of the
blame here. He’s got this habit of, let’s say, speaking beyond his size. Noble
intentions sometimes sure… but not the safest strategy in a world like this.
Especially not when he’s ignoring clear rules (and people!) meant to protect
him.
"But I don't think this is going to last, though.
Trevor's status can't stay this way. You put too much emphasis on what all
someone applying for Status-C has to go through to be granted it, both in the
previous chapter and in this one. The "loophole" Penelope found,
using Helena's position to override Donnica's claim, strikes me as more of a
system thing than a legal one. As in someone like Helena could step in and
override things if it's in the best interest of the tiny, not to claim them for
themselves. There's no way the government would make you go through such an
extensive process, one that many willing applicants have failed for fickle
reasons if S1 is anything to go by, only to just allow someone else, even
someone like Helena, to just swoop in and claim an applicant for
themselves."
This is such an interesting take. You’ve really dug into the
nuance here, and I love that. The idea that Helena’s override is more of a
bureaucratic flex than a legal foundation? Definitely something worth thinking
about. You raise a great point but if the Status-C process is that rigorous,
can a loophole like this really hold up? And if Trevor is now
technically Helena’s property... what kind of recourse does Donnica even have?
What happens to Trevor in the meantime? It could be a messy legal gray zone
Trevor has to navigate here!
"So yeah, this isn't going to last. I don't know if
Helena is smart enough to realize this or if Donnica is going to have to file a
lawsuit to regain her property, but Trevor's time as a true slave is limited.
You're not fooling me, even if I still have that sense of dread in the pit of
my stomach worrying about Trevor. Because as much as I believe I'm right on
this, I can't really know that for sure. And even if I am, that's not going to
help Trevor much in the short term, as we saw in S4 (which I'll circle back to
shortly)."
If I’ve got that little knot of dread sitting in your
stomach, then I’ve done my job! I was curious how people would react once the
Status-C interception hit, and the feedback so far has been amazing. One reader
even told me they had to stop reading for a bit just to catch their breath
after it happened. Mission accomplished!
"All of this, in my mind, makes Penelope nothing
more than a gorgeous, entitled idiot. I don't see how she's going to come back
from this, unless Helena can think of some legal basis to justify the claim
override, like a false claim of abuse or something. That being said, you set
her up as being the one to do this quite well. She thinks that tinies in
America are basically up for grabs, that it's only a matter of waiting until
their registration status changes and then no one cares. That last line about
her loving America really drives this point home. She really thinks it's that
simple here, and that she, a regal brit with a queen complex (I loved every
single one of those royalty references, by the way!), can just grab Trevor up
and take him, even though he was supposed to be claimed by Annabel and
Donnica."
Oh god yes… Penelope was such a joy to write. You know how
much I love a bratty, smug giantess, and Penelope checked every box. I
definitely had fun hinting at her background too, there’s more to her history
with tinies. And I had such a blast writing a bitchy giantess who plays by the
rules for once, well, sort of. Her little foray into American dating was all
about toeing that legal line: going after registered tinies, technically
permitted, but still trying to dominate and control them every step of the way.
It’s her own twisted version of “playing fair.”
"Also, it was interesting to hear that the UK (and
presumably a good portion of the world) inherently protect tinies status as
people rather than privatizing it like the U.S. does. That certainly plays into
the greedy Americans stereotype pretty well, and the fact that this makes the
country the envy of people like Penelope, foreign visitors who want to own a
tiny with a will of their own, makes a lot of sense. I was intrigued that it
was mentioned a couple times that Penelope had owned tinies before, though, and
broken-in ones at that. The tiny trafficking trade must be alive and well under
the shadows of Big Ben and Old Bailey!"
The whole "pay-in registration" system was actually
inspired by the American healthcare model, where survival itself sometimes
depends on what you can afford. Years ago, when I first started reading about
how people were dying from lack of basic medical coverage, it honestly shocked
me. That real-world absurdity made its way into this story’s legal system. So
yeah, high fiction, but maybe not that far from reality…
"But the pocket might have been my favorite part of
these three segments. I've praised your emphasis on giant footsteps quite a
bit, but this was such a unique take on it! I love how carelessly she stuffed
him in her skirt pocket, but it was how his whole world was utterly rocked with
each step as she strutted through the office that really got me. You had me at
the word thigh! That was such a great detail, her thigh knocking him down as it
rushed up to meet him in the pocket over and over as she walked without a care
in the world. So good!"
You always seem to point out the things that I'm super proud
of but that I don’t think anyone would notice. So thank you. I LOVED writing
that pocket scene... it was a great way for me to supercharge that transitional
moment from the office to the car. And, like most of my size play stuff, it
took way more rewrites than it probably should have. Honestly, I liked
the way that one turned out so much I might throw another pocket scene in soon!
"Anyway, back to the smut, your luxurious writing
style worked its magic here. The way she lowered him to her panties so slowly,
making him take in every inch of her, was awesome! Uh, disgraceful! I meant
disgraceful! What a menace Penelope is. A sultry, bratty, sexy British menace.
Um, what were we talking about again?"
you know it’s been a while since Trevor was used like this!
Back on the island he was played with by those two teenage girls (which he
actually didn’t seem too bothered by) and he had that little scare with Annabel
when she ambushed him at her apartment... but nothing this intense since the
early days with Amber (and wow, has she evolved since then!). It kind of
felt inevitable; he keeps pushing these towering women, keeps putting himself
in danger, and eventually... well, it catches up.
And yeah, seeing him fully stripped of agency again, trapped
under a woman who thinks she’s literal royalty? It hit wickedly good! I
especially loved tying that ass smut back to the bathroom scene with Helena. Penelope’s
menace was so fun to play with. her entitlement, her control, that ridiculous
accent of hers (which I definitely botched at times, but hey, I tried!).
“Oh, and I didn't forget about Celine and MINAR. When we
first learned that Helena was being shady, I suspected that she was planning a
coup, something we now know isn't the case. But that she has
her own system and has been keeping track of things her own way the whole time
is mind-blowing to me. I just assumed she was being difficult, but now we know
she has something to hide. Namely Celine. Who the fuck is that? Is it even
actually a person? Maybe some kind of codename or AI? What a great mystery
you've sprung on us!”
Love this whole section and all the theories you tossed out in the paragraphs before it… but I’m going to stay quiet on it for now. If you’re feeling mystery, tension, and intrigue, then that’s exactly where I want you. I’ll just say that Celine and MINAR both play a big role moving forward. Once you’ve read the next three segments, we’ll definitely revisit this conversation.





Date: June 22 2025 9:59 PM Title: PART 28
I have to admit, I didn't expect the two month time jump. I figured there would be drama surrounding the vetting process for Status-C. If S1 is any indication of how things are going to go, however, it seems like there could be more drama at the destination than there was along the journey!
But I want to start with Donnica. Yeah, Annabel is the star of the opening segment, but there were a lot of interesting things going on with the goddess mother here as well.
In fact the first thing to jump out at me as I was reading was how Donnica handled Annabel's bratty attitude. Donnica exhibited a level of patience we haven't seen from her, except maybe when fighting with Trevor. She made an effort to be calm and keep her frustration in check. She was firm yet gentle as she kept trying to keep Annabel on task. She was loving even as Annabel pushed her buttons, going so far as to let Annabel take her desk for a "break" at the end of the segment, resigning herself to the couch.
This is so different than we've seen Donnica behave with anyone else. She was so motherly with Annabel, which got me thinking about Amber, actually. Donnica has no clue how to relate with her daughter and build that relationship up, so she ends up more or less treating Amber like everyone else, ordering her around when she wants something from her. Yeah, there are moments where Donnica really tries and that kindness shines through just a bit, but the regular mother is lost when it comes to parenting, an area in which the goddess mother thrives from the look of it.
Donnica so naturally, so effortlessly handles Annabel in a way that Amber can only dream of, and that really hits me hard. I don't even think Donnica is aware of this. She has an awesome mother-daughter dynamic with her secretary, yet she constantly laments not being able to do so with her actual daughter. It makes me feel bad for both Amber and Donnica. For Amber, that's all she's ever wanted from her mother: not money or status, but a real loving relationship. Donnica feels the same way, but between struggling to claw her way to the top and the harsh, aloof way her own parents raised her, she just doesn't know how to do that.
So while I found Donnica being soft and beyond understanding during Annabel's tantrums, that kept weighing on the back of my mind the whole time.
The other thing I noticed about Donnica was that her stance on tinies seems to subtly be shifting. It was fantastic to find out whatever happened to Chelsea and incredibly sad/hot to see her demise at Annabel's heels, I think the reason how she got in that position in the first place is really intriguing.
I was a little surprised when it was revealed that Donnica was so open to seeing if Chelsea could actually prove useful when we were getting that backstory on the doomed tiny. In my mind, the old Donnica would have never considered it and would have been insulted at the very idea of this even being uttered, especially by a tiny. Chelsea was right to fear that she'd get stuck in Donnica's glorious ass, as that's what I thought was going to happen, too.
But instead, Donnica gave Chelsea a chance. And when the tiny made good on her promise, Donnica gave her a new role, only forcing Chelsea to service Donnica's own pussy every so often. No, Chelsea's new role was that of "pocket assistant," doing valuable work for her master instead of menial, humiliating tasks.
And if I had been drinking something when Donnica told Annabel that Chelsea was better at going through files than the giant assistant, I'd have choked on it. For Donnica to acknowledge that a tiny has superior skills to a giant in something relevant is a huge step for the goddess (like at least a 36-Chelsea-long stride)!
Obviously Donnica isn't a tiny sympathizer, and she still considered Chelsea a slave, but she saw real value in Chelsea. That, to me at least, is a massive break from her old fanatical worldview that all tinies are useless and should only exist to service and amuse their giant masters. I don't know if she'll ever take a more pro-tiny stance (probably not), but I still think this is a development worth keeping an eye on.
Speaking of Chelsea, man, how heartbreaking is her story! It's bad enough being broken by Annabel and servicing Donnica, but to be used office-wide like that is such a high level of cruelty, all without any of her former peers even giving it a moment's thought. To be treated like a product by those you used to call peers, to hear them gossiping and going about their lives like they always had, like she used to do, while she was in constant agony inside their panties, not even worth acknowledging, had to be unbearable for her! Add in the new employees, people she would have seniority over if she were still big (and she hadn't walked out in solidarity for John Turner, which implies she herself wasn't a sizeist like the rest of her former coworkers seem to be), and the sting only gets worse. And the taunts from some of those who knew her, probably jealous of her skill given that it was enough to attract Donnica's attention even at an inch tall, rubbing her new size in her face at every opportunity, might be the worst part.
Other than the raping. The raping is definitely the worst part!
But it really strikes me that not one of these women, especially those who used to laugh and share casual conversation with Chelsea, never seem to look at her and think, "Oh shit, this could happen to me!" Donnica thinks herself a goddess and Annabel has her own firm beliefs about size, but to see so widespread an eagerness to simply use and abuse a former colleague, all without any of them showing a hint of concern that they themselves could just as easily end up in her position one day, is the epitome of hubris. You'd think at least one of them would watch as one of their friends takes Chelsea out of the cage and think, "Would she do that to me if I got infected?"
That this isn't the case is really interesting to me. Is this just a case of "it'll never happen to me" syndrome, or is there a general public perception that the virus is under control and no one else needs to worry about shrinking? Maybe they've been told the virus has been eradicated altogether? This peek at how the larger world (or at least the larger view of Donnica's firm) views tinies is as curious as it is frightening!
Then there's my girl Annabel! I know some people haven't been so much into the whole goddess mother stuff, but it was so good here! I really enjoyed petulant, bratty Annabel, and the fact that she is now comfortable enough to act this way directly to her master solidifies just how complex their relationship really is.
So obviously this isn't your standard master-servant relationship, and I've already mentioned how great motherly Donnica was in this segment. But while Annabel loves and wants to do what makes her master happy, its her service to the goddess mother that gives her her own happiness! Feeling shutout really bothered her, and she wasn't afraid to let Donnica know it, master or not. So she stood up to her goddess mother in the only way she knew how: She threw a bratty tantrum and made her master deal with her.
We saw that feeling culminated when she finally got underneath Donnica's skin and got herself growled at before her master left her office to go deal with the tiny-person legal department (does that mean what I think it means?!). While virtually every person on the planet not named Trevor is terrified of Donnica's ire, Annabel loved being on the receiving end of it! Not because she wanted to upset her master or felt like it was some sort of victory but because she penetrated her master's shell and affect her master. I like how it was emphasized that affected didn't mean controlled here. Annabel doesn't want to influence or direct Donnica; she just wants to know that she can touch that part of her goddess mother that lay beneath that authoritative surface of hers.
It was also interesting to see Annabel be so jealous of someone else making themselves useful to Donnica. Yeah, the fact that it was a tiny made it worse, but I think she would have felt that way no matter who was earning her goddess mother's trust. Annabel wants to be Donnica's right hand, and other than Trevor, there's not room for anybody else to step in and let Donnica lean on them like she had started to do with Chelsea.
The contrast between how Annabel and Donnica viewed Chelsea also stood out to me. I mentioned above how I feel like Donnica's treatment of Chelsea indicated a slight shift in her belief system, but that most certainly wasn't the case with Annabel here. Annabel just couldn't get over the fact that Chelsea was a tiny, and it bothered her to no end that this bug had wormed her way out of her "real" duties. She couldn't see how useful Chelsea was to Donnica or how much it would make her master's life harder if Chelsea wasn't around to handle that administrative stuff anymore. No, all she saw was a pussy slave duping her master into a reprieve and stealing Annabel's own spot with Donnica in the process.
This is where Annabel distinguishes herself from a regular servant. Anyone else would have been happy that Chelsea was making Donnica's life easier. Not Annabel, though. No, Chelsea was a problem, no matter how useful she seemed to be. And even if it upset her master, she needed to find a way to "fix" it.
Donnica is so used to Annabel's devotion that she never even considered that Annabel might intentionally kill Chelsea in a fit of jealousy. That thought never entered her mind. Even Annabel's bad acting went unnoticed by her. That's why Donnica never even thought about Chelsea being in danger when she left the room.
And holy shit did you kill it with that whole scene of Chelsea's death! From Annabel shifting those files on Donnica's desk, such a simple act creating a nightmare for Chelsea that literally rattled her to her core, to Annabel sticking her tongue out at the stain on the floor that had once been Chelsea, I was completely dialed in. You detailed Annabel lifting, carrying, and setting down the breakfast tray so well, nailing how world shaking all of this was for the pocket assistant, as well as how easily Annabel's steps drowned out the tiny's pleas.
And that part where Annabel actually put the files on Donnica's desk? Brilliant! I loved the quick-shifting perspectives from paragraph to paragraph, letting us know how casually Annabel was walking while Chelsea was stuck on her hands and knees because the quakes of the giantess's indifferent steps were too much for her to take. That comparison, how easily and without thought or care Annabel was stepping and the cataclysmic results below, was perfectly done!
I also loved the childish taunt Annabel gave right before stomping Chelsea flat. It was so petty. So petulant. So perfect!
Don't get me wrong, I feel terrible that this happened to Chelsea. You even gave me hope for her, ya jerk! But man, you crafted her end masterfully!
But the biggest thing with this segment, plot-wise anyway, has to be Annabel not doing the task that Donnica assigned her. Annabel is so convinced that Trevor's portal status isn't going to change until the next day that she wants to do something "useful" instead. Even after she gets Chelsea out of the way, Annabel pouts after being scolded and takes that "break" in Donnica's chair, where she's obviously not watching the portal.
So yeah, I'm pretty sure something is about to happen with that. And Donnica asking if Annabel had heard from Trevor yet only seems to feed that idea even more.
I have no idea what that something is, but I do know that Annabel's petty brattiness and/ or Donnica's micromanaging of things is likely to play a role in it.
And that contrast drew my attention as well, now that I think about it. Annabel and Donnica are both ridiculously meticulous, but for very different reasons, and that is illustrated quite well here. Annabel has an almost OCD-level compulsion to make things exactly as she thinks they should be. It eats away at her, and that irritation usually doesn't bode well for those around her (except Trevor and Donnica, as she's devoted her life to them). But said compulsion has absolutely nothing to do with worry or concern, hence her behavior here.
Donnica is the opposite. She plans out every detail and has to know everything because she's constantly worried that something is going to go wrong or that someone is going to take everything from her. Again, I think this probably goes back to her past, where it sounds like she had to scrap for everything and earn her way to where she is now, not having any support from her parents or anyone she was dating along the way (until Trevor). Donnica is meticulous because she always expects something to go wrong, so she has to be ready for it, has to control it, stop it. She has to protect everything that's hers.
I just thought the difference between these two, despite both of them being very detail-oriented, was really interesting!
Author's Response:
“I have
to admit, I didn't expect the two month time jump. I figured there would be
drama surrounding the vetting process for Status-C. If S1 is any indication of
how things are going to go, however, it seems like there could be more drama at
the destination than there was along the journey!”
Funny thing,
normally the Status-C process takes way longer than two months. But Donnica,
with her deep industry connections and… let’s say “unyielding intensity,”
managed to push it through at record speed. When Donnica wants something, she
gets it.
“In fact
the first thing to jump out at me as I was reading was how Donnica handled
Annabel's bratty attitude. Donnica exhibited a level of patience we haven't
seen from her, except maybe when fighting with Trevor. She made an effort to be
calm and keep her frustration in check. She was firm yet gentle as she kept
trying to keep Annabel on task. She was loving even as Annabel pushed her
buttons, going so far as to let Annabel take her desk for a ‘break’ at the end
of the segment, resigning herself to the couch.”
Thank you
for highlighting this! Donnica’s patience here is such a crucial beat.
Annabel’s not the only one who takes their relationship seriously… Donnica
really does care, and I think sometimes that gets missed beneath all the power
and dominance. She’s learning how to handle her brat. It’s messy. It’s growth.
It’s kind of endearing.
“I was a
little surprised when it was revealed that Donnica was so open to seeing if
Chelsea could actually prove useful when we were getting that backstory on the
doomed tiny. In my mind, the old Donnica would have never considered it and
would have been insulted at the very idea of this even being uttered,
especially by a tiny. Chelsea was right to fear that she'd get stuck in
Donnica's glorious ass, as that's what I thought was going to happen, too.”
Donnica’s
ass is glorious, isn’t it? Honestly, Chelsea might’ve been lucky to end up
there! But yeah, it’s a fair observation… this might be a sign of Donnica
softening, or shifting, just a bit. Or maybe she's just more strategic now...
who knows?
“That
this isn't the case is really interesting to me. Is this just a case of ‘it'll
never happen to me’ syndrome, or is there a general public perception that the
virus is under control and no one else needs to worry about shrinking? Maybe
they've been told the virus has been eradicated altogether? This peek at how
the larger world (or at least the larger view of Donnica's firm) views tinies
is as curious as it is frightening!”
You’re
right to zero in on this… it’s definitely something I plan to explore more
deeply. The worldview of the giantess class, especially in relation to the
virus, is a whole thing. It connects to how power is perceived and maintained.
But hey... you just got the registration worldbuilding, don’t get greedy on me
now!
“So
obviously this isn't your standard master-servant relationship, and I've
already mentioned how great motherly Donnica was in this segment. But while
Annabel loves and wants to do what makes her master happy, its her service to
the goddess mother that gives her her own happiness! Feeling shutout really
bothered her, and she wasn't afraid to let Donnica know it, master or not. So
she stood up to her goddess mother in the only way she knew how: She threw a
bratty tantrum and made her master deal with her.”
I love how
bratty Annabel’s become with Donnica. It’s such a perfect reflection of the
unique (and increasingly complex) relationship they’ve built. You’re right, her
reaction says so much more than a simple act of obedience ever could. And let’s
just say... this tantrum might have consequences that stretch beyond this
segment ;)
“Donnica
is so used to Annabel's devotion that she never even considered that Annabel
might intentionally kill Chelsea in a fit of jealousy. That thought never
entered her mind. Even Annabel's bad acting went unnoticed by her. That's why
Donnica never even thought about Chelsea being in danger when she left the
room.”
Haha, that
bad acting scene was such a joy to write. You nailed it, Donnica’s sense of
superiority is so baked in that she misses the small stuff. It’s like her
divine self-image creates blind spots, especially when it comes to those she
thinks are unquestionably loyal. She assumes their love is absolute... and
sometimes that’s a dangerous assumption.
“And
holy shit did you kill it with that whole scene of Chelsea's death! From
Annabel shifting those files on Donnica's desk, such a simple act creating a
nightmare for Chelsea that literally rattled her to her core, to Annabel
sticking her tongue out at the stain on the floor that had once been Chelsea, I
was completely dialed in. You detailed Annabel lifting, carrying, and setting
down the breakfast tray so well, nailing how world shaking all of this was for
the pocket assistant, as well as how easily Annabel's steps drowned out the
tiny's pleas.
And that
part where Annabel actually put the files on Donnica's desk? Brilliant! I loved
the quick-shifting perspectives from paragraph to paragraph, letting us know
how casually Annabel was walking while Chelsea was stuck on her hands and knees
because the quakes of the giantess's indifferent steps were too much for her to
take. That comparison, how easily and without thought or care Annabel was
stepping and the cataclysmic results below, was perfectly done!”
Ahhh thank
you! These scenes always take the most rewriting. I usually start with a super
basic version, then realize there’s not nearly enough sensory texture, and then
just keep layering until it feels right. The key for this one was definitely
contrast… making Annabel’s stroll casual, almost carefree, while Chelsea’s
world is violently collapsing beneath her. Jumping between perspectives helped
a ton. I’m so glad it landed!
“Don't
get me wrong, I feel terrible that this happened to Chelsea. You even gave me
hope for her, ya jerk! But man, you crafted her end masterfully!”
Haha, thank
you! That was the plan all along… give her a full underdog arc. From slave, to
brave little voice in Donnica’s presence, to earning a second chance... only to
be obliterated by one giant, jealous, bratty foot. Even before I fully
developed the Status-C plot, I had this scenario in my head. It just slotted in
perfectly here.
“But the
biggest thing with this segment, plot-wise anyway, has to be Annabel not doing
the task that Donnica assigned her. Annabel is so convinced that Trevor's
portal status isn't going to change until the next day that she wants to do
something "useful" instead. Even after she gets Chelsea out of the
way, Annabel pouts after being scolded and takes that "break" in
Donnica's chair, where she's obviously not watching the portal.”
Ohhh yes.
That little moment might be more important than it seems... and something very
soon may hinge on it. Also, can we just take a second to appreciate how bratty
she is spinning around in that chair? Iconic.
“And
that contrast drew my attention as well, now that I think about it. Annabel and
Donnica are both ridiculously meticulous, but for very different reasons, and
that is illustrated quite well here. Annabel has an almost OCD-level compulsion
to make things exactly as she thinks they should be. It eats away at her, and
that irritation usually doesn't bode well for those around her (except Trevor
and Donnica, as she's devoted her life to them). But said compulsion has
absolutely nothing to do with worry or concern, hence her behavior here.
Donnica
is the opposite. She plans out every detail and has to know everything because
she's constantly worried that something is going to go wrong or that someone is
going to take everything from her. Again, I think this probably goes back to
her past, where it sounds like she had to scrap for everything and earn her way
to where she is now, not having any support from her parents or anyone she was
dating along the way (until Trevor). Donnica is meticulous because she always
expects something to go wrong, so she has to be ready for it, has to control
it, stop it. She has to protect everything that's hers.”
God, this is such a good take. If someone had asked me to differentiate their approaches to control, I might’ve gotten there eventually… but not this cleanly. You hit it perfectly: Annabel is driven by compulsion and vision, Donnica by anxiety and protection. And you’re going to love where this goes, because Annabel’s compulsions are about to get tested in major ways coming up in the story. Can’t wait to share what’s coming!